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More interested in the content of what you write than the style. Theological, political, historical, scientific, or experiential, or indeed anything that paints a vision of the future. A good grammar checker will tell you about spelling and commas.
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Not entirely sure as I like most stuff. I prefer something with a soul rather than purely secular. But I like Sci-Fi, anything Christian, and also 'What-if' type speculations with plausible plots.
Least Favorite Genres
Anything that fails to look for a way out of the darkness. You can be dark, just don't wallow in it. Generally, I try to steer clear of Fantasy, and most Dark or Horror stories just make me laugh or grimace due to their ignorance of the dark side.
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I have really liked some of the heartwarming dramas I have read here particularly personal stories. Thought-provoking poems or stories are cool also though I am no expert on poetical forms.
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Anything that is just an affirmation of the dark side. I hate empty words. I always look for human intelligence. I try and avoid Fantasy and Horror where there is no metaphorical resonance or connection with real-world truth.
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I mainly review at random and just see what grabs my attention. I will usually skip stuff I do not like unless it gets me riled or if it is interesting for other reasons.
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Review of Gilda Locksley  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a reciprocal review

Reader Experience

A modern take on the Goldilocks and Three Bears fairy tale. A young woman inherits a cabin in the forest, has a party, and learns how trash management works with bears around.


Commentary

This made me laugh and was well written. In such a wild place maybe she also needs a gun as well as a metal bin with a lock. Personally, I live on the edge of a big city and can always choose between the two. But there are few wolves and bears in Europe today. The experience of the truly wild is something that is lost to most of us yet because rare it is very interesting.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of birthday cake  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Received this via random review and was pleasantly surprised to find a diamond in a coal mine.

Reader Experience

A little six-year-old girl on the brink of sugary, culinary pleasures

Commentary

This was charming and contained some exquisite and evocative descriptions that had me salivating for that cake.

It must be hard to have to think about the consequences of eating something sugary and measuring insulin. I started to have to fight for my weight around 5 years ago. Giving up chocolate did not seem an attractive option so now I run 8 miles every two days and do an hour of weights and workout the alternate day. Actually, I enjoy the exercise which is stress-relieving also.

Thanks for sharing this gem 8 years ago.

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Review of Frozen  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and thought it expressed the morning perfectly

Reader Experience

There is a frost on the grass, but the sun is out with the promise of the warmth of the day to come.

Commentary

A good poem to wake up to. Minds may be full of nonsense and clouded with unscheduled responsibilities but then the sun comes out and the timetables get built, the schedules are planned and the tasks sequenced. It is going to be a bright, bright sunny day and I may go for a run when my chores are finished.

Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Thankful  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for a great poem

Reader Experience

A man remembers his departed mother's wisdom, prayers, example, and presence with thankfulness.


Commentary

This brilliant poem was skillfully written. As a parent, I have to hope my own children remember me affectionately when my time comes. I think I will feel this way about my parents when they go. One line made me think though

"lay flowers on her grave"

I have to cross the English channel to lay flowers on the graves of those I love. Suddenly it seemed far away.

Thanks for sharing



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Review of Could Be Serious  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the question of what makes poetry important to the poet

Reader Experience

There are a host of reasons why poets write and they sacrifice lesser things to create their poems, like housework for instance.


Commentary

I had to smile at the sentiment here. I wrote a poem this morning for a contest and now plan to do my daily 5 reviews. But looking around at the house it is a mess and my wife is out today. So when I finish this I have to get up and start cleaning. Which is a major incentive to just sit here and keep waffling on ostensibly in response to your poem *Wink*

I used to write to express feelings that otherwise never quite got articulated or were only clumsily expressed. At one point I thought I might be able to pull women with poetry, but many of my early efforts were clumsy and probably caused me more problems than benefits gained. I did not understand the mind of my reader nor how they would understand my words. Brought up in a bible culture I thought the Song of Solomon was the bee's knees of love poetry and did not understand when a woman brought up on pop songs and modern film romances just laughed and thought me strange for sharing such verses with her. Some kind of balance between self-expression and connection is probably the essence of good poetry. Or as you suggest it might be people who lack the ability to do good REM sleep and need to write those nuances of feeling and unprocessed experience into a poetical form to make sense of each day. Why oh why though do we take the open mic and broadcast our deepest feelings and reflections to anyone who will listen. Maybe because we believe they are worth hearing and sharing. Do we return others the favor and listen to their poems also, trying to understand how they think and feel and see our world. It is in such sharing that community is born and understanding across the bubbles of our existence.

