Well, haven't we all been there. Wanting to give up because of the pain of one love. I love the story behind the poem. It was well written and with a easy flow. I could not find any corrections needed, but when I like a peice I really may miss the mistakes.
Thank you for sharing this with us here at WDC, and hope to read more from you soon.
Ida
This is avery fluent poem. I found it to be a great read with a great message inside it.
I love where you speak of pain, and yet, a gem of hope still there. This is something that we all need to remember. There is always light somewhere inside even when we feel darkest.
The only problem is :
spell check: lemon-ae
and this line seems out of place to me:
Like an oyster with a pearl,
This is a great peice, and when reading my critisim take in to concideration that I have had a head ache for three weeks.
I loved the poem, and hope to see more of your work.
Ida
I love the bounce of this poem. The rhyme makes it be a really fun read. I found the flow easy and made for a interesting read. It has a great message. It shows patience and the need to remember that tomorrow is day that can fix today.
This is a very nice peice. I think of the pie as all the blessings that is being with held from me. That is the great thing about this poem. I am sure different people can relate in different ways. These words are well chosen, and has a easy flow.
This is a great read. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
This is a beautiful poem. You took me to a lake. Your talent for painting with your words shown brightly at this colorful picture. I have been carried away in a a trance that waited for just the little tug to wake me up. So with this I would like to say this was a very amazing read.
This is a very useful page. I know that I am not the best reviwer of spelling and grammer. When I am carrie away by the story of the item, I don't notice the mistakes.
I know that I haven't not even been to my review skills due to an ongoing head ache.
I am thankful for those of you that take the time to encourage and teach us.
This poem was amazing. It covered a person with a true writer's heart. You have a talent for paint pictures with your words. You tell us who your enfluences are. Your beginning "author Jesus Christ", and you even introduce the importance of your parents.
Wow, what can I say. This touched my very being. This well written, wonderfull flowing, and sweet words made me think of what my children have down the road. This brought tears to my eyes.
I could see you standing there waiting for their return. That is what I am doing now. Waiting for them to come back from their dad's.
Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem with us.
Ida
I love the message, flow, and the rhyme in this poem. This is like everything that I have read of your port. You introduced a state of mind that the two of us share. You introduced someone that has been a great part of my WDC family wtih a gifted flare.
Though there are some run-on sentences, I could feel your words of love. It made my heart remember its true love. The words were well chosen, and the meaning was sure. you were paint a loving picture of love that I have had and lost.
I hope that you find Writing.com a great family and support as I have.
I feel that everyone can relate to your words at one time or another. I have looked into the eyes of family that has found their way out of the maze that we call life. I can almost see the emotin behind them.
This is well written, and it was inspirational for me. I like to think of my family seperated from their passt pains.
Thank you for sharing this marvelous poem iwht us.
Ida
This poem takes me bak in my life where a camp out was our everyday life. I enjoyed the read. You took me along from the time of expectation until the trip gets alittle old.
Isn't that human nature about most everything we do. I mean excitment then we get a little board.
I am not one to be able to review form or notice grammer in a peice that carries me through the story.
This poem has a story that I have lived myself. I can see the pain and fear in your words. I lived your poem when I first got divorced, and I hope that one day I can live a life that I am not so scared to touch others.
I hope that you find Writing.com the family of support that I have.
I don't see such a low rate as I see here. I know that there is letters that need capalized and such, but this poem has a great message. This poem has a fun flow that makes for an amazing read.
This poem dosn't rate a bad review. I think that it is a very good job. With little editting, it would be excllent poem.
This poem is a wonderful read. It has a musical rhymitic flow. The message is clear, and the reader can relate to it sometime in their life. I remember many tmes that I could ask the same question while holding hands with a bleak darkness. A darkness that promices to hide all the problems within its shadows.
This was a real pleasure to read, and I am sure that you will get simular reviews. Thank you for sharing this with Writing.com.
The story that is the foundation of this poem is as if you pulled it right out of my heart. The poem has a great flow. I love how you have shown that when a good person is left behind there will always be reminents of then in the heart that left.
I enjoyed this somuch. Thank you so much for sharing this with us,
Ida
I love this poem, and I know that there probably not one person that hasn't visited this area that is foundation for your poem. I was left four times for other women before I let go of the faith in th "US". Still after five years and his two other babies, our kids still want Mommy and Daddy back together.
I love the strength that I see in this poem. It has a great flow and rhyme.
This poem is a wake up call for most. Everyone needs friends support. This is well written. You chose words that paint the picture of a broken hearted brother. A person forgetten just left to his own thoughts that carry him futher away from humanity.
This poem brought me to tears. The words were well chosen, and the it had an easy flow. This is a peice that I can truly relate to. After being married sixteen years, giving my all, I lost it to a woman just four years older than our marriage.
I still look being afraid as I do. Yes, I suffer from the Wiplash just waiting trembling for a simple sencere touch.
so to have missed your photos. I love to took into peoples hearts through there writing and their photos. I have a few pictures in my port if you are interested to look at. My children, myself, and even some drawings done by me and my little ones.
I can't wait until you refil this file.
Ida
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