ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3245925

Review of For Kidd, the cat, with love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your beloved pet who passed away. Poignant. A well written ode. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses for emphasis and placement of a period at the end of a thought will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dede fgfg hh.
Nice use of near rhyme and perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your fond memories of your cat beautifully in this piece. You show the love and joy you had for her.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3245914

Review of Pinching Words

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about writing being purloined and/or plagerized that causes hurt and pain to the true author. I especially like the lines:
"Purloined verse, expressive larceny;
Embezzling words of genuine faith,"
Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklk. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Powerful. You express your anger and hurt for a so called friend who 'stole' your work thereby destroying your trust and friendship.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this betrayal by your friend. Good alliteration and assonance. Clever word play.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3245494

Review of Alone in the House at Night

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write that is short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see the eeriness of being in the house alone with shadows cascading from a night-light painting a giant on the wall; your footsteps pressed in on the carpet, the glow reflecting off the mirror and looking out the window pane that gets foggy from you sighs.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefe. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express you loneliness in the house that you were alone in. I know the feeling and can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3245490

Review of Threes-A Terza Rima

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, imaginative. A well crafted terza rima. Free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your imagination you paint vivid snapshots of threes: cantankerous witches; fire and brimstone and rolling eyes; the sounds of cheers... hip, hip, hooray.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aba bcb cdc. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. Dark and clever.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3245477

Review of Seeing her in the clouds....

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt, introspective and poignant. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Lovely metaphor and simile: 'Flowing like and autumn leaf, your golden fleece chimes with the floating stream of the wind...' simply beautiful.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the inner beauty of this person, her serenity and how you would care for her, even at a distance. Being away from her causes feelings of emptiness within yourself, this friendship meaning so much to you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line six, should be 'your' and line seven should be 'your'.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3245452

Review of Fairy Tale Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and romantic. Introspective. A well crafted sonnet.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Ten syllables per line except line fourteen which is nine syllables. Just a suggestion: a strategically placed comma at natural pauses and a period at the end of thought will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg. A mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express our desire and hope for true love beautifully in this poem. This wish for fairytale love is something lots of us have sometime during our lives.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3245267

Review of Autumn

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the autumn season. Very nice form. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of autumn that we see through the lens of your eye, the beautiful colors, the leaves falling and the chilly days and nights that you express so vividly in this piece.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Lovely personification of Nature: 'she spreads her yellow carpet', 'she declares the advent of winter'.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbc. A mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this poem.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for the autumn season with warmth. It is my favorite season and you describe it well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on the description of the leaves. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3245263

Review of Attraction

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presention. Uplifiting. A skillfully crafted Septolet that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Very nice imagery and descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of these bright colored birds and the lilting melodies that they sing.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the beauty of these mating birds whose love song will last but for a few seasons.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3244837

Review of shattered

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write that is concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 17 syllables or less form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a rock shattering a window pane.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling as you express the sound 'shattered' silence, a creative way of expressing contrast between silent and noisy.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3244818

Review of Memories

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about memories inspired from nature. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express how powerful touch can be to bring back memories, in this instance to touch a tree years later and feel the joy of 'reunion' that it brings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3244808

Review of Only She Stands There

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express her feelings about being a loner, feelings that I understand and can relate to very well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3244794

Review of Perfect Stranger

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write. Heartfelt. Nicely crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your idea of the perfect man, handsome and passionate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought as well as make the flow and rhythm of this poem even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'bright blue eyes, a vast ocean inviting me to set sail,' and simile: 'golden hair flowing in the wind like a silk scarf' - lovely descriptive/comparison of his attraction.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings for this stranger of your fantasies that are delightfully sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3244766

Review of Death

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting of the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breakds are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of death, the darkness of it waiting to 'strike with its piercing bow.'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababcdcd. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how death comes when we least expect it, and how we're not really ready for it when it comes even when we know it will eventually come.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of 'Death.' Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line four: should be 'peaceful,' also, in line seven, should the last word be 'blow'?

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3244520

Review of Soldier's Song

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of this poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message from the perspective of a soldier. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in stanza two line (though, toe).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the conviction and the heart a soldier has regarding the battles he fights to protect the freedom of the people and the land that he loves.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3244476

Review of Life is for the Living

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that suits the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message about living ones life. Clever word play. Thoughtful. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, adding a question mark at the end of lines two and four will give emphasis to the thought you are advocating.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Thought provoking. This is a message that all of us should think about in regards to the purpose of our lives.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis if feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3244386

Review of Contrast of Beauty

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the beauty of winter. A skillfully crafted Septolet. Perfect form that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptives. You paint a picture of the starkness that is seen in the winter season with a blanket of snow that shows its beauty.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; clever word play. You express the 'season's best' in the chill of winter when eyes are drawn to the flash of color that is bright against the starkness in nature at this time.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3244079

Review of Ziggot

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this imaginative creature called a ziggot. Nicely crafted free verse. A short, concise and succinct children's verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the character of this little creature that makes little messes.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; a lighthearted poem about a ziggot who will take the blame for a mess made, instead of you. Very nice humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3244041

Review of Dads

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about fathers. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about dads beautifully in this piece; that they are smart, sweet, caring and love their children most of all.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3244005

Review of Night Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the night sky in its beauty, one that your readers can see clearly in our minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought and also make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'the stars glitter like jewels on black velvet' and 'a shooting star rushes by lighting the sky like fireworks.'
Nice metaphor: 'the man in the moon winks from above and smiles broadly.' Very nice descriptive/comparisons of the evening sky in its beauty.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the peacefulness you feel, the inner peace that fills you as you look upon the night sky. I can relate. I have laid upon the grass on a starry night and have felt that same peacefulness you describe in your poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3243983

Review of The Bloom That Is Thee

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message about beauty. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor, beauty seen as a flower in bloom, one of hope and life.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about beauty in bloom, as you see it in your eyes and feel it in your heart.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis if feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3242387

Review of Ode To A Sunflower

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write that is concise and succinct. Nice presentation. Skillfully crafted Whitney. Perfect 3/4/3/4/3/4/7 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the life of sunflower, even as it withers through its seeds it will be reborn.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you very nicely express the circle of life in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3242185

Review of Wafers (A Tyburn)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about you love for wafers. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted Tyburn. Perfect form. Well crafted rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect feminine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your love for these wafers that are made by your mother, something all of us can relate to.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3242180

Review of Dazzling Brilliance

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of this sunny day, the color of the sky and the beautiful girl showered by its rays that wee see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of personification: 'the flirtatious sun plays with her hair' - very nice descriptive/comparison about the sun's flirtation with this beauty.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings brought about by this sunny day and its brilliance as it showers down upon this young girl that has caught your eye and who seems to be flirting with you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3242172

Review of Vacation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about vacations. Skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you describe vacation, its rest, relaxation, fun and memories that stay with us even after it is over.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express these special moments on vacation that bring one warm memories and togetherness and love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Yummy

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation about a favorite dessert. Skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a very good picture of this sweet dessert that is delectable and enjoyable to eat.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express your love for a favorite sweet. I'm partial to it as well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong alliteration, nice assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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