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Review of Follow Your Dreams

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message. Introspective and heartfelt. A skillfully crafted acronym.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about following your dreams even when things may not go your way.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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Review of My Loneliness

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of your loneliness and your wish to hide from it.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express your loneliness, wishing you had the ability to make friends, but always on the sidelines watching others make and mend friendships. I understand these feelings well and can relate to them.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3225515

Review of "Happy Fathers Day"

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about celebrating your first Father's Day with your birth father. Poignant. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter 5/5/5/5 - 5/7/5/7 - 5/5/5/5. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'ribbons of love'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express your feelings for your father after many years without knowing him and finally getting the chance for the first time to wish him "Happy Father's Day."

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3225495

Review of The battlefields

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the horror seen after battle from the perspective of a dead soldier. A well crafted free style metered rhyming poem.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see the devastation that war brings, the death and dying of soldiers scattered on the battlefield.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in the first three stanzas are either near rhyme or perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express this soldier's horror of death and war and the possible fate to all who war with others.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Morning Glory

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt words of praise and adoration for our Lord. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Good imagery as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of peace that is found in the Lord who calms one spirits and feeds the soul from rivers of heaven's mountain.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor, 'You're the rain that gently waters secret deserts in my being.' Lovely.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A mix of near rhyme and perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that you execute well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your faith, love and trust in the Lord beautifully in this piece. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of your love for the Lord. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3225142

Review of Abba, Father

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about God the Father. Lovely words of praise and adoration for Him. Prayerful. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the character of God; His love, power, grace, restoration and so much more that He does for His children.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme which is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your faith and conviction shines in this piece. You express your love and trust in Him beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about God. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3225126

Review of Evading Shadows

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

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Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about eluding death. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Monorhyme. Free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Thought provoking. You express your thoughts about death, why it reveals its face and if it's even possible to evade it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3225119

Review of Partings

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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Title
A good title that suits the subject of your short story.

Structure
Your story of partings flows very well. Lovely depth of feeling. The reader can feel the emotions of this conversation between brothers in the piece.

Language
The dialogue is good and true to life. It maintains the story line, keeping it moving forward to a conclusion that is true to life.

Character and Idea
Your characters are believable. The relationship between them shows a closeness and yet at the same time a farewell causes a bit of friction between them that ends with a promise that is a poignant end to the story.

Other Points/Overall
The flow of the dialogue is smooth that expresses irritation, exasperation and love. A well penned story and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3225040

Review of Christmas - The Gift!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation. A heartfelt message of the true meaning of Christmas. Well crafted free verse couplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the most precious gift to mankind given to us, our Lord. You express your faith, gratefulness and thankfulness that God has given us though His Son. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of this truth. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Christmas

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about Santa running late. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of a modern Santa who uses a helicopter to get to his destination instead of his reliable reindeer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling with a bit of humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3224820

Review of JESUS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt words of praise and adoration. Nicely crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; your faith shines as you share your love for the Lord in this piece. Prayerful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on our Lord. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Speechless

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Introspective. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; your interest in this man who when you see him leaves you without words, expresses the power he has over you as you wish to make an impression on him that will resonate with him.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3224780

Review of Demons

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt, dark and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect masculine and feminine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings powerfully in this poem. You are unable to find peace because of the darkness that consumes you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3224767

Review of Tribute of Gratitude

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. Abstract. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done.
Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about gratitude for your rediscovery well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3224393

Review of Seventeen

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and lamentful. Excellent form. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see the sorrow of loss of one so young.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter: 10/4/4 - 10/4/4 - 10/4/4. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aba cbc dbd. Perfect mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express powerfully the grief of the parents and friends of this young one who has passed away. My condolences on your loss.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3224093

Review of A Riddle Within

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express love beautifully through this riddle (of questions) that describe its essence.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3224084

Review of Dance With Me

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and romantic. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint this beautiful, intricate dance of love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transitions and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; delightfully sensual, the heat of passion in this dance between lovers.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; with nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3224060

Review of A Rainbow

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'we must stretch to be a rainbow in the clouds' a very good comparision of how in times of trial we should be peace makers like a rainbow after a storm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; uplifting and encouraging message for those times when we go through troubles and things get emotional and we speak before we think.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Voice of an Angel

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very nice write. Heartfelt and romantic. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for this special person in your life beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Embers of the Day

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. A heartfelt poem about love that as faded. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of love grown cold, like that of ashes whose embers are fading away.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and very nice meter.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice simile: 'our love is cold and gray like embers of the day.' A very good comparison, fading love as the day fades away.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings about the fire (passion) of love that has gone out, leaving embers behind that grow cold and die just a love will do without sustenance.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of For every rose

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message. Heartfelt and thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: aba aba abca. Perfect dactylic and feminine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty of a rose which signifies love and forgiveness to those who receive it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of I Dream of Magic

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem. Whimsical.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and imagination we see dragons and magic of the past and how magic has faded because of a darkness that has chained anything 'enchanted' through non-belief.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your sorrow of 'magic' fading with poignance as you hold on to your dreams of it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of The ocean

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

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Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted Whitney. Perfect 3/4/3/4/3/4/7 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of the ocean, how it soothes, strengthens and cleanses you until you are renewed.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice simile: 'I glisten as the sea.' Very good personification of the ocean: 'the waves cradle me and gently rock back and forth'

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love for the ocean beautifully in this piece. The comfort it gives you is consoling and supportive until you are ready to continue your journey on dry land. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of A stained Sherri

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and dedicatory piece to your friend Sherri. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of your friendship which we see through the lens of your eye and heart.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Lovely simile: 'you wash my tears like summer's rain' a very good comparison and descriptive.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express your love for Sherri and hers for you beautifully in this poem. Her light shines brightly, 'blinding' your shadows. You are blessed to have such a good friend.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Elegantly written verse.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of ~Stolen Emotion

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. A lament of love gone wrong and the sorrow it brings. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'memories creep along forgotten flames' and 'your thirst perished, a deadened cloud of agony,' in regards to this ardor that is lost.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express hurt and pain of this betrayal of love that is no longer savored and brings you pain even thought you still love him. Poignantly passionate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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