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#2259390 by LightinMind
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More interested in the content of what you write than the style. Theological, political, historical, scientific, or experiential, or indeed anything that paints a vision of the future. A good grammar checker will tell you about spelling and commas.
Favorite Genres
Not entirely sure as I like most stuff. I prefer something with a soul rather than purely secular. But I like Sci-Fi, anything Christian, and also 'What-if' type speculations with plausible plots.
Least Favorite Genres
Anything that fails to look for a way out of the darkness. You can be dark, just don't wallow in it. Generally, I try to steer clear of Fantasy, and most Dark or Horror stories just make me laugh or grimace due to their ignorance of the dark side.
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I have really liked some of the heartwarming dramas I have read here particularly personal stories. Thought-provoking poems or stories are cool also though I am no expert on poetical forms.
Least Favorite Item Types
Anything that is just an affirmation of the dark side. I hate empty words. I always look for human intelligence. I try and avoid Fantasy and Horror where there is no metaphorical resonance or connection with real-world truth.
I will not review...
I mainly review at random and just see what grabs my attention. I will usually skip stuff I do not like unless it gets me riled or if it is interesting for other reasons.
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Review of My Little World  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and you have set this to be open for public review despite its content

Reader Experience

Just go away, I am at peace in my own little bubble and you are intruding. Don't slam the door on your way out.

Commentary

Reminded me of the famous actress Greta Garbo's famous misquoted saying "I just want to be alone" Apparently she actually said, "I want to be let alone" which is very different. But it seems that you are going with the first meaning which begs the question as to why I am able to review this poem at all. Is there a hidden subtext that says "I want to be seen to be insisting that I be alone because I want to advertise how happy I am with my own company". Is this a simple aversion to my presence or whoever inspired the poem in the first place - "you should leave me alone" or is this what it says - I really want all other human presences out of my life, finally and definitively forever. In which case I would suggest the poem was quite sad and missing out on a whole world of possibilities. A poem can be good but never self-sufficient. It uses language and concepts that others invented and which you absorbed into your inner thought life, it obeys rules that required a social consensus. A world without others is much reduced and if taken to the extreme would require a private language inaccessible to others to be employed also. Since this is not done in this case I have to conclude the author does not really want to be alone and in that case, the poem is a lie, a lie to self as much as others. It does not reflect the true heart agenda of the author at all and has not been properly thought through.

Thanks for a provocative read


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed to try and work out what you were saying.

Reader Experience

The poem reads as if the author has been in many battles, but were these in the abstract gaming world or in the world of flesh and blood? He provides an emotional history of fear, insecurity, maniacal pride, happiness, horror, and hope as he has journeyed through many challenges

Commentary

One of the fastest-growing industries in the world, this Pandemic, has been gaming. The worlds, gamers meet in, are becoming ever more colorful, action-packed, and indeed realistic. Millions of gamers have congregated online, oblivious or indeed welcoming of lockdowns, that have given them more time to play. It is an extreme world where life and death happen several times an hour but where the human soul is always given another chance to fight again. When these are the boundaries of one's world, I guess emotions and soul reactions to life the universe, and everything are also defined in their terms. The challenges reach ever further into one's mind and experience until the world outside the gaming room door seems less and less real, less and less inviting and unexciting by contrast. A whole generation, of men especially, are immersed in a world of continual combat, locked in dark caves and neglectful of what lies beyond those walls. They never touch or taste another human being. It is a new a more exciting form of monasticism. This does not make their soul's struggles any less real but it begs the question of whether the worlds we have created inside our machines have started to cage our souls or to set them free into hither too unexplored, vast, virtual expanses. There appear to be no limits to these new wide-open horizons and people are disappearing into the cloud at an alarming rate. The streets are empty.

Thanks for sharing your poem. This was my reaction to what you wrote. If I got it all wrong please forgive me and move on.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the theology

Reader Experience

The author explores approaching God in terms of a detachment from the world and a leaving behind of its troubles.


