Hello Quiltingmama, I have just read your story, "Christmas Surprises."
I realyl enjoyed this, had me interested from start to finish. I thought for a moment there was an intruder in the house, but relieved when it turned out to be Dylan.
The imagery is very good.
A great little read and I should be very surprised if it does not win.
Hello CTG, what a lovely yet sad Christmas story. For some children, this sort of thing is really happening, it reminds us not to take everything for granted. So a very good message in your story too.
The imagery is good and I thought it well written.
Hello Soh, I have just read your poem, "Telephone Lover." I thought it very cleverly written. Was this true?
My favourite lines were "I had forgotten my name, but could not let her feel as if this was a game." So you just said the first name that came to mind, even thouigh it was a girls name. It is funny how we get tounge tied just at the sound of another's voice.
I loved the whole poem, but then it ended with that dreaded "Click." She must have had her reasons.
Hello AJane, I have just read your Essay on "Cheating In School."
I have to say I agree with the teacher, homework is homework and not meant to be copied from someone eles in the last five minutes before class starts. I do not feel the person is going to learn much by copying from someone else. Also if whoever they copied from has the work wrong or is poorly done, then that makes it even worse for the cheater.
Never the less a good essay and some really good points mentioned.
The only suggestion I have is to separate paragraphs.
Hello CPaigeR, I have just read your poem, "Without." I think the message is really good. The poet is on a journey for life, fighting for what is theirs and going it alone.
My favourite lines were the last two "All these things I am going through, I hope you know, it's all for you."
Hello MRS. Whatsit, I love your handle. I have just been reading through your list of books and I must say my favourite is The Hobbit. I still pick it up every now and then to read again. Matilda is another favourite, but I think anything Roald Dahl writes is good. Of course C.S. Lewis is brilliant too.
Hello THEonly, I have just read your poem, "Clear Sky."
The beauty of nature is something we unfortunately do forget and abuse.
NIce poem with a message.
There are a lot of mistakes in it , for instance, no capital letters, nt, should be not. With a little revising it should prove to be a really good poem.
Hello Rika, I have just read your poem, dedicated to your friend. It is so tragic when someone takes their own life. My brother did this, a long time ago now. We all learn to live with it, but never get over it.
I like the way you have described the names in each verse to help us to understand the poem.
Hello wordkraft, well this is amazing and you say it is actually true? I mean, I would not have minded just meeting them, especially Neil Sedaka, but you had a chance to almost kill them! lol
What an incredible story, so you have to have to have five stars. (If you will pardon the pun)
Hello Dathan, I just read your poem, "Thinking Out Loud." I imagine living with MS can be hard. This was written in 2000? I hope you are still coping well.
I like the lines, "I am here world and I'm on a quest, to let everyone know how we deal with MS." Those words show your courage and determination.
Hello express, I have just read your article about your Dads failing memory. It must be a very hard thing to live with,especially to see a parent lose their memory. I cannot imagine how hard it must have been for both you and your Mother. But you seemed to take a very positive approach to it.
Suggestions, I am not sure why you have so many fullstops between sentences. Example, " We both were. sleep. deprived."
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