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#2259390 by LightinMind
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More interested in the content of what you write than the style. Theological, political, historical, scientific, or experiential, or indeed anything that paints a vision of the future. A good grammar checker will tell you about spelling and commas.
Favorite Genres
Not entirely sure as I like most stuff. I prefer something with a soul rather than purely secular. But I like Sci-Fi, anything Christian, and also 'What-if' type speculations with plausible plots.
Least Favorite Genres
Anything that fails to look for a way out of the darkness. You can be dark, just don't wallow in it. Generally, I try to steer clear of Fantasy, and most Dark or Horror stories just make me laugh or grimace due to their ignorance of the dark side.
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I have really liked some of the heartwarming dramas I have read here particularly personal stories. Thought-provoking poems or stories are cool also though I am no expert on poetical forms.
Least Favorite Item Types
Anything that is just an affirmation of the dark side. I hate empty words. I always look for human intelligence. I try and avoid Fantasy and Horror where there is no metaphorical resonance or connection with real-world truth.
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I mainly review at random and just see what grabs my attention. I will usually skip stuff I do not like unless it gets me riled or if it is interesting for other reasons.
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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for the love theme.

Reader Experience

A mother looks back on her daughter's life. She was the twin that they did not know was there until she followed behind her brother into this world. She has always craved attention and sometimes found it in thew wrong places and doing the wrong things. She broke her marriage and now she is alone seemingly always on the brink of breakdown. Her mothers heart is stretched to the limit trying to keep up with her, near to seeing all feeling evaporate away in fact. Then suddenly she tells her mother that she loves her...


Commentary

The dynamics of parent and child fascinate me having children of my own. One of mine came into this world effortlessly, is low maintenance and always fun to be around when he comes out of his cave. The other requiring constant attention was a nightmare pregnancy for my wife and hardly slept for her first 3 years before finally settling down into more normal patterns. Now she also is a pleasure to be with and a source of fascinating conversation and creativity. It seems every child is different, they all have their phases their ups and downs but a parents love never really goes away however extremely it is tested. It is a wonderful moment when a child turns around to you and says 'I love you'. I could review the last 8 words you wrote or the other 496. Weighed in the balance it is those 8 that I remember and it seems also to you.

Moving and well written account, so thanks for sharing.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and thought it might give me some insight into the late arrival of the most recent Bond film: Tommorrow never dies...nah that was the old one: No Time to Die

Reader Experience

Hey this has got nothing to do with Bond, instead you suggest that the promise of that movie is just a euphemism that will never come. It is just a ghost a shadow a fabrication of a possible future, but actually completely dynamic. All that exists is the moment and what we do in the present. Tomorrows film may never come!

Commentary

This didactic musing reminds of a book I read once called the "Power of Now". Also of the teachings of the Buddha, that we should live in the moment and shed our delusions about the future and our chains to the past and the pains we experienced and experience. Both are not true in my view as promises do come true. My wife promised to marry me, she did, I promised to be faithful, I have been. I promised my boss to do some work, I did it. God promises me things which I trust for my future like salvation etc. A promise is only as good as the person who makes it and the rerendering of past and future in the shape of man's existential experience of the present is always doomed to failure, unless accompanied by Divine powers, resurrection abilities and a claim to the throne of God.

I did find an affirmation of the wisdom in what you said here however:

Those who work their land will have abundant food, but those who chase fantasies will have their fill of poverty. Prov 28:19

If that is what you meant then I agree. No offence was intended by this review, this was my honest reaction to your words. Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Our Daily Rain  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a reciprocal review.

Reader Experience

This was so England! The feeling of mist and water, sodden soil, the sound and sight of streams and rivers and green shrouded in grey. Yes not our green and pleasant land, our grey and pleasant England.


Commentary

Having emigrated to Germany descriptions like this tug at my heart strings. It is funny what you miss. The fertile soils of Southern England are continually watered although I understand London receives less net rainfall than Rome in a warmer klime. It is grey that English moan about when caught inside a pea souper but they sing about the greeness of the land. Yet now I miss even that greay. Your poem was perfect, your descriptions brought this to life.

