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#3229218

Review of TEDDY BEAR

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Short, concise and succinct. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of snuggling with your teddy bear to make you feel better.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; nice rhyme scheme. Perfect feminine end line rhyme in lines one, two, six and seven which is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line five.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the comfort you get from your teddy bear when you cuddle it when you're feeling sad or upset.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228706

Review of A Rare Find

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title
A good title that suits the theme of your short story.

Structure
A very good write, much like an allegory or parable, a narrative of an event that illustrates a moral or spiritual lesson. Your story flows well amd teaches a lesson that all of us can learn from.

Language
As you narrate this story, the direction of it is constant and flows to its logical conclusion. You express it from the farmer's point of view as we learn that he tested what he found which resulted in a rare find, something of so much value that it paid off his mortgage. He found the value in it.

Character and Idea
It is from this characterization of the farmer and his find that the reader can see the similarity to the gospel of God's grace. It is this spiritual nugget that is of great price and is free to all who believe. The 'idea' put forth is that if the farmer hadn't recognized his 'pearl' of great price, that nugget that turned out to be gold, he wouldn't have been able to pay off his mortgage and own his land outright.

The same can be said of the Gospel of God's grace. By never understanding how priceless this gift is, and never coming to the saving grace through Christ our Lord is certainly tragedy and loss.
Because as you have stated 'The person who finds Jesus Christ the Savior, makes the happiest, most valuable find possible in his or her lifetime.' That person has found 'true gold.'

Other Points/Overall
A lovely story and invitation to seek and come to know the Lord.
Well penned with much insight and wisdom. Write on.
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#3228691

Review of Something More

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint the shades of love that are felt but not heard but is understood by the heart and translated into words unspoken.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about how powerful emotions can be, how love can be without any words being spoken. Passionate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228687

Review of Rose within Your Hand

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about being nurtured while growing up. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You describe growing up through a comparison of a gardener who nurtures their flowers until they outgrow their pots.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile

Nice metaphor for a child that is molded by a parent - 'I am the rose within your hand;' and 'nurtured me from bud to flower' very good comparisons and descriptives for raising a child.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; a nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express the love and care between parent and child as lessons are taught and learned and in time the realization comes that they have 'grown' up and blossomed in their journey of life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228678

Review of As the Bell Tolls

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write that is dark and eerie. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of all hallows eve and the creatures who rise on that night when the bell tolls as humans sleep.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with unique rhyme scheme: abcb cbcc adef ghfa.
Perfect masculine end line rhyme in the first two stanzas that are executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; scary, spooky and alarming as the bell tolls.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3228425

Review of Sing A Song

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt message of hope. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Lyrical.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in second through fifth stanzas is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that you execute very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings about hope, joy, peace, justice and love for the world and its peoples beautifully in this poem. A lovely song that praises these things that all of us should hope for.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228419

Review of My Wife, My Forever Friend

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and dedicatory piece to your wife. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for your wife and how much she means to you beautifully in this piece. This love and friendship with her is a wonderful gift from God. You are blessed.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228414

Review of Renewed Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your prose.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about this once special love. Romantic. Skillfully crafted prose.

Imagery:

Imagery is very good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of love, you paint a beautiful picture of this young woman.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for her beautifully in this piece; in her at this moment in time you found your happiness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice internal rhyme in line one. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228391

Review of Invisible Love

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about invisible love. Introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklk. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts and feelings about the charms of this invisible love who's not there, an imaginary love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228092

Review of Silence

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about silence and dreams that any child would enjoy. Skillfully crafted quatrain that is free style metered rhyming poetry which I prefer and enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a picture of silence and a child falling asleep to dream.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express how silence will lull a child to sleep and to dream.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3227859

Review of Children

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your children. A well crafted rictameter string. Perfect 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love for your children beautifully in this piece. God blessed you with wonderful children.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. My only suggestion would be for you to center your poem so that the reader can see the diamond form.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read.

