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More interested in the content of what you write than the style. Theological, political, historical, scientific, or experiential, or indeed anything that paints a vision of the future. A good grammar checker will tell you about spelling and commas.
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Not entirely sure as I like most stuff. I prefer something with a soul rather than purely secular. But I like Sci-Fi, anything Christian, and also 'What-if' type speculations with plausible plots.
Least Favorite Genres
Anything that fails to look for a way out of the darkness. You can be dark, just don't wallow in it. Generally, I try to steer clear of Fantasy, and most Dark or Horror stories just make me laugh or grimace due to their ignorance of the dark side.
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I have really liked some of the heartwarming dramas I have read here particularly personal stories. Thought-provoking poems or stories are cool also though I am no expert on poetical forms.
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Anything that is just an affirmation of the dark side. I hate empty words. I always look for human intelligence. I try and avoid Fantasy and Horror where there is no metaphorical resonance or connection with real-world truth.
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I mainly review at random and just see what grabs my attention. I will usually skip stuff I do not like unless it gets me riled or if it is interesting for other reasons.
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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for the electrical advice

Reader Experience

Henry is cold and trying to fix the heater he knocked over yesterday. He has opened up the back and is playing with the insides with his screwdriver. He has switched off the multiplug connector but then there is a flash


Commentary

Nettie might have spoken up a little earlier about the change in plug arrangements. Henry is trying to help but clearly does not have a clue and does not do the proper checks in advance. Nettie seems to understand the basics of fuse boxes and circuit breakers maybe she should fix the heater after it is unplugged from the wall of course.

Think there are too many human errors in this account for it to constitute self-help. That Nettie failed to unplug the heater after Henry ignored her was gross negligence on her part and her nagging and putdowns probably just put Henry's back up. This is the sort of story you can learn from without appreciating or warming to because all the characters are disturbing and embarrassing for different reasons.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Defeated  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed because I like Sci-Fi.

Reader Experience

Two men sucked out of a compartment exposed to space with only a limited oxygen supply. They recount a lifetime of conflict while they await their end. Then along comes Tess ...


Commentary

That was an unexpected ending though a more plausible one than two superheroes, who had battled across space and time, and who were finally meeting their end. The beautiful Tess now looks like the keeper of the space=asylum, another cool concept. I am surprised this piece got no attention as it was quite good, well written. Interesting that even in the future the psychologists have no cure for schizophrenia except drugs and quarantine. Maybe we should just go back to exorcisms as they seemed to be more effective.

Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Forsaken  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Mythology

Reader Experience

The angel Gabriel who announced the birth of Christ has been cast out of heaven but does not know why. He desperately wants to get back in because he still lives God. He goes to Lilith who apparently is a vampire and she turns him into one. Now he no longer feels the pain of having lost God and thinks that he is free in a way that he has never been before.


Commentary

Gabriel clearly did not have the mankind jealousy issues that are hinted at causing the original angelic fall in this account. He announced that God Himself would come to earth as a man. God is not fickle and does not simply cast an angel out. There is nothing fickle about Lucifers casting down which involved an angelic war and a fight with the Archangel Michael. This alternate mythology requires we jump into a parallel universe where the opposite of angels is vampires and Gabriel somehow becomes a bad guy who, once upon a time like Lucifer, stood in God's presence. This is only sustainable as a storyline as long as the current popularity of vampires endures. One wonders how long it will last without revelatory, historical, scientific, or even credible experiential testimony to it as a reality. The best myths like the best lies have some kind of connection to reality.

The text contains some minor errors:

One the other side of the throne a strange dog creature slumbered. Werewolf, Gabriel though with distaste. - On the other side of the throne a strange dog creature slumbered. Werewolf, Gabriel thought with distaste.

Is it Gabriel or Gabriele?

I though I smelled an Angel = I thought I smelled an Angel

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Review of In the Beginning  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Horror Scary / Mythology

Reader Experience

An alternate explanation of how a pale, fragile girl Va’ Amphare became the mother of all Vampires by the grace of Night Sky.