Loved the last line which made me laugh:

Give us this day our daily rain,
and forgive us our umbrellas.

It rarely really rained in the UK, really tipped it down. Maybe the occasional thunder storm in Summer. I remember drizzle and spitting rain instead. People would always carry umbrellas though

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of 'The Incident'  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Received via random review and was hooked by the first line.

Reader Experience

A government experiment goes terribly wrong and a great many people completely disappear including Brenda Marsh's family. This is the interview by Agent Sully (nay Scully) and boss.


Commentary

The dialog was authentic and engaging from start to finish and you had me hooked. So this was excellent writing. But when I finished the story I got to thinking about the plot.

Government incompetence combined with access to cutting edge technologies is of course a terrible combination. The thesis here is that a tap of mechanical devices caused some kind of power surge that evaporated all human beings while leaving biological plant material still in the pot. Moreover Brenda survives with no obvious impairment. With a neutron bomb all biological material would be vaporized leaving the infrastructure in place, but this idea of only some survived does not fit any reasonable theories we have.

Also memory wiping technologies do not exist. If a government was that ruthless to test technology on its own people it would probably just shoot them if they were witnesses to their incompetence.

But my biggest question about the plot was why was the interview taking place at all. Brenda could not tell them anything they did not already know. They only pertinent info in her case is where she was when the incident happened. From that they could work out why she was not vaporized with her family by seeing what might have shielded her from the effect. But this question was never asked.

Anyway loved it even if I thought it slightly implausible. Thanks for sharing.


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Review of The Monsters Know  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed to battle the monsters

Reader Experience

A woman let's the monsters within tear her apart. When she asks where her mind and soul have gone the answer comes, it is the monsters that know.


Commentary

My reoccurring dream as a young boy was always about killing the monsters and setting some girl I loved free. When the monsters looked liked winning I usually end up forcing my own ending on the dream, so they never defeated me. Passivity in the face of monsters seems to be a mistake. Resist the devil and he will flee from you is the best advice. Invent new weaponry, tactics, and superpowers, to take them on in your imaginary battles and drive them from your mental spaces. It helps to think about another's well being over your own, to spend more time in the light and to focus on what is pure, noble, good and helpful.

So monsters probably do know what they did with what they stole, but it does not belong to them and can be reclaimed.

Monsters always draw maps with arrows that point to hell, so maybe their maps are no good.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Driving  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and was hooked by the driving test theme

Reader Experience

Jennifer majored in German literature and is looking for a job. Her mode of transport has always been a bike but most jobs are too far away and so she needs to get a driving license. Her friend Nolan and her have both failed this test 3 times. She appears to be an insomniac. The build up to her test begins 7am with her instructor Christine. But she is late sleeping and will not be rested for the test.


Commentary

Living in Germany, right now, I enjoy a great public transport system and rarely use my car. For long business trips I tend to use a train and for local travel I can use the UBahn or Bus or bike it. My first jobs I would cycle to work and my wife would use our car. Now we have two cars but I still use mine only for shopping, church and dump runs and trips to the seaside. What I am trying to communicate is the culture clash your words evoke with mine. Germans love their cars but are not beholden to a car culture. Americans seem to have to use a car to travel any kind of distance.

Regarding the story line Jennifer seems to have no clue when it comes to value of sleep, knowing how to relax and she does not seem like someone who is a natural driver. She may well be a menace on the roads if she ever does pass her test. Sleep deprivation is as big a killer than drunk driving.

It seems Jennifer's surname implies German roots and her interest in German literature and bicycles tie her more closely with the German culture than the American one in some ways.

You seem to use British rather than American spelling. Aside from that there were no obvious issues.

I found Jennifer a chaotic character that was setting herself up to fail but also someone who seemed out of place in an American car culture.

It was an interesting cultural foray, thanks for sharing.


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Review of Until It Sleeps  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by a Faustian bargain set to the tune of Metallica

Reader Experience

A holy man makes a Faustian bargain for the greater good, but now it is time to pay.

