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I try to be honest and positive. My Christian faith is an important background factor. I hate rating low but have a system that determines how I grade.
 
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More interested in the content of what you write than the style. Theological, political, historical, scientific, or experiential, or indeed anything that paints a vision of the future. A good grammar checker will tell you about spelling and commas.
Favorite Genres
Not entirely sure as I like most stuff. I prefer something with a soul rather than purely secular. But I like Sci-Fi, anything Christian, and also 'What-if' type speculations with plausible plots.
Least Favorite Genres
Anything that fails to look for a way out of the darkness. You can be dark, just don't wallow in it. Generally, I try to steer clear of Fantasy, and most Dark or Horror stories just make me laugh or grimace due to their ignorance of the dark side.
Favorite Item Types
I have really liked some of the heartwarming dramas I have read here particularly personal stories. Thought-provoking poems or stories are cool also though I am no expert on poetical forms.
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Anything that is just an affirmation of the dark side. I hate empty words. I always look for human intelligence. I try and avoid Fantasy and Horror where there is no metaphorical resonance or connection with real-world truth.
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I mainly review at random and just see what grabs my attention. I will usually skip stuff I do not like unless it gets me riled or if it is interesting for other reasons.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via the random 'read & review' button and stayed for an amusing story

Reader Experience

No one likes cold callers and that is what the author perceives this "Windows Technical Department" call to be. Until...


Commentary

I get so many unsolicited calls these days I never answer the phone unless it is a number I recognize from my contact list. Must admit a call like the one you described would probably be on the ignore list. But it does beg the question if we miss that crucial warning or a desperate cry for help or a long-lost friend in the process of putting the phone down and blocking numbers.

Not sure what the Windows Technical Department was going to offer by way of advice for dealing with virally infected exploding windows. But it made for a good and amusing story. Loved the comment:

"Show yourself! I am trained in martial-arts. I don’t want to hurt you but I will if you don’t show yourself"

As with the man suddenly confronted with 7 knife-wielding gangsters in the street, such a phrase is usually an empty gesture of defiance and in this supernatural case seemed to have been especially so. How will martial arts help you against virally infected windows?

Anyway thanks for making me laugh this morning.


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Review of It's in the Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Received this via the random 'read & review' button and stayed for the romance.

Reader Experience

Love can endure through the hard times with help from God.


Commentary

People make the vow - "For Richer or Poorer, in sickness or in health, in good times or in bad times till death us do part" almost always thinking that they will have a higher balance of joy than pain in marriage. In practice both come and all marriage vows are tested by reality. Not all of us make it to the point of death but then not all of us pray and draw on God's strength. If the commitment between two people was right when made then the promise to be faithful endures and we can make things work. I thought you expressed the commitment, the love, and the determination quite well here. I was irritated by the capitalization within sentences. Stylistically or relating to the creativity of the words used this was not a brilliant poem. But it had simple purity and commitment to it which I quite liked.

Thanks for sharing.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Received this via the random 'read & review' button and was intrigued

Reader Experience

The author feels trapped and feels as if she is losing the sense of who she is. Fear, shame, sadness, and depression, all characterise that sinking feeling, a malaise in which hope struggles to reveal itself. Can she survive her greatest fear that somehow she is trapped and just about to drown?


Commentary

I have been watching the news all day due to the death of Prince Phillip. This guy was a refugee from a country that murdered his family. Three of his sisters were Nazis and not invited to his wedding. He fought in a war and sacrificed himself so that his wife the Queen might bloom. He saw his favorite uncle murdered by the IRA. He had a strength of character that persevered in the worst of circumstances and did not really understand when his children revealed weaknesses that circumstances and schooling had never permitted in him. It is interesting that today's generation regards the demons within as being more terrifying than actual enemies like revolutionaries, terrorists and Nazis and the laughter of a merciless aristocratic mob with antiquated ideas about gender roles. Prince Phillip would have had a simple answer, pick yourself up, start looking outwards, get active and find yourself some real enemies and then pound them into oblivion also. Start living a life for others, read their concerns and put them into perspective, listen to their hopes, and affirm them. We find ourselves by loving others not by falling between the cracks of who we are into the abyss of self-absorption.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Reader Experience