Commentary

So this is an origin story about a race that does not exist but is popular in modern literature. The story itself was coherent, well written, and sounded reasonable within its own terms. I suspect that ancient tribal cultures would have some kind of holy man or religious gurus that would have held this woman of the night only who drinks blood to live as a problem and expelled or killed her long before the real trouble started with her. But myths are fictional and this one stands as a good story, though not as advertised, for children just before they go to bed!

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Mythology

Reader Experience

The author gives six good reasons why UFOs do not exist. They range from lack of anything but anecdotal proof, the incompetence of governments at concealing things and their tendency to lie about things like spy planes, and that most scientists will not touch this with a barge pole. SETI did not find anything despite billions of dollars of investment, there are no radio waves and the stories about this were probably a product of cold war fears anyway in the first place and a promotional feature of the build-up to the Apollo space program.

Commentary

Actually, the whole UFO thing goes back to atheist writers of the late Victorian era like H.G.Wells who wrote War of the Worlds. It was part of a general move to a more scientific outlook on the universe and a move away from anthropocentric and geocentric religious accounts. After a century of searching, however, we have still found nothing out there. Part of the premise for the existence of alien life is the theory of evolution and the Drake Equation. Both however rely on one thing that has never been proven as a starting point - abiogenesis. The idea that life can emerge from chemicals spontaneously has NEVER been demonstrated. But because life emerged on Earth they suggest that it must also have simply emerged elsewhere. Again and again, this speculative theory has been disproved by actual experience. When man landed on the moon we found "Magnificent Desolation". When Mariner did its Martian flybys it discovered craters, not canals. We have found no life out there and yet the theories that mainstream science swears by insisting it must be out there. The whole UFO mythology is a product of this speculative thinking.

Thanks for sharing. I liked what you wrote, just think it did not go far enough into the conceptual framework which insists these things must exist.


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Review of A Day to Remember  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Action/Adventure

Reader Experience

A mother takes her sons and daughter-in-law to a campsite in the mountains. They use the lifts to ascend to the heights. The view is awesome. But when it comes time to descend the mother cannot stomach riding in those lifts again as she suffers from vertigo and decides to walk down. She misses the hiker's trail and walks straight down the ski slope family in tow. They make it without serious injury but the park attendants put them in the lift for the last stage of the journey


Commentary

Well climbing a mountain is definitely one way to conquer a fear of heights. Those lifts remind me of a ski trip and being suspended 100's of feet above the ground ascending into the Alps. Must admit I found it exhilarating but that might be foolishness regarding the risks rather than courage on my part. This place sounds beautiful and worth a visit. It sounds like some strong family memories were created that day and will be shared in years to come. I miss the mountains, this pandemic, my work takes me to them a lot but now everything is in home-office. Your piece reminded me of the vertical drops, the spectacular views, the green of the forests, drinking from mountain springs, and breathing the clean fresh air with the sun in my face. You might want to convert to this a short story at one point. The colors and characters and scenery would all work for that. There are a lot of open ends to this story - missing husbands for example who might have been able to help with the fears.

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Review of The Hot Tub  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Romance/Love

Reader Experience

The wife is in bed and the man is in the spa. It is cold outside but the water is warm. When he closes his eyes he can see a beautiful woman who comes to him. They make love. He opens his eyes and she is not there. Only the smell of her perfume remains.


Commentary

Costless adultery with spooky undertones. There is no evidence he was ever unfaithful to his wife. The experience is more real and personal than porn and costs him nothing as would have a visit to a prostitute. He loves a woman with his eyes shut and when he opens them she is gone. Yet there is the perfume smell. Can a man make love to a ghost, to a demon, or to the projected spirit of another woman? Or maybe this was just a dream and he only imagined her lingering perfume?

Very erotic and very thought-provoking. Perhaps too much in fact. I need to find an action piece for my next raid review to clear my mind!