Commentary

Goethe did it before you. Trusting devils is a fools game and I have to wonder at the holy man's credentials at trying to force God's hand with a devils bargain, whatever the circumstances in which he thought he knew better. Is not the essence of evil, after all, thinking that we know better than God. The dimensions of the demon are exaggerated and swollen so that he becomes a superbeing gloating over his prey. This Holy Man still trusts in God and considers his sacrifice to have been for the good of others. That love motive may yet confound the demon but the holy man has placed himself in the worst of circumstances to test that hope.

Interesting story and well written, found one error here:

"And did I not delivery?" = "And did I not deliver?"

Thanks for sharing


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the theme

Reader Experience

Seekers glimpse the future before it happens and can change it. As Sarah comes of age at 16 she inherits her powers and a mirror in which she can see these visions. But acquiring the powers is only the first step, mastering them is also required and knowing that she is in control. She learns how to rebuke evil and to make the evil go away.


Commentary

A mix of prophet and prayer warrior, resisting the devil and causing him to flee, a seeker seems like a policeman of the timeline, keeping it as pure as possible. Why these powers are given, who gives them and why to this family and bloodline is not explained in the story. Why a mirror, in which you usually see yourself or those that stand with you, should be associated with this power is also not explained. But I guess images in a mirror are echoes of reality much as visions of what might be can also be. How a 4D insight into a 3D reality is managed would require brain extensions most of us do not have. I wonder if there is a stress and overheating associated with this gift or is there a genetic modification, natural or designed in the background here that makes this possible?

I do not know how Sarah keeps her moral compass set? There are no scriptures to guide here, just the inherited wisdom and experience of those who have been before her. If there is one of her, maybe there are many. Is she special because of this power and whom does it serve?

I liked the story, there are no obvious errors stylistically. YOur piece raises a lot of questions and was a stimulating read.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of BLACK CROW  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and have liked your writing a lot in most past reviews.

Reader Experience

The poem talks about a black crow becoming a black man but compares the hearts of men and crows to suggest that man's deeds are dark while those of the crow would be pure


Commentary

The whole black- white / good-evil matrix is a difficult one in a color sensitive age with BLM and race so high on the agenda. I guess you wrote this in a different country and a different time. You have written some fabulous poems on this site which I have reviewed. But this was not one of your better ones. The language was a little difficult on the tongue and did not flow, for example:

This does not you bother.
Do deeds blacker, all know

That said it was quite remarkable how you kept the syllable count discipline throughout the poem.

Not sure why you chose a crow, it is associated with carrion in Europe. Not really a paragon of virtue by any means.

Thanks for your poem.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a Raid review.

Reader Experience

The only boy with a girlfriend in the last year of Junior High holds hands with Cynthia his girlfriend while skating in the public skating area. They receive all the jokes from his mates as needing to hold hands to stay up, even though half of them needed their hockey sticks as props to prevent them falling over themselves. Then Cynthia performs an ice dance maneuver that has them all reevaluating their priorities

Commentary

A skillfully executed 3 word contest combined with real life experience makes a good and engaging story here. Think it is the authenticity of the style that really makes it work.

The story is of one of those coming of age milestones when boys suddenly discover that there is something more than ice hockey and each others company. Cynthia shows the boys what feminine grace looks like on ice and suddenly the boys are staring over at a brand new world they want to visit.

It is a very polished piece and I did not find any obvious errors. Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Poor Twisted Me  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a Raid review. Winter fun meets depression head on!

Reader Experience

This is dark, toxic wallowing depression feeding off the good and the bright and the hopeful and casting everything into shadows

Commentary

Simple remedy: snowball down the back of your shirt. You'll be too angry to be depressed. Leave you on top of a snowy mountain to make your own way home in the middle of the night. You'll be too scared to be depressed. Or leave a person you love on top of same Wintry mountain for you to rescue. Love, fear and anger are all stronger than depression. So hopefully you are angry enough now to climb out of the toxic twilight zone you described and read my review.

