You certainally have a way with words. You put this poem together with a nice flowing rhyme. I enjoyed the message, and hope that you find inspiration and family here ad WDC as I have.
The words painted a picture that th reader was able to see throught your eyes. I think this was a great read, and am so glad that you are able to share this with us.
wonder how many of your readers could relate to your words. How many of us have lived and felt as though we have lost it all. Yes, I have to say I have felt your word, and I had to rate this with a five. With few words you covered the emotions of many. This is what I admire about those that can do this.
This is a great poem. I think that you covered what writing is all about, and I loved the question about anxiety. It makes me feel a little more normal when I fight fear. Maybe fear needs to speak to be released. To allow people to see that we can relate to those in world that God has placed us in.
Good job.. The words are as though they are spoken to me.
Another very emotional poem that has a wonderful flow. You have a gift of covering emotion. This is sometimes hard for some because they must live as they write, and some emotions are just too dep. You cover the battle of trying to be positive and the challenge to keep it that way.
You are blessed with something that my children doesn't have. This poem brought tears to my eyes. It is a dream for me to have that kind of love. The kind that didn't only last sixteen years and leave my children feeling torn between mom and dad. I envy that for my children to have the blessing that you speak of.
I think that this work show real talent. I can feel the admoration in your words. This is rightly so because such people are a dying breed.
I like the way this poem handles the ups and downs of relationship. There is such a maturity in this while the world plays the blame game. I found this to have a great flow and a rhyme that make this a wonderful read.
Thank you for sharing such a good poem with us.
Ida
This poem speaks to me. In a way it gives me hope. I was married sixteen years and three kids. I gave all when he left, remarried, and had other children, I felt that I would never find the one God has for me. These words gives me a little more hope.
Thank you for sharing this well written poem. I found the flow to make it a great read.
This is a beautiful and true poem.. The love of a parent could not have been put any better than these words. I have three children. Charity, Christian, and Noah. Differen, t doctors said that I would not have children. I found verses that promised God's children children, and the next month I found that I was having Charity. I was married five years, and God gave me his gifts.
Thank you for sharing this with us, and bringing me back to remembering the true gifts of God.
I like this. I find it very true in most parts of life. My favorite part is "I can only hope that you take me at
face value, and credit my principle- This is a statement we all should take in as we cross paths with people that we meet along our lives' course.
I loved this story. It held family and adventure together. My two sons are here at the computer with me. I think that they found the bear falling waving it;s paws around very funny.
My children has no relation with their grand fathers due to illnesses, but this made them think about what it would have been like to have had this kind of adventure.
Oh, girl, you wrote my life long dream in the begining that became my life by the last verses. I was married 16 years, and he had left me three times before he finally found the 21 year old that he finally married.
Thank you for this poem, and for putting my words into your's.
I love this story, and can truly relate to it. Since my divorce I have been looking for my Mr right, and when I was married I was praying that he was mr right.
My favorite part is:
April always thought it ironic, and just her luck, that her greatest professional successes were realized during times of the year that also served as a reminder of her greatest personal failures. Like her flowers, April's romantic prospects were all quick to bloom, and just as quick to wither and die.
I truly loved the last line because it summed up the last four years of my life since my divorce. One relationship after another started and withered away.
I was wondering what you drew your flower power from? Do you do flowers? Did you have a high school rival?
You really did a good job taking me into this story as well.
I love this story. You painted it so beautifully with just these few words. To me that shows true talent. It is so much like that life that I have been living. So full of anxiety and fear, but I think that my shoot finally is beginning to open.
I think that you have done a great job here, and I love the way you took me into the story.
My favorite part is:
"That's right," Annette confirmed with a satisfied smirk, as she moved to buckle Thomas into his car seat. "I spent all week looking for him and worrying. So now I'm returning the favor. Have fun chasing after him... and trying to get him to take his bath or brush his teeth when he won't let you near him!"
It reminds me of my life with my children.
You have created a story that leaves me waiting for more. Thank you for the oppurtunity of reading this peice.
This is very informative with a very few words. I agree that memories are what lives forever, and I hope that I can make the right decisions that can be passed down from my children to my grandchildren.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
I really enjoyed the read, and I will be back to visit your port.
This is an excellent peice, and I truly can relate to this. I am having problems with this becuase it seems that your enemies are in your own family.
This poem carries an inportant message with a great rhyme and flow. I think that the only way to real happiness is to forgive and let go of the bitterness.
Thank you for the great read.
Ida
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This is a wonderful way to help each other. I know that you have been doing so much for this community of WDC, and I would like to use this time to let you know how much it is appreicated. I know that it has encouraged me as well as a lot of writers here.
This sounds like an wonderful way to exercize your talent. I would like to know what the prompts are for the next few days. I could not figure out just where to find the prompts.
I would love to have the informations so that I can enter. Also I have a question.
Can a person enter as many days as they want?
This is an excellent opportunity. I also love trying to figure out the twists of stories and movies. I will enter this contest as soon as I get a chance, and hope that this computer allows me to summit an entry. It gives me problems.
This is a very good peice that leaves me wanting to read more.. The funny thing is that I have a piece in my port that starts out a little like this. I was going to enter it in another contest of the Outdoors. I have lost the address to enter it.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
ida
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