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Review of Martyr  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Horror/Scary

Reader Experience

Thomas works in the morgue. He had always been a little obsessed with death and years of working with the dead, being alone without love had dulled his spirit. He lacked enthusiasm for life. But then a beautiful woman is brought into the morgue, she is simply perfect, he is more awed than attracted by that beauty and her death seems a tragic waste. She has a wooden stake through the heart. A tall ageless visitor to the morgue views the woman and kisses her. There are depth, history, and ferocity in his eyes. As he leaves Thomas is suddenly grateful to be alive and the supernatural possibilities of the world are open to him once again.

Commentary

Why must the magic in this life always come from the dark side. Monsters, vampires, werewolves, witches, and things that lurk in the shadows. Where are the angels and miracles in such dreamscapes? It is a vampire that reawakens Thomas's dreams and maybe the death of one also. A man who sees the tragedy of this life so acutely, viewing the victims of murders, crashes and man's inevitable decay and decline to the grave might well lose his enthusiasm for life. It is odd that the threat and the beauty of such an evil creature as a vampire should revive this man's interest in living.

You wrote well and the descriptions of the nuances in the vampire's eyes were especially powerful. There was also something haunting and powerful about such a beautiful and perfect woman lying dead in a morgue. The terrible waste, the unspoken story of her life, the lost potential messaged to him in her empty shell.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Men's

Reader Experience

At first, a man is not really clear what his purpose is. He tries out stuff that does not work out. He finds success in unexpected areas. He wants one thing and gets another

Then a man finds out what his call is and sets himself to that wholeheartedly. He develops the necessary skills and this is tested by experience.

Once perfected in his ambition and calling who can stop such a man.


Commentary

I found this short poem insightful but also quite individualistic. A man's ambition meets a community's need at some point. Relationships with wife and children mold direction and choices. Also in reality a person's declared ambition, even their settled ambition can be overthrown by equally determined opponents, bad luck, and circumstance.

This is why a man needs to learn to pray and trust, to find the grace and strength to carry on even when his purpose becomes unclear and obstructions lie in his path.

Any way I liked your poem which was provocative and interesting


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Review of The Nova  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Action/Adventure

Reader Experience

The Nova is a faulty product with exploding fuel tanks but it has half the market share. But the cost-benefit analysis reveals it will be slightly cheaper to keep it than pull it. William Goebels (no relation to the other guy) runs a campaign advertising the patriotic resonance of the risk of driving the car with the American culture. The car sales rebound. Ramblerwho leads a consumer protection group starts campaigning against the car. New enlarged fuel tanks have the unfortunate habit of creating a blast pattern resembling a middle finger. This makes a great basis for a consumer protection ad in which this middle finger is shown replete with the statement that the corporation does not care about consumer safety. Sales plummet again and the corporation runs an open-air event for Judge Blackmore appointed to the case ( and with Supreme court ambitions). But it ends in disaster when the Nova explodes and the middle finger fire pattern singes a permanent reminder of that onto the Judge's head. The corporation struggles on...


Commentary

An immensely amusing piece replete with classic mother-in-law jokes. I loved that the CEO drove a Mercedes. This is also an incisive satire on the greed of corporate culture. Cost-Benefit analysis replaces the notion of right and wrong and even judges can be bought by paying for their lobbying campaigns. German car firms do have a reputation for quality but in recent years have been held to account for violations of environmental testing standards. These are problems that they and other firms around the world have been legally obliged to fix. One hopes that in Europe especially that a sense of right and wrong does trump corporate ambition and greed.

Thanks for sharing this timeless piece 2 decades ago.


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Review of Possession  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Horror/Scary

Reader Experience

Jack Stone the seven-foot-tall black murderer of little girls is caught in the act of disemboweling a young lady. He is taken to floor 3 of the hospital in which lifetime containment of patients that cannot be cured is the standard position it appears. The patients are agitated by the arrival of Jack Stone who they claim is talking to them inside their heads. Tony, who works there, distributes the sleeping pills to the patients. He seems calm as he sees the daily horrors of mutilated dolls and threatening behavior. Jack Stone refuses the pills throwing them away. But then later that night be discover the true meaning of possession. The inmates and the guard are all dead and mutilated and only Tony is found in the corridor. Then he goes home to his child and pregnant wife Karen. Is the nightmare just beginning...