So depression chews on suffering BUT also "the thoughts you love most". I was unclear on its dietary plans. If it eats nice thoughts to generate bad ones then surely it does not eat the bad ones or they would not remain. If it feeds only on the bad stuff then does it actually eat the good ones.

You mentioned a play on building a person up to crash them down harder. Then depression got greedy and desperate and so it is not really feeding as well now as when it started. So for the sake of a really good wallow, later on sounds, like you need to build a snowman and find your sled, have a load of fun, and then just let the black cloud of torment and misery go to work later *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your thoughts.


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Review of Snow Thoughts  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a Raid review.

Reader Experience

A tale of two places: Michigan and Texas, and two age groups: 5 and 50, and how they experience snow.


Commentary

Interesting way to categorize and then explore the experience. Contrasting warmth and cold, the spectator of a pretty scene and the active participant in Winter fun. One finds that the experience of the long Winter Cold helps her value the warmth of Spring and Summer and the other that the occasional trip North to experience Winter cold makes her value her home in the warm south.In the case of the 50 year Southern Gal the symmetry was spoilt by her previous Northern history and experience.

I was interested in the association of the arrival of the first snows with cooking cookies and hot cocoa. A sort of sense memory of the experience of snow that makes it feel better and more homey.

Thanks for sharing

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Review of Ice  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a Raid Review

Reader Experience

A sudden freeze leaves Irene and Brynn heading for home in dangerous conditions. Irene sees something in the partially frozen river, Brynn is concerned for her safety and holding her hand. Irene confirms she saw a flower which had been rapidly frozen in the ice. Irene, much to Brynn's horror, makes her way to the waters edge and uses a stone to hammer the ice convinced someone is under the ice. Brynn reluctantly helps out and using a branch retrieves a red stripy glove. Now they can go home.

Commentary

The sequence of flower - dead body possibility - then stripy glove made for a good melodrama. I have had my fair experience of icebergs on the river, frozen lakes, blizzards, snow drifts and black ice. So the feeling of danger in the background of this story was a nice touch to which the two characters respond one in a more cowardly way and then practically dragged along by the other and the other more heroically. I felt the gender roles were reversed here with Brynn as the scared one who just wanted back in his comfy zone and Irene as the adventurous one taking risks. But maybe those gender stereotypes do not really work here. That said Brynn is usually a girl's name, but here it is used in a male form. He calls Irene his girlfriend, so "incredulous at the risks the girl was taking" sounds a little impersonal.

Liked the story, thanks for sharing.


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Review of Cheese Puffs  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Received via random review and stayed for the romance

Reader Experience

Angie, a nurse, and Drew, a gentleman hockey player, are brought together by the man from coffee heaven where they both hung out but never quite seemed to meet. They instantly click and the cheese puff care package and shared loved of coffee heaven definitely helped


Commentary

Hockey players are brute monsters particularly ones that score. But guess there might be an exception to that. Guess that she can patch him after his next fight though, being a nurse in an ER. Loved the story , which was loaded with chemistry and uplifting, and have just realized this is going to be a fluff review, with a 5 star rating, because I have nothing negative or critical to say about it.

Thanks for sharing


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Review of Rebound  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for the story

Reader Experience

Charles promised Julie Paris in law school but never got round to it as he developed his lawyer career. She dumped him and went to Paris by herself. He followed, got knocked off his stool in the Hotel bar and now they are back together.

Commentary

It seems you had to get the three words: mask, horn and sand into the text. The story is flash fiction so there is only so much you can say. This is love v career choice story where the King chooses to abdicate for a day or two to go collect his American bride. The last part is a little ambiguous

""Charles, you have no idea how much I prayed this would happen," Julie screamed, as she knocked me off my stool.

Everyone in the room applauded, as we picked ourselves up."

Did she have to scream, couldn't she have exclaimed or gasped or something? Was that like a rugby tackle, did she take out the legs, did she whack him one. They end up together but did she break his back when she landed on top of him? Just asking, because was not clear.

