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ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3241539

Review of Spooky Spirits

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation. Eerie with a bit of evil humor. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of halloween night, where all creatures of the night come out to play.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Dark. You express the spookiness on halloween as evil walks in the night.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong alliteration, good assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3241528

Review of Mazed

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write. Heartfelt and powerful. Abstract. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is concisce and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabc dd eeff. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the pain of abuse and the scars it leaves behind with power in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with strong alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3241521

Review of Drowned

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your fears that are so strong that your courage is drowned out by them, keeping you in the darkness. Only the silence eases your fear.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3241518

Review of Bloomless Flower

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of the poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and presentation. Abstract and introspective. Well crafted rhyming couplets, 10 syllables per line.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter; very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines 1 and 2 (tomb, womb); lines 3 and 4 (visions, decisions); line 5 (frightened; brightened); line 6 (tangled, dangled) line 8 (severed, endeavored); lines 9 and 10 (tightly; forthrightly).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your inner most thoughts, the things that haunt you with power in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3241509

Review of A Journey

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt. Very nice form 9/3/1/4 - 9/3/1/4 - 9/3/1/3.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how important friendship is in the journey of life. Uplifting and encouraging.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3241274

Review of The Sandy Shore

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation. Elegant verse. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see a vivid picture of a morning of rest at the beach; of the gulls flying overheard, scavenging for pieces of bread left for their consumption.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the peacefulness of the shore that I can relate to very well, the salt air, the sounds of the waves coming to shore and the sounds of the gulls. The scene is definitely a treasure, one to be painted or written about as you have done in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3241267

Review of War

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message that is short, concise and succinct. Well crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the imminency of war and the death that it will bring.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3240872

Review of Oblivious

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about death, heartfelt and abstract. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a haunting picture of death that comes swiftly and violently.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'a few notes, like angel dust, floating down from the trees above' - a very good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express the terror in the eyes of those who see their lives flash before them a moment before their deaths.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of onomatopoeia (rat-a-tat-tat). Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3240335

Review of The Dance

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about dancing. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lively picture of fun and joyful dance.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee. A mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling with a bit of humor. You express the excitement of the dance very well in this poem. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3240330

Review of Winter Night

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about winter, snowflakes and rest. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid and beautiful picture of snowflakes that fall from a 'velvet' sky to earth in the evening.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'twinkling diamonds, shining bright' excellent descriptive/comparison for starlight. Nice personification of trees: 'sighing in their sleep, the trees remember April's gentle breeze.'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of the winter season as plant life is asleep in its bed awaiting spring.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3240299

Review of Snapshot

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 form. Short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. Nicely expressed memories as seen through a snapshot that arouses desire from the past.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3240288

Review of For Terry...

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and tribute to your husband and the love you share for each other. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccbb defe. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love passionately in this poem. Your love shines in this piece. You are blessed.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read.

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#3240284

Review of Waiting...

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Nice rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme (every second/fourth line in the second and third stanzas and first/third line in the third stanza.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feeling for this person you are waiting for poignantly in this piece. You feel his hurt and pain, expressing it with sincerity and at the same time hope he'll come to really see you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3240281

Review of For you

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabcd eefgf hhii. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You thoughtfully work through how you feel about this person as you decide whether it is true love or not. In time you'll know whether this friendship is something deeper even though you already know that you care so much that you don't want to let them go. I can relate to these feelings you express.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of rhetorical questions as you search your true feelings about this person. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3240272

Review of The Secret

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your secret habit that is found out. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the passion of your secret hobby of sketching and scribbling that was so engrossing to you that when it was misplaced and found by someone, it was shared and resulted in getting you into trouble with your coworkers and your now ex-boss. Seems that your artwork was a bit too true to life. This is a message to all of us who are artistic and write, draw, etc. Never leave your work behind because you never know what the consequences will be from the one who finds it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3239653

Review of Each Moment Passing

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the love shared by your sister and her beau. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efgf hiji. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express beautifully this blessing of new love that has come to your sister that she shares deeply with her beau.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. I like how you use the last word of each stanza as the first word of the following stanza. Very creative.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3239643

Review of Grief

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. A heartfelt lament of hurt and pain. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how painful it was when the one you loved left you without saying goodbye; how your grief was almost too hard to bear before you were able to move on to better days and seek someone to trust and love. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3239634

Review of Love Scars

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and introspective. Painful. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'true love heals; it is a fountain of life'
Very nice descriptive and comparison about the true definition of love.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express with depth that sometimes the love sought, isn't true; that you want it so much with the person, you thought it was the real thing when it wasn't and you are left with another set of 'love scars.'

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice internal rhyme in line six (you, too). Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3239621

Review of Lulling Me To Sleep

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Passionate and poignant. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for him beautifuly in this piece. His strength and warmth lulls you into peaceful sleep for with him all is well in your world because he is with you. But then you remember, you're alone and you miss him; he's not with you and tears flow...lulling you to sleep. Touching.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3239312

Review of You

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about this special person whom you miss very much. Nicely crafted free verse poem.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is nice; transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion: strategically placed commas at natural pauses and a period at the end of a thought will make the flow and rhythm much better in my opinion. Also 'I' should be capitalized in the lines that you use because it is a personal pronoun and subject of your poem (referring to you).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings about this special person with poignance in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. Just a note: there are quite a few word tense errors (line 5 second word should be 'were,' line 6 third word should be 'you're' and sixth word should be 'no'. Line 7 first and sixth words should be 'no'; line 10 the fifth and seventh words should be 'hear' and 'advice'.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3239271

Review of Feast or Fury

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message about choice and a persons final destination. A blend of rhyme and free verse that is nicely crafted; two stanzas of rhyming triplets and two stanzas of free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion: a strategically placed comma (and or period at the end of a thought) at a natural pause will give emphasis to a thought and make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is fine in the first two triplets of your poem as is the rhyme scheme: abc dbc. In the second and third lines of stanza one and and two are a mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your faith well in this piece as you give warning of the possible destination of a person who does not make the right choice, choosing hell intead of Christ who is merciful and loving; He gives grace and forgiveness to those who believe in Him and we will reside with Him in heaven.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3239054

Review of Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and tribute to the woman you love. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion: strategically placed commas at natural pauses (at the end of lines 1 and 2 of stanza 1 for example) will give emphasis to your thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeaa. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love and thankfulness for this person who means a great deal to you knowing that she is meant just for you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use for repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3239029

Review of IT'S THE LITTLE THINGS, OH LORD

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt prayer. Skillfully crafted free verse about God's love and care for you.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express God's care for us beautifully in this piece. Lovely words of praise and adoration for Him for which we a trully blessed. Your faith shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of The Lesson of Parenthood

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about parenthood. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a busy home, sometimes chaotic, filled with laughter of children that keeps parents young as they learn to play again.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Your love for your children shines in this piece. You express the warmth your children bring you even in the chaos; it's peaceful in this house of love. You are blessed.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Fun Rhymes

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of our poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Heartfelt and upbeat. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefe. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. Lilting, uplifting and fun.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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