Commentary

The devil(s) come to kill and destroy, to spoil and ruin. Horrific crimes are blamed on demons and on possession. It seems that people close to the edge of sanity are especially vulnerable to this kind of spiritual wickedness. Tony does not seem to have ever heard the verse "Resist the devil and he will flee from you". He becomes the devil's hands in a series of crimes that liberate the demon from the captured Jack Stone and move him into a new body and new possibilities beyond the cage of the third floor.

I did not like the way that the darkness was allowed to triumph here, but I guess that is the horror genre. In practice, I do not believe that the devil can automatically expect any victories nor can he Borg-like claim that resistance is futile. Christians can bind and rebuke him and send him packing in Christ's name.

This piece was well written, perhaps too well written, and leaves a disturbing and unsettling feeling. The author engages the reader and traps him also in the story and the horrible ending leaves a stain. Again this is the Horror/Scary genre perfectly expressed.

Thanks for sharing, I think?!


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Review of Monster  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: Horror/Scary

Reader Experience

This read as if it were autobiographical until the horrific ending which I truly hope is not true. So I was going to call the little girl Andrea. It was easy to sympathize with her for being the victim of a firework explosion, horribly disfigured and ostracised by the school bully Richie. Growing up embittered and lied and even though eventually receiving plastic surgery in her twenties clearly tormented and disfigured inside also by the experience of being called a monster. But then there was the ending and Richie's kid...

Commentary

The notion that people's words and rejection can turn us into monsters is the central premise here. A beautiful kid is turned into a psychopath in later life, due to an accident and then people's reactions to it. Twisted by bitterness she enacts cruel revenge on an innocent child for the sins of the father. But I resist that premise. I remember having acne and collecting rejections from girls who would use phrases like Eww. Then I remember when the spots went and suddenly women were easy. People can be so superficial but how we handle that rejection or acceptance is up to us. To have some permanent disfigurement is a test of character way higher than that experienced by most adolescent males struggling with pus-filled volcanoes erupting over their faces though. It summons up literary images like that of the Hunch Back of Notre Dame Quasimodo and his beloved Esmeralda. But even Victor Hugo cannot find a happy ending to that one unless two skeletons entwined in death in a paupers grave qualifies.

Such things come to all of us. Sometimes as extreme and as physically in your face as this and other times due to false reports about us that marginalize us from our communities. These do not have to turn us into monsters like the one that kidnapped Benny in your story.

So I found your story powerful, horrible, deeply wrong, and scary in the sense that people can really be like that.

Thanks for sharing this 2 decades ago.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: men's

Reader Experience

The author says that football is now America's national game rather than baseball and gives a lot of reasons for this.


Commentary

I grew up in Britain where football is soccer. American football was regarded as a bastardized form of rugby where pansies wore armor because they were afraid of taking a hit. Baseball was regarded as a girl's game called rounders, just with a bigger bat and balls. In fact, the whole world calls soccer football, and football is called American football. The Superbowl/World Series is not a worldwide cup on the scale of the football WorldCup final which is truly global in scope and interest. Kids in Africa or Asia or most of the Americas kick a soccer ball around they do not throw American footballs. The commercialization and corruption you mourn in the sport of baseball are universal unfortunately with sports being corrupted by the commercial contracts on which they depend. The love of the game is often replaced with the love of money and that is an insidious poison here as in most things. What fascinates me about American football is the desire to differentiate from the rest of the world and especially the British who play Rugby. It is like your date format. The whole world does dd/mm/yyyy while Americans insist on mm/dd/yyyy. Why must America always be the exception and Americans exceptional? This attitude has promoted some remarkable achievement and yet also major dysfunctionality with everyone wanting to be that football star and defining their relative success in terms of how close they got to that superstar that great achievement, that great event. When you do not make it you are a loser. But actually, this lens is a false one. I love Sports enjoy a game of American football on TV but our idolatry of sports is a distorting and toxic mangling of our cultures. We need to get back to church and get sports in proper perspective.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: men's

Reader Experience

The author advises men what works and what does not in their wardrobe.


