This is a very good poem. It made me think of the times that I used to climb the hills surrounding our house as a child. You have a great choice of words, and this was a fun read.
I found one thing that you may need to know. I think that your title may have a typo.
THis is a very good poem with great flow. I think that this poem shows both sides of the coin very vividly. I love the fact that you show how some people can fight for life with one hand and hold the gun that kills a doctor in the other.
I don't agree ith abortation, but I have an ex in law that has six children that the state is raising because of her drug habbits.
I truly think that this is a very well writen debate, and I am so glad that you decided to share this with us.
You have wonderful poetry, great rhymes, and the flowing patterns that keep the reader's attention. I love the emotion and descriptivness that you used. The pictures that introduce your folders truly are inviting. This is a read worth doing.
The form is very nice. I like the rhyming flow, and the sweet visionary words. You carried me through the poem with words that made me feel as though I could see her. This was a job well done, and I hope to read more of your work soon
This is a great poem, and it is a reminder of someone that I loved once. I found his lov e as a friend that came to my side when my exhusband left me to be with someone else. He saved me from doing something stupid in the condition that I was in. Then guess what was next. My ex came back, and my friend ( that we fell in love) left. He wanted me to ask him to stay, but my job was to love my husband. The friend did leave, and ended up in prision in another state.
Through out years of my husband leaving and living with other women, he loved me through his letters. When he got out, he could not find me. He got married, and then he found me this year. How I wish things were differen. Yet he can remain my fantacy.
THis is a wonderful poem. I loved the way it flowed, and the entertaining way it rhymes. This poem has a great poem has a very encouraging and great message. I think that this is one of the most best reads in a while about encouragment.
So when is the big day. This is the commericals equal. I think that this is a wonderful time to share with us. I really still remember the day when my ex husband asked me to marry him. I hope to have that day again with he who shall complete my life with me and the children.
THis is a tear jerker. I love this as a great inspiration of a love that is taken beyond the grave. Your words brought the emotions of the widow to the hearts of your readers. I only pray that they can be reunited with that love on the other side, and he is standig by her side when she is tired of battling here on earth.
Very beautiful picture that takes me into the wonderous scenes of nature. I really believe that naure is where all beauty is seen. you have captured this in this picture. The lighting here is great. You have captured the shadows against the white feahers.
This is a wonderful poem, and the fluent rhynig pattern makes for a great read. I have a uncle that was in the same war. He drinks a lot now, andpeople talksabout the flash backs of the war. This poem really painted the picture of men that was forsed into killing situations that they really wasn't prepared for.
Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem with us.
Ida
THis s a very good poem. If I had read this poem at valentines, I would have been very loney. You created a picture of a grand admiration that each heart wishes that it had. I think that you have good rhyme. The flow and word choices create a wonderful and touching read.
This is a great poem, and I admire the skills that show throught int he lines of a poem with very few words. It tells of story of a cold lonely heart. We all have been there, but I haven't not ben able to write the emotion in so few words. You were to do that without taking away from the meaning of the peice.
I think that I see a little ham in those eyes much like I see in my little brown pepper's eyes. This is a very handsome youngster.
I love the expression that h has. Is he a little charmer. My ten year old son admits to being one, and that he sucks up to people. Those are his own words too.
We have to cherish pictures like this so that we can carry the image long after they stary their own family.
These are beautiful. I am raising two teenagers. I too was a teenager at one time. I respect teenager that has to battle wars that was much different than I had to. I am glad that God has allowed me to remember the emotional years between twelve and twenty. This helps when my "little ones", using the term with a mother's heart, emotional roller coaster.
I remember how my heart broke so many times from family and boyfriends.
Thank you for sharing this well written part of your heart.
Ida
This is beautiful. It is well written. You have chosen just the right words, and you have rhymed them in a very fluent manner. You have taken me back to a time that I loved this strong. I went asleep knowing that we would meet in our dreams, but our dreams would just be our spirits leaving our sleeping bodies to join together until time to wake up.
This is a great poem, and it will touch everyone who visits your poetry.
Where did you get the words for this poem? It is as if you charmed them right out of my heart. I hope that you have found someone since you wrote this poem. Man, can I relate to your words. I was married, and was traded in. lol.. Anyway, I ask God ever since to prepare my "God sent" future husband for his family, but sometimes I look at the glass as empty. There is no half empty on these days.
This poem gave me inspiration that I am not alone on the wait to cross paths with the right person.
This is a great poem. It has a very good rhyming patteren. It had a wonderful flow that kept my attention. The message was something I could relate to.
This poem allows us to know that we are not alone when it comes to pain. We all hurt, and so do others.
There was one mistake that I may have found:
Akin
Should this be A kin.
These are beautiful girls, and I think that I need to comment on their eyes and smiles. Their faces show that they have been raised without any harmful experiences. They really look well rounded and so full of love. It is so encuraging to see them likethis because of worring about my little ones.
This is a great poem. I found one typeo in the early part of the poem. However, as I read on the poem was so good that I forgot the typo. I loved the thought that there is someone out there for us all. I had one hidden in my basement. I love that you covered what love is. Being there for the one you love.
This poem is great. At first I was a little thrown into my own life as the opsite person. I was reading it as the other woman in a married relationship. Then as the end came up. I had to smile. It reminded me of my youth. Maybe what she was actually thinking, but she was only four years older than our marriage was.
I can relate to this poem. Matter-of -fact, I wrote a poem that started with the exact same first lines. I was surprised to see them ther. Of course the rest of my poems was different. This goes to show that we are never alone in our worst loneliness.
I enjoyed the read, and am so glad that you chose to share it with us.
Ida
This was a great poem, and I though that it was a great tribute to a loyal friend. You painted a picture of pain and hope in very few words.
Your description caught my eye, and since I have three children that force me to be a grandmother to two dogs and one cat. (My 10 year old is going to be grand father to his "son's" puppies" If they were to read this they would cry.
Only thing that I noticed that may need attention is although instead of altho
My heart goes out to you. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
PS if you have a picture, you can add its picture with this peice.
This is a great poem. I loved the flow, I think that the rhyme is cool. I could see the weather, and the emotion was captured with such skill.
The only thing that I think that I would do is copy the last line of the other verses into the last. I would make it stronger at he end with the sentence.
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