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#3215990

Review of A Christmas Collage

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. A heartfelt and uplifting message of what Christmas means to you. Very nice free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of the Christmas season of lights, ornaments and trees as we celebrate our Lord's birth.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is very nice. A mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; the joy of Christmas and your faith shines brightly in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215981

Review of Castles in the Sand

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of togetherness at the beach and the beauty of it that we see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every first, second and fourth lines of the first three stanzas and the first and second lines of the fourth stanza are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the love you have for each other delightfully in this romantic interlude.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3215814

Review of Mon Mari

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Introspective and poignant. A heartfelt tribute of your husband's love for you. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint vivid pictures of your life that was lamentful before your love came into your life. He took you from the cold winter of loneliness and disillusionment to the warmth and renewal of spring.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'pieces torn from me scattered in the bitter winds of uncertainty' and simile: 'disillusioned in pain swirled like snowflakes in the pepetual winter of my life' are excellent comparisions to describe your life and frame of mind.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your love for your husband and his loving encouragemnt and care for you shines in this piece. He helped you become whole. You are truly blessed to have such a man in your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215805

Review of Sidney's Poetry

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

Good titles for both poems.

Form/Style:

Very good writes, heartfelt and imaginative. Skillfully crafted free verse. Very nice presentation.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You have a wonderful imagination and you paint vivid pictures of life and nature.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; lilting, upbeat. Encouraging. You are a talented poet.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and consonance with good assonance.

Overall:

Both poems are well penned and enjoyable reads. Write on.

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#3215739

Review of The Storyteller

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the magic of storytelling. Heartfelt. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You take us to enchanted lands where we see knights, ghosts, dragons, fairies and so much more that we see through the lens of your imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your joy of telling stories and I can sense that you're a wonderful storyteller. Your love for sharing your stories shine in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215729

Review of Christmas Fears

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the excitement and anticipation of Christmas, Santa Claus and gifts from the perspective of a child. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the eyes of this little boy you paint a picture of his expectation and enthusiasm as he waits for Santa to arrive and his wonder and fear of whether presents will be left behind for him... and his brother.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. The magic of Christmas as seen in the eyes of a child shines brilliantly in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there's a typo in stanza six, line two; should be 'tinkling' and in stanza thirteen, line two should be 'too.'

Overall:

A well penned story poem and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215714

Review of Rainbow Wishes

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and story poem. Heartfelt and magical. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of this place where she searches the sky for the rainbow which she can wish upon to see her love she misses so much.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'on imagination's wings'

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express her love which shines in this piece with poignance. Romantic. Lovely anticipation that her wish will come true.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3215709

Review of The Ocean Wave

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your experience with ocean waves. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You take the reader to the ocean where through the lens of your eye we see ocean waves crescendo as they crash into the rocky shore and the mist from it sprays upon your face. Refreshing.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transtion and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'ocean jewels fell onto my upturned face in a gentle brush,' a lovely description of how the mist of the ocean tenderly brushes your face like a hand would.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love for the ocean, how it makes you feel, almost romantic. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the power of the ocean waves. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3215702

Review of A Little Witch Who Wanted To Fly

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and story poem that any child would enjoy. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I prefer and enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a funny picture of this little witch who wishes to fly but doesn't have the knack for it.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in the second through fourth stanzas are perfect masculine end line that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; lilting, imaginative with a bit of humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; very nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215614

Review of A Lesson Regarding Roses

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about the folly of love. Skillfully crafted Fibonacci. Perfect 1/2/3/5/8/13 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful picture of a rose, its brilliance and scent that is usually given in a gesture of love in courtship which in some cases will lead to folly.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling with a tinge of cynicism when it comes to love that is not true and the roses then become a folly.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3215015

Review of Nature's Summer Revelry

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of the sights and sounds of a summer evening.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the beauty of a summer night very well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215005

Review of Harvest of Words

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write. Concise and succinct. A nicely crafted senryu. Almost perfect form. Line three has 6 syllables, should be 5.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the seasons, the birth of spring growing to summers warmth moving into the vibrancy of color in fall.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well.
Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the beauty of the seasons through the harvest of words.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3215002

