I feel that everyone can relate to your words at one time or another. I have looked into the eyes of family that has found their way out of the maze that we call life. I can almost see the emotin behind them.
This is well written, and it was inspirational for me. I like to think of my family seperated from their passt pains.
Thank you for sharing this marvelous poem iwht us.
Ida
This poem takes me bak in my life where a camp out was our everyday life. I enjoyed the read. You took me along from the time of expectation until the trip gets alittle old.
Isn't that human nature about most everything we do. I mean excitment then we get a little board.
I am not one to be able to review form or notice grammer in a peice that carries me through the story.
I am in tears. I have been in both places. I have had many people in my life that I have had to try save. I also have thought those terrible thoughts to take all my problems with the many inplanted thoughts of the spirit of sucide.
The one thought that kept me going i that I wanted to know how things would change.
Thank you for this wonderful peice. I feel the poem is words that speak out for many that don't know how to speak for themselves.
This poem has a story that I have lived myself. I can see the pain and fear in your words. I lived your poem when I first got divorced, and I hope that one day I can live a life that I am not so scared to touch others.
I hope that you find Writing.com the family of support that I have.
I don't see such a low rate as I see here. I know that there is letters that need capalized and such, but this poem has a great message. This poem has a fun flow that makes for an amazing read.
This poem dosn't rate a bad review. I think that it is a very good job. With little editting, it would be excllent poem.
This poem is a wonderful read. It has a musical rhymitic flow. The message is clear, and the reader can relate to it sometime in their life. I remember many tmes that I could ask the same question while holding hands with a bleak darkness. A darkness that promices to hide all the problems within its shadows.
This was a real pleasure to read, and I am sure that you will get simular reviews. Thank you for sharing this with Writing.com.
The story that is the foundation of this poem is as if you pulled it right out of my heart. The poem has a great flow. I love how you have shown that when a good person is left behind there will always be reminents of then in the heart that left.
I enjoyed this somuch. Thank you so much for sharing this with us,
Ida
I love this poem, and I know that there probably not one person that hasn't visited this area that is foundation for your poem. I was left four times for other women before I let go of the faith in th "US". Still after five years and his two other babies, our kids still want Mommy and Daddy back together.
I love the strength that I see in this poem. It has a great flow and rhyme.
This poem is a wake up call for most. Everyone needs friends support. This is well written. You chose words that paint the picture of a broken hearted brother. A person forgetten just left to his own thoughts that carry him futher away from humanity.
This poem brought me to tears. The words were well chosen, and the it had an easy flow. This is a peice that I can truly relate to. After being married sixteen years, giving my all, I lost it to a woman just four years older than our marriage.
I still look being afraid as I do. Yes, I suffer from the Wiplash just waiting trembling for a simple sencere touch.
so to have missed your photos. I love to took into peoples hearts through there writing and their photos. I have a few pictures in my port if you are interested to look at. My children, myself, and even some drawings done by me and my little ones.
You certainally have a way with words. You put this poem together with a nice flowing rhyme. I enjoyed the message, and hope that you find inspiration and family here ad WDC as I have.
The words painted a picture that th reader was able to see throught your eyes. I think this was a great read, and am so glad that you are able to share this with us.
wonder how many of your readers could relate to your words. How many of us have lived and felt as though we have lost it all. Yes, I have to say I have felt your word, and I had to rate this with a five. With few words you covered the emotions of many. This is what I admire about those that can do this.
This is a great poem. I think that you covered what writing is all about, and I loved the question about anxiety. It makes me feel a little more normal when I fight fear. Maybe fear needs to speak to be released. To allow people to see that we can relate to those in world that God has placed us in.
Good job.. The words are as though they are spoken to me.
Another very emotional poem that has a wonderful flow. You have a gift of covering emotion. This is sometimes hard for some because they must live as they write, and some emotions are just too dep. You cover the battle of trying to be positive and the challenge to keep it that way.
You are blessed with something that my children doesn't have. This poem brought tears to my eyes. It is a dream for me to have that kind of love. The kind that didn't only last sixteen years and leave my children feeling torn between mom and dad. I envy that for my children to have the blessing that you speak of.
I think that this work show real talent. I can feel the admoration in your words. This is rightly so because such people are a dying breed.
I like the way this poem handles the ups and downs of relationship. There is such a maturity in this while the world plays the blame game. I found this to have a great flow and a rhyme that make this a wonderful read.
Thank you for sharing such a good poem with us.
Ida
Your words have come from a place that most of our world has forgotten. No one seems to hold those values high as yesteryear. I could see somme that stories are told. You know those men that live in the western days.
Too many men have left their families without a male to teach their sons to be true men. I pray that my son's will learn by their mother's words and examples of men of the values of your poem.
This gives me hope for my two sons to grow up to be good men, and that my daughter finds a special man.
This poem speaks to me. In a way it gives me hope. I was married sixteen years and three kids. I gave all when he left, remarried, and had other children, I felt that I would never find the one God has for me. These words gives me a little more hope.
Thank you for sharing this well written poem. I found the flow to make it a great read.
This has a great flow that makes it an enjoyable read. I can see the inspiration that he has made in your lie. I really enjoyed the positive attitude that in with the lines. I can see that you have a heart that absorbs the kindness of others, and I am sure that this is in part from the person in the poem.
Thank you for sharing this with us and allowing the reader get to know hm.
Ida
this is very well written. It shows talent that beings the reader wit you.
I had to read this because I have a Mary Beth in my past that is a bad memory that isn't even her fault. My ex husband. the father to my three children, laid with her for months then threw her away as he did me later.
Now I understand that she too was a victime of a bored family man that wanted to be single at the time.
This is a beautiful and true poem.. The love of a parent could not have been put any better than these words. I have three children. Charity, Christian, and Noah. Differen, t doctors said that I would not have children. I found verses that promised God's children children, and the next month I found that I was having Charity. I was married five years, and God gave me his gifts.
Thank you for sharing this with us, and bringing me back to remembering the true gifts of God.
I like this. I find it very true in most parts of life. My favorite part is "I can only hope that you take me at
face value, and credit my principle- This is a statement we all should take in as we cross paths with people that we meet along our lives' course.
This is a very good poem. I was taken along with your discriptive words. The flow made it an easy and enjoyable read.
My favorite part is the last two lines. I have felt the chill of my own tears growing cold as I walk in the cold winter wind.I try to walk off the pain of a broken heart. that seems to also be freezing in the ruthless season.
I truly enjoyed the peice, and I hope to be back to read more.
ida
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