Thanks for sharing


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for a poem about beauty

Reader Experience

A man contemplates a woman and considers her beautiful. He wonders if she knows how beautiful she is.


Commentary

Your poem reminded me of my wife and my daughter. Both are beautiful in my eyes and more deeply at a soul level also. It is not just skin-deep prettiness that makes a woman beautiful it is a spiritual thing that transforms the ordinary into the magical, the plain into the exceptional. It is like a light, an aura that decorates a woman's form with a transcendent glory. I do not see this in every woman. But I see it in my wife and my daughter and even my mother. It is a thing that is not bound by time, by the curves and perfect skin of youth, nor fine clothes and careful make-up. It is something eternal and linked with the Divine that animates the human spirit. It is the view of a woman in worship full of the Divine presence, it is the gentleness of wise words and loving actions, it is the soothing calming presence of a woman at peace with herself and the universe.

We limit our ideas of beauty to the sexual in the modern age and women are sexually attractive, far more so than men. But a woman's beauty is also far more than that.

I liked your poem and am thankful for the energizing opportunity to think about women and beauty over coffee this morning.

I liked this line

Does she know?
Yes, I think so,
My heart and soul just told her so.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for a surreal experience

The first few lines made me think that there was a creature inside the person. So I was waiting for some kind of alien experience when it bursts out. Then I thought it might be a woman with a baby inside. Then I looked at your portfolio and thought you might be talking about a demon.

The last two lines did not really make sense and were a bit of a disappointment.

Give me something to wet your shirt over
And some other way for us to this sober

No idea what that might mean. Were you drunk when you wrote it, overcome with grief, hence the tears reference? Anyway, it started well, albeit a little terrifying. Of course, I might have completely misread this.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for a tour of the Grand Canyon

Reader Experience

Describes some of the best viewing places in the Grand Canyon


Commentary

Liked your vivid descriptions that made memories come alive. It was succinct and enough to take me there and experience the moments.

Thanks for sharing


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Review of Equilibrium  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Reader Experience

Light and darkness portrayed as cosmic brothers in perpetual conflict. The one providing hope, resurrection, healing, and salvation the other overwhelming, blinding, terrifying and draining. The author suggests the two cannot exist without each other and that we are engaged in some kind of balancing act between them within and without.


Commentary

Very Manichean and as such have to disagree. Like Augustine, I seek darkness as an absence rather than a real force in itself. Fear is love gone bad or spoilt. Blindness is the absence of seeing, being overwhelmed is the loss of perfect harmony with God and creation. Darkness drains because it is empty. The fight is not an equal one, the good guys win and Light expels the darkness. There are no shadows that demons can hide from God in.

But you have a flawless writing style and 44 people have already given you 5 stars for this. But since your piece is tainted by the darkness it embraces as a brother I can only give you 4.5. To give you 5 would be to affirm a heresy and a lack of perfect understanding. The one brother is real and the other just a ghost who can harm only for a season.

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Review of Poem Emerald  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and smelt a Buddhist theme here

Reader Experience

What we hang on too tightly drips slowly through our fingers. In every deed are the temptations of the dark side of suffering and disappointment. A whisper is heard to break one's hold and let the moment pass.

Commentary

Dhamma is central to Buddhism and means to uphold, in the sense of upholding the teachings attributed to the Buddha. The central teaching being about overcoming dissatisfaction or suffering (dukkha).

