ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

Review Requests: ON

4,636 Public Reviews Given

4,671 Total Reviews Given

751

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272729

Review of 02-The Island in Mountains of Green

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

** Image ID #1388845 Unavailable **

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write about friendship of these mythical creatures in this epic tale. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives as seen through the lens of your imagination. You paint a vivid picture of this setting in which the adventure begins.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near rhyme and near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express the deepening friendship betwee Dragon Blue and her companion, a love that is growing between them in this magical place. You are a fine storyteller.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

752

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272723

Review of Bridge To My Lover

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (5.0)

** Image ID #1388845 Unavailable **

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about love you feel for your lover. A heartfelt promise and tribute to this special person. Skillfully crafted free verse that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor: 'hold my hand across the stormy seas.' A lovely plea to be there at your side through the storms of life, a very good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your expectations of love and trust with conviction in this piece as you implore your partner to trust in the perfect will of God. Your trust in Him and your vow to cleave to the one you love through all the peaks and valleys of life is a wonderful testament to your faith.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

753

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272496

Review of Lord's guidance

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and conversation with the Lord. Prayerful and introspective. A well crafted free verse poem with a tinge of rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your faith and trust in God whom you ask for His guidance as you serve Him. I can relate to your thoughts and feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

754

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272478

Review of Heavenly Father

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about our Lord and Savior. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse that is concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of our Saviors death and resurrection.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Prayerful. You express your faith, love, trust and thankfulness for God beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

755

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272410

Review of Night's Birth

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about a summer evening. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid and imaginative picture of the evening sky in its brilliance of moonlight and star shine.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc de. A good mixture of near rhyme and perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your love and intrigue with the evening sky, God's creation, beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

756

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272372

Review of Worth

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. A thought provoking piece. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I would change the period of lines four, six, eight and ten to question marks. It would make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about the soul and its worth and importance to a person very well in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

757

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272366

Review of Work

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about how you feel at work on the first day of the week. Heartfelt. A well crafted Senryu that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of an employee staring at his computer screen trying to type on the keyboard, wishing it was time to leave work.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, you don't really need to use 'the' in line one and two. If you remove them, it will smooth out the flow and rhythm and still be perfect form of haiku which is done in 17 syllables or less, in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your boredom at work and you wish to be elsewhere with the work day over. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

758

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272360

Review of Mask

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the periods at the end of lines three and nine; removing them will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about who you are and the masks you wear as you long for happiness in life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

759

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272129

Review of My Heart

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about heartache that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how even though your heart has been broken by others, it heals as time works its magic and you learn to trust again. I think all of us can relate to these feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line three, should be 'guard'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

760

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272097

Review of Success and Failure

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about success and failure that is heartfelt and introspective. Nice shape. A good attempt at the diamante form. Just a note, in line five there should be 3-ing words you have four (frustrating is posted twice).

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how one feels as they cherish the moments of success and the contrast to it, the disappointment, frustration and bitterness that failure brings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Best wishes in the contest. Write on.

761

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3272078

Review of Genres

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation about genres in writing. Good shape. A skillfully crafted diamante. Perfect form that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You capture the genres of comedy in its lightness and darkness, a rainbow of color affecting genres in writing from funny to shocking.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Best wishes in the contest. Write on.

762

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271796

Review of Departing

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Lamentful. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings, your hurts that send you to that dark place, where pain and disappointment resides.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

763

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271789

Review of The Upset Soul

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write, introspective and thoughtful. Nicely crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I would change the period at the end of line two to a comma which will make the flow and rhythm better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts about not being able to understand your feelings, how you get upset so easily about disappointment and why you aren't able to trust. The only thing you understand is the love you feel for this person close to your heart who you want to spend the rest of your life with. I think we can all relate to these feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Nice internal rhyme in line seven (just, trust).

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

764

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271772

Review of do you remember?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and reminder to someone dear to you to remember the good times you have had together. Heartfelt. Nicely crafted free verse poetry that is short, concise and succinct. Nice content.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the importance this relationship is to you and hope that she will remember it too.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance. Just a note, there are several typos in your poem: in line one and seven, should be 'remember;' in line four should be 'through,' in line five should be 'lose.' I find it a good practice to spell check once I've completed a poem, but this is just a suggestion.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

765

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271760

Review of Fear

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about fear, heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express the terror you feel from memories of childhood that are painful even after so many years; fear that seems to rule your life, a nightmare that will not let you go.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

766

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271741

Review of Hold On

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write to the one you love about persevering that is uplifting and encouraging. Well crafted free verse that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your love and support for the man you love with passion and poignance.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

767

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271577

Review of These four walls

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about walls around us. Heartfelt and clever. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see these 'walls' of protection that can also make us feel disconnected from others.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of metaphor and simile: 'like cattle trapped inside tiny stalls,' nice descriptive/comparison about living within the 'walls' of life or even your mind.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababacac. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how claustraphobic one can be inside these four walls, but that they also can be a shelter from hurt without them... to be crushed without the protection.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

768

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271567

Review of Greatness...

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem. Just a note, there is a typo in the title, should be 'Greatness'.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and message. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice simile: 'listen to life as the wind, not always calm, sometimes blows hard...' a good descriptive/comparison to living life.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how the circumstances we experience in life can be like many aspects of the wind, it can be calm, blow hard and be tranquil. By these winds of change we grow, become stronger, an inner awareness of strength within us that is seen as greatness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in the last line of your poem, should be 'greatness.'

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

769

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271547

Review of Angel

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

** Image ID #1624812 Unavailable **
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the one you love. Heartfelt and romantic. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abac dedf ghih. A good mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece (harmony, symphony; touch, much; sorts, ports).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your joy and passion for this special person in your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

770

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271488

Review of My Darling

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and lullaby. Melodic. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb adec. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme which is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your love and hope for your children shines in this poem. A lovely song to sing to your girls before they went to sleep.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

771

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271483

Review of I wonder

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about things one wonders about. Nicely crafted free verse. Whimsical.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of personification: thunder clouds shedding tears; trees and flower singing for the two of you.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express compassion through nature and how it is showered upon you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

772

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271210

Review of I am

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about how you see yourself. Upbeat. A good sense of self. Well crafted triplets, free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express yourself beautifully in this piece. You're passionate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration and assonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line six, should be 'would' and in line twelve, should be 'until'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

773

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271203

Review of Nothing

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about how you feel, sad, lonely and hurt; heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a stategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make your flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (find, mind; feel, steal; see, me; feel, real; there, scare).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your anger and pain about this man who caused you such hurt taking from you your happiness. Lamentful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

774

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271197

Review of Ageing

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about ageing. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of how you view yourself as you grow older that the reader sees through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about growing older beautifully in this piece. A nice bit of humor, upbeat and a very nice take on your memories and the longed for maturity that you have now reached. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

775

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#3271148

Review of The man of my dreams

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the man of your dreams. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccdde. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about the perfect man for you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your feelings. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"