Commentary

I must admit that I come from a culture and generation that considers it a little gay to be so anal and precise about what clothes a man wears. Also, I have always preferred an understated look and never wanted to stand out because of my appearance because character and real achievement matter more than appearance in my world. I have always gone for anonymous over flamboyant and my color choices reflect that: blues, greys, browns. But having read your article and now living in an age where the whole gay thing has been extensively revisited, and men's reactions to gay people have restricted their own choices, I wonder if there was a reductionism in my attitudes. After all, it is the male peacock that has all the colors. My wardrobe is a mess. I have clothes that go back 3 decades to school days, baggy then, tight-fitting now. Some I have not worn in 20 years. I thought the two-year rule was a good one. Also, the quality comment struck me. I do not like spending money on clothes as it seems to be a useless extra expense but you are right if you are going to you should buy quality so that 30 years from now you could still wear them. That probably saves money and makes you look better. Also, you are right that clothes say a lot about who you are. As an IT guy, I do not need to dress up and especially during a pandemic when it is all home office. But there are special events where I wear a suit. I went to a dance recently at which my only suitable pair of shoes dated from my school years. They were two sizes too small and broken. My feet hurt all the way through and a piece of wood from the sole jutted embarrassingly out from the back of my shoe for part of the dance causing some merriment. A decent pair of shoes could last a lifetime since my feet are no longer growing. I have loads of sports kit, some of which I do not wear cause it is broken. Two good suits and a lot of frayed T-shirts. I usually wear Levis and I wear out a pair every two years. I keep the old pairs for painting trousers, but exactly how many pairs of painting trousers does a man need, particularly ones with holes in the bum, knees, etc.

So I might revisit my wardrobe later and do a bit of a cleanout. Thanks for sharing such useful advice.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. This came up under a search for the genre: men's

Reader Experience

The author shares a series of sexist jokes that elevate men at the expense of women.


Commentary

Some of the jokes were quite funny but having gone through marriage counseling I am on the other side of this sexism. I was interested in the view of male-female relationships reinforced by this humor.

A basic theme here in many of the jokes is that women should cook and clean, bring the man a beer. Women talk more than men and yet manage to remain completely incomprehensible to them. Women always think they are right and the man wrong. Think the woman cooking and cleaning stereotype is quite dated and we no longer need a full-time housewife to do the washing, cooking. I have a Thermomix for example which cooks anything I want. Women are therefore free to work, vote, and pursue different interests and men are just as capable of loading the machine and pressing the buttons at the correct times. Women's verbal IQs are higher than men's and they generally value words and communication more. If men are doing the things that need doing this is less of a problem than when they are not. A woman's words echo the man, angry and nagging when he neglects his duties and loving and affectionate when he meets her needs. Men will always, well in the main, be bigger and stronger than women but that means less in an age of machines where women can lift things with forklift trucks just as easily as men can. Do agree that women can often self sabotage their own self-esteem. I look in the mirror and see a Greek god, she does not see a goddess even though I tell her she is gorgeous.

My favorites were:

Women will never be equal to men until they can walk down the street with a beer belly and I bald head and still think they’re beautiful.

and

The most successful way to remember your wife’s birthday is to forget it once

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Review of Cry of the Wolf  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Reader Experience

fallen angel has created a parallel universe and a world called Foria. Sarah Turner is cast into this strange and terrible place in Alice in Wonderland fashion except this place has dragons and wizards rather than Cheshire cats. She interacts with other Narnian-type superheroes and they combine to try and defeat an evil wizard. This wizard appears to want to open the door to destruction by collecting various crystal shards.

Commentary

It seems you got a lot of attention and feedback for this summary of your book. The powers and conflicts of this other world, like that of a Gaming universe, burn with brighter colors and more extreme consequences. In a pandemic, they offer an alternate experience and a heightened awareness of what is possible. In these visionary landscapes, people can be superheroes rather than the caged and passive couch potatoes of the covid-19 lockdown. We have come a long way from fireside chats in small tribal villages where people spoke of mythical beasts that once lurked in the forests or that lived in faraway mountains confronted by heroes of ancient times. You wrote this a decade before the lockdown but my son lives in this sort of gaming world now, killing those dragons, outwitting those wizards, finding those magical objects. What you dreamed once is now a reality for many in the modern world with the gaming console as the interdimensional portal transporting them to these other worlds.