Review of Hungry Soul ~

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of the poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message. Skillfully crafted etheree/anagram blend. Perfect form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the attributes of a hungry soul that is lamentful awash in hoplessness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3214203

Review of Snozzberry Tulips

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and fun read. A poem that any child who likes Willy Wonka would enjoy. Skillfully crafted PI poem; a 6 line poem with perfect 3/1/4/2/8/6 words form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. A magical picture you paint of Willy's dream that we see through the lens of your imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; an upbeat, enchanting piece that is imaginative, a beautiful place to dream of about the best treats a child could love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3213466

Review of Overdue

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write and message. Heartfelt and dark. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see a pictured of a polluted sky due to our neglect of our resources.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the moon who expresses his ire about enduring the filthy haze that has been permeating his sky and comments about a crumbling building, lets humans know that it is again their neglect that caused destruction.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling and commentary on society's misuse of its resources thus causing its decay.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3212796

Review of Adversity

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted Lune. Perfect 3 words/5 words/3 words form with the added sequence that each first line of the triplet starts with the consecutive letter of the alphabet (line 1 A; line 4 B; line 7 C) and so on.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about adversity in life and love very well in this piece with the hope that the one you care for will tear down the barriers of black and white because when it comes to love, there is no color line... even if others see it as sin.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3212785

Review of My Baby

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt and passionate. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is very good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of love, intoxicating and sensual, potent and addictive, love that immerses you in its arms.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice simile 'desire like the smooth caress on the wind on a hot summer's day. 'lust, like the burning embers of an autumn sky.' 'Beautiful comparisons, vivid. These are just a few of the many similes incorporated in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you have defined and expressed love with power and the conviction that having it is all you could need.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3212772

Review of Katherine

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and dedicatory piece to your good friend. Very nice presentation. Skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a beautiful picture of her character and of your special friendship.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of simile comparing her to the beauty of golden wattle.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you're blessed to have a friend like Katherine in your life. You revel in the joy of this friendship that has touched you both deeply. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3212761

Review of Justice

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message in regards to the the civil rights movement. Skillfully crafted Fibonacci, perfect 1/2/3/5/8/13 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the pain of the struggle of the Negro people in American and our cry/demand for justice which was denied us for so long simply because of a pigment problem and a society that sought to continue the injustice.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3212026

Review of Thoughts Before Bedtime

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and loving. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice internal rhyme in line two (laughter, after) and line ten (happy, be). Perfect masculine end line rhyme (lines 3 through 10) which is executed beautifully in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Romantic words of love that you express about the one you love. You express your thoughts of this special person in your life with tenderness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Spring Thanks

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the spring season. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a pretty picture of new life that comes with spring.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will smooth out the flow and rhythm (in my opinion).

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that you execute very well in this piece.
Nice internal rhyme in the last line of your poem (fun, begun).

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the message that God made spring for a reason, being new life and that we should remember to thank Him for the blessings of the season. I can sense that you enjoy springtime very much. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Tears of Pain

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Very nice imagery and descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your tears, and how they affect you in an alarming way.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor 'tsunami of emotions' powerful use of comparison of tears to a violent storm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how devastating these tears are which seem to touch the soul (never receding).

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of My dream...

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt romantic fantasy. A lovely dream of a love you have yet to meet. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I like and enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes we see the love of your dreams.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good. Line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile 'eyes are deep as the sea'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that you execute well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual. You enjoyed this dream and long to meet this love of your life, but the question of your heart is will you meet him someday for real?

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, in line 14 you need to move the comma one word over after 'me' instead of tell (in my opinion).

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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Review of My Hearts Cry!

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A very good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt prayer of supplication. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme. A lovely conversation in the first two stanzas (your call) and in the last stanza the Lord's response.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; in stanza one lines 1,2,3,6 are perfect masculine end line rhyme.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. A beautiful testimony of your trust in the Lord to forgive all your sins. I can relate to this sinners prayer to the Lord which all believers have prayed in some form through the ages.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of I Am Not Afraid!

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write. Heartfelt, uplifting words of faith. Skillfully crafted free verse poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your faith and trust in the Lord shines in this piece. Your conviction that you are not alone and need not be afraid through the power of God who has made heaven your home. Comforting words that fill your heart with His loving grace.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling that there is no need to fear in the arms of God. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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