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Review of Love or Passion?

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message. Heartfelt and thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'passion gives you wings,' 'burning stars find rest in gentle skies' 'passion exotic fruit, love an ancient tree' very poetic.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme aabb ccdd eeff. Nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You describe this bond of love and passion that should always be connected to each other because they harmonize each other.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Very nice use of repetition for emphasis of the connection of love and passion. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Oh the Cost

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very nice write from the perspective of a dying soldier. Heartfelt and poignant. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling; nicely crafted couplets, a blending of free verse and rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines 2,4,6,8,10 and 12 that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings, gratefulness in this poem that honors soldiers from all branches of the military.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration and assonance. Just a suggestion, it would be nice if you could single space your poem for easier reading.

Overall:

Nicely penned tribute to our men and women in the armed forces.
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#3211083

Review of Moon Dance

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write and presentation. A heartfelt romantic fantasy poem. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of love that we see through the lens of your imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'dance with the stars' and nice simile 'glide across the Milky Way like a beam of light.' Poetic.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express all you would do to be with this person you love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your feelings. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210948

Review of Backseat Driver

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and story poem. Skillfully crafted acrostic blended with nearly perfect monorhyme. Very creative.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of cruising in a new car, something any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. The enjoyment of taking a ride in a new car and the excitement of being pulled over by the police makes your heart jump as you are pulled into this story poem. I especially enjoyed the humor of the piece... her own child reporting their car stolen. Someone was in real trouble for that 'antic.'

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210736

Review of The Rose

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt and uplifting. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of safety and security in the arms of God, this secret place where His children find solace.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor 'within the garden of your soul comes forth a lovely rose...' simply beautiful.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with very well in this piece (go, so; despair, there; heart, part; rose, grow).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; a lovely message of love, protection and growth under God's guidance.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Wanderlust

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Senryu string. The first senryu is 3/4/3, the second thru fifth are 3/5/3, perfect 17 syllables or less form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express your feelings powerfully in this piece. The sense of hopelessness permeates the poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3210293

Review of Listen Today

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very nice write and message. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about the importance of listening to the one you love, 'to feast on her words' that will bring delight.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition as a reminder to listen, favor and impart to her your feelings. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210287

Review of Kiss

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very nice write, heartfelt. Well crafted freeverse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture that celebrates the kiss and its affects on the receiver.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done.
Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual, this pleasure that comes from lips. You express feelings that go along with being kissed beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of beauty of her lips. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210275

Review of Earth's Faithful

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Well crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of gardening that we can see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Very nice depth of feeling; your love for this pastime shines in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210267

Review of Here

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Heartfelt, introspective and lamentful. Well crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your sadness being separated from the one you love. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of Daddy

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. A lovely tribute to a father. Short, concise and succinct nicely crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a very nice picture of a fathers love and care.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

In the lines that rhyme (5,6,7,9), perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; the love and respect that you express about this father shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of A Beautiful Girl

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A good write about love that you seek. Elegant verse. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry. Imagery: is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of love that blossoms that we see through the lens of your eye. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Rhyme: is good as is the rhyme scheme abab. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece. Tone: lovely depth of feeling; you express the love and romance you would find in this girl of your dreams. Word choice: is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3209592

Review of Destiny and Desire

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A good write. Heart. Well crafted rhyming poetry. Romantic. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm. Rhyme: is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme which is executed very well in this piece. Tone: lovely depth of feeling; you express how love makes all things new in the one touched by it. Word choice: is good with nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3209325

Review of Silent Jeer

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about jealousy. Dark. Skillfully crafted Petrarchan sonnet. Good meter written in iambic pentameter.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this woman who is after 'your' date. Through your eyes we see her sensuality as she 'stalks' her prey.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor 'temptress stalks her prey,' 'the albatross takes flight,' 'on feathered feet she floats' which describes her prowess.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you portray her jealousy as well as your anger as she makes a play for your date.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with strong alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of By a stream

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A good write, peaceful. Well crafted free verse. Very nice use of simile (water clear as glass; sky as perfect as a picture; peaceful as a babbling brook.) Imagery: is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of this special place that we see through the lens of your eyes. You take me there, to this place of serenity where one can commune in nature. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Tone: lovely depth of feeling, this place you describe is almost magical. Word choice: is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of A long forgotten ride

