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Lady Marine: Song Of Lochness

Poetry that is capturing the mysterious allure of the lake and the deep emotions.

The whispers of love

This piece always beholds a special place in my heart.

Such As We Are

A short essay describing my general beliefs. A rather dry read.

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#3212796

Review of Adversity

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted Lune. Perfect 3 words/5 words/3 words form with the added sequence that each first line of the triplet starts with the consecutive letter of the alphabet (line 1 A; line 4 B; line 7 C) and so on.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about adversity in life and love very well in this piece with the hope that the one you care for will tear down the barriers of black and white because when it comes to love, there is no color line... even if others see it as sin.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3212785

Review of My Baby

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt and passionate. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is very good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of love, intoxicating and sensual, potent and addictive, love that immerses you in its arms.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice simile 'desire like the smooth caress on the wind on a hot summer's day. 'lust, like the burning embers of an autumn sky.' 'Beautiful comparisons, vivid. These are just a few of the many similes incorporated in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you have defined and expressed love with power and the conviction that having it is all you could need.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3212772

Review of Katherine

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and dedicatory piece to your good friend. Very nice presentation. Skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a beautiful picture of her character and of your special friendship.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of simile comparing her to the beauty of golden wattle.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you're blessed to have a friend like Katherine in your life. You revel in the joy of this friendship that has touched you both deeply. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3212761

Review of Justice

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message in regards to the the civil rights movement. Skillfully crafted Fibonacci, perfect 1/2/3/5/8/13 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the pain of the struggle of the Negro people in American and our cry/demand for justice which was denied us for so long simply because of a pigment problem and a society that sought to continue the injustice.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3212026

Review of Thoughts Before Bedtime

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and loving. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice internal rhyme in line two (laughter, after) and line ten (happy, be). Perfect masculine end line rhyme (lines 3 through 10) which is executed beautifully in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Romantic words of love that you express about the one you love. You express your thoughts of this special person in your life with tenderness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3211994

Review of Spring Thanks

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the spring season. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a pretty picture of new life that comes with spring.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will smooth out the flow and rhythm (in my opinion).

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that you execute very well in this piece.
Nice internal rhyme in the last line of your poem (fun, begun).

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the message that God made spring for a reason, being new life and that we should remember to thank Him for the blessings of the season. I can sense that you enjoy springtime very much. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3211747

Review of To WDC's Ninth Birthday

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and tribute to WDC's ninth birthday. Heartfelt and upbeat. Skillfully crafted Limerick. Perfect 9/9/6/6/9 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very good meter and rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one (today, day).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; a celebratory piece for this wonderful site.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, nice assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3211733

Review of Tears of Pain

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Very nice imagery and descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your tears, and how they affect you in an alarming way.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'tsunami of emotions' powerful use of comparison of tears to a violent storm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how devastating these tears are which seem to touch the soul (never receding).

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3211220

Review of My dream...

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt romantic fantasy. A lovely dream of a love you have yet to meet. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I like and enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes we see the love of your dreams.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good. Line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile 'eyes are deep as the sea'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that you execute well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual. You enjoyed this dream and long to meet this love of your life, but the question of your heart is will you meet him someday for real?

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, in line 14 you need to move the comma one word over after 'me' instead of tell (in my opinion).

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3211203

Review of My Hearts Cry!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A very good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt prayer of supplication. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme. A lovely conversation in the first two stanzas (your call) and in the last stanza the Lord's response.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; in stanza one lines 1,2,3,6 are perfect masculine end line rhyme.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. A beautiful testimony of your trust in the Lord to forgive all your sins. I can relate to this sinners prayer to the Lord which all believers have prayed in some form through the ages.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3211188

Review of I Am Not Afraid!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt, uplifting words of faith. Skillfully crafted free verse poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your faith and trust in the Lord shines in this piece. Your conviction that you are not alone and need not be afraid through the power of God who has made heaven your home. Comforting words that fill your heart with His loving grace.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling that there is no need to fear in the arms of God. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3211118