The silkworms build their cocoon and are then boiled to extract the silk threads for the weaving process. So they die in that sleep before becoming silk moths only dreaming of flight through mulberry forests in the sunshine. They will miss the full moons and bustling Chinese towns. But the garments they leave behind are perhaps saturated with the lost hopes and freedoms of all those lost moths who will never experience the colors of the sky. Put the silk in your mouth and maybe you also can taste those lost midsummer nights and the ghostly laughter of the leaves and song of the cicadas.

Commentary

Silk has always been in great demand among the truly rich and powerful. Merchants bore the hazards of the silk road to bring their wares to the Roman Empire from China. Even today this remains a luxury and more expensive. There is an element of natural sacrifice in the story of silk. The beneficiaries are a privileged elite that probably is more concerned with the feelings of silkworms than the sacrifices of the poor and the enslaved that brought the silk to market and who fashioned this into emblems of advantage and comfort.

I liked your poem, thanks for sharing.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via the random 'read & review' button and was touched by the theme.

Reader Experience

The author was blind to love for a season allowing it to be obscured by pride. But now mindful of God they pledge to love

Commentary

Prince Phillip was married to the Queen of England for 73 years. There were some major ups and downs in that relationship. This was a man of great intellect, profound reflection, and even prophetic insight married to a woman of far less education but with the Imperial crown on her head. This unsung hero pledged himself to be the best possible support to his wife, the Queen. He stood 2 steps behind her for most of her reign, the silent strength, the wise advisor, and the love of her life. Now he is gone and the Queen mourns him alone with her large extended family to offer condolence. Were there times when she was blind to her man and he to her? Almost definitely and yet this profoundly Christian couple persevered in the most testing of circumstances and their marriage is an example of what could be.

Your poem spoke to me today in the light of world events

Thanks for sharing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Reader Experience

A flood from the heavens blurs the property lines.

Commentary

They say you can see the Great Wall of China from space although Chinese astronaut Yang Liwei shockingly revealed he could not see it from space at all. Maybe we can make out a few cities at night with the lights on but the property rights in those are all blurred together. Go as far out as Voyager One and not even these are visible just one blue dot, one deluged water-soaked planet. We can spend our lives paying for houses with clear garden fences but great floods like that of hurricane Katrina can sweep all those manmade boundaries away in an instant. I guess the survivors on the Ark climbed out after a global flood to also see an absence of fences and a brand new world.

I loved this short, provocative poem, thanks for sharing.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via the random read & review button and stayed to pontificate on light the moon and feyre st.clair.

Reader Experience

The moon is not made of light it just reflects light. Maybe I am like the moon, cold and dead and just reflecting the light and beauty of something else.

Commentary

I believe you are made in the image of God which means that not only do you reflect something of His light and beauty but so also something of that light and beauty is intrinsic to your very created being. So you are more like the Earth than the moon with lots of electric lights and cities that glow in the dark. OK, you do not compare to the sun but some of those patterns look cool from space. Theoretically, you could build a spaceship and start planting lights on the moon powered by stored solar power or nuclear reactors. You could do the same throughout the solar system and it would be all the more interesting for your artistry and pattern weaving. Does the fact that the sun could incinerate you and all your works in the blink of an eye negate their value. No, I do not think so

This little light of mine
I am gonna let it shine.....


Thanks for sharing a little light here.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for some wisdom

Reader Experience

A Miracle is personified as a person and as such advises that just because you have experienced the joy of a Wonder should not become proud. Indeed since miracles are clothed in mystery and are beyond our understanding there is no reason for pride.

