ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3275432

Review of Hope

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official First People's Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your fears and the hope you look for in the light that shines from your closet that eases it. Heartfelt and introspective. Good shape form. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your tears show that you need comforting and seeing that light softly glow from your closet almost makes you feel that you're not alone and that God is on the other side of the wall giving you warmth and hopefulness. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3275395

Review of Each and Every Day

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official First People's Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about this special relationship between Wendy and Billy written from Wendy's perspective. Introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jeke. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. The love she feels for Billy shines brightly in this piece as she wonders if she at last has found her soul mate, friend and companion of her heart.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3275385

Review of Always Write

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official First People's Writing Review"

"Always Write" is a good title that is suitable for this write regarding Writing Tips. Your instructions are easy to understand and make perfect sense for those who multi-task when it comes to writing several stories (or poems) at the same time. This seems to me to make life easier for the writer and eases stress about emailing their work back and forth to different computers. You express the ease that this practice has brought you and has given you the incentive to 'multi-create'... I like that term. Well penned and an informative read. Thank you for sharing. Write on.

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#3275199

Review of BLESSINGS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good heartfelt write of thankfulness and gratitude to God for the blessings He has given you. Introspective and prayerful. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as your pour out your feelings to the Lord, thanking Him for the comfort, strength and care He has given you and continues to do for you every day. Your love and trust in Him is a testimony to your faith and is inspirational. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3275191

Review of MY MORNING PRAYER

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt prayer in your morning conversation with the Lord. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eecc ffgg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. A prayer of supplication and intercessory prayer for you and your family that is heartfelt. Your faith and trust in God shines in this prayer poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3275185

Review of GOD KNOWS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good heartfelt write and message about God who knows us and our needs. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklm. In stanzas one through three, every second/fourth line is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling and a beautiful testimony of your faith and trust in God. Encouraging and uplifting. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the love and power of God to know our needs. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3275179

Review of IN HIS CARE

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt petition to God to watch over your son. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghij. A good mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love and concern for your son as you put his welfare in God's loving care. Your faith and trust in God shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of being in God's care. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3275165

Review of THE TOUCH OF GOD'S HAND

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about the artistry of the hand of God. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. With the brush of your pen, you paint a vivid picture of God's creation, the majesty of mountains, streams and the sunset that we see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe agbg. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your joy and awe of God's creation. Your faith shines brightly in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line two of stanza one, should be 'little'.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3274836

Review of As Morning greets me on the Bay

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your morning on the bay. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry, nearly perfect iambic tetrameter.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the shore, sea, boats in this misty morning as birds cry out and you watch the sun rise as activity begins at the dock. The chill in the air as boats are being taken out for their daily work is something any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as making the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of personification of the morning mist: it lies down to hover on the distant sand.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklm nkok. Every second/fourth line in stanzas 1, 2, 3 and 5 are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about the morning just before you head out in your boat. The reader can sense the peacefulness of the moment before the work day begins.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3274823

Review of Come Around I'll be Your Guide

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your relationship with the one you love. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets that are short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee fg. The first five couplets are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Uplifting and encouraging as you express your willingness to guide the one you care for through their sorrow and pain as you build a new life together.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line one, should be 'your'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3274495

Review of O MY HERO, COME: ~Pi~ Form

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt. A good interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted Pi poem. Perfect form.

Originality/Imagination:

An original piece, a queen calling to her love slave.

Content:

Content is good.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Deep expression of emotion. Passionate. Delightfully sensual. I like the innuendo of the piece.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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#3273870

Review of DEEPLY LOVED

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A beautiful heartfelt write about loving someone deeply and the strength it gives you. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines one and three of stanza one (something, nothing; fly, by).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the power of true love beautifully in this poem. Passionate. A wonderful message about love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3273861

Review of LAKOTA

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation about the spirit and strength of Lakota Nation to overcome under the oppression of the white man. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the righteous anger of the people and only faith in Wakan Tanka brings them through each trial. The past has not been forgotten, and as your poem states so well, there is 'always another battle left to be fought'.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3273852

Review of ROSEBUD

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation. Heartfelt. A tribute to the leadership of Crazy Horse. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause will give emphasis to your thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the pain of the Indian people, their death at the hands of the Seventh Calvary; yet the strength of their chief brought victory to the tribes, retribution to the soldiers who took so many of their lives.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3273830

Review of FOR YOU ALWAYS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and dedicatory piece to your friend Maggie. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Lovely simile: 'Our hearts are joined like sand to sea,'
a very nice descriptive/comparison of your bond to each other.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccde ffbb gghh a. A nice mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one of stanza two (do, too).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings for Maggie beautifully and with poignance in this piece. An uplifting, encouraging and thoughtful poem to her.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3273812

Review of Crimson

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about an argument of the color of the sky at sunset. Sweet. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of sunset as you discuss the color of the sky that is beautifully colorful as you and your love each try to describe it, when your kiss ends the discussion... you both win.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling and a sweet conversation that ends romantically with a kiss.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3273793

Review of Light

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the morning light that you share with someone dear to you. A skillfully crafted Cinquain string. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a warm picture of the morning light as you watch him sleeping peacefully touching him tenderly.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Your tenderness and love for him shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3273787

Review of Spring

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about springtime. A skillfully crafted haiku that is concise and succinct. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of cardinals singing in an oak tree in your backyard which the reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the beauty of spring and the sounds of birds singing that is uplifting to the spirit.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3273780

Review of A few Haiku

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Form/Style:

A good short write about a spring day. A skillfully crafted haiku string. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid snapshot of beautiful blossom in springtime as robins hunt for worms and rabbit feast in a garden.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the joy of spring that I can relate to very much.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3273175

Review of our universe

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the night sky and dawns breaking. Skillfully crafted Haiku that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of stars shining brightly in the evening sky and the colors of the rainbow in the morning as dawn comes with the rising sun.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the joy you feel at experiencing the beauty in the created universe.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3273167

Review of a fun time out

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a county fair that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 17 syllables or less form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye the reader can see a child eating pink cotton candy that is sticky and sticking to his fingers.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the fun the child has eating this delicious candy.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3273157

Review of One Little Toad

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write that any child will enjoy that teaches them their numbers and how to count making learning fun. Skillfully crafted frees style metered internal rhyming pooetry. It will make a lovely picture book.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of different animals in nature and what they are doings which the reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Perfect feminine and masculine internal rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece (toad, road; flowers, showers; seeds, weeds; bees, trees; chicks, sticks; moles, holes; frogs, logs; llamas, mamas; mice, ice; sheep, asleep).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Lilting and lighthearted. Upbeat and fun.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the size of the plants and animals in nature. Nice use of onomatopoeia (bees buzzing). Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3273135

Review of I'll be on top...

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about reaching your goals and succeeding. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I would change the period at the end of line four to a question mark; it would make the flow and rhythm of this couplet even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about being successful by working hard and staying focused well in this poem. Your determination to succeed shines brightly in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3272823

Review of I'M NOT PERFECT - YET!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write, message and heartfelt testimony. Skillfully crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy. Lovely presentation.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your faith, trust and love for the Lord with conviction in this piece. Lovely words of adoration and praise to the Lord that comes from your heart. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3272749

Review of Poetry 10: America Stands for Freedom

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about America and freedom celebrated on Independence Day. Heartfelt and patriotic. A skillfully crafted double acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the pride you have in our country and its people; those with vision who created it which keeps our fundamental principles of freedom for all people. A message that touches the hearts of 'we the people'.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.