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Review of Evolution  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This is a genre-specific raid review. You came up under a search for men's.

Reader Experience

This story focuses on the Beast from X-Men, or Hank McCoy as he is otherwise known. Hank's ravenous appetite heralds an important life change.


Commentary

Well, he was an impressive hero figure before this change and now he is seven feet tall and even stronger than before. The Beast is a curious character with intelligence and brawn woven into the same person. In the series, there was a self-loathing with his evolved appearance after the experiment that went wrong. But you are correct that if this kind of mutation is possible at all there is little reason to suppose it would stop at a level we were comfortable with. I think though that the whole premise of X-Men is a little shaky as most mutations result in regression and failure of function rather than improvement and the idea that mutation could occur so rapidly and be consolidated into a stable form so quickly is unlikely. But I liked your story which was well written and kept me engaged from start to finish.

There were a few issues in the text:

Luckily for him, he had known the Xavier’s mansion like the back of his hand = Luckily for him, he knew Xavier’s mansion like the back of his hand

he did very little than make it more pronounced = he only succeeded in making it more pronounced

Well,” jean replied = Well,” Jean replied

as the excess wait helps you better store your energy = as the excess weight helps you better store your energy

As he lie in bed = As he lay in bed


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Review of Dear Me  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Received this via random review and took the time machine back to 2012

Reader Experience

Snows goals from 2012 moving on from 2011. Grandad is the inspiration


Commentary

It seemed like a reasonable list. Did you make it?

I noticed a few bugs in the text:

you do not to litter the space-time continuum = you do not [want] to litter the space-time continuum

Do not focus on how difficulty of the project = Do not focus on [the] difficulty of the project

to make sure your mother live = to make sure your mother lived

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the topical theme

Reader Experience

The author lauds the work of various engineers providing ventilators and special masks and scientists for their pioneering innovations and research in the area of coronavirus


Commentary

An interesting theme and it is true that engineers have played their part alongside medical health professionals and vaccine research scientists. Some of these innovations will also be useful moving forwards.

The most commonly used word this year, indeed every year in the English language is "the". The top trending words of 2020 were words like covid, covid-19, pandemic, and coronavirus. This despite heart disease and strokes still dominating the kill list.

One of the coolest innovations to be revealed during this pandemic has been the new RNA vaccine techniques behind the BioNTech/Pfizer vaccine for instance. This could revolutionize medicine and is a major innovation in the treatment of cancer still a major killer on the planet.

This Pandemic has been transforming. For instance, my church has grown as we have used Zoom to reach people all over the world for our services. The addition of the virtual space to our physical space will remain with us when this is over, extending the reach of our services.

The biggest lessons of the pandemic from a health point of view have been the terrible state of our lifestyles and the need for improved exercise to cultivate strong immune systems and respiratory health. The pandemic has also revealed deep inequalities in health care provision between rich and poor. But the technologies all too often deal with the symptoms, not the underlying issues which have to do with diet, exercise, sleep, and lifestyle.

Interesting and stimulating topic. Thanks for sharing


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and was touched by the sentiment

Reader Experience

An older person mourns the fact that no one writes letters anymore. She cannot get into her Email because she forgot her password. Please send her a letter


Commentary

The digital age is definitely faster and more efficient but the speed of change leaves many behind. Many, not trained in the new ways, lose communication possibilities and we have also lost a permanent record of our conversations. The old letters that used to fill boxes to be reread years later are replaced by email accounts that we renew every few years and therefore lose the contents of. We back up on laptops that crash every few years unless we go for the new cloud-based solutions which not everyone trusts. Even the best emails can get lost. My children hardly ever even use email now, having moved on to various chat tools and interactive applications. The conversations become more mundane with every innovation. It often seems that precision and clarity are increasingly emphasized over the communication of the nuances of one's feelings.

