ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3236973

Review of Because Of Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your prose poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message about love and how one shows it to the people they care for.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express that the things you do for those around you, the cooking, cleaning and writing fills you with joy. At other times, you sulk, argue, cry and bellow, still it's all because of love. Because of love we live harmoniously, God's gift to us.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3236911

Review of This Poem is Me

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A nice title that is suitable to your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write expressing the importance of words to you, how you use them like a mask. Heartfelt and introspective. Abstract. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of how you view yourself, your emotions, your thoughts and feelings you hold deep inside.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts, those held deep inside and your feelings; but you hold your true self hidden from everyone, even from the words you write in your poetry.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3236897

Review of When

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about life. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ab cb db ccb eb fb. A mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express how music becomes a focus in life that uplifts your spirit.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Just a note, there are several typos - line 3: should be 'visualize', line 7: should be 'hypnotize', and line 8: should be 'victimize'.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3236676

Review of Vampyr

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good dark write. Powerful. Nice form (shape). A well crafted free style metered rhyming poem.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion: a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will emphasis a thought as well as make the flow and rhythm of your piece even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme. In lines two through seven, a mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. This person expresses his inability to cope or live without hope. His grief and pain has become too much, so he begs the 'undead' to save him from life by taking his life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. My only suggestion is to remember to spell check your writing: (line 9: can't; line 11: I'm).

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read.

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#3236516

Review of snowflakes

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write that is concise and succinct. Well crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Visual. You paint a vivid picture of snow fall, pristine and silent.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the peacefulness of a light dusting of snow.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3236277

Review of Storm Front

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 17 syllables or less form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of a coming storm, a windy, cloud filled sky with the sound of chimes carried on the wind.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling as this storm slowly builds while you watch the sky.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3236274

Review of Dawn

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a cool morning as the fog caresses branches of trees while birds sing for sunrise.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'morning fog kisses the redwood branches' very nice descriptive/comparison of the morning scene.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the beauty of this moment in the morning, capturing nature poetically in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3236265

Review of Terminal

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your views about death, that each one of us is terminal, we just don't know when our lives will end. Thought provoking.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3236247

Review of Lock Out The Night

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt prayer. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefece. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as you cry out to the Lord in prayer asking for His protection from the darkness; to let you see His face and bathe in the light of His grace that you think is fading from your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3236213

Review of BabyCat In Her Garden

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of this cat meditating in her garden communing with first spring blossoms.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm. Just a note, haiku doesn't need punctuation so there's no need for the period at the end of line three in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the serenity that the cat has found in her garden.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3236205

Review of Summer Calls Me Dreaming

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt fantasy write of summer dreaming. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your imagination, you paint a vivid picture of the starry heavens where your dreams take flight as you and your love fly together in the moonlit sky until morning.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Lovely metaphor: 'we'll softly wander through the crystal night til the chariot of morning opens up our eyes.' Simply beautiful.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in stanzas one and two are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this poem. Nice internal rhyme in line four of stanza two (high, sky).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express your joy about this travel in your dreams, wandering in the milky way with the one you love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3236192

Review of Ode to Summer

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your memories of summer and its beauty you enjoy. Well crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see summer in its sweetness, the scent of flowers carried on the wind, bees flitting from flower to flower seeking its nectar; the calm you feel as you sit and meditate under the sun on this beautiful day.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your joy and love of the season. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line one of your fourth stanza. One 'the' needs to be deleted.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3236180

Review of A Soldier Answers a Strange Question

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title
A title that suits the subject of your short story.

Structure
For this 55 word story, the flow is good; it gets straight to the point as this soldier expresses her thoughts about war.

Language
Language is good, true to life. She answers the question about living through any war in history with conviction on how she views war.

Character and Idea
Her character, as soldier, is beautiful. She's passionate about what war has been and always will be... hell. She learned to kill, she still has to live with that knowledge and she must be careful. I think she expresses the thoughts of a true soldier, one that has been in combat.

Other Points/Overall
The dialogue of this soldier is good and her feelings are heartfelt.

She expresses her thoughts powerfully, and her resolve every day is to be 'very careful' with what she has learned and has to continue living with so that she need not kill again.

For such a short story, it is a thought provoking piece.

Well penned, write on.
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#3236173

Review of Silently Running

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how painful it would be not to have this person you love in your life; like grains of sand pouring through a broken hour glass, your life would silently run out.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3235979

Review of Salem

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt fantasy, dark and otherworldly. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture that is seen from the perspective of a vampire who has tired of his 'life' wanting it to end by spectral hands.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. He expresses his wish to end his existence with conviction. He tires of the darkness that gains strength from within. He wants to find release through those spectral hands.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3235603

Review of Wall Barrier

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of how you view your life, at times bubbly and other times when you feel temptation all of which is locked behind your protective wall.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'Bubbles rising to the top tickling my nose like champagne.'

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express how your protective barrier traps you, keeping you safe from yourself. Thought provoking.

Word Choice:

Word is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3235595

Review of Midnight Hour

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Eerie. Skillfully crafted free style rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in first, third and fourth stanzas is perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling, kind of scary yet also magical in the midnight hour.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of onomatopoeia (tick tock). Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3235566

Review of Renewal

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write. Skillfully crafted free verse that is succinct and concise.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of life budding after a long drought, after a healing rain and the land becomes rejuvenated.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'The earth mother is rejuvenated.'

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty of nature when it springs to life and the joy that it brings to those who experience it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3235560

Review of Autumn Afternoon

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a walk in the woods. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a walk in autumn. Through the lens of your eye you paint a beautiful picture of the freshness and chill of a fall day, the colorful leaves that crunch under your feet each step you take and the smoky haze you see in the valley below just before dusk falls.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the beauty and serenity of a stroll in a mountain forest. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3235410

Review of The Greatest Gift?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write, heartfelt and sad. A skillfully crafted Rispetto. Perfect abab ccdd form and meter (iambic tetrameter).

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your wife as seen through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'her heart, a pure white morning dove'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the happiness and love felt at starting a family and in a moment, he finds out about her deception and betrayal; the pain of knowing that this greatest gift, a child, was not his.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3235237

Review of Successful love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem. Just a note, the title is misspelled, should be 'Successful'.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about true love. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of love between these two people as they share this special moment.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Poignant, passionate and joyful love. Sweetly sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3235232

Review of Sorries

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about regret that is heartfelt and lamentful. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good and line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. My only suggestion: strategic placement of commas at natural pauses will give a thought emphasis and will make the flow and rhythm of your poem better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express your sadness, pain and regret that can't always be alleviated by sorries.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3235226

Review of For you only

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt words of love to the special person in your life. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts and make your flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. The love you have for this person is passion filled and shines brightly in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3235221

Review of Secrets Untold

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion: strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as making the flow and rhythm even better in your poem.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the darkness in this loneliness that causes you pain, emptiness and anger.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of loneliness, of having no one to trust. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Nice internal rhyme in line five (emptiness, nothingness).

Overall:

Very nicely penned and a good read.

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#3234803

Review of Such a tease

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery and descriptives are good. You paint a sensual picture of his passion which is not for her.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhytm.

Metaphor or Simile

Nice metaphor: 'lips wet as raindrops' very nice descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Deceptive, she awaits a kiss never intended for her.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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