Commentary

I have seen people prayed for, who went into remission from cancer. One man I know died an atheist and came back to life as a Christian having, while dead, experienced Christ. Another girl I knew saw her mother who was in a wheelchair walk after being prayed for. Once I prayed with a bishop where we measured a man's legs who had back pain. One leg was longer than the other. We prayed, the pain left, and then when we measured the man's legs afterward they were the same length. Miracles happen and only a fool can deny this. But because we live in a universe where miracles are possible we can say little in our own confidence or strength that gives us cause to strut through this life. It is humbling to know that God can, God does and God is in these miracles. It is an occasion for both joy and humility. The content of what you wrote was spot on but how you wrote it requires more work.

Thanks for sharing.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for a great story

Reader Experience

Rich and Rob Benton escape a lame party by getting them to play hide and seek and using the opportunity to climb over the back fence. They go searching for buried treasure and find themselves stranded by a cave in a deserted tunnel. They are not alone there are some mean ghosts down there. Fortunately for them, one of them is called Benton.


Commentary

Very well told and entertaining story. It reminds me of the kind of exploratory freedom I had as a child. These kinds of near-death experiences shape character. Today in our risk-averse cultures the kids grow fat and game in their bedrooms rather than seeking adventures in the real world, covid19 definitely has not helped matters, nor have new houses being built over the old forests and parks. Well in this case I guess it was also an experience of post-death ghosts.

Anyway thanks for sharing


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, you beat me last month in the no dialog contest pushing me into second place. So I thought I would come and view the victor's work.

Reader Experience

A little boy strays into nature, into a world of birds, squirrels, and friendly dogs. He connects with mother nature and then is drawn back to his dearest friend of all, his own mother.

Commentary

I guess you captured the theme of friendship very well here. Your writing harmonized with nature and naturally with the creatures of nature. You stayed within maternal boundaries not reaching too deeply into dark forests or beyond baby blue skies into the empty darkness of space. All was smiles and happiness and multicolored butterflies. From a child's perspective, this is a true portrayal of friendship from the time of Eden before the fall. Before a dark world demanding sacrifice, hard choices, and commitments of time, money, blood. Before a time of adulthood and realities that test and refine our character and test our commitments to those we love.

I found some minor mistakes in the text:

Little Johnny had wondered a little to far from his mother in the park = Little Johnny had wandered a little too far from his mother in the park

He had only wondered about twenty yards away from the playground = He had only wandered about twenty yards away from the playground

Thanks for sharing and congratulations on winning the contest.


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Received this via my newsfeed and liked the title and remember liking most of what you write also.

Reader Experience

Rachel is falling between cracks into alternate worlds. Some hellish, some heavenly. In this world, she is doomed to die of brain cancer. Her cancer is growing like a spider inside her brain. As her brain breaks, so the floor or the ceiling, cracks, to reveal either horrors or delights. Though she never built that cabin in the mountains, which he had always wanted, through the cracks she finds a new pathway to that place.

Commentary

You reach for the heights of heaven and depths of hell in this piece, taking the reader through the dark and horrible to green meadows and dreams come true. You leave the impression that you would rather scare the bejeebers out of your reader than lead them into that heavenly cabin in the mountains but somehow that is where we end up anyway. I liked the idea of cracks in the world echoing the brokenness of the experience of a woman with brain cancer losing her mind to a malignant arachnological spreading doom. You somehow combined the horror of that experience with the liberation of realizing her dreams.

I found two small errors in the text:

In her peripheral lay only a gloom so perfect that it seemed to be an abyss = In her peripheral vision lay only a gloom so perfect that it seemed to be an abyss

It began as a faraway crowd, multitudes of raging babble like an angry, destructive mob - did not sound quite right as raging babble is a sound or symptomatic of a multitude

Maybe: It began as a faraway crowd, multiple voices raging babble like an angry, destructive mob.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for an exposition of the number of the Beast

Reader Experience

There is no 666 house number because 666 is the devil's number. But it could mean a whole load of other things also. Somebody who claims to understand this number is probably being dishonest.


