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#3232038

Review of Silence

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write, dark, lamentful and tragic. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry about the silence that comes to one who has been raped.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the horror, pain and sadness of a victim of rape.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dede fghg. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Mournful, lamentful. You express her hurt, pain and a loss of words because of what has happened to her and the fear of trying to tell the man she loves that she's been raped. Powerful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of A MESSAGE FROM GOD

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write, message and rendering from God's word of His 'knowing' everyone as they are formed in their mother's womb. A nice blend of free verse (first verse) and free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme in the second through fourth stanzas. Near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line 2 of your poem (knew, you); in lines 8 and 12 (may, say); line 11 (you, too); line 15 (through, you).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the love God has for each of us, His care and that we need not fear for He is always with us to guide and protect. A lovely message of invitation to unbelievers.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line 13, should be 'worthless'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3231886

Review of Left Alone

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Nicely crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptive. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a picture of your sadness and loneliness.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of emotion. You express how being left alone makes you sad because no one cares about you. Lamentful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.
Just a note, there is a typo in line two, should be 'morning.'

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3231320

Review of Passion's Heat

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Passion filled. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the act of love and its hot and burning desire.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: "Like the ocean's tide with it's sun kissed mist
over your skin, my fingers glide" very nice descriptive and comparison to love making.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef ghgh. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual. You express your love passionately in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3231278

Review of The Sweetest Gift

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt and uplifting. A skillfully crafted Rispetto. Perfect abab ccdd form in iambic tetrameter.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter: 8 syllables per line. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your pain in love that condemned you to loneliness until someone special entered your life fulfilling your life with true love, a gift to you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3231269

Review of desire

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good, heartfelt write. Well crafted reverse etheree. Near perfect form. Lovely shape.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the passion of love between lovers.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with strong alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3231227

Review of I Find Peace

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Serene and introspective. A skillfully crafted Kyrielle Sonnet. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of this special place where you have found peace within yourself, a place of light that shines upon you day and night.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter: 8 syllables per line throughout poem. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in the three stanzas that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in stanza one line three (by, my) and in stanza three line three (by, my).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; You express God's love beautifully and how it brings one rest and peace beyond compare.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling that drives this French form poetry. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3231209

Review of I don't want to say goodbye

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write expressing your fear about loving someone new because you don't want to have to say goodbye. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your insecurity in a possible relationship that will go wrong and cause you pain when you have to say goodbye. I think everyone has felt that way some time in their lives.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3231108

Review of Broken Warrior in Gratitude

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and testimony of your relationship with God. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the character of a warrior of God.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a unique rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your faith and trust in God who strengthens you to be His true warrior in your life journey. All you need He gives you as you express so well in this poem. Lovely words of praise and adoration for Him.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and conviction. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Rain (of tears)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write; heartfelt. A skillfully crafted rhyming acrostic that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of rain, describing it as nature's tears.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'nature's gown of tears'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines 1, 3 and 4 that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of a misty rain that falls on cities and towns, with a lovely sense of serenity and cleansing.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3230668

Review of SantasJob

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about Santa's work. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry that is concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint of vivid picture of Santa, his reindeer and where he stops on top of roofs of homes using the chimney to enter homes to leave gifts for children.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Good meter: 6/6/6/6/7/6. Just a note, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabccb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the joy that Santa brings to children every Christmas.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3230650

Review of Sunset's Whisper

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and romantic. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of sunset, the dark sky and twinkling stars that are seen through the lens of you eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very nice personification of stars: 'though twinkling stars will dare smile through, while you are far away from me, they'll frown a humble hue.' A beautiful descriptive of emotion 'felt' by the stars.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line two of the fourth stanza (Til, still) and in the last line of the sixth stanza (My, sky).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your longing for your love who is away from you deeply.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3230627

Review of Footprints

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and loving. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of your love as you walk along on the beach at sunset, walking in the rain... a picture of your footprints through the years.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the love for your fiance beautifully in this poem. Poignant and joyful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3230612

Review of Zombie

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good dark write about a zombie. Imaginative. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid and eerie picture of a zombie and his fear, bloodlust and pain of the light.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Tone is dark and eerie.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3230598

Review of Loose Lumps

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write; a humorous and fun read. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid and funny picture of goose bumps and how they come and go.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'goose bumps gladly flair like small white bubbles which seem to rise' - a good descriptive and comparison about how they affect ones skin.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme which is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line sixteen (they're, there).

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; lighthearted with a good sense of humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of how these goose bumps or loose lumps are. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line six, should be 'you're' and in line ten, should be 'you're'.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3230586

Review of GIFT OF MELANCHOLY

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about sadness and loneliness. Heartfelt and introspective. Abstract and thought provoking. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm much better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'I soar like a bird without feathers'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express your feelings about being cleansed by melancholy to release you from sadness and loneliness with earnestness in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line fourteen, should be 'of'.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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Review of Life - a paradox

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message. Upbeat and encouraging. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two (comedy, tragedy)

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; thought provoking. You express the range of feelings in life from comedy to tragedy but also enriches the spirit of our lives.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3230567

Review of DUTY

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message about duty. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three (enhances, advances) and line ten (epitome, beauty).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your understanding of the importance of duty and how it affects ones life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3230560

Review of MY FRIEND

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about this special friendship. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about your friend and your friendship beautifully in this poem. You express a bond that is nurturing and precious, a treasure and gift to you. You are blessed to have such a person in your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line 7, should be 'determination'.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Yet Still

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message about love. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express love and how it sustains a person, even after it's gone, something I think all of us understands. A beautiful message of just how powerful love can be.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of First Kiss

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. Romantic. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Nicely sensual and passionate. You express this beautiful moment of a first kiss with someone who is special to you very well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of I Need

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write; heartfelt and instrospective. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love, your need for this special woman beautifully.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3229870

Review of The ways I love you

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Perfect dactylic and feminine end line rhyme is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for Sophia beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3229865

Review of My Brother

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and dedicatory piece about your brother and how special he is to you. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for your brother, a special gift from God, beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3229826

Review of Chapter

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Heartfelt, lamentful and introspective. Nicely crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause will promote emphasis and will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about starting over somewhere new with the heartache and pain that you still feel as you start this new chapter in your life journey with poignance.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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