ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3256796

Review of Morning Dew

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about memories of spring. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of returning spring, its beauty, the sounds of birds singing and the gentle spring wind.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of personification, sunshine kissing the dew, flowers and dandelion leaves and fog hugging the valleys.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express how spring is inspirational to you, the peace and renewal it brings. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3256776

Review of MY SAVIOR

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and testimony of saving faith. Heartfelt. Lovely words of praise and adoration to our Lord. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love and trust in the Lord beautifully in this poem. A prayer of petition that all believers can pray along with you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3256764

Review of Bodies on the Sand

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, short, concise and succinct. A well crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of waves rushing over bodies on a sandy beach.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express how freeing this is to abandon rules and allow the waves to rush over one.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3256099

Review of Let Me See

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your prayer/poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and lamentful. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second forth line in each stanza is near perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as you cry out to God in desperation feeling that He has forgotten you because you think your connection to Him has somehow been broken and you are plagued with doubt. A beautiful prayer of supplication to God that He help you see that you are still abiding in Him and that He continues to lead you in His everlasting light. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there are a couple of typos: in line 4 of your first stanza, should be 'has'; line 3 of the third stanza, first word should be 'Now'; and line 4 in your last stanza, should be 'complete.'

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3256082

Review of Broken Spirit

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about loss that is concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of a storm, wind blowing and rain falling which is much like grieving, a storm of emotion, tears falling and ones heart aching.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how grief can break the spirit as the soul searches for answers where none can be found.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3256062

Review of Star Gazing is For Fools

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Prime. Perfect 1/2/3/5/7/11/13 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transtion and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Thoughtful. You express how making wishes are foolish, childish and unrealistic games people play who have given up on everything else; yet looking up at Orion's Belt, studying the stars, you find yourself wishing you were one of them. The beauty of it, the majesty of it draws you in. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3254909

Review of Where I'm From

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official First People's Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and biography about your life and times. Skillfully crafted free verse poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your life, where you were born, what your family is like, chores you had to do when growing up in the country in poverty, what you did for fun and so much more.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express what home was to you and what it is now, a different universe from the one you began in. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3254536

Review of No Sense Rhyming

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and well crafted nonsense poem. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a funny picture of lambs climbing trees, honey bees tapping their knees as paper wasps swim in the mud.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. Humorous.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a fun read. Write on.

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#3254363

Review of Seventy-Six Is Not Enough!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about living life to the fullest and having fun. Upbeat and encouraging. I like the humor. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of favorite things that bring you joy and makes life fun.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; a wonderful sense of fun and humor as you spend time with this special friend and prayerfully hope for another decade or two of this good life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3254253

Review of Larval Aspirations

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about aspirations. Introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice meter.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Second/fourth line of poem is a mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about sharing a dream to breaking out of an old mold and becoming a 'butterfly'.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3253973

Review of Nature Never Told

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A beautiful heartfelt write about the time spent with your daughter. Poignant as you express your first hello and last goodbye. Skillfully crafted rhyming couplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a loving picture of the time spent with your daughter, the hopes and dreams you had for her and then left with the tears of loneliness as she starts her own adventure in heaven.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your joy and sorrow as well as your faith that you will one day be reunited with her in heaven one day. Touching.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Thank you for sharing. Write on.

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#3253953

Review of Spring

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about Spring. A skillfully crafted Monotetra. Perfect form. Excellent monorhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of spring that is vivid, a time of renewal as the blossoms open up in sunshine.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very good meter (iambic tetrameter) and rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the joy of spring beautifully in this poem. Renewal and refreshment of the season is uplifting.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice repetition for emphasis of feelings that spring brings and is driven by the form of poetry. Strong alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3253860

Review of This Thing

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about a very special friendship. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece (name, game; care, dare; start, heart).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express these special feelings that you have for one another without saying the 'L' word, but it's there between you, shared in your hearts.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetiton for emphasis of feeling about your relationship. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3253676

Review of " Chasing Butterflys "

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your love of butterflies. Whimsical and uplifting. Well crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. I can vividly picture your chasing after that dainty, beautiful butterfly that brings you joy, making you smile.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: ' floating jewel' a good descriptive/comparison to the butterfly's beauty.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express your joy and happiness in the day and at the same time wishing that you could be free like the butterfly.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the butterfly. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3253658

Review of "Dockside"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme (night, sight, twilight; marrow, narrows; lumber, slumbers, wonder) that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how much you miss being without the one you love, the sadness of being there on the dock as you think of her during these dark hours that you are alone. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3253640

Review of "Spring"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about Spring and rebirth. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjly.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a lovely picture of moonlight showering the bay on a cool early spring morning. A lovely picture of the sights and sounds of renewal of the season.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of flowers: 'yawning from long sleep' very nice descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme (bay, day; rain, again; face, race; new, too; around, abounds).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you take these moments to express how the season touches you while you watch the one you love sleep.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3253627

Review of "Women"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the women in your life and their importance to you. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'they are an island' very nice descriptive of these women being a place of safety for you.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how these women complement you in your life and they share a special place in your heart. You are blessed.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3252998

Review of Shattered Glass

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the shattering glass, how it teetered and tottered one the edge of the desk and the end result, shattering glass and shatter composure of the one who fell with it to the floor.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express her feelings, victory, shock and surprise as she ends up on the floor, totally sober.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3252991

Review of Someone who loves you

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message about your faith and trust in the Lord. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I would change some of the commas to periods at the end of a thought (i.e. at the end of line four a period instead of a comma and remove the semi-colon at the end of line eight and change the comma at the end of line ten to a period). This will make the flow and rhythm much better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'He built a fortress of love through His body and blood,' - good descriptive/comparison of this 'house' of love God created for us.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Lovely words of praise and adoration for our Lord and all that He has done for us. I can relate to your feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of God's love and care for us. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3252926

Review of Heaven

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Uplifting and enouraging. A well crafted monorhyme, free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a nice picture of heaven, gentle waves under morning sun, soft breezes and all troubles gone.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses and a period at the end of a thought will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect dacylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your view of heaven beautifully and with poignance.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3252916

Review of Misunderstood

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as you express your thoughts and feelings about find answers in life and being misuderstood. I think we all go through this at some time in our lives. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your feelings. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3252322

Review of Broard Shoulders

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem. Just a note, there is a typo in your title, should be 'Broad'.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message. Uplifting and encouraging. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your faith in God and the conviction that He lifts burdens and problems from our shoulders beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Just a suggestion and note: to use spell check after writing your poetry and that there are a couple of typos: line 5, should be 'complaint'; line 10, should be 'broad.'

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3252314

Review of All I have

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem. Just a note, there is a typo in the title, I should be capitalized.

Form/Style:

A good write that is heartfelt and introspective. A good shape poem. A well crafted free verse acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts of what inspires you, truth beheld in the eyes of the person you love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of The Eternal Question

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, presentation and funny read; a parody of the Cinderella story with the mirror from the Snow White story. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. The reader can see how she primps in front of the mirror, asking him about her frock and if it makes her look fat.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile

Nice personification of the mirror. He's uncouth with a wicked sense of humor.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling and very good humor. I love the mirror's 'crack' about her caboose.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. Good use of repetition for emphasis on the mirror.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of My Angel

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and tribute to this very special friend who was there for you when times were rough. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the period at the end of line three, five and seven. Removing them will make the flow and rhythm much better in my opinion. Nice use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (strife, life; none, run; bay, dismay; things, wings).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thankfulness for this special person who soothed your soul, driving away your dismay and becoming your good friend.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this special friend. Good alliteration and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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