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that fits the theme of your poem. A very good write and imaginative story poem. Suspenseful. Well crafted rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer. Good use of repetition for emphasis of emotion for the struggle of the lovers who wished to be together. Nice use of simile ('roiling darkness like a shroud'). Imagery: is good as are the descriptives. We see through the lens of your imagination this story of lovers who flee so that they can be together but all they encounter are trials that wish to keep them apart. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm. Rhyme: is good; near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Tone: deep expression of emotion; suspense builds throughout the poem. You are a talented storyteller. Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Memories

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your memories. Heartfelt. Well crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a nice picture of memories at different times in your life and how important they are to you.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; every second/fourth line in first two stanzas are perfect masculine end line rhyme. The second/fourth line of the third stanza is near rhyme.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express with poignance these memories that you will treasure, good or bad. These feelings I can relate to, the bitter and sweet of memories that will always be important to us.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Desert Skies

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and prayerful. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of the beauty of the desert in the evening.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. We see through the lens of your eyes the beauty of the night sky, stars shining brightly, then fading as the sun rises.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'He paints the sky with His hand and spreads His warmth across the land' A wonderful way to express the beauty created by God and the security of His presence that gives warmth to the spirit.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; calm and peaceful, stargazing at the beauty God created knowing that the ones you care for see these same stars too. Comforting.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Birthday For Cutiefox

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that fits the theme of your poem. A good short write, heartfelt birthday wishes for your friend. Concise and succinct. Well crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm. Rhyme: is good; nice mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme which is executed well in this piece. Tone: nice depth of feeling in these well wishes for a good time and great day on his birthday. Word choice: is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of The ocean

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A good write, lamenftful, heartfelt and poignant. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer. Imagery: is very nice; you paint a picture of love that is deep and lasting. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter 8/8/8/8 and very nice rhythm. Rhyme: is good; second/fourth line rhyme that is perfect masculine end line rhyme executed very well in this piece. Tone: deep expression of emotion; you express your feelings of this special love beautifully, a love that will never be forgotten. Word choice: is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Pieces of Me

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A very good dark write and sad lament about love. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry that I prefer and enjoy. Very nice use of simile. Elegantly written verse. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Rhyme: is good; unique rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines 2, 4, 6 and 8 of stanza 1; lines 2, 5, 7 9 of stanza 2 and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme in lines 2, 4, 6 and 8 of stanza 3 which is executed beautifully in this piece. Tone: deep expression of emotion; you express your thoughts about this withdrawal of love that causes one hurt, pain... and suicide. I hope this isn't a true story. Word choice: is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned; write on.
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Review of A Soldier's Broken Heart

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt, poignant and lamentful. The epistle is a lovely form of letter writing and in this case it is from a soldier to his sweetheart.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. This soldier paints a vivid picture of what life is like for him on his tour of duty and how much he misses his sweetheart.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice Rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; He expresses his worry from not hearing from her but as always tells her he loves her and that he misses her. He encourages her to keep her spirits up, even asking her to tell him what he did wrong until he finally hears from her and finds out that she loves someone else. A man of character, he wishes her well, telling her one last time that he'll always miss her and love her. She doesn't realize that she's the one who as lost someone very special.

Word Choice:

Word choice: is good. Excellent use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Beautiful love letters that end on a sad note. Write on.

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Review of An American Warrior

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Concise and succinct rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of soldiers through time who have fought for our freedom.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the conviction of those in the military who serve willingly to preserve our freedom.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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Review of Your name

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A very nice short write, heartfelt, introspective and lamentful. Succinct. Nice contrast between the first and last stanzas. Abstract. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm. Tone: deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts, the drama that remains unnamed very well in this piece. Word choice: is good. Overall: nicely penned, write on.

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Review of Christmas kind of love

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that fits the theme of your poem. A good write, heartfelt. Well crafted free verse. Romantic. Nice metaphor ('sea of white' for snow). Very nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Imagery: is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of the love you wish for. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Tone: deep expression of emotion; you express this beautiful wish for true love that any reader can relate to. Word choice: is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a suggestion, in line 5, change 'you're' to I'm. It makes the line flow much better, in my opinion. Overall: well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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