Anyway enjoyed the story, thanks for sharing.

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Review of Little Chubby  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the underlying philosophical musings here.

Reader Experience

Ingrid is talking to Little Chubby a once beautiful, colorfully decorated and beloved Christmas tree which is now being thrown out and is mournfully contemplating the meaning of its life. Ingrid says you had your moment but all things change and that love is not forever. Some how the tree stands a little taller just before the moment of its death.


Commentary

OK this has to be a metaphor cause Christmas trees do not have consciousness, cannot think and do not have the capacity to mourn their temporary existences. Children may invest part of their humanity in the glittering lights and image of a tree on Christmas Day but they quickly forget that tree once Christmas passes cause there is no person there to remember.

Taken as a metaphor this really does not work cause love does last forever and there is meaning to our lives and in essence that is the message of Christmas. That even the least of us, the poorest and most oppressed can have hope in that something more, because the love of God assures us that is so. Jesus came as a child, He entered our world, to prove that love, ultimately on a cross, by which our broken hearts could be healed and love experienced in its fullness, rather than just glimpsed, as now.

So I would reject this metaphor as nihilistic/pantheistic and not the sort of message you share with someone who just lost his job and is feeling redundant, his marriage and is feeling unloved or someone he loved to tragedy and is wondering if their love will endure beyond the grave and if he will ever see them again.

To man who just lost his job I would say, God has new plans for you in this life or the next, no situation is hopeless and try and look at this from the perspective of eternity

To the man who just lost the woman he loved to tragedy or via divorce I would say there is a deeper love that endures for eternity

Thanks for sharing. I guess your story was quite stimulating and stylistic professional.Look at all the thoughts and words it has generated. I just radically disagree with it as a simple story about a Christmas tree or more profoundly as a metaphor about life the universe and everything.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed because today's theme seems to be strange creatures.

Reader Experience

A man, maybe Max, wakes with two people besides him: Mya who looks like a fox and Elder Andrake who looks like an owl. They decide to bite him because they cannot heal him. Biting him will transform him and help heal him. Then Mya bites him.

Commentary

Obviously a lot of unanswered questions in just this chapter alone. Where did he come from, how did he get there, how was he wounded, why are the creatures different in appearance. Why do the humans tend to join the monsters in fighting against these creatures? But despite humans generally being hostile to them these creatures decide to help him , to heal by transformation. Transformation into what remains to be seen.

A few minor errors in the text:

Consciousness does not need a capital C.

taking in first line is probably talking.

Thanks for sharing

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed because my daughter loves mermaid stories

Reader Experience

Story of mermaids romantically engaged on the beach who missed the tide and got stranded overnight. A car comes and puts them in the back and drops them off in a building where experiments are done on them. People do not believe they are real. While we being transported in a truck there was an accident and they fell into the ocean. They are revived in the water and rescue the two truck drivers before swimming away into the freedom of the ocean.

Commentary

My daughter love Mako and H2O type mermaid series but these have the flexibility of having legs on land and can blend in with the rest of us. Who knows if these creatures exist. In the modern age it would be pretty hard to conceal oneself from all the surveillance technologies available and mankind is more and more intrusive in the oceans, so the probability is minimal but that does not stop people dreaming about these creatures who bring humanity and drama to the oceans, who swim in the vast blue spaces and interact with the abundance of creatures in the oceans. Most of us just stand on the seashore , swim at most 50 meters from the shore, or take a sail boat out a little further. But the ocean itself remains mysterious, miles deep and even the submarines of the worlds navies have only really just begun to explore it and understand it.

Loved your poem, its rhythm and rhyme but the story of how they got trapped in the first place seemed implausible to me given the physical discomfort of being separated from water for too long.

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Review of House Fly  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and stayed because I hate flies.

Reader Experience

Oh you describe all too vividly the fly floating in the air, probably infested with myriad diseases coming to rest on the lip of a cup.

