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ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3234798

Review of The Abyss That Is You

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptive. You paint a vivid picture of the cold blue eyes of this man whose heart she wishes to share in love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought as well as making the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'eyes blue like the sky on a warm summer's day' a beautiful descriptive and comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abccc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as she wishes him to share his heart with her.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3234339

Review of I Didn't Ask For This Shell

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Prayerful. Well crafted free verse couplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion: a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in this poem in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'inside my shell I crawled back in' a nice descriptive/comparison of how you view your inner self that you hide within.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express feelings of sadness, lack of trusting others and your prayerful cry to God to 'soften your shell, water it till you love and trust again to help others'.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice internal rhyme in line seven (be, me). Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note: there is a typo in line three, should be "today".

Overall:

Very nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3234326

Review of I Am By Nature

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write from the perspective of Nature. Heartfelt and lamentful. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of nature, her winds, forest and lightning that floods across the sky.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion: strategically placed commas at natural pauses and a period posted at the end of a thought (for example - a comma at the end of line one and a period at the end of line 2) will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of Nature. She expresses her thoughts, sadness and pain she feels because of mankinds assault and poor care to her.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaab cccb bbbb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line 3 of stanza 1 (where, dare).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Nature expresses her feelings about her mistreatment with power in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of reptition for emphasis of Nature's feelings. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note: there is a typo in line three of your second stanza, should be 'your'.

Overall:

Very nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3234306

Review of A Crisp Breeze

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You take the reader to this place; we walk alongside you seeing through the lens of your eye the beauty and sounds of nature as you mull over the possibilities in life's journey while enjoying the chill of the breeze.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion: I would remove the comma at the end of line one and change the comma to a period at the end of line five. I'd also remove the commas from the ends of lines six, seven, ten, twelve and change the comma to a period at the end of line eight. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; I enjoy the peacefulness that permeates this poem. It gives me a sense of well being that I'd have on a walk in contemplation.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the sights, sounds and chilly wind expressed in the piece. Nice internal rhyme in line ten (grace, face) and end line rhyme in the last two lines of your poem (ease, breeze). Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Very nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3234289

Review of Trapped

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this person who is trying to write but is distracted with the sounds around her.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, in line one of your first stanza I'd change wall to 'walls'. I think this makes the line flow better in my opinion. Also you need to add a period at the end of line four of stanza two.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the thoughts of this writer as the walls close in around her as she tries to write under difficult circumstances where distractions take her from that special place where she is able to put her thoughts down on paper.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3234206

Review of Words of the saved.

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message about your view of heaven. A lovely invitation to those who do not know the Lord. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a lovely picture of your concept of heaven, a place of peace, joy, love and light of God.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Good mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your faith about the Lord and our heavenly home beautifully and with poignance in this invitational poem to those who do not know Him. Uplifting words of encouragement.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line 13, should be "you're". Also, I think your poem will look better and easier to read if you single space it with a space between each stanza, but this is only my opinion.

Overall:

Very nicely penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3233696

Review of Coffee

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 form. Nice presentation.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of how the sound and scent of perculating coffee awakens you from slumber to drink a cup of it.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; I can relate to these feelings that coffee brings to a person just awakening from a good nights sleep.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3233688

Review of Snowy Winter Sunset

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write of woods in slumber. Skillfully crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and the brush of your pen, you paint a vivid picture of the woods in winter, barren and asleep under the 'blue-filtered' light of the season.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of this scene locked in this wintery sunset very well in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3233684

Review of Double Acrostic

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and skillfully crafted mirror (double) acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling as you express your thoughts and feelings about yourself. You define your character and wish to trick the readers eye in this your 'pantomime'.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3233677

Review of Daffodil Slumber

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation about this beautiful daffodil. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of daffodils in slumber awaiting spring to awaken and blossom again and after a time wither then slumber until they are reawakened.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; every second line of each couplet rhymes with perfect feminine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the cycle of life of this flower beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3233669