Commentary

Some said it was Nero, some said it was the simple implication of imperfection, of a demonic attempt to mimic the seven spirit of god with a lesser number, the three members of the Trinity with an imperfect copy of Dragon, Beast, and False Prophet. I have seen men with this number as a tattoo who thought they were hard rather than just demonic cannon fodder on a highway to hell. There is nothing funny about this number it is an imperfect, merely human number a number that reaches for heights it can never attain. A doomed number like that of a taxi firm here in Germany that never comes in time. That Iron maiden song on this theme sprang to mind when I read this. But I thought their lyrics were better than these ones and more real for not even pretending this number is a joke. How much do we need to understand something bad to know that the best thing is to stay well away.

Woe to you, oh earth and sea
For the Devil sends the beast with wrath
Because he knows the time is short
Let him who hath understanding reckon the number of the beast
For it is a human number
Its number is six hundred and sixty-six
I left alone, my mind was blank
I needed time to think
To get the memories from my mind
What did I see? Can I believe?
That what I saw that night was real and not just fantasy?
Just what I saw in my old dreams
Were they reflections of my warped mind staring back at me?
'Cause in my dreams it's always there
The evil face that twists my mind and brings me to despair
Night was black, was no use holding back
'Cause I just had to see, was someone watching me?
In the mist, dark figures move and twist
Was all this for real or just some kind of Hell?
Six six six, the number of the beast
Hell and fire was spawned to be released
Torches blazed and sacred chants were praised
As they start to cry, hands held to the sky
In the night, the fires are burning bright
The ritual has begun, Satan's work is done
Six six six, the number of the beast
Sacrifice is going on tonight
This can't go on, I must inform the law
Can this still be real, or just some crazy dream?
But I feel drawn towards the chanting hordes
Seem to mesmerize, can't avoid their eyes
Six six six, the number of the beast
Six six six, the one for you and me
I'm coming back, I will return
And I'll possess your body and I'll make you burn
I have the fire, I have the force
I have the power to make my evil take its course

Thanks for sharing.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and spirituality seems to be the theme today

Reader Experience

We all die and pass into the gaps between the subatomic to merge with shadows gathered between the past and the future. Yet even this darkness shall pass, leaving behind an empty pupa case.


Commentary

Not sure if you are talking about reincarnation or the afterlife here. But either way, this was profound finding gateways between atoms and yesterday and tomorrow into a new reality. I loved the image of the pupa as if we rise into a world of new possibility and light far beyond the experience of the lowly caterpillars that made our graves. We rise as multicolored butterflies into the light. Personally, I do not believe that everyone has died_ Enoch and Elijah for instance. Nor do I believe that everyone must die. Christ will come again to greet a whole troop of people who will never taste death at all. But it is the experience of most of us and the transition to a new existence beyond what is accepted by most world religions. Some have a belief in a night of extended soul sleep until the resurrection at Kingdom Come. Others believe we instantly move into paradise. However, this comes to pass I would like to die with my heart wide open and trusting in a God who loves me and calls me home.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the cricketing theme

Reader Experience

Willie Morton, Scotlands famous slow bowler apparently learnt the sport from a book


Commentary

Apparently, he died two years ago, quite suddenly in fact. In fact, since your review, he divorced, remarried, and then died. Playing for Scotland he was never going to be famous as they do not even play at Test level and have never won anything except one solitary world cup match against Hong Kong. That said the man was a sportsman playing rugby, cricket, and darts and sounds a bit of a character also. I do not know if your story is true and a book truly improved his game. Having played the game myself I somehow doubt it, you learn this by doing it and watching pros play. But I liked your poem and the story it evoked of this man's life and his contribution to Scottish cricket. Not sure this is a Braveheart level tale of Scottish nationalistic pride, however. Scotland would need to actually beat the English cricket team with him taking several wickets and hitting a century before I would regard him as the new William Wallace or Robert the Bruce.

Thanks for sharing.


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed for some good writing

Reader Experience

Ouch, that was rather extreme. Ohh I see! Really?


Commentary

I must admit I was ready to give up with the story when the man offered her his heart in a red leather pouch. It seemed too much and impossible. She should probably have run a mile at that point. I recently wrote something in the romance/horror genre which involved a macabre gift to a woman. She should have run in my story also.

