This is a great poem. I see the lines in my own life, and I see them in the lives of my three children. I even felt them when my mother raised my sister's daughter. The child called my mom mom. She was only nine months old, and she needed a mom. She had been left alone in a house, but that did not stop me form hurting that she hadn't earned my mom as her's. I know I was wrong, but sometimes I hurt that my mom's grandchild is her daughter while my children are her grandchildren
I have gotten over it even though I love and named the child myself.
I love this, and it reminded me of the times in my life that I held my children. With each infant, came new experiences. This poem remnded me of such times as long nights, and cute smiles.
The poem carried this mother into a well written poem. The picture was one that took the reader into the lines. The rhyme was wonderful, and the flow made it an easy read.
This is a very good poem, and it is so precious that two siblings are so close. I wish that my family was this way. I have three children, and my ex husband has two babies. I am so proud that they would fight as hard for each as they do with each other.
The page its self is beautifully done. The rules are clear. The awards are thought out. You have some your work cut out for you, as I read the entries. Each one shows the thyme, flow, and the romantace of the moon.
The poem has a good flow and rhyme. I like the way you explained in the ending statement. This made the item educational. I love the way you used discription of emotion and of a couple in love.
This poem could be sent as a romantic note to a lover.
beauriful. Isn't it wonderful that the moon inspires so much. This poem has a great rhyme, and the flow is excellant. THe poem is in over all well written.
I like the way you speak of the meaness of the night. This a sweet read, and I think that this is a job well.
I know this feeling. I have a daughter and two sons. Rightnow she is 14, and she is a half inch taller. She wears shoes two sizes larger than me. Yet, she and her brothers make up all that I am.
Whoever gave you awardicon, sure had good taste. This poem was well written, and the flow was great.
Thank you for sharng this with us.
Ida
ps you can see them on my contest "My Kids Be the Judge"
This is a wonder peice. I found the message to be one of importance to those who do not understand. I have three children, and the son in the middle has ADHD, I try not to be over protective, but others pick on him even when he doesn't act out.
I was so inspired with this story, and love the way you show te possitive. I am so thankful for all the ways he makes me smile, and is my teenaged boy. He always wants to be the man of the house. He has so many things he gives to me even when I want to pull my hair out.
THis is a very inspirational poem. The flow was excellant, and the beat made it to be an easy read. I think of all the people that feel so alone, and looking for the "mother's love" they had once felt safe and secure wth. I think that this is very well done.
THe flow and rhyme are great, and I am brougt back to a time I would lay in the grass looking up at the sky. You have painted a lovely and familuar picture. I could see the child excited by the plane and its mistery.
This was well worth the read. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
I remember having to read this play in Language class in high school. I think that this one is more enjoyable. I like the image that you have discribed, and the emotion or Naritive that it has. It has a very good rhyme and the flow is great. This would be nice to give out in a classroom to encourage the stuents to read Shakspear.
Doesn't this truly describe the ups and downs of the heart's cycle. I enjoyed this read. The flow was smooth, and the rhyme carried the reader into a very well descrbed story. I takes me back a few years when I was waiting for the phone to ring.
This story had a wonderful flow, and it would make for a great movie. Maybe even (my faorie) Lay & Order or NCSI. I enjoyed the the action and plot. The charatures were believable, and the action could only be equalled to an action drama. This is a job well done.
This is both a emotional and physical inspiration especially with all the flooding and broken homes. The lines flow well, and the rhyme made this a uplifting poem. This is a very fluent and great poem. I tuly enjoyed this read.
This is a wonderful peice. It was nice to see so many talented names. There are so many family members here that it is so hard to be able to list all that they have done on here or what they mean to us.
I am going to revisit this page and review some of the authors that you have found worthy of your essay.
Well, it suprised me to see the name KEV at the end of the poem. You understood our battles so well. I wish for all the work she has had done. I am in the process of getting stomach bypass.
I truly think that this is a good poem for teenagers to read. So many girls want to be Barbie dolls that they are hurting themselves.
I have a neice that is not 135 lbs, but she decided to loose weight. Her husband (their ages 18 and 20) tells her to wear a bra to bed or she will sag. He calls attention to every flaw, and she is now thinking she is not beautiful. Everyone thinks that this child could be a model or actress. I think that I will show her this poem.
This is a wonderful poem, and you have a great rhyming pattern that makes this an enjoyable read. It is nice to read items that up lift and hold our attentions to the possitive.
I love the way you use everyday things in our lives to describe life its self.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I think that it is a job well done.
Ida
This was a fun way to admit something that I get teased about it. I love finding out that I am not in the snoring boat alone. My sinuses are in bad shape and my weight is not any help.
This is well thought up and the introduction was amusing.
You need to be careful. Your talent is showing. It is amazing to hear what inspires each author. I can find inspiration in my children, my family, or as simple as a cloud. Your writing is very skillful, and I will be back to review each peice on day peice by peice. YOu keep a nice flow and lead the reader into your work.
This is a wonderful and inspirational poem. I loved the way the easy rhyme and flow made for an enjoyable. The words were uplifting and so was the message.
I would love to learn the different forms of poetry, but I seem to come short. I end up still writing from the heart. I find it so hard to find out how to creat a beat with in a line without chopping on the work.
This covers the fears of the unknown, and I sence an effort to describe it. Like a picture (my daughter hates of a woman with her throat cut), I think that this poem has some venting in your words. I truly enjoyed this read, and am thankful that you have decided to become part of the WDC of Writing.com.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
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