ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3268163

Review of COME RAIN OR SHINE

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about life and relationship. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of highs and lows of life through its similarity to weather from its extremes, dark clouds, thunder and lightening, to its calm, soft rain, rainbows and sunshine. The contrast and beauty in nature shows its contrast just as it does in life.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Just a note, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Lovely simile and metaphor, comparison/descriptives of the volatility of life to utter calm, just as the weather can be.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. A beautiful way to view life, from overcoming our difficulties to the conquest that bring of love and peacefulness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3267881

Review of The Caress

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about a caress you receive from the one you love. Well crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings about his caress, his tenderness and love for you. Delightfully sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice masculine end line rhyme in lines eleven and twelve (glance, dance).

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3267875

Review of Love is.......

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about what true love is. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, if you add a comma after blind at the end of line one I think the flow and rhythm will be much better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express what others say love is which contrasts with what you believe love is. I agree with the second half of your poem (what you say and think love is).

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3267867

Review of The Crossroads

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write that is heartfelt and thoughtful just as you reach a milestone in your life, graduation from high school. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Just a note, you don't need the period at the end of line two or the comma after though in line three. If you remove them, the flow and rhythm will be much better in my opinion.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling as you express your thoughts at the crossroad to a new beginning in your life as you and your friends go separate ways. I can relate to this new chapter that is opening in your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your dreams. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line five, should be 'future'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3267856

Review of Set Me Free

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Prayerful. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts of being set free from your anxiety of life prayerfully in this piece. Your faith and trust in God shines in this piece. This is a petition to God that I can relate to very well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3267845

Review of Haiku Over Miami

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write that is concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the beach in the moonlight.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. I like the humor of the piece 'all things plastic'.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; clever word play. Good alliteration and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3267579

Review of Icicles and Berries

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the beauty of the winter season. Heartfelt and romantic. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye the reader sees the beauty of winter, the romance of it and its brilliance of color. I has its own warmth that is touching to the heart.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme which is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the joy and romance that you find in winter beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the season and its beauty. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3267563

Review of Before I Met You.

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about this special person in your life. A very nice tribute to him and his love for you. Well crafted free verse. Good content.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, if you remove the period after me in the fifth line of your poem, and change didn't to 'hadn't' and meet to 'met' in line seven, it will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. The love you feel for your boyfriend shines in this piece. The reader can sense how much he means to you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line eight, should be 'changed'.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3267559

Review of Dont Leave.

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem. Just a note, there is a misspelling in your title, should be 'Don't'.

Form/Style:

A good write about how special this person you love is to you. Heartfelt and introspective. Nicely crafted free verse. Your content is good.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done nicely. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how much he means to you, his affect upon your life; that without him you would be lost.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance. Just a suggestion, you should make a point of spell checking your writing. It will help you with the grammar and spelling errors. I make it rule to do so whenever I write something. You have a few errors: line two, should be 'afraid,'; line four should be 'can't' and 'lose'; line six should be 'drown'; line eleven should be 'It's' and line twelve should be 'don't'.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3267421

Review of Rejuvenation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective about hope and how it is rekindled in your life. Nicely crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the Earth, it smiles.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts of lost opportunities that were stolen right out from under you that caused you hurt and pain; then found your spirit uplifted as hope in things around you eased that sadness. I can relate to these feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3267414

Review of Free

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the beauty you see in nature as contrasted to that of a hunter. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the scenery and the animals living in their habitat.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition is nicely done. Nice rhythm.
Just a suggestion, I keep stumbling over the first line of the last couplet of your poem. Maybe if you revise it, something like:
'Some will say that this is sport while others disagree,' and in line 11, should be 'there's' will smooth out the flow and rhythm in those lines in my opinion.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of personification of corn and flowers: 'Golden heads of corn sway gently in the breeze. Coloured flowers rais their heads, looking for the bees.' Nice metaphor: 'Giant trees with arms outstretched, reaching for the sky.' Nice descriptive/comparisons of how you see the plant life.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your joy at seeing the beauty of nature and its creatures that bring joy and wonder to your heart. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Just a suggestion to watch your punctuation. Some of the periods at the end of the sentences could be changed to commas which would smooth out the rhythm in my opinion.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3267258

Review of To a Teacher

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and dedicatory piece to teachers. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically place comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You give a passionate tribute to teachers who help our children blossom as they teach them that learning can be fun and are instrumental in their growth and development through the years.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.
Just a note, there is a typo in line one of your fourth stanza, you need to remove the 'is' after school.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3267243

Review of Walking in Untamed Beauty

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt message of this place you imagine. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this place you hold in the recesses of your mind, a place you hope to discover of 'untamed beauty.'

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the serenity and beauty of this 'sanctuary' of peacefulness where you hope to one day travel. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3266612

Review of Beast of Ergarn

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and fantasy story poem. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the beauty of spirit of the unicorn, your love for her and being a slave of her enchantment, the keeper of her land.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3266600

Review of Butterfly

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a butterfly. A well crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a butterfly that flits and flies in nature.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the beauty of a butterfly in flight that is almost magical.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3266597

Review of My Baby.

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the one you love. Well crafted free verse poetry with a tinge of rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thought as well as make your flow and rhythm better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for him beautifully in this piece. Passion filled.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Just a note, there are a few typos, 'I' should be capitalized, in line seven should be 'don't' and 'lonely'.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3266515

Review of You and Me

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about this girl you like. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm of your poem even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is either perfect feminine or masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts and feelings about this girl you like as you hope that she returns your feelings too. You hope she will come to love you so you could love her too, walking in the light of love. Romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.
Just a note, there is a typo in line one of your final stanza, should be 'can't'.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3266497

Review of Knight in Shining Armor

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt fantasy write about your knight in shining armor. Well crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your hope and dream of finding your true love, your 'knight' who will give you loves first kiss. Passionate and romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3266479

Review of Verbing

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your skewed outlook on love after a painful divorce. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your pain and anger about love. The scars ar gone but the hurt of messing up your life still lives on deep within yourself.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3266469

Review of Glimpses

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express your thoughts and dreams in the present that eludes you and seems to be unsettling to you well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3266457

Review of Deep Inside

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Nicely crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about the things you hide from others, lies that the world will not get to see as you wonder what it would feel like not to hide everything deep inside.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice internal rhyme in lines one and four of the first stanza (hide, inside; why, cry) and in line three of stanza two (thinking, wandering). Just a note, there is a typo in line two of your fourth stanza, should be 'What'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3266374

Review of Beauty

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and encouraging. Skillfully crafted Senryu that is short concise and succinct. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; I love the serenity of your words, the calm that is soothing to the soul.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3266321

Review of The Forest

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the forest and the serenity it brings you. Well crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a soothing picture of the forest with your words, contrasting its essence with the aura that surrounds you.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm of your poem better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: the forest sings to you; nice simile: its song is 'calming like the song of a nightingale'. very nice descriptive/comparison of your feeling of the forest.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your love for the forest and the peacefulness that is found there very well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3265786

Review of Embrace

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about embracing someone you love. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm of your poem even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. A mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that you execute nicely in this piece (race, face; skin, within; caress, undress; me, tightly; trace, embrace).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Delightfully sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of New Beginnings

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about new beginnings beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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