This is a wonderful poem, and the rhyming flow makes it an exciting read. These words are fun, and I would like to have my children to read it. I don't know much about different fomats of poetry. I only write and read what I feel, and this is a fun read.
This is a wonderful group, and I see some very talented names in the list. I am proud of all that they are doing here in the writing family. I am proud of having been a part of such an encouraging place for nearly two years.
These are a very great way to show people how they empact all of us here at Writing.com. I would like to have a gift certificate or two for others her.
I am glad that I have came across this shop, and I would like to send the happiness to some newbies.
This is vey well written, and I can relate to the moods. I found the flow and the pattern with in. I am happy to have read your work. I am also caught up in the forever circling thoughts that are always dancing in my head.
i LOVE this poem. The flow is great, but the catchy part is the essage. I used to love swinging on my grandmother's porch. I spent quite a few hours escaping from the real world on her swing holding my infant brother. I think that this took me back to a happier time.
I love this poem and the adoration that you have fo your brother. The flow made it a great read, and the message hits my heart. My only living brother isn't in the best of health, and he has a mind set of family fued right.
He was a prayer answered when I was thirteen, and I abanded him by getting married at 20.
This is a great madlib. I truly enjoyed this activity. I can see that this could be amazing if I had come up with more interesting answers. I loved the direction of the story that can be created here. There could be endless laughs with the contest alone.
I like the twist. I was expecting a story about a naughty "Chicken Pal" or about bad cookies that made Santa skip the house. Then we find that Chicken Pal was just too eager for the giving season.
There were only a couple of mistakes that may have uncovered. They both were capital letters. One should have been looked instead of "looke" and maybe chicken Pal should be Chicken Pal.
WOW. Some needed GPS there. Too bad that I missed it. I am sure that it was very welcome both to the ones that received the points and those that received the reviews. Please send me a line or two to let me know when you are having another event like this one.
This is a wonderful chance to challenge myself. Though 1000 words are the usual for my writing, I think that I still need work on writing descriptive strories. I feel that this is another way to exercize my writing kills on stories, and not to always focus on poetry.
This seems like a great contest. I am very interested in this contest. Does it have to be newly created material? Does a story about angels or Heaven classify as fantasy? I would like to know a little more about it, as for what is fantasy content.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I don't have many points at the moment, but would like to donate 500 to your contest.
I read this while on the phone with my crying sister and my mother. My sister lost her neice to cancer. I was just reading this as she told me about the young lady. RIght before reading this, I spoke to my ex sister-in-law that is getting out of the hospital from a colon cancer operation. She will have to have kimo and radiation. She had lost six children to the state due to drugs. I know that a lot are running through these minds as I am reading this.
THe Good thing is that my ex sister-in-law got saved yesterday.
Thank you for sharing this you never know whose life you touch.
Ida
Very interesting peice, and it can help me if I am lost for rhyme. I like the way it ends, and I think that it puts everything in to place in the poem. Every word has a place in our lives. I think that this was a hard peice to write. I am a wordy and it would be hard to corver an idea in such a few words.
Beautiful. Haven't we all been there. The love stories of our lives are all around us. I have wanted the touch of a special someone, and the ache in my heart just to know that we would be forever. Now I want to have that feeling and the right person to feel it for.
I love this because of it nice flow and rhyme, and it was a great message. It really touched my heart because my ex's sister-in-law has just has a colon cancer operation. She has lost her children (6 of them) to the state due to drugs. They said that she has to take kimo and radiaton, She got saved yesterday in th hospital.
This is a very beautiful poem, and I truly think that this is a reminder to Americans where our hearts should be. During all other wars, American was in bad times, but no matter what we are going through, those who try to protect and serve our country has gone through much more.
This poem has a good flow and great rhyme. I feel this is a reminder to this Nation.
Well, I thought that I was a mazed by that beautiful picture, but when reading that poem I have both chills and tears. I could not imagine the feeling that the mother felt here, but you sucked me into the mother's role. I could, as a moter of a girl, I really could feel her pain. I could not see my life without my children.
This poem s a beautifull and humbling peice. I love the meaning behind it reminding us of that there are things that are bigger than ourselves in this God's creation. I love that it is a great way to remind ourselves of how great God's creations are.
I would love to read this to my son Noah. He loves animals. This poem has a rhyme, flow, and message that he would understand. Though he is only 10 he knows more about animals than I do.
There is a message that I am sure that you did not intend to show here, but it is my own. As a mother of three fueding children, I try to just keep my peace and allow them their space to work things out for themselves. Yet, sometimes this little mouse has to just scream.
I think that everything has been so wonderfull and so beautiful. I think you have shown so much of your caring heart for our writig.com family. I loved the whole idea of kUDOS, and I am so glad to have stumbled across this site.
You knw that you have to be careful that your tender doesn't show.
THis is a very good poem. I love the short lines and the way they flow together. You have a real talent for the rhyme. The words carry the reader along the stanz easily.
My favorite part is:
My soul torn in two
My heart stopped
You little face blue
Only a second in time
I remember when I was six, I help my baby brother's coffin on my lap. I remember what he looked like.
I love the motion in this peice. When I read it, I think of my daughter. I feel love in your words. THe only thing that I might suggest is that it would make it easier for me to read if it was in stanz form. I really can relate this t my little girl of fourteen.
This story flows so that it makes a great read. The dialog is much better than I can do yet. I love the chacters that you have created and the relationships between them. I like the way that it shows the everyday relationship issues that make this story more real for the most of the readers.
This is a very good story. The time of future is wonderful. The dialog is great, and that is an item that I have problems with. You were able to bring the reader along as if they were part of the story or wittnessing it up close. The emotion of Mohamed is very well written, and I can relate to the roll a coaster.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
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