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#3229900

Review of Yet Still

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message about love. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express love and how it sustains a person, even after it's gone, something I think all of us understands. A beautiful message of just how powerful love can be.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of First Kiss

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Romantic. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Nicely sensual and passionate. You express this beautiful moment of a first kiss with someone who is special to you very well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3229878

Review of I Need

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write; heartfelt and instrospective. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love, your need for this special woman beautifully.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3229870

Review of The ways I love you

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Perfect dactylic and feminine end line rhyme is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for Sophia beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3229865

Review of My Brother

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and dedicatory piece about your brother and how special he is to you. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for your brother, a special gift from God, beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3229826

Review of Chapter

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Heartfelt, lamentful and introspective. Nicely crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause will promote emphasis and will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about starting over somewhere new with the heartache and pain that you still feel as you start this new chapter in your life journey with poignance.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3229814

Review of Gone

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Introspective. Heartfelt, concise and succinct well crafted blend of free verse and rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines 1, 3, 7 and 11 that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express your thoughts well about this person whom you miss.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3229286

Review of Tear Drift

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your tears.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'my tears fall like snowflakes' very nice descriptive and comparison to your tears.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express what your tears are like creatively and with poignance.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3229280

Review of Coping with Grief

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt, lamentful and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how you cope with your grief and loss through memories that you have of those you've lost. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Very nice use of dialogue. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3229248

Review of Monster Outside My Window

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt, eerie and humorous. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the 'monster' that the reader sees through the lens of your eye and imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is either perfect feminine or masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line 4 of stanza two (stared, scared).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; very nice humor as you looked into the mirror and saw that the monster was you. Very nice punch line.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3229231

Review of Witch on the Broom

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a vampire who loves a witch. Imaginative. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptives. Through the eyes of the vampire, you paint a vivid picture of the beauty and character of the witch.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the love the vampire has for the witch nicely in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3229218

Review of TEDDY BEAR

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Short, concise and succinct. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of snuggling with your teddy bear to make you feel better.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; nice rhyme scheme. Perfect feminine end line rhyme in lines one, two, six and seven which is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line five.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the comfort you get from your teddy bear when you cuddle it when you're feeling sad or upset.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228706

Review of A Rare Find

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title
A good title that suits the theme of your short story.

Structure
A very good write, much like an allegory or parable, a narrative of an event that illustrates a moral or spiritual lesson. Your story flows well amd teaches a lesson that all of us can learn from.

Language
As you narrate this story, the direction of it is constant and flows to its logical conclusion. You express it from the farmer's point of view as we learn that he tested what he found which resulted in a rare find, something of so much value that it paid off his mortgage. He found the value in it.

Character and Idea
It is from this characterization of the farmer and his find that the reader can see the similarity to the gospel of God's grace. It is this spiritual nugget that is of great price and is free to all who believe. The 'idea' put forth is that if the farmer hadn't recognized his 'pearl' of great price, that nugget that turned out to be gold, he wouldn't have been able to pay off his mortgage and own his land outright.

The same can be said of the Gospel of God's grace. By never understanding how priceless this gift is, and never coming to the saving grace through Christ our Lord is certainly tragedy and loss.
Because as you have stated 'The person who finds Jesus Christ the Savior, makes the happiest, most valuable find possible in his or her lifetime.' That person has found 'true gold.'

Other Points/Overall
A lovely story and invitation to seek and come to know the Lord.
Well penned with much insight and wisdom. Write on.
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#3228691

Review of Something More

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint the shades of love that are felt but not heard but is understood by the heart and translated into words unspoken.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about how powerful emotions can be, how love can be without any words being spoken. Passionate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228687

Review of Rose within Your Hand

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about being nurtured while growing up. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You describe growing up through a comparison of a gardener who nurtures their flowers until they outgrow their pots.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile

Nice metaphor for a child that is molded by a parent - 'I am the rose within your hand;' and 'nurtured me from bud to flower' very good comparisons and descriptives for raising a child.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; a nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express the love and care between parent and child as lessons are taught and learned and in time the realization comes that they have 'grown' up and blossomed in their journey of life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228678

Review of As the Bell Tolls

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write that is dark and eerie. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of all hallows eve and the creatures who rise on that night when the bell tolls as humans sleep.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with unique rhyme scheme: abcb cbcc adef ghfa.
Perfect masculine end line rhyme in the first two stanzas that are executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; scary, spooky and alarming as the bell tolls.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3228425

Review of Sing A Song

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt message of hope. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Lyrical.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in second through fifth stanzas is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that you execute very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings about hope, joy, peace, justice and love for the world and its peoples beautifully in this poem. A lovely song that praises these things that all of us should hope for.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of My Wife, My Forever Friend

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and dedicatory piece to your wife. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for your wife and how much she means to you beautifully in this piece. This love and friendship with her is a wonderful gift from God. You are blessed.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228414

Review of Renewed Love

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your prose.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about this once special love. Romantic. Skillfully crafted prose.

Imagery:

Imagery is very good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of love, you paint a beautiful picture of this young woman.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for her beautifully in this piece; in her at this moment in time you found your happiness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice internal rhyme in line one. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Invisible Love

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about invisible love. Introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklk. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts and feelings about the charms of this invisible love who's not there, an imaginary love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3228378

Review of I Got In Trouble

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a child who gets into trouble. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a mother who loves her child and disciplines him when needed.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect feminine and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines three and ten.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the love that mother and child share in this poem, even when that child is punished. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Little Duck

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Rated: E

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write for children. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a young child conversing with a little duck, fluffy and white that she wishes to play with.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the eagerness this child has who is curious and wants to be friends with this little duck she wants to play with.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this duck and its thoughts. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of The Fuzzy Bear

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your curiosity about fuzzy bears. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and imagination, you paint a vivid picture of what this bear looks like as you wonder how he acts, lives and feels.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff gg.
Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your love for fuzzy bears and how curious you are about them. I can relate. I collect teddy bears. I love how soft and fuzzy they are.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling regarding fuzzy bears. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, in line three of your poem there is a typo, after Does should be 'his'.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read.

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Review of Silence

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about silence and dreams that any child would enjoy. Skillfully crafted quatrain that is free style metered rhyming poetry which I prefer and enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a picture of silence and a child falling asleep to dream.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express how silence will lull a child to sleep and to dream.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Children

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your children. A well crafted rictameter string. Perfect 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love for your children beautifully in this piece. God blessed you with wonderful children.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. My only suggestion would be for you to center your poem so that the reader can see the diamond form.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read.

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