 
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But in this story, it turns out to be a rather creative way to get the woman he fell for which actually worked out. Then there is that last line which overthrows the entire storyline again with the suggestion that they have died at some point and are ghosts. There is a rollercoaster here of dark-light-dark.

I enjoyed the story, which was quite creative and disturbing at the same time. Thanks for sharing


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Reader Experience

So the reason for ACs despair is a man. Some relationship has not worked out and she is dealing with the aftermath of smashed dreams. Granny is the perfect confessor as she knows God.


Commentary

No man is perfect, even those that made it to heaven (before they got in) and those that are married. To idolize a man and place all one's hopes and dreams in one is naive. Such moments of defeat are a time to reconsider and get things into perspective. We all made embarrassing mistakes on our way to imperfect but lasting relationships. Once in those relationships, we have to make choices every day to make them work. If the relationship is snatched away there are still decisions to be made. Decisions as to what to do with the emptiness and the crushed hopes, whether to give in to the darkness or to choose the light. It helps to have a source of strength greater than even granny, like the One she prays to for instance.

I had a similar experience within a marriage which I described here:

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I liked your letter which expressed what you wanted to say very well. I liked that you appealed to a God fear in person out of the darkness whom you could trust. Thanks for sharing


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and since I am just waking up myself it seemed topical

Reader Experience

A woman wakes just before dawn, when the morning star still shines, from nightmares. She is soothed by the haunting voice, presence, and then embrace of a man who is more than a man because not mortal. There she can forget the terrors of the night.

Commentary

Beautifully written but I was wondering about the content of the poem. It seems that during the night the romantic feelings for a new love were temporarily forgotten with ice forming around cupid's dart. It is the light that banishes your fears and in that new warmth, you go to the man. Who is a man that is more than a man, a man not mortal? The use of words like haunting implies a supernatural quality to the man. But it seems he is not omnipresent, as he was not there with you during the night during your nightmares. You come to him in the daylight when the shadows flee and light warms us. He is the sunlight after the storm and the day after the nightmare-filled night. Maybe he would indeed seem more than mortal in the light of that experience, but this man is no god.

It was an interesting poem with many provocative lines. Thanks for sharing.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and was intrigued

Reader Experience

You spell out fear with the first letter of each line. Each line describes being afraid.


Commentary

It did the job, it rhymed, you are right to fear is illogical and yet the experience of it is very real. I did not find your poem that scary but it ticked all the correct boxes. Quantifying that missing x-factor is the hard thing but like the reasons for being afraid it can sometimes be elusive.

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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Received this via random review and was a little confused as to why you posted it.

Reader Experience

World War Three starts sometime in 2064 and results in the world returning to a pre cold War configuration.


Commentary

There are so many grammatical and spelling errors in this I would not know where to start. I recommend you use a tool like Grammarly in the future which would show you what I mean. I loaded your text into this review and just about everything is underlined in red. Also, the story makes no sense, has no appreciation for the development of technology and geopolitics. You seem to want to revive old Cold War national configurations like the USSR and Yugoslavia but why, no rationale is given and no explanation about how this could come to pass. A local nuclear war would most likely destroy the planet.

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Received this via random review and stayed as a Brit to read an American account of the Boston Tea party

Reader Experience

Hoodlums board three ships and proceed to throw their cargo of tea overboard *Wink*


Commentary

As a Brit, I must admit the American revolution is not regarded as a glorious chapter in my nation's history. There was deep incompetence in the administration of the colonies up until the revolution. Mercantilism and monopoly trading made profits for aristocrats and cemented Britains control and the profitability of its trade routes. But then it did have a lot of wars to pay for, many of which it fought in defense of the colonists. Americans had enjoyed peace for almost a generation since the British had expelled the French from Canada and they had always had more freedom than people back home. The old loyalties were breaking down and I am sure local businessmen resented the prices the British charged them for tea. This incident sparked a bloody revolution and in the end this all worked out and Brits and Americans became friends again. America is larger and more prosperous for having broken free and Britain learned valuable lessons from its experience going on to build the largest empire the world has ever seen over the next century. One wonders what the world would have looked like had Americans and Brits remained in the same team for that century.

