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ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3262880

Review of I Will Commit

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt vow of commitment to the one you love. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thought as well as making the flow and rhythm of your poem even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love, commitment and support for this special person beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262595

Review of Perfection

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

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Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the woman you love. Heartfelt and romantic. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of the woman you love through the eyes of love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abc bde fbdb bfb. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for her beautifully and with passion in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3262586

Review of If I could send a last bouquet

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write dedicated to loved ones who have passed away. Skillfully crafted free verse. Introspective and lamentful.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You use the language of flowers to describe your loss and love for those who passed; that your thoughts are carried by a flower's scent to where their spirit resides... as a forget-me-not. You express your sorrow beautifully in this piece. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3262583

Review of Sweet Little Flower

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt tribute to your young cousin who passed away. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thought as well as making the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Lovely metaphor: this 'sweet little flower' being your cousin, and 'a fragrance' her sweetness being precious in God's sight.
'He plucked you from this garden' God called her from life to come be with Him in heaven.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your faith in God and your trust that He called your cousin home to be with Him permeates this piece. Poignant and uplifting.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your cousin's character. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3262571

Review of Dr. Reiser (Grandpa)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and tribute to your teacher and mentor. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the encouragement that he gives you to to reach for your impossible dream so that it will become your reality. Your respect for him permeates this piece. He has been a teacher and friend whose council will always be a part of you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line twelve, should be 'than'.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262564

Review of Home

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about home. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as making the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'the skies--my cathedral, the wind--my blanket' Nice personification: 'the stars kiss me goodnight' very nice descriptive/comparison on defining home.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for home that gives you hope, warmth and safety.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3262357

Review of The Dark

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the eerieness of the night. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of night time, stars shining brightly in the sky, the creepiness that night can be and the shadows that seem to be all around.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this poem.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling, a bit spooky and a bit of humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an entertaining piece. Write on.

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#3262348

Review of My Wish

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Imaginative. A poem any child would delight in. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a goldfish and different animals you would like to be, from the perspective of a hamster.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one (wish, goldfish).

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. I enjoy the humor of this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an entertaining piece. Write on.

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#3262340

Review of Aphrodite

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the woman you love. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccdd. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this poem.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for your girlfriend beautifully in this piece. Romantic and passionate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3262265

Review of In That Moment, Forever

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfull crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a moment in your life as you stand under gray skies on a rainy day at the shore.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express your thoughts about life, a time that was good and right, a time when you could see the glory in life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling of that special moment. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262260

Review of It's Up To You

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Uplifting and encouraging message about life and goals. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. An upbeat and spirit lifting message for everyone.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262256

Review of 'go-Getter'

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write, upbeat and encouraging. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct. A very good pep talk.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts earnestly in this piece. A powerful message of perseverance and stick-to-it-ness to reach our goals which is good advice to all of us.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262251

Review of The Real Me

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about how you hide your 'real' self from everyone but your special friend who makes you feel safe. Introspective and heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two of the first stanza (me, see; do, you).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts about why you hide your true self, yet at the same time you are open to this special friend who you care deeply for who is supportive of you and you hope that one day you can return the favor. You are blessed to have this person in your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262240

Review of Perfect Lover

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your lyrics.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about love that makes a person whole. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry/lyrics.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of sunrise that melts away the cold as to describe the love you have for this special person in your life that we see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for this special woman beautifully in these lyrics.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3262237

Review of I am not growing old

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective about not growing old. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of how you feel and look and even with wrinkles, sags and not being as firm in places you once were, you're not growing old.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express with earnestness that you aren't growing old; that you love stronger, have passion that is greater and know deep down in your heart that you aren't growing old. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is your use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262180

Review of You?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about this woman in your dreams. Nicely crafted unrhymed couplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done nicely. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your feeling for her that seems much like a ghostly enchantment, yet this is the woman of your dreams that your heart commands you to find.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262174

Review of A Nonsense Rhyme

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that suits the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and fun read. Nicely crafted nonsense rhyme. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express your random thoughts well and with a bit of humor in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of relieving stress and pass time. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line two and nine, should be 'relieve'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3262169

Review of Daddys' Prayer

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write from a father's point of view after putting his children to bed. Well crafted monorhyme, free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a note, at the end of lines three and four I would change the periods to commas which would make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; the reader can sense the deep love you have for your children as you teach them God's word to prepare them for life. Your faith shines in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3262160

Review of A Poem

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about poetry, its vast color given to words emphasizing ones feelings. Nicely crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Thoughtful. You express your thoughts about poetry being a blank canvas filled with the experience of life and its vast colors. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the colors of life. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262152

Review of Fallen

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about love at first sight. Well crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of first meeting, and the surprise of falling in love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the romance of falling in love beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line three, should be 'surprise.'

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262147

Review of Who?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your search to find out who you are. Well crafted free verse. Introspective.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically place comma at natural pauses will emphasis a thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts well as you search for the real you and what you want in life. Thoughtful. All of us have gone through this, trying to figure out who we are at some time in our lives. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and a rhetorical question for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3262141

Review of What I Need

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective of what traits you are looking for in a guy. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You have a strong sense of self and know what you would want in the person you would love; someone you can trust in and who loves you unconditionally.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line four, should be 'infinite.'

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Grace

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write of grace experienced through nature. A skillfully crafted sonnet.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of nature, its beauty and majesty a reflection of our Creator.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good meter and very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification: 'in hope my soul await the tomb. hope gestating in heaven's womb.' a very nice descriptive/comparison of the 'birth' of hope in heaven.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abba cddc effe gg. Well crafted envelope rhyme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the unseen presence of God in nature's woodland. Grace and faith is expressed beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3260537

Review of " Blackfoot Pride"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your Native American heritage. A lovely tribute to your grandfather. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse triplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'upon his face I see mine, like so many furrows across the fields of time' very nice comparison/descriptive.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the pride you learned from your grandfather of your Indian heritage as you thank the Great Spirit for him. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3260523

Review of "My Love"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about lost love. Introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two of the first stanza.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your sorrow about this lost love through writing, stating things you left unsaid and will remain unread by him.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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