Review of Hawk

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a hawk in nature. Good form. Skillfully crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the hawk, his power as a predator, his beauty in flight and strength of movement.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the inner traits of this bird beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3233604

Review of Worlds apart

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and poignant. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptive. You paint this picture of love for a sibling who passed in a lovely shower of moonlight and the calm of light blue ocean's tide.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express love and pain you feel for the loss of your brother beautifully in this poem. The reader senses how much you miss him while you know that the love you shared with him is stronger than ever.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3233587

Review of Two Poems

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

Good titles that fit the themes of your poems "Belief" and "I'm a Clown"

Form/Style:

Both poems are written well and come from your heart. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

In both pieces flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

In "Belief" nice metaphor: 'travel through life's bed of roses' and simile: 'fly like the joyous dove' - both are good comparisons.

Rhyme:

In both poems, rhyme is good as is their rhyme schemes. In "Belief" near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. In "I'm a Clown" every second line in each couplet is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this poem.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling in both poems. You express your beliefs with conviction, laughter and love.

Word Choice:

Word choice in both poems is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in "Belief" and strong use of repetition for emphasis in "I'm a clown". In both poems nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Both poems are well penned and enjoyable reads. Write on.

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#3233099

Review of Friday

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about Friday, the last day of the work week. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababcc dedeff ghghcc. A mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the happiness that Friday brings especially the fact that at the end of the day you start the weekend. Your love for Friday's shines in this piece and I can relate to it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about Friday's. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3233027

Review of Sky Flowers

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and skillfully crafted rhyming Rictamter. Perfect form. Lovely presentation and aesthetics.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of these 'sky flowers' that give excitement to those who ride within them.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'an amazing bouquet, in a new guise, as flowers of the sky arise' a lovely comparison and descriptive of colorful hot air balloons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the astonishment of these travelers beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3232608

Review of I am here for a reason

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. A well crafted quatrain, free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love for this special person beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3232603

Review of In Search Of My Stolen Heart

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about falling in love. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm. Just a note, you don't need the semi colon at the end of line four. If you remove it the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love for this person who has drawn you to her, capturing your heart.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3232600

Review of I will always be there for you.......

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and compassionate. Nice blend of free verse and free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme in the first stanza: abcb. The second/fourth line of the first stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express your love for this person, your empathy for her and willingness to always be there for her.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3232575

Review of The Wooded Path

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your walk in the woods lost in thought. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of leaves falling from trees on your Autumn walk while chilly winds blow and at the same setting your soul free.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about living and the things that bind us together in our journey of life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3232561

Review of Does it Exist

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Thoughtful. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your need to understand the 'why' of things in life and where to find those answers. Those questions led you to look upward towards the sky where you found affection.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3232550

Review of So Little

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses, and a period at the end of a thought will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Also, there is a typo in lines eight and ten, should be 'I'.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about how you view your life well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3232544

Review of As The Rain Silently Fell

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Delightfully sensual. Well crafted free verse triplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a beautiful picture of a loving relationship.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'her eyes glistened like a lazy summer day.' A lovely descriptive and comparison.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thankfulness to God for the love he has given you with poignance in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3232519

Review of Our Dance Is Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Romantic. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Also, line one is slightly awkward. If you change me to 'I' the line will be grammatically correct.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb bb cc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your love for the one you love passionately in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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Review of Life

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about life and what it's like. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptive. You paint a picture of the similarity of life to the grain of sand in an hour glass.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as making the flow and rhythm of your poem even better.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'life is like that moment, a drifting grain of sand' a nice descriptive and comparison to life.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about life and ones journey. It is lived well while we feel young and grow older as the years slip by much like the sands of an hour glass.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of this drifting sand of time. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line 14, should be 'through.'

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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Review of Spirit Sisters

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write, ghostly gothic. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a very eerie picture of the woman in this 'spirit' world.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb abcb. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling as she opens herself to these whispers from the beyond.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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