So this poem seems to me to misuse the word dhamma as it is something enduring at the heart of Buddhism and is the response to situations of pain and disappointment. Unless that is it is a criticism of Buddhism. So the meaning here is not clear and while intriguing it seems to make no sense in fact.

Thanks for sharing


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Review of The Table  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and was intrigued

Reader Experience

Appears to be set in a restaurant. A man at one table eats alone but watches a couple's amorous interaction, kissing without touching on another table. This evokes memories of romantic ghosts. Then finally the moment passes and there is only the debris of dinner to mark its passing.


Commentary

What some call voyeurism others call the networked reality of our humanity. A couple's happiness evokes memories of our own romance and will be the center of attention in a crowded restaurant for a man alone.

I liked this verse:

Their eyes
Smile and laugh.
Their lips
Speak quiet intimacies
Kiss without touching.

Thanks for sharing

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Review of Ides of March  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and was hooked from the start

Reader Experience

Natalie may have only been a school kid but her notebook contains secrets that will change the world. Secrets she was killed for. Her friend Miss Green and Daniel, from the rough end of town, have the notebook and the school principal, in cahoots with the dark side of the Federal government, fails to find it on her. With Daniel, she plots how to publicize the information. She is almost killed but Daniel rescues her shooting her assailant dead. They manage to get to CNN and read out the contents on live TV. They are shot dead while doing so by Officer Pire. But it is too late and their sacrifice brings down the administration.


Commentary

Very well written, you have to wonder what was in that notebook. There was a puzzling reference at the beginning to redheads being arrested for the good of the people. Did they think the person with the notebook was a redhead or was the government conspiracy against redheads? You had a few themes common to American teen dramas like a partnership between a girl from a nice area with a boy from the black stuff. Of authority being suspicious and compromised and of parents being slightly dysfunctional in their responses. Why the school principal was in cahoots with the Federal government was a little mysterious. Even highly decorated veterans and police officers do not walk around with a full chest of medals, or did you mean ribbons, or did Officer Pire just dress up for what he must have known was his swansong. He killed the youths on-air, on CNN. You'd have thought someone that close to the president would have chosen a better time and would have had more street smarts than that.

Interesting story, thanks for sharing


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Review of Bad Dream  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for a crazy dream

Reader Experience

There is a dream about talking dolls looking for the phone. There is waking to phone calls about trips around the world and the mailman delivers the same. Crawling back into bed and finding oneself on an idyllic island beach with a man asking for the bagels and on his way to work.


Commentary

This is really crazy and quite surreal. There is a travel theme here which is understandable during a lockdown in a pandemic. There is an insistent and persistent theme, from dolls, phonecalls, and mailmen that you should be traveling to some exotic location. Then on arrival, there is the humdrum request for bagels on the way to work. Could a dream get more disjointed? Yet it was engaging from start to finish and now the fragments have a life of their own in my head. I am going to have to do some more reviews to get the pictures to fade and that black eyed voodoo doll to stop staring at me.

Liked this, it was well written and engaging, thanks for sharing.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (1.0)
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Reader Experience

The author thinks bitterness is enlightening and that love should always be attacked. The pleasure of the bitter is to destroy health and happiness.


Commentary

Not sure why the author considers this wise. It seems more the definition of foolishness to be so eaten up by the poison of bitterness that you lash out at your every chance for healing and happiness. Is it enlightened to debunk love or just deranged. Like pouring acid on the most beautiful face bitterness spoils, poisons, and destroys.

This was not wise. But it was provocative. For the second reason, I thank you for sharing.

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Review of Beauty Is ...  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and you mentioned programming

Reader Experience

A coded line has the potential to unlock a world of beauty. We find beauty in natures complexity and also as a result of our minds quest for it.


Commentary

Not sure but were you talking about the computer language Quest here, a sort of mish-mash of javascript, XML, C#, and VB. If so that makes some sense as you could create adventure games with this, some of sweet beauty and others of sour ugliness.

There is something beautiful about finished code. Human beings are far more complex and our DNA is coding par excellence. The coding of the natural world is beyond human intelligence and even of the most powerful AIs. The line between beauty and awe is blurred in fact when I consider that code.