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#3227610

Review of Photographic Memory

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that suits the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the beauty of autumn. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of fall and its warm colors that is seen in this forest haven as the sun shines upon it.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'amber leaves stashed like stars on branches of oak' and 'crisp grass overflowing pertinent boundaries like and ocean' lovely descriptives and creative comparisons.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the beauty of this scene and you joy of the season very well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3227587

Review of MOTHER Vs TEACHER

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and tribute to mother's and teachers. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transitions and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, stategically placed commas at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the importance that mother's and teachers have upon children beautifully in this poem. They are truly God's blessing to us all.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on the roles of mother and teacher. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3227338

Review of Longing for Something More

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Abstract, dark, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good with nice descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of being trapped that is painful to stay or leave as you try to find release from your feelings.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts about being free, while still in this prison from which you have yet to escape.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3227313

Review of In Dreams

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcc deff ghii. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You feel the passion of love in your dreams and upon waking, you long for that love with yearning and fear, a fear of being so close to someone.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3227233

Review of Hard Candy

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'life is like candy, it is usually sweet, but sometimes it's hard and breaks your teeth.' very good descriptive and comparison between candy and life.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one of stanza 2 and in line four of stanza 4.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; and encouraging message. Upbeat.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3227223

Review of Happiness to the Rescue

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message. Well crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a very nice picture of how happiness can chase away ones depression.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of Happiness; he walks into a room with a smile on his face, skips joyfully over to a lonely man and is encouraging.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; uplifting, upbeat and encouraging.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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Review of My love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write and dedicatory poem about your husband. Concise and succinct. Very nice shape. Perfect 1/2/3/4/1 form. Minimilistic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well.

Tone:

Very nice depth of feeling; you describe the character of your husband lovingly.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3226488

Review of Fire Eyes!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about love and how you long for it from the woman you love. Concise and succinct. Nicely crafted rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'the fire in your eyes is so bright' a lovely way to describe her passion. 'A flame in me I could not quench' good descriptive of your ardor that can not be put out.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abacad. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines one, three and five that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Nicely sensual. You express your passion for each other very well in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3226175

Review of Santa lost his way

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about Christmas and Santa losing his way in the storm. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. In your dream you paint a beautiful picture of warm sunshine and children's laughter at Christmas time. Then the cold brings you out of sleep to the reality of a blizzard, with thoughts that Santa may have lost his way in the snow.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter, 10 syllables per line in each stanza. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the joy of the season in one part of the world, and the cold reality where you live with gloomy thoughts that because of bad weather, Santa might lose his way and not arrive.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of "A Loving Peace"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is nice; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your dreams of a world at peace where all men treasure love and respect each other to truly be good neighbors; where all religions can come to an understanding in peacefulness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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Review of Two Little Owls

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and story poem that any child would enjoy. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid story about this family of owls that nest in a tin sewer drain.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb cccc. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you are a fine storyteller as you tell this lilting story poem that a child would delight in.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on this owl family. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of An Airy Heart

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and introspective. Nicely crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of the different types of winds that describe how you feel about yourself deep inside.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings in a powerful way, these seasonal winds of your life that are always flowing and changing.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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Review of Where the Thunder Hides

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and imaginative story poem. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your imagination you paint a vivid picture about a storm and the giants in charge of them who make the noise and throw the lightning bolts.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the power of a storm that a child would find exciting and an adventure. You are a talented storyteller.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice use of repetition for emphasis of the action of this story. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of A Friend

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message about true friendship. Nicely crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well with a nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Strong use of simile: 'a friend is like a fire on a cold day.' 'a friend is like a jester, trying to make you laugh during hard times.' These are my favorite comparisons about what a friend is like in this poem that is almost totally made up of similes.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you define what a real friend is and the type of friend you will be.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good and strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

A good write and message. Introspective and heartfelt. A skillfully crafted acronym.
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