Commentary

When I get to heaven the question as to why God invented flies and mosquitoes will be high on the list. That irritating buzzing sound they make keeping me awake at night or distracting my work. I kill these without mercy. The common house fly is a disease carrier also: shigellosis, typhoid fever, E. coli, and cholera are all on the list of stuff it spreads. So preach it sister, let us raise up an army of fly swatting, fly hating crusaders to purge the earth of this evil. Actually only half joking about thhat last part - I really do not like flies.

Thanks for a beautifully written poem that managed to evoke my full disgust of flies and get me reaching for the fly swatter in an empty room.

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Review of Heading Home  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and was hooked by first stanza

Reader Experience

I love American country music. It tells a story about something that matters to a tune that person can usually sing a long to. Here we have a veteran from some war being brought home in a casket on that last train to be buried by a proud but grieving family and community. Loved it!


Commentary

You already have rave reviews for this one and mine is no different. Truly superb and moving poem.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed because it is a matter of some concern

Reader Experience

The author describes the hazards and risks of poor waste management

Commentary

In the EU there are already strict laws relating to the issues described so I can only imagine the author is writing in less developed circumstances. For electronic goods the RoHS directive restricts hazardous substances being used in production of products, WEEE helps the recycling effort and ElectroG involves the manufacturer with that. For general waste incineration there is the The Waste Incineration Directive which is comprehensive. Developed European economies have strict rules and standards relating to human waste disposal. Medical waste is partly covered by general waste disposal directives but may require more focused thought.

Globally it is clear that much remains to be done and incidents like the Bopal disaster in India, the poisonous air in Beijing due to pollution and coal fire burning all need sorting out. Whether a global policy is possible is doubtful but international pressure can clearly be brought to make environmentally friendly policies happen. With the new administration of Joe Biden this is now going to be a priority in the USA but China for all its rhetoric remains light years away from a coherent policy as yet.

Thanks for your thought provoking article

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Review of Razor-blade  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Received this via random review and was hooked by your cutting edge language *Wink*

Reader Experience

An intriguing yet terrifying expose of what a razor blade can do. Me thinks he does love his blade too much.

Commentary

Descriptively powerful from a master wordsmith, the language pulls us in to experience the blades cut and movement. I found this deeply disturbing you made me afraid of a blade I cannot even see, of what it can do. Not sure I even understand what you wrote, but it was hypnotic and then there was blood.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for the drama

Reader Experience

A very dark and brutal letter from Abraham on behalf of shadowy criminal underworld to his intended kidnap victim and prey Betty Higgensbee. No reason is given for why she will be taken and the promise of brokenness given nor why a picture of her husband, taken the month before, is attached. Dark Stuff!

Commentary

Someone who takes so much pleasure in inflicting physical and psychological pain on another has all the right qualifications to work in elite organisations like the KGB, Stasi, Gestapo or Saudi Royal family. There is nothing redeeming in this text, no glimmer of hope. One wonders what brought on this burst of negativity and extreme darkness. But it was well written, now how do I get out of this mental prison you created for me. Ah click, click....

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Review of Crystalline  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this poem via the Raid list and thought I would check it out.

Reader Experience

Exquisite description of the experience of snow falling under a midnight, midwinter moon

Commentary

Loved the language and the descriptive power. The poem was free verse but sometimes rhymed which I found a little off-putting.

Thanks for this.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the imagery

Reader Experience

The poem describes someone on the edge of a black hole desperately struggling to preserve their existence from being sucked in and destroyed. But with a little faith we can believe that such self destruction is not the end and that our souls will be reborn

Commentary

In all the Star Trek movies, the ship always somehow breaks free of the Black hole, or even rescues the ship that cannot. A Christian take is less that you just surrender to events, but rather that you do everything you can and if you fail then you are still at peace because of your faith in the after life. In practice the forces at work in a black hole would most likely rip you apart before depositing your pieces light years away. Faith takes me to heaven but I think the gravity well of a Black Hole is just brutal. Even so if you are caught by the event horizon of a black hole there is actually nothing to fear for a person of faith who believes in resurrection from the dead. Not sure that reincarnation really qualifies as grounds for faith in this situation however.

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