Liked your poem which was well written. Also, the content was inspiring so beautiful!

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You helped me out recently with a review and some emails. So I came to your portfolio to look around and this was something that caught my eye.

Reader Experience

The author discusses absolute truth in science and religion. What can we really know about our beginnings?

Commentary

We had a discussion about idolatry in church on Sunday. When you paint a picture that gets in the way of seeing God then in a sense you create an idol. Sometimes our theories and frameworks are essentially just one big complex picture of reality that may or may not be true. I have often wondered if notions of "Objectivity" and "Absolute Truth" often stray away from actual Judaeo Christian understandings of what Truth is. After all fundamentally the Truth is personal. When Christians believe they essentially put their trust in a personal God. Indeed personality is built into the nature of God, who is three persons, yet One God. The eternal dance of the Trinity involves Persons interacting and relating and exhibiting a perfect love for each other. It is clear from scripture that God created. We have clues about the how in the bible but they are not always clear. The essential message therefrom God is I did it, trust me.
The three big scientific myths of our age are - Big Bang; abiogenesis; and evolution. None of these are actually provable by the scientific method itself and indeed the empirical evidence entirely contradicts the notion of chemical evolution for instance. So it would be a mistake to speak of them with the same certainty that we can speak of facts. They are in effect models or pictures that we have given certainty to. In some respects for those who give just a little more credence than is warranted they have become idols. Similarly, a great many people have fixed understandings of what scriptures say that contradict the basic creeds of Nicea and Chalcedon and yet which they assert as absolute truths. So I guess even Christians can be idolaters.

When I think of the Truth I think of Jesus. Because I think the incarnate Christ really models truth and what it means in practice to the limits we, as humans can actually grasp it. Truth is therefore fundamentally a matter of trust. If I asked Jesus, as an apostle how long a table was, I think he would have gotten out some kind of Carpenters measuring device and told me precisely how long it was. If I asked Jesus about God He could speak from personal experience and without the filters of sin and distraction about who God was. So fundamentally I trust someone who can give me honest answers, whose whole life is lived in the Light, and who models truth in everything they say and do. It is not really that abstract at all to someone who has always been there. Ask Him about Creation and He will say all things were created through Him. Simple really, the real question is why so many people cannot hang loose on the details.

Thanks for your text which inspired all this verbiage. You might want to check some of the sentences for example:

Why ask questions with the intention only express the answer in terms of faith - Why ask questions with the intention of only expressing the answer in terms of faith?

Thanks for sharing.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for a good story

Reader Experience

Aiden is autistic and hates being touched and has a precise measured way of doing things. He does not really enjoy social contact and reacts strongly when he is touched by Sue on the stairs. Proceeding with his overdue lunchbreak he discovers Ellen gagging and immediately calls 911. Later it transpires that Ellen has ingested lemon juice to which she is highly allergic. The story works through the evidence and finds the real criminal in the mix. He has therefore saved Ellens's life but she knows better than to grab him on the stairs by way of thank you.


Commentary

This was a really good and engaging short story. I was gripped from start to finish and enjoyed the twists and turns of the plot. Aiden is an attractive character and reminded me of the good doctor series on TV.

Found one small error here:

relieved that one else there = relieved that no one else was there

Thanks for sharing.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Received this via random review and stayed to object

Reader Experience

Youth rules and are better than oldies and middle-aged people because they can eat what they like, are fitter and more creative.

Commentary

I was a lot faster in my youth, some 20-25% in fact. I know precisely because I never stopped exercising. In my youth, I always compared myself against elite athletes who would run rings around me but I was always in that top fittest 10%. Now I look at youth who play fewer sports, do more gaming, or just lounge around with their mobiles, and hardly ever go outside and I know that I am fitter than all but that top 10% of them. In fact, youth is no guarantee of fitness. They could become fitter than me because they are younger but most cannot be bothered.

