Hello Valery Black, Welcome to WDC! I see you have just joined, and what a way to start. A very good poem. I do not usually like non rhyming poetry but this one is very good.
I loved the second verse, so true, we use our past, present and dreams.
Hello Linda Mahan Miller, I have just read your Essay on lighthouses. Very short but interesting piece of history. I do not think keepers live in the lighthouses anymore do they? i think it would be fun to live in one.
You seem to have a lot of writing on the bottom of the page that I am not sure should be there.
Hello Dathan, I must say this was an amazing read and an eye openener. I imagine you must have found working there incredibly difficult, I am sure I would. But at least you now recognise how good it is to be free.
Very interesting Essay.
The only suggestion I have is to separate your paragraphs, it does help the reader.
Hello rsa, I have just read your story of understanding your Dad. You are right we cannot change people , they are what they are. It does not mean the feelings are not there, even if they do not show them often.
Hello Ruth, what a lovely story! So inspirational, I thought the Mother had done something terrible and read on in antisipation, to discover it was something as nice as that.
Hello April , I have just read your poem, "Memories." No wonder it won First prize. I like it, you describe the friendship from childhood to adulthood and the things inbetween, in such a short poem.
Then you move on and leave it behind.
A really good poem, I have no suggestions and no idea why only four stars, it well deserves a five.
Hello Ken, I love your poetry, I could read it all day, this one is no exception. What lovely memories.
I remember my daughter, when very young, made a paper star for my sister. She placed it on her tree faithfully every year, till last Christmas when she passed away. My daughter now has the star back and has placed it on her tree this year.
Hello RedBengalTiger, welcome to WDC. I have just read your poem, "Christmas Night." It reminds me of when my children were young, sneaking downstairs to take a peep.
Hello TB, this is absolutely awful and I can imagine how hard it must be for you write it. Although sometimes it helps to write things, I know it will never go away but to unladen the burden can help. I realise it is not finished, but I shall come back to read on when it is.
I am going to give five stars as you show great courage in writing this.
Hello Ophelia and welcome to WDC. I have just read your song Lyrics "Gangster Girl."
A story of love between a Gangster and a "Princess." It reminds me of Rhianna's "Love the way you lie." The writer knows he lies, but still she loves him.
I would suggest a capital I, always and "lier," should be "liar."
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