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#3222576

Review of Moving On

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem; the closing of one chapter as you start a new one.

Form/Style:

A good write about the fond memories you have of your childhood home that has been sold. Introspective and heartfelt. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express with poignance your feelings of sadness for this place which you hold dear; memories for you, of your Dad who once lived there who's now gone that makes you weep for what once was. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3222553

Review of Poppy Food

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about 'food' for the soul. Well crafted blank verse in iambic tetrameter.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of beauty that gives sustenance to the spirit, this visitor a poppy in bloom in springtime, a time of renewal.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter: 8 syllables per line throughout poem. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of a poppy, 'standing tall, cyclopic black eye framed in red, stared in at me as if to say...'

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your joy of spring creatively and beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration and consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3222528

Review of Two Psalms

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt words of praise and adoration. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid, powerful, loving and supportive picture of God who knows all our needs.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter: 2/4/4/4/4/4/4/2 - 2/4/4/4/4/4/4/2 and very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; your faith and trust in God shines in this piece. You express your conviction with passion.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition (in second psalm) for emphasis of what God does for you. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3222047

Review of The Gardening Life*

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about gardening and the joy of it. A skillfully crafted Lune String. Perfect 3/5/3 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You took me to this garden as we see through the lens of your eye, a gardener doing his work. I can almost smell the soil as you work and water it.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the bond you have with the land as you do your gardening, and even though it can be hard work, it's done with love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the process of gardening. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3221688

Review of Recovery

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write; heartfelt, concise and succinct. Soothing.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the healing quality of nature's winds that is calming to the spirit.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the serenity one feels after being consoled by the gentle stroke of the wind that brings healing.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3221681

Review of Gloomy Country Road

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation. Skillfully crafted Nove Otto. Perfect form and metered rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see all that you see as you walk down this country path and in the distance the brewing of a storm as the leaves sway in the wind.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aacbbcddc. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express an eerieness as you walk the path in the darkness as you hear dogs bark and cries of bluejays.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3221662

Review of Peace

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Lune. Perfect 5/3/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of lightning, thunder and a soft rain and the scent of the earth in a cleansing renewal.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express wonder of the storm which starts in darkness but ends in light of restoration.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3221642

Review of Autumn

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation. Short, concise and succinct. Perfect 3/4/3/4/3/4/7 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of fall, the beauty of its color as created by God.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; your enjoyment of the season shines through in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Life is a dance

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Concise and succinct. A well crafted huitain, near perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the dance of life as we see it through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Rhythm is good; line to line breaks are well done. Good meter (8 syllables per line) and very nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause and a period at the end of a thought (line 4 and 8) will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor, 'life is a dance' very nice comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme of this form: ababbcbc. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express life as a dance that can go smoothly at times and difficult in the next... a dance that can be graceful in the flow of life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3219945

Review of Doom of the Nightmare King

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good dark fantasy write. Short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted quatrain, free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Second/fourth lines are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the happiness of the death of the Nightmare King and that the years of fear and pain have finally ended and the memories will fade into the past.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3219900

Review of Why Don't Vampire's P?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title
A good title that suits the theme of your fantasy write/essay.

Structure
Your question is an interesting one and you express information about vampires and their 'living habits' well in this piece. I also enjoy the humor of the piece. You paint some funny pictures about food preferences and the results after 'eating.'

Language
Your narrative as you express your argument about whether vampires relieve themselves maintains a good flow and direction as do these questions that never seem to be answered in stories about vampires.

Character and Idea
The idea about vampires changing into bats has also been problematic as you express very well. I too have wondered about the clothing issue. This is something that I agree someone should write about to tie up the loose ends.

Other Points/Overall
Overall a good job. You have a good sense of humor that comes out well in this piece.
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#3219429

Review of Cinquiano on Horses

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about horses. Short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of the character of horses.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your love for horses and their beauty in motion.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3219413

Review of light

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write about light. Concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Whitney. Perfect 3/4/3/4/3/4/7 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of light, its gloominess in December and new light of renewal that comes in January, the precurser of spring.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; uplifting.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3219407

Review of Were I a poet

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt. Nicely shaped form poetry. Well crafted.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile, 'my pen would write words fluttering like butterflies' very nice descriptive and comparision.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about being a poet beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3219401

Review of Winter day

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the winter season. Skillfully crafted Minute Poem. Perfect 8/4/4/4 form in each stanza.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of winter that we can see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the beauty of a winter day, one that you enjoy as it foretells the coming spring.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Hungry

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will smooth out the rhythm of your poem.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express your wish to know love and live your life in a freedom, outside of the box that you are caught in. You express your hunger to really live life to the fullest.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3218721

Review of Promise

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt message. Short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Septolet. Perfect form, 7 lines, 14 words in two parts dealing with one thought creating a picture.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the warmth of a true friendship that neither person will part from, a promise that comes from the heart.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3218711

Review of Get Up!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and encouraging. A skillfully crafted Triolet. Perfect form, 10 syllables per line.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; upbeat. A very nice pep talk that encourages one to move on in their life, to help them out of depression that only they can work out and overcome.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3218360

Review of Darkness Sea(revised)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Dark, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see this darkness, hoplessness that seems to be pulling you under these waves of emotion.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor, 'I fell into the Darkness Sea'

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts, your loss of self powerfully in this dark place where you reside.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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Review of Copenhagen-nama

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message. Short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling and commentary on society's inability to 'clear the air' in this debate as well as dealing with polution on a world wide scale.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3218053

Review of Long Night

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of loneliness, wanting to be held by the one you love, but trusting that if not possible, you are held in the grace of God.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your faith and trust in God shines in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3218051

Review of Character

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line six (wisdom, drum).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts about yourself and how you are comfortable within yourself. Walking to the beat of your own drum, you've made peace with how you live your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write.

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Review of TEN LITTLE HOT DOGS

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and educational piece to teach counting to children using their fingers and poetry to make learning fun. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. A funny picture of hot dogs as they are grilled and eaten with gusto.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every first, second, fourth and sixth line of each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; a fun exercise that little ones would enjoy and an very good teaching moment.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of learning. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3217748

Review of Jesus Is His Name

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem/song.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message. I'm sure the children enjoy singing this at VBS. An entertaining piece.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice meter and rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; uplifting praise and adoration for our Lord through song. Wonderful expression of faith that shines in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in singing words of praise.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Tiger

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write, a poem that children would enjoy about a tiger. A skillfully crafted Palindrome. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a tiger in its habitat; a cat that is powerful and dangerous blending in with its surroundings.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you capture the ferociousness of this cat that is very scary if you happen to be its prey.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the traits of this cat. Good alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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