Well, it suprised me to see the name KEV at the end of the poem. You understood our battles so well. I wish for all the work she has had done. I am in the process of getting stomach bypass.
I truly think that this is a good poem for teenagers to read. So many girls want to be Barbie dolls that they are hurting themselves.
I have a neice that is not 135 lbs, but she decided to loose weight. Her husband (their ages 18 and 20) tells her to wear a bra to bed or she will sag. He calls attention to every flaw, and she is now thinking she is not beautiful. Everyone thinks that this child could be a model or actress. I think that I will show her this poem.
Wonderful poem. Could I ask you if this is a true poem? I have a relative that was born as his mother died. His family always treated him differently as if he caused her death. Then when his father remarried, the second wife found out that she had cancer also. The child was only seven. Then he started blaming himself because his mother had chose to give her only son (out of five children) a chance to live. Now he really has emotional troubles, and I hope him the best.
That being said this poem had a great flow, and you carried this message very well.
This is a wonderful poem, and you have a great rhyming pattern that makes this an enjoyable read. It is nice to read items that up lift and hold our attentions to the possitive.
I love the way you use everyday things in our lives to describe life its self.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I think that it is a job well done.
Ida
This was a fun way to admit something that I get teased about it. I love finding out that I am not in the snoring boat alone. My sinuses are in bad shape and my weight is not any help.
This is well thought up and the introduction was amusing.
You need to be careful. Your talent is showing. It is amazing to hear what inspires each author. I can find inspiration in my children, my family, or as simple as a cloud. Your writing is very skillful, and I will be back to review each peice on day peice by peice. YOu keep a nice flow and lead the reader into your work.
This is a wonderful and inspirational poem. I loved the way the easy rhyme and flow made for an enjoyable. The words were uplifting and so was the message.
I would love to learn the different forms of poetry, but I seem to come short. I end up still writing from the heart. I find it so hard to find out how to creat a beat with in a line without chopping on the work.
This covers the fears of the unknown, and I sence an effort to describe it. Like a picture (my daughter hates of a woman with her throat cut), I think that this poem has some venting in your words. I truly enjoyed this read, and am thankful that you have decided to become part of the WDC of Writing.com.
This was an excellant educational peice. I know about bitem and image, but I did not know about the others. I will be coming back to visit this page from time to time. Would it be a problem to put the image tag on here? I just learned it last week. I had such a problem creating my contest page. Also could you tell me where I can find the smileys tags. Everyone uses them beautifully, and I would like to learn the skill to pass along a smile.
Thank you so much for sharing this. I have been on here near two years, and I wish I would have visited before.
Love this poem. Could we even imagine what an angel has to walk through in the spiritual relm? I mean looking at my life. The angels in my life has to walk through doupt (sometimes), heart brake, and just bad times.
This poem has a great rhyme, and it is very inspirational peice.
I have a bad connection so here is the fourh time reviewing this peice. I love the poem. It captures love in the essience. The flow is smoot, and it was a great read. You were able to paint a beautiful picture of love.
This was a wonderful read. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
I adore this poem. I remember when I had my first child, and this item takes me back to the days of holding her and her brothers. You paiint a beautifu picture of love. The poem has a good flow and rhyme. You have the talent to carry me into your work. THis a job well done.
This is a great poem. The flow is good. I have had people and pets that create the feeling of summer in my life no matter what time of year they are around. My children are my spring.
The words are well chosen, and the image was wll painted.
This poem has some wonderful things with in it. First of all the picture is so beautiful. Next the flow and rhyme worked well to create a great read. Then the interesting part to me was the imagery with the educational part. Like I am not sure I have hear of the words "cygnus" and "gossamer". Could you tell me the meanings of these words? Cygnus means swan? Gossamer is some kind of weeds?"
This is a great poem, and very heart felt peice. I think that it takes talent to write an item that isn't an event from your own life. The image was well painted, and your words carried me into the poem. I think that it is talent to write such a great story in such a few words.
These lines had a good flow with an enjoyable rhyme.
Great message! I love this poem, and I can vision being high in the sky looking down on the world. I truly think of this as something that needs to be printed in newspapers. More people should begin to think in this direction. I was impressed with this wonderful poem.
If the reader has children, they certainly can relate to your words. This poem has a great flow and rhyme. I didn't find mistakes. I never do when the peice captures a part of me. I found this to be a great read that shows you skill of catching the subject and painting a picture with few words.
This is a wonderful way to challenge the one area that I truly need to work on. I have a problem covering a story line or emotion of an item in a few words, and I a secretly envous of those who can.
I hope to come back with an entry soon. It seems to be an exciting way to exercize my short line skills.
Thank you for writing this and sharing this with us.
Ida
THis is a wonderful and informative peice. I agree to how things that once made up our morals and lifestyles have been down played to mear existanc. I have children, and I watch that them grow up with all the mess that makes up the world that they live in. Living in a family where "dad" has left and married someone and they do not see him.
Men and women don't have the hearts of the "goog ole days".
I like this, and I hope that you continue to add to this item. Not just quotes that you hae heard, but also add your own. I mean each day and emotional state creates its own little theme of the day.
I mean what do you think the day was like for the person when they said "Dreams do come true."?
Just a thought, I really like this. MMM maybe creat a contest.. Allow the entries to be statements that catch other's attention or inspire. Then choose the winner.
This is a wonderful heartfelt poem. I loved the twist. The rhyme made it a fun read, and the flow made it an easy read. This painted a wonderful picture of a new relationship that brings me back in time, and I hope into the future.
This is so cute, and reminds us that all things and events always have purpose in our lives (even if it is to have a laugh on another bad day down the road). I plan to visit the link that you have provided above. I am sure that there are a few things that may bring smily.
This is a great poem, and this is a fluent and enjoyable read. I can feel loneliness in the words, but I also feel that the person in the poem realizes that he/she has friends that need attention from him/her. It feels as though the person here don't really trust enough to give to others. This makes him lonely and always wanting something that the perso in the poem can not give.
I miss the feeling of the true love. I had it once I thought, and I am waiting for it to return. You captured the feeling of that new love.
I feel that your poem has a very fluent read. The emotions are strong and created sweet memories from a love that had lasted eighteen years until I was traded in for someone just four years older than our marriage.
You are very descriptive, and the poem flows well. I think that you have create a story that brought me along with your words. I love the way that you are able to create a contrast with the way the waters appear with the way it can turn.
I have enjoyed the read, and feel that it is a wonderful read.
Thank you for reading this with us.
Ida
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