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#3217721

Review of Missing You

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see the love and care you feel for this very special person whom you miss very much.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love beautifully and romantically in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3217567

Review of The Shepherd and His Flock

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about shepherds and their flocks. A skillfully crafted Minute Poem. Perfect 8/4/4/4 form in each stanza.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of shepherds caring for their flocks through the seasons. We see these images through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you capture the life and livelihood of shepherds living in harmony under God's law.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3217560

Review of A Pixie Wonderland

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good fantasy write. Magical. A skillfully crafted Spenserian Sonnet. Perfect form written in iambic pentameter.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of this enchanted land where pixies dance to the music of nature.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Excellent meter and very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'rippling water murmurs ancient tunes.' Very nice comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab bcbc cdcd ee. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; this is a wonderful place for anyone to dream of. A beautiful place in nature to be enjoyed.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of enjambment. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3217546

Review of Healing Hands

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt message about the nursing profession. A skillfully crafted Minute Poem. Perfect 8/4/4/4 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the compassion of nurses who ease the pain and suffering of those they care for with their healing hands and hearts.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the character of those whose vocation is nursing beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3217541

Review of My Friend

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write; heartfelt, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Eintou. Perfect 2/4/6/8/6/4/2 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; You express true friendship beautifully in this piece. You are blessed to have such a friend in your life. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3217099

Review of The First Thanksgiving

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about the Thanksgiving tradition. Skillfully crafted free verse acrostic that is concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling as you express the sharing of the first Thanksgiving for thankfulness of new friends and the bounty of God's blessings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3216806

Review of My Anonymous

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt tribute to this special friend and writer. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, in line six I would add these words after that "'it would' right from the start", making the rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your feelings for this writer and the encouragement he gives you beautifully in this poem. Touching.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3216770

Review of Boys

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message about your son and boys in general. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a very good picture of boys and their curiosity and character.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about boys and their care beautifully in this piece and faith that God will help their mother's to guide them with His light.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance with good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3216755

Review of Swinging on a porch

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very nice write. Heartfelt. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of spending time on a porch swing. Through the lens of your eye the reader can see the enjoyment and peacefulness one can have with a friend who shares their time with you swinging back and forth, a pleasant way to spend the day.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, at the end of line ten I would change the period to a comma. This will smooth out the rhythm of lines ten and eleven in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with unique rhyme scheme. In rhyming lines, near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is well done.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; uplifts ones spirit. Hospitable.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read.

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Review of A Christmas Collage

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. A heartfelt and uplifting message of what Christmas means to you. Very nice free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of the Christmas season of lights, ornaments and trees as we celebrate our Lord's birth.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is very nice. A mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; the joy of Christmas and your faith shines brightly in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215981

Review of Castles in the Sand

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of togetherness at the beach and the beauty of it that we see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every first, second and fourth lines of the first three stanzas and the first and second lines of the fourth stanza are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the love you have for each other delightfully in this romantic interlude.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3215814

Review of Mon Mari

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Introspective and poignant. A heartfelt tribute of your husband's love for you. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint vivid pictures of your life that was lamentful before your love came into your life. He took you from the cold winter of loneliness and disillusionment to the warmth and renewal of spring.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'pieces torn from me scattered in the bitter winds of uncertainty' and simile: 'disillusioned in pain swirled like snowflakes in the pepetual winter of my life' are excellent comparisions to describe your life and frame of mind.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your love for your husband and his loving encouragemnt and care for you shines in this piece. He helped you become whole. You are truly blessed to have such a man in your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215805

Review of Sidney's Poetry

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

Good titles for both poems.

Form/Style:

Very good writes, heartfelt and imaginative. Skillfully crafted free verse. Very nice presentation.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You have a wonderful imagination and you paint vivid pictures of life and nature.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; lilting, upbeat. Encouraging. You are a talented poet.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and consonance with good assonance.

Overall:

Both poems are well penned and enjoyable reads. Write on.

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#3215739

Review of The Storyteller

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the magic of storytelling. Heartfelt. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You take us to enchanted lands where we see knights, ghosts, dragons, fairies and so much more that we see through the lens of your imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your joy of telling stories and I can sense that you're a wonderful storyteller. Your love for sharing your stories shine in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215729

Review of Christmas Fears

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the excitement and anticipation of Christmas, Santa Claus and gifts from the perspective of a child. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the eyes of this little boy you paint a picture of his expectation and enthusiasm as he waits for Santa to arrive and his wonder and fear of whether presents will be left behind for him... and his brother.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. The magic of Christmas as seen in the eyes of a child shines brilliantly in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there's a typo in stanza six, line two; should be 'tinkling' and in stanza thirteen, line two should be 'too.'

Overall:

A well penned story poem and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215714

Review of Rainbow Wishes

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and story poem. Heartfelt and magical. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of this place where she searches the sky for the rainbow which she can wish upon to see her love she misses so much.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'on imagination's wings'

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express her love which shines in this piece with poignance. Romantic. Lovely anticipation that her wish will come true.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3215709

Review of The Ocean Wave

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your experience with ocean waves. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You take the reader to the ocean where through the lens of your eye we see ocean waves crescendo as they crash into the rocky shore and the mist from it sprays upon your face. Refreshing.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transtion and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'ocean jewels fell onto my upturned face in a gentle brush,' a lovely description of how the mist of the ocean tenderly brushes your face like a hand would.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love for the ocean, how it makes you feel, almost romantic. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the power of the ocean waves. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3215702

Review of A Little Witch Who Wanted To Fly

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and story poem that any child would enjoy. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I prefer and enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a funny picture of this little witch who wishes to fly but doesn't have the knack for it.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in the second through fourth stanzas are perfect masculine end line that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; lilting, imaginative with a bit of humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; very nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215614

Review of A Lesson Regarding Roses

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about the folly of love. Skillfully crafted Fibonacci. Perfect 1/2/3/5/8/13 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of a rose, its brilliance and scent that is usually given in a gesture of love in courtship which in some cases will lead to folly.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling with a tinge of cynicism when it comes to love that is not true and the roses then become a folly.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3215015

Review of Nature's Summer Revelry

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of the sights and sounds of a summer evening.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the beauty of a summer night very well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215005

Review of Harvest of Words

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Concise and succinct. A nicely crafted senryu. Almost perfect form. Line three has 6 syllables, should be 5.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the seasons, the birth of spring growing to summers warmth moving into the vibrancy of color in fall.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well.
Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the beauty of the seasons through the harvest of words.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Hungry Soul ~

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of the poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message. Skillfully crafted etheree/anagram blend. Perfect form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the attributes of a hungry soul that is lamentful awash in hoplessness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of Snozzberry Tulips

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and fun read. A poem that any child who likes Willy Wonka would enjoy. Skillfully crafted PI poem; a 6 line poem with perfect 3/1/4/2/8/6 words form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. A magical picture you paint of Willy's dream that we see through the lens of your imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; an upbeat, enchanting piece that is imaginative, a beautiful place to dream of about the best treats a child could love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3213474

Review of THE TURNBERRY STREET POET.

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt tribute to Kansaspoet. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of friendship through campfire which we see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you honor this special person beautifully in this piece. The warmth of your love for him and his writing permeates this poem. I'm sure he will long be remembered. My condolences on your loss.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3213466

Review of Overdue

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write and message. Heartfelt and dark. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see a pictured of a polluted sky due to our neglect of our resources.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the moon who expresses his ire about enduring the filthy haze that has been permeating his sky and comments about a crumbling building, lets humans know that it is again their neglect that caused destruction.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling and commentary on society's misuse of its resources thus causing its decay.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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