Review of Love or Passion?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message. Heartfelt and thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'passion gives you wings,' 'burning stars find rest in gentle skies' 'passion exotic fruit, love an ancient tree' very poetic.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme aabb ccdd eeff. Nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You describe this bond of love and passion that should always be connected to each other because they harmonize each other.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Very nice use of repetition for emphasis of the connection of love and passion. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3211107

Review of Oh the Cost

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very nice write from the perspective of a dying soldier. Heartfelt and poignant. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling; nicely crafted couplets, a blending of free verse and rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines 2,4,6,8,10 and 12 that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings, gratefulness in this poem that honors soldiers from all branches of the military.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration and assonance. Just a suggestion, it would be nice if you could single space your poem for easier reading.

Overall:

Nicely penned tribute to our men and women in the armed forces.
Write on.

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#3210948

Review of Backseat Driver

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and story poem. Skillfully crafted acrostic blended with nearly perfect monorhyme. Very creative.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of cruising in a new car, something any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. The enjoyment of taking a ride in a new car and the excitement of being pulled over by the police makes your heart jump as you are pulled into this story poem. I especially enjoyed the humor of the piece... her own child reporting their car stolen. Someone was in real trouble for that 'antic.'

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210736

Review of The Rose

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt and uplifting. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of safety and security in the arms of God, this secret place where His children find solace.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor 'within the garden of your soul comes forth a lovely rose...' simply beautiful.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with very well in this piece (go, so; despair, there; heart, part; rose, grow).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; a lovely message of love, protection and growth under God's guidance.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210419

Review of Wanderlust

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Senryu string. The first senryu is 3/4/3, the second thru fifth are 3/5/3, perfect 17 syllables or less form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express your feelings powerfully in this piece. The sense of hopelessness permeates the poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3210293

Review of Listen Today

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very nice write and message. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about the importance of listening to the one you love, 'to feast on her words' that will bring delight.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition as a reminder to listen, favor and impart to her your feelings. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210287

Review of Kiss

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very nice write, heartfelt. Well crafted freeverse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture that celebrates the kiss and its affects on the receiver.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done.
Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual, this pleasure that comes from lips. You express feelings that go along with being kissed beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of beauty of her lips. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210275

Review of Earth's Faithful

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Well crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of gardening that we can see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Very nice depth of feeling; your love for this pastime shines in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3210267

Review of Here

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Heartfelt, introspective and lamentful. Well crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your sadness being separated from the one you love. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3210262

Review of Daddy

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write. A lovely tribute to a father. Short, concise and succinct nicely crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a very nice picture of a fathers love and care.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

In the lines that rhyme (5,6,7,9), perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; the love and respect that you express about this father shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3209605

Review of A Beautiful Girl

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A good write about love that you seek. Elegant verse. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry. Imagery: is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of love that blossoms that we see through the lens of your eye. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Rhyme: is good as is the rhyme scheme abab. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece. Tone: lovely depth of feeling; you express the love and romance you would find in this girl of your dreams. Word choice: is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3209592

Review of Destiny and Desire

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A good write. Heart. Well crafted rhyming poetry. Romantic. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm. Rhyme: is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme which is executed very well in this piece. Tone: lovely depth of feeling; you express how love makes all things new in the one touched by it. Word choice: is good with nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3209325

Review of Silent Jeer

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about jealousy. Dark. Skillfully crafted Petrarchan sonnet. Good meter written in iambic pentameter.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this woman who is after 'your' date. Through your eyes we see her sensuality as she 'stalks' her prey.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor 'temptress stalks her prey,' 'the albatross takes flight,' 'on feathered feet she floats' which describes her prowess.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you portray her jealousy as well as your anger as she makes a play for your date.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with strong alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of By a stream

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

A good title that suits the theme of your poem. A good write, peaceful. Well crafted free verse. Very nice use of simile (water clear as glass; sky as perfect as a picture; peaceful as a babbling brook.) Imagery: is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of this special place that we see through the lens of your eyes. You take me there, to this place of serenity where one can commune in nature. Flow: is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Tone: lovely depth of feeling, this place you describe is almost magical. Word choice: is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Overall: well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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