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#3265712

Review of My Poet Tree

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about writing poetry. Clever word play. A skillfully crafted concrete poem that is short, concise and succinct. Very nice free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice. Perfect masculine end line rhyme (try, my; new, through) that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about creating poetry well in this poem. I can relate; I think all poets at times think their words (which they want to be fresh and new) turn out to be sappy and oozing.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3265707

Review of Like a hawk seizing prey . . .

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about addiction. Heartfelt, painful and intense. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the feelings of this person that is caught up in his addiction as you stand by powerless and shattered because you can't do anything to stop him in his slide towards oblivion.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3265519

Review of Human Nature

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about human nature. Abstract. Nicely crafted free verse. Thought provoking.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is nice. Line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will emphasize a thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'He is dynamic shells that hide the crinkled pea' very nice descriptive/comparison of human nature.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express your thoughts well about how mankind shines in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of mankinds human nature. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3265134

Review of A Writers Poem

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and adventure in weaving this story poem. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaaa bbcc cccc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You plot out the story beautifully, making it interesting and entertaining to peak the readers imagination; this is the job of all writers.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, in line two of stanza one, the word should be 'lies'.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3265118

Review of Across The Room

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express your admiration for this person, your infatuation for him and wonder if he feels the same thing for you and your hope that he will say something so you will know how he feels about you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3264919

Review of THE HOUR!

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme. Good presentation.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

The last two lines of your poem is a mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your faith beautifully in this piece. The truth found in our Lord is our greater goal, and the blessed hope for us is to one day be with Him. This is our victory and the hour that believers wait for.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3264906

Review of A Key

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this special key that you hold close to your heart. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aab cc dd beb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how this key unlocks the tender heart of your true love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis about what the key would open. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3264898

Review of The Reason

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt, introspective and lamentful. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm of the poem even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your sadness and depression about the end of your relationship and the emptiness you feel that fills you with doubt.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3264625

Review of Do I Dare?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective about taking a chance in love; about telling this special person of your feelings for her. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotions as you express your feelings, your vulnerability if you open your heart to her, a risk for you to find out whether she loves you back. I think we have all felt this way about the unsurety of ones love for another and the hope they love you back.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely written and a good read. Write on.

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#3264621

Review of Vision of Night's Love

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Abstract. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid of starlike raindrops that flow down your face, tears of joy of the beauty seen in a night of love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, some of the periods (after lines seven, eight and nine) should be removed. This would make the flow and rhythm of the piece even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'stars like raindrops fall, stream down my face,' very nice descriptive/comparison of tears, and metaphor: 'Seen through translucent windows' nice descriptive of your eyes.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings beautifully about love in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3264282

Review of Autumn's Painted Secrets

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about love. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy. A lovely ballad. Perfect 8/6/8/6 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of Autumn and the love you share with this special person.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition is well done. Good meter and very nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as making your flow and rhythm even better in this poem.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. abab cdcd efef ghgh. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Passionate and romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3264260

Review of Why my heart sings

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good dedicatory write about your son. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted quatrains that are free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the eyes of love you paint a delightful picture of your son, his grin and giggles and his bright spirit.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for your son and the joy he brings you which shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3264250

Review of Submissive obsession

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about love that can be obsessive. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme in the first three stanzas. abcb defe ghih. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about the obsessive love you have for this person and that trying to fight against it is futile because you feel as thought you've been bewitched.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3264195

Review of Moon

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. A skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the full moon as a light for romance.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very nice personification of the moon.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the light of love of the 'old man' who smiles down on lovers showered in his light.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3263054

Review of The Right Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the gift of love that makes life peaceful and full. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm of the piece even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this poem.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the passion of love for this special person that you have been blessed with by God beautifully in this piece. It's in his strong arms that your heart thaws from the pain of being used and in him you have found peace and true love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3262903

Review of Optimism

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write that is concise and succinct. A chestnut of wisdom. Skillfully crafted free verse. Thoughtful.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling, upbeat and encouraging words about life and how one should live it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262902

Review of A Guy Like Charlie Brown

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your longing for a guy like Charlie Brown who is loyal, trustworthy and willing to love. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; a nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. No matter the hardship of life, he always savors it and makes the best of it. You express the sweetness of his character and that he would always love you, and this is what you wish for in love, a love given you like that of Charlie Brown's.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line two, should be 'life'.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262900

Review of When God calls me Home

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message about when the time comes and you are called home to be with the Lord. Introspective and thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you draw comfort in knowing that you will one day join those you love who are in heaven waiting for you. Your faith and trust in God shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of thought. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262897

Review of If God was a tree

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about viewing God as a tree. Nicely crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express traits of God with those of a tree that grows high, allows light in, whose roots grow deep in the earth to keep it stable.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the power of God. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262895

Review of Artificial

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write that is concise and succinct. Nicely crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a pleasant windy day and the willows that sway in them as the tree is dying.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done nicely. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling, almost a sense of mourning.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262888

Review of No Ordinary Mouse

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the subject of this poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the daily adventure of a mouse. Any child would enjoy this story poem. Imaginative. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a day in the life of a very busy mouse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling, lighthearted and fun.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the traits of the mouse. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an entertaining read. Write on.

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#3262887

Review of School

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the rush and bustle of school life. Nicely crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and experience, you paint a vivid picture of the 'busy-ness' of life in school.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the 'work ethic' seen in the daily attendees at school, one that any reader can relate to.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line eleven, should be 'library'.

Overall:

Nice penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262882

Review of Mind, Body, Heart and Soul

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your commitment and love for this person in your life. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You both express your love and commitment to each other with earnestness in this piece, a vow you hold dearly in your hearts.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of the commitment you hold for each other. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of I Will Commit

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt vow of commitment to the one you love. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thought as well as making the flow and rhythm of your poem even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love, commitment and support for this special person beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Perfection

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the woman you love. Heartfelt and romantic. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of the woman you love through the eyes of love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abc bde fbdb bfb. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for her beautifully and with passion in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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