Regarding creativity, you need to have read widely, lived a lot, and experienced real pain before you can really write anything interesting. Youth are shallow and mainly uninspired repeating the works or sentiments of those who came before them. Sometimes they say original things but mainly it has all been said before. Definitely think oldies have the edge there.

Regarding eating whatever you like youth has a natural advantage but a lack of exercise mainly neutralizes it. I mainly eat whatever I like but then I have to go for an 8 mile run every two days to compensate. Most young people I know cannot even run 8 miles and many of them are getting quite fat because they eat without that exercise program.

So absolutely disagree with the content here.

Also, the language was a little strange and did not sound English in its syntax and word choice even though it survives a basic grammar checker.

Thanks for sharing and please reconsider the place of oldies in your life. Youth is not always better.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for a good poem

Reader Experience

A man cannot believe his luck when a hot beautiful hitchhiker joins him to ride shotgun.
He tries to seduce her with a lie but this woman is no dumb blonde.

Commentary

Well written with a hilarious ending, felt justice was done here given his deceit and intent. But should I really empathize with the car thief? - not sure about that. A world of motels and long-distance traveling seems quite remote right now with the lockdown but poems like this help keep the travel spirit alive and make me realize I actually miss it to some extent.

Thanks for sharing.



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Review of ArE yOu ReAdY???  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for the poetical self-reflection

Reader Experience

She wonders if he could handle her inner pain and darkness. She wonders if he would understand it and whether or not she should let him in. Would he care about her tears?


Commentary

Having had times of wallowing in my own life I have developed what I now regard as a healthy aversion to hanging on to darkness and pain as if it were a cherished measure of identity. Better to define one's life in terms of its joys, loved moments, and hopes. I am completely intolerant of self-pity and depressive thoughts in myself. This probably makes me the wrong person to commentate on your poem as I lack the pastoral compassion to bring you gently into the light and to let go of the stuff that does not matter to embrace stuff that does. Also, I think it is different for a man and woman. Feelings however dark and painful are more often confused with identity in women. That is probably a controversial thing to say but someone could simply say to me something like "Get real!" or "pull yourself together" and that would do the trick. But this same philosophy does not work on my wife or my daughter or indeed my brother - so go figure maybe I should learn to appreciate people's wallowing after all and have lost something in my own genocide of darkness. After all, sometimes love and hate, pain and pleasure are intertwined and you cannot eliminate the one without harming the other. Sort of like pulling up weeds in a flower garden

Thanks for your poem which I obviously found quite inspiring given all this verbiage.


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Review of Writing In Images  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and was fascinated by the theme.

Reader Experience

The writer's words are experienced by the reader as imagery. The best writers produce the best light, color, sensation, and emotion in their readers.


Commentary

My favorite reads growing up were the bible books of Joshua and then the books of the Judges and Kings for their battles and the Lord of the Rings for its vivid imagery. When you read books like this there is a sense in which you live them and actually experience them. You are there in the battles, you are the hero that saves Middle Earth or conquers Israel. By contrast, Leviticus in the bible had to have been the worst book for me growing up. Loads of rules and minutiae that send me to sleep. Now I find it quite fascinating because I have new ways to read it and new questions about the text. How we paint our pictures, the emotions we generate, the sensations we evoke, and the colors that form in the reader's mind are not completely in our control. It remains mysterious why one writer's words resonate and those of another do not. You can show examples of books that worked but even these worked for some groups and not others. Books that were loved in another age now lie dusty and neglected in second-hand antiquarian book shops and libraries. Even within families, I hate Harry Potter and my daughter loves it.

Interesting article thanks for sharing.

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Review of Radiations  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Reader Experience

The author discusses ionized and non-ionized radiation


Commentary

It has been a while since I opened a physics book and I had forgotten how interesting it could be. Thanks for differentiating the two kinds of radiation for me. We live in an electromagnetic age and just looking around my house, every plug is used with some gadget plugged into it. I guess our bodies are awash from all these particles/waves passing through us. Some taking parts of us with them or changing our configuration and others just passing through. If they did find out that all this stuff that so many people make so much money from was actually killing us I wonder how easily this information would come out.