Thanks for sharing an interesting and informative piece.


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Shaun's father was killed in some war. He was buried in a military cemetery with a lot of other soldiers. Shaun is being brought up by his grandfather as his mother also died 4 years after his father did. The grandfather feels the loss of his son and the little boy misses his dad as he sits on the swing which used to be his father's favorite place growing up.

Commentary

Very well written piece. I was engrossed from start to finish even though it was a simple thing that they were doing. I wondered why the Grandfather found it hard to find the grave unless it was one of those big military graveyards far away from where they actually lived. With so many wars to chose from this story could have been written for today or indeed at any time in the last century.

Thanks for sharing such a moving story.

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A strange world with very hot days and moonlit nights. The gravediggers bury people in the night. Apparently the sick and weak get sedated and buried alive in this place.


Commentary

In such a brutal society, with such hot days, I wondered why they did not opt for cremation. There was no rationale for the ritual of burial given nor why it was necessary to cull the weak and the sick so abruptly. Were there resource shortages for instance on a hostile planet with monsters in every direction?

There were some difficult phrases here that need some attention:

we find ourselves misfortunate enough the live in = we find ourselves misfortunate enough to live in

but Semeriand there be monsters and terrifying beasts, or so the stories go. =
but in Semeriand there be monsters and terrifying beasts, or so the stories go.

Sickness, frailty, weakness, they like to pretend they’re immortal = Whether sick, frail, or weak they all like to pretend they’re immortal

we fall file out into the cold dead of night = we file out into the cold dead of night

intentionally hanging as far back from the rest of my group was possible = intentionally hanging as far back from the rest of my group as was possible


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Carolina's hair falls out and so she wears a spectacular hat to school. An understanding teacher and class finds inspiration in wearing hats of their own


Commentary

Making the best out of a bad situation and turning a negative into a positive spring to mind. I liked the courage and energy and inspiration of Carolina here. She does not surrender to the dark side just because the dark side has taken so much from her. She continues to live in the light and to love as long as she can.

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AC writes a letter to granny articulating the pain of her existence. Her coping mechanisms seem to be shutting down large sections of her humanity. Darkness shrouds dreams she cannot remember. She remembers the bullet points of her existence but the emotions are deleted out. As storms calm, she does not recognize the person she is becoming. Is this better than the raw pain it replaces or not. Is the bid to be normal worth the loss of deep inner spaces too painful to explore anymore. Granny seems to know God, maybe that is why AC writes to her.

Commentary

Not sure from the letter what the source of this pain is but it sounds intensely physical and consuming of the person's consciousness. No doubt a drug regime dulls this and various coping mechanisms but this leaves the person suffering somehow detached from themselves. Looking in on a tortured soul they cannot bear to engage with and yet who remains them. Granny has a better focus with God and only God can give the kind of strength to endure and overcome the deepest of pains. You write well but seem trapped in darkness until the last lines when you appeal to this old lady, who no doubt has also felt pains in her much longer life and who has found solace through those with the God who made her and you.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Reader Experience

Mother Nature is personified. She is angry at what man has done to her creation and is bent on revenge and clean up. So deep darkness falls upon the earth for a season and great storms and earthquakes. Those who survive wake to a new world when the darkness passes.

Commentary

Nature is quite brutal when considered on its own terms and without reference to God. From my Christian perspective, the first human profession was as a Gardner and then as a farmer and we have not been good stewards of what we have been given. We trample and destroy what we have barely begun to understand and we break the harmony that exists in creation by doing so.

The first line in a story is important and yours was too long and could be broken into two.

picturesque panoramas of beauty with each etched = picturesque panoramas of beauty, each etched

variety, and life but to no avail or respect from humanity. = variety, and life. But all to no avail as humanity continued to disrespect her.

Global judgments are quite devastating to all parts of the ecosystem and not just to humanity. A considerable loss of species diversity and the breaking of the harmony of complex ecosystems might all result. Destruction is not the best route to a new start.

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