Beautiful story and picture painted with so few words. It was inspirational and easy read. It show the reader you faith, and gives some of us hope. I hope that it is that easy when it is my time to go. THis is one of the best religious items that I have read.
Been there felt that. This is a wonderful item that discribes the jealously that we all have felt at some time in our life. The flow made it a easy and enjoyable. The centimate brought the reader into the emotion and story behind the words. I can not wait to read more.
Ida
This is a great opportunity for our hard work and heartfelt words can mingle with those of others in healthy competition.. I have entered a poem, and see some very talented names of poets. This is a wonderful to get to know each other, and our word to be noticed.
These are such emotional items. I wish I could have been closer. I loved him so much, and I am not too far from having him leave us. You letters made me feel as though (as a reader), I could him just sitting by a table reading your words as you are writing them. This is comfornting to those of us who are loosing or have lost those that we love.
This is a great poem. I remember the teenage yearsl, and they were so hard ( not that my life found a way to get better). You captured all the emotions of the confusion, betrayal, and emotional rollacoaster that is called teen life very well. This is a great poem that captures so much in such few words.
This is a wonderful poem. You were able to take the reader into your work. The form was very well chosen. The flow was smooth, and the rhyme carried me along without stumbling. I think that this is a very well written poem, and the message is one that we all can relate to.
This poem is one that takes me back to a time that I was in love, and it creates in my heart a hope for those emotions to return and cover my heart again. This poem is a well written one with very few well chosen words. The rhyme and flow of the words were excellent.
This is a great poem with a wonderful flow and rhyme. I think that what I like best is that (to me) it reads like a chapter of Song of Solmon. The love story of the Bible. I loved the way you were able to create the emotions that you have in the reader.
I love the way this is written. You were able to take the reader into the ory. I think that the use of the Fourth of July celebration in the story line was nice. I also think that the names that you have chosen for this story meets with the alien story. Your discription of the aliens were vivid, and I enjoyed the ride into the science fiction.
You captured a strong emotion in such a few words. The rhyme is good, and the flow was smooth. Your words remind of my sixteen year marriage that lasted long enough for him to meet someone just four years older than our marriage. This is a poem (like I did) is easy to relate to.
THis is a great poem. Outside of having a car to sale, you wrote my life. I was nearly in tears with the words that you have written. YOu brought me into your well writte story line. It had a smooth flow and rhyme to carry that touching message. It is true that no matter howhard life is it could be worse.
This is a very good poem, and one that most people have lived. The flow makes read smooth and even. You were able to take your reader into your work. THe description of emotions were vivid. The story line was warming, and love shone with every word.
This is one of the best that I have read because it is relatable. I think this is a fun rhyme so fluent. This is a poem that both adults and children. This is a very descriptive poem. You covered summer from clothes to weather. This is a wonderful item.
The rhyme and the flow was great. The imagery was wonderful. You brought me into the story line. The description is so vivid. I could see the ridges, hills, and the path its self. This is a job well done right down to sound of te rain. I think that this is my favorite part.
This is a great poem. The rhyme is fluent, and the words are well chosen. I think that you have covered the message of reality very well. This poem is one that I can relate to, and the part about the years teaching us could not be written any better. This is a job that lets me knowt that I am not the only person with a poor reality.
Tank you for sharing this with us at Writing.com
Ida
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I agree with the words of your poem. The time line the poem was great, and the picture that you painted with your words brought me right into your work. The flow was perfect for this item. You covered an emotion that is feared by some and welcomed by others, and you did this in a manner that seemed effortless. This is a talented piece of wok.
This is a cute peom. The words were well chosen, and the rhyme was fun. I really feel that this would make a great children's book. The story about the bunnies are time honored by children and families everywhere, and your story ranks up there with Ber Rabbit.
Thank you for sharing this great story.
Ida
262 words
This is a well written poem that has a fun flow. THe rhyme is excellant. I think that it is a wonderful way to compare the beauty of nature with the loveliness of people. I enjoyed the comparisons and the descriptions of the moon and the nature with its flaws is still beautiful.
This is a great peice that is a theme to my life. The words are well chosen, and the flow makes the poem a great read. The message is a wonderful and we all can relate. I love the way you draw attention to the fact that we are people that leave things and decisions to the last minute.
I kept waiting for the twist, and I was so happy to see it come to pass. The form was wonderful, and the flow made the poem an enjoyable read. I bounced along the lines as if they came from my own lips. Your descriptions are right on the money about children, and I am so glad that you brought the reader's attention to both sides of children.
The flow of these lines are smooth, and the rhyme is well written. The message is sad, and there are too many that can relate to your words. The descritpion of the emotions (dark as they are) was very well chosen. The poem brought the reader into the story as a spector of a blackened and bruised heart.
This is a tear jerker. It is so romantic to love so strong even after death. It has a good flow, and the rhyme is great. I don't see any mistakes in spelling or form. I think that you have covered the emotion of the love and the pain of loosing your lover to death.
Thank you for sharing this with the Writing.com family.
269 words
THis had a great flow, and you chose the words well to work well with the orginal. I thnk that I will have a friend to look this over. I think that he will like it due to the fact that he s going to visit Calefornia (forgive my spelling).
This was fun, and would fair well in those cow comercials.
Thank you for sharing this fun read.
Ida
346 words
THis is a good story, and I could see my children loving the afore mintioned job. It had a good flow to this story, and the content was covered very well with few words. This was well done, and it was a fun read.
Thank you for sharinng this with us.
Ida
259 words
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