My Grammarly application goes hey wire on your text underlining loads of stuff in red. You might want to check out the application which would help with the grammar here.

Thanks for sharing

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Review of The Greedy King  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Reader Experience

A greedy king gets the just reward for his greed when his treasure drove crushes him


Commentary

Greed is good was the slogan of the Wolf of Wall Street and other kindred spirits. While the rich grow richer the poor grow poorer as wealth passes away from their hands and into those who do not need it and uselessly hoard it. Your poem was for children but it speaks more widely also.

I loved the image of the gigantic box which he filled with a lifetime of greed and exploitation of his subjects. Even better was when the castle floor, which clearly he had not spent enough on maintaining, broke and the box of his treasure crushed him. It was a fitting end to the man.

The next King gives away all the accumulated wealth leaving the ruin as a monument to the king's folly.

As the bible says,

“But God said to him, ‘You fool! This very night your life will be demanded from you. Then who will get what you have prepared for yourself?’

21 “This is how it will be with whoever stores up things for themselves but is not rich toward God.”
Luke 12:13-21

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Reader Experience

Anti-scientific thinking is a growing problem. This piece asks what can be done to encourage people to appreciate science. It gives examples of toys, visually pleasing experiments, and obvious benefits in day-to-day life as a starting point for educating people as to the value of science.


Commentary

In an age where empirical fact denial, relating to elections and global pandemics, is becoming a pandemic of its own it is a fair question.

The obvious benefits of science do need to be asserted and there is a crisis in many schools relating to scientific education and its valuation. This piece offered useful ways to overcome this issue. But I think part of the issue here is the overextension of science into realms where its commentary is not authoritative or sometimes even helpful. For example into the realms of human nature or experience in which scientific language is inadequate. For example that of love and romance. Science overextends itself when it discusses religion except when definite scientific claims are being made. Origin stories at distances of billions of years are purely speculative but asserted with a degree of unwarranted certainty. Remote cosmology is sabotaged by the insight that 95% of the universe does not give off an electromagnetic signature at all.

As well as overreaching relating to scope those who fund the scientists have started to manipulate their conclusions and to misuse facts by incorporating them into their own narratives and obsessions. It does not fit the agenda of oil companies to talk about global warming nor that of coal miners. Car manufacturers manipulate the parameters of their fume testing so that they pass closely defined scientific tests making a mockery of the validity of these tests. Politicians do not like the results of an election and so immediately suggest that machines have been programmed with biases, that the software has been hacked, and that the objectivity of a result can be questioned. Even paper recounts and exhaustive checks do not change the minds of those who do not want the result that is actually scientifically true.

Thanks for sharing an engaging and interesting piece.



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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Reader Experience

Grandma Katt, who died 23 years ago, appears in physical form and shares pancakes with her granddaughter Sara. She informs her that she is a Mind Seer and reminds her of an example from her childhood when her gift manifested.


Commentary

This was well written and engaging. Grandma comes, in a warm and familiar form. She cooks pancakes and shares a cup of tea with her granddaughter. She opens up her mind to the gift she had had since childhood.

So her gift appears to be an advanced discernment of another's thoughts and feelings, to the point that she can actually manipulate what it is that they think they see. So in effect, she can deceive people with a sort of hypnotism. This should have manifested in her successes in life by now if it was already present in her life. I wonder how she will use this gift now that she is aware of it. That her parents concealed it from her puzzles me. I would have thought it would have been better to help her come to terms with it. I guess they could have been afraid of this gift being used. Who wants their daughter to be taken away by men in white coats to be examined in some kind of lab.

Not sure where Grandma went in the intervening years. This is not a Christian gift as it involves deception so if Grandma was also so gifted is she in heaven or hell. Or is she just floating around like a homeless ghost?

Only found two minor errors:

She pat my arm = She patted my arm

but the next thing you knew it, the elephant was in your father’s hands = but the next thing you knew, the elephant was in your father’s hands


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