There is a stray bracket you might want to remove from the end of the poem

I liked the content of this, the rhyming structure, and the choice of words. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for the action packed adventure

Reader Experience

Sheriff Dixon is a crook and Jake and Laura have the proof. Jake gets Laura on the train. Once out of the valley she should be able to upload that You Tube.


Commentary

So they can text on the mountain but they cannot upload you tubes. But they could have phoned or texted the authorities outside the valley. Not sure they really needed to jump the train on Devil's Bend to get a message out. But it made for a good story and gave a sense of urgency to the escape in the darkness. Hollow tree trunks and back door knocking all added to the sense of suspense and danger.

I liked this though I thought it a little implausible

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Review of McDonald's  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Reader Experience

This person works at McDonald's and does not like it

Commentary

A job is a job and I would not criticize anyone for making a living, whatever they do. Personally, I love McDonald's and the smell of fried chips. I know pregnant women who during morning sickness were only able to keep a Big Mac down.

Was not sure what poetical format AABBBA is. Not a limerick AABBA. But anyway thought it worked.

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Review of The Time to Panic  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and liked the call for action on the environment

Reader Experience

We are well past the time when we should have started acting to resolve the problems we have created with the environment


Commentary

This appears to be a priority of the new Biden administration. It has been a priority for decades here in Europe and we are already changing our economy in a Green Economy direction. But people forget that American power in the twentieth century was founded on oil just as British power in the nineteenth century was founded on coal. It meant that your navy could always be at sea because it never ran out of fuel. Your planes could always be in the sky and your land forces could be mechanized and always on the move. The chemical and plastics industries do not yet have reasonable green alternatives. But there is now an urgency to this transition. How can we make the shift without reverting to the dark ages? There is no such thing as an electric tank and biodegradable toys do not sell that well as yet. We are making the transition but it is more painful than many imagine.

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Review of Isolated  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Reader Experience

The experience of lockdown can be like that of being caged and as such quite suffocating. Then there are those days when the sun comes out. We are all looking forward to freedom at the end of the pandemic.


Commentary

Everybody dies but not everybody gets to live. Not sure who said that but it seemed to fit your piece and fears of an unlived life. I have valued this time of isolation, it has brought me closer to my family in isolation with me. I have developed new disciplines for writing and exercise and my work situation has improved due to less travel and more home office. But I do miss the open road. I drove the car the other day, the stereo on high on the autobahn and it was quite exhilarating for a moment until I realized I did not have anywhere to go. Those glimpses of freedom, of sunlit mountain tops, ships charging through roaring waves and the imagination of being in a crowd again with all its noises, smells and people pushing past are not in vain. We will all be free soon when the vaccines are in and the plague is gone.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a reciprocal review as we seem to share a love of SciFi

Reader Experience

In the corporations of the future robots and humans mix and work together. But in this story, we have a malfunctioning robot that seems to have a sort of robotic power trip and has steam coming out of her ears. The scene ends with Kristina the robot on the ground processing her traumatic experience of being contradicted


Commentary

The hardware required to make such robots work is actually quite expensive and I think you exaggerate the kind of AI that would sit in a robot. Robots do not have to look humanoid to be useful and I think most will remain in factories doing mundane and repetitive tasks. The investment required to give autonomous personality to a robot would not be cost-effective for corporations in the most likely future. So the scenario itself seemed a little unrealistic to me. The notion that an AI can develop its own robot agenda would not be tolerated in any half sensible future. I think something akin to Asimov's 3 laws would probably govern their interaction with humans. The notion that a robot could file a complaint to personnel is both intriguing and a nightmare. In such a world I think I might even join a Luddite militia with the intent to destroy the robots and remove them from our lives. But I believe AI has limits and its intelligence is that of calculation and regurgitation and rehearsal rather than genuine and creative. If it does exceed us then we would be looking at teams of networked robots acting in accordance with an AIs grand plan rather than autonomous systems. Hopefully, we will always be able to counter one AI with another that serves our purpose and counter those employed by organized crime and dictators also. Who knows the future is wide open.

Thanks for the provocative and interesting story though


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