ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3248003

Review of Drift

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Introspective. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses and changing washing to 'washes' in line three will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express your thoughts about approaching death well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247996

Review of Be fine

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Poignant. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought and will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Also, you don't need a period at the end of lines eight, nine and ten.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you ease your friend's mind, that it's okay for her to let go, the you all will be fine and she need not worry any more. Compassionate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247951

Review of The sun always rises

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives of dawn that is seen through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line ot line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very nice personification of dawn as a woman of passion in your dreams who is seductive and a temptress.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is your rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three of your first stanza (eyes, skies).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual. You express the emptiness you feel when darkness creeps in and she leaves you alone in your dreams.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Just one note, there is an error in tense in line one of your fourth stanza, should be 'taken' instead of took.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247941

Review of Insecurity

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts, your insecurity about who you are and the resentment you feel with earnestness in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247923

Review of My Last Breath

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about death; heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion using the last of your strength to reach out to the one you love, to touch one last time.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line two, should be 'breath'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247390

Review of Omega

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write that is concise and succinct about being woman. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of woman, created by God, graceful and complex.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the beauty and grace of woman, God's creation.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of physicality of woman. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247376

Review of Peace

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Thought provoking. A chestnut, precept to live by. Skillfully crafted free verse couplets that are short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; clever, thoughtful and something all of us should do, forgive each other and forgive ourselves. This brings peace.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247361

Review of The Kiss

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about a kiss from the one you love. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see this perfect kiss and the emotions it brings you, touching your souls.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed commas at natural pauses or at the end of a thought, will give emphasis and make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual. You express this longing for his kiss that touches the heart. Romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the kiss. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247343

Review of Koolaide Kisses

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about a toddler playing as his parents watch over him from the point of view of the toddler. Endearing. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the toddler playing, exploring, climbing, running around and sipping koolaide from the cup his mother gives him.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought and will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. The parents love and care for their child and his love for them shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3247331

Review of Broken hearted

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about getting to work late because you missed the bus. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling with a bit of sarcastic humor. Reminds me so much of public transportation, which is not very good where I live. I can relate to your feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. Just a note, there are a couple of typos: in line nine, should be 'don't' and in line fourteen, should be 'it's'.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3246900

Review of Who am I?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Thoughtful and prayerful. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab ccc dd cefe. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this poem.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts about who you are with depth as you search for the answer. All of us ask many of these questions about ourselves at some time in our lives.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3246896

Review of Lottery Ticket-Destination Imagination

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the lottery and a satirical response to it (You have to be in it to win it philosophy). Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of what one would do if they won the lottery.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at naturals pauses for emphasis will make the flow and rhythm of the peace much better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as one dreams of the 'win' and then dashed in the loss. You express the highs and lows of those participating in the lottery.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3246893

Review of Caught in the act - A bit on the side

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and amusing story poem that is short, concise and succinct. Risque. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You describe a very vivid and funny escapade about nearly being caught in a precarious situation by her partner with someone else.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb cc. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Very good humor. Exciting with a bit of daring.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3246852

Review of The Wedding Day

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title
A good title that is suiting to the subject of your short story.

Structure
A good short, short write. The flow of your story flows very well as you tell a story of 55 words exactly.

Language
The setting of the story is described very well and suits the atmosphere of the ceremony of marriage that is taking place. Real to life. The story stays in the third person point of view and gives the reader an understanding of all characers in the story.

Character and Idea
The character (the groom) and his emotions are described very well. The reader knows that he loves his bride and his happiness shines from within. A lovely snap shot of this special occasion. Romantic and poignant.

Specific Highlights:

I especially like: "He noticed her strawberry red lips
as she smiled back at him, seeing his love reflected tenfold." Poignant and romantic.

Overall:
I also like how the the groom loses himself in his thoughts of love for his bride, so much so that there is a bit of comic relief:
a small cough to remind him to say "I do."

You did a good job with this 55 word challenge. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3246549

Review of Unhappiness, a Quintet

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Quintet (a five line form of poetry with no set rhyme scheme or syllable count whose format is up to the poet).

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: a tear forging a single river down your cheek. Very good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your unhappiness through shedding tears, alone. I can relate to this feeling well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3246521

Review of A Silent Whisper

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write, lovely words of romance. Passionate. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme in the second/fourth lines of the first three stanzas that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your joy, passion and love for this person who you know loves you too and is committed to your relationship in a bond of eternal love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis if feeling. Good alliteration and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3246511

Review of Broken Shell

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

An interesting write. A well crafted Senryu, perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of 'fixing' a physical problem with substances unnatural.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. A sad commentary on society; if you don't like your looks or any part of your body, have a surgical procedure and fix it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3246150

Review of What is Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write defining the character traits of love. Skillfully crafted free verse couplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts about love, in its many faces, a gift and blessing from God. A lovely message to your readers to 'taste it, learn from it and grow.'

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3246133

Review of Teach Them Diligently

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt message about teaching our children about God and His love. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ab cb de fe gh ih. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece (heart, start; way, day; anew, do).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about teaching children to love God and His word with earnestness in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about teaching children God's word. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3246125

Review of His Word

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt message about the wisdom of God's holy word. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your faith and conviction in the word of God and your trust in Him that shines brightly in this poem. A message that encourages reading it daily as a guide for living.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3246116

Review of Love is

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write and message about the character of love as described in the word of God. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm much better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbc. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling and beautiful rendering of 1 Corinthians 13 that is easy to understand and touches the heart.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3245925

Review of For Kidd, the cat, with love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your beloved pet who passed away. Poignant. A well written ode. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses for emphasis and placement of a period at the end of a thought will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dede fgfg hh.
Nice use of near rhyme and perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your fond memories of your cat beautifully in this piece. You show the love and joy you had for her.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3245914

Review of Pinching Words

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about writing being purloined and/or plagerized that causes hurt and pain to the true author. I especially like the lines:
"Purloined verse, expressive larceny;
Embezzling words of genuine faith,"
Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklk. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Powerful. You express your anger and hurt for a so called friend who 'stole' your work thereby destroying your trust and friendship.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this betrayal by your friend. Good alliteration and assonance. Clever word play.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3245494

Review of Alone in the House at Night

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write that is short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see the eeriness of being in the house alone with shadows cascading from a night-light painting a giant on the wall; your footsteps pressed in on the carpet, the glow reflecting off the mirror and looking out the window pane that gets foggy from you sighs.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefe. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express you loneliness in the house that you were alone in. I know the feeling and can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Threes-A Terza Rima

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, imaginative. A well crafted terza rima. Free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your imagination you paint vivid snapshots of threes: cantankerous witches; fire and brimstone and rolling eyes; the sounds of cheers... hip, hip, hooray.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aba bcb cdc. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. Dark and clever.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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