Commentary

Christian theology by contrast with Hindu theology is incarnational. By this, I mean the body matters as much as the spirit and is a part of us. When we are resurrected we are not resurrected as incorporeal ghosts but with physical bodies. So the notion that we must leave behind the physical to unite with the spiritual, with God seems wrong to me. God is present with Mother Theresa caring for orphans in the gutters of Calcutta. God is present in the mother cradling her newborn child with wonder and thankfulness in her heart. God is present in the small acts of kindness that transform a person's day, outlook, and life and lends joy to all and sundry. God is present in the priest who swaps with a Jew in a concentration camp and goes to the gas chamber in his place. Love is incarnate and with us, like Christ was with us, fully God and fully man in the same person. So this poem seems like a form of asceticism to me. We can approach God with eyes and souls wide open. Love is demonstrated in a physical world, not in a retreat from it. We remain real human beings even when we are spiritual ones. We transcend without losing the common touch, taste, smell, sight, and sound of our humanity.

Anyway, that was my reaction to what you wrote, you are of course free to ignore it.

I was unsure if khalish was an unresting, troubling sensation or a person.

Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Here I Am  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the underlying theology.

Reader Experience

The author climbs to his god, who lives in a temple, on the top of a hill. He moves from his troubles and pains to transported joy and the sound of the divine worship.

Commentary

In the first stanza, I thought you might be talking about Rome which also has 7 hills. The movement of the devotee to the high place, a place of reverence and worship, is common to many of the world's religions. The notion that it is my decisions, my risk, and my effort, that allows me to reach god is something that I, as a Christian, believing in justification by faith, do not share. God can meet us in the valleys or on the mountain peaks. We are saved by his grace, not our own efforts. Another thing I noticed was the color. India is a very colorful place and its religious priests and temples are bedecked with color. But it is also a fertile land and one can look down from the mountain top and see life in abundance there also. Yet many of its most holy men wear rags and are colorless, living ascetic and impoverished lives. So even within the confines of the Hindu outlook, I wondered to what extent climbing the 11 km of steps to Tirumala was a social activity, dedicated to raising funds for the temple and bonding communities of pilgrims and to what extent it was a truly spiritual exercise. I do like that in India religion is so important and so much effort is given to putting it in a central place. This adds the perspective that life is so much more than just a mere material struggle. But many Indians I meet or chat with online today are quite materialistic and indeed nationalistic, so I wonder if the old devotion to Indias 333 million gods is fading in practice while being shouted so aggressively into the faces of India's Christian and Muslim minorities.

Regarding your writing style, I have nothing to critique as this was very well done. Thanks for sharing.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Received this via random review and it looked interesting

Reader Experience

The grandparents may have terrorized the author's youth. But now they seem insignificant and the burden of bitterness carried all these years is lifted.


Commentary

It seems that the grandparents were a little tyrannical and narcissistic. This left a degree of bitterness in the author. But returning as an adult to visit, the power of these memories and bullies is shrunken to the point of water under the bridge to him.

There is still a tinge of bitterness in the instinct to gloat perhaps and even forgiveness is given with the clear message that they no longer matter, so sounds a little vengeful. But the message here is clear the author has moved on. So it is a poem about psychological liberation from childhood trauma and a new freedom.

As I said this liberation does not seem entirely complete and a slightly dark tinge to it. But thanks for sharing your thought provoking poem.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and was touched by the theme as I have kids of my own.

Reader Experience

The child's bedroom seems empty when she is gone. The 27 carved Elephants stand guard, from a shelf a loving parent installed, mournful witnesses to an absence.


Commentary

Loved this but it was also so sad. With teenagers of my own, this is a day fast approaching for me also. Yes, their rooms, now, so full of life, character, joy, and stories will seem vacant when they are gone. This story makes me want to enjoy the time I still have with them. But their rooms are also their own private space to which parents are occasionally invited even now. With Zoom and Whats App, they are currently hubs of international activity, but I guess the silence will come soon enough.

You might want to check out Grammarly as you have a lot of missing commas and articles in this piece.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Received this via random review and since, as a married man, I just received Valentine's card from an anonymous person I thought it was topical

Reader Experience

The author is single and proud of it and suggests a format for Anti-Valentine's day celebrations

Commentary

This was funny but might be still a draft as there are spelling mistakes:

Untile = Until

Missing words:

that's why called SINGLE - that's why it's called SINGLE

The footnotes are all empty.

It sounds a little inauthentic because clearly, the author has scheduled time to cry alone, so part of the resentment of the romantic day forced by couples are those who are single is a bitterness informed by previous experience.

But hey I am married and do not appreciate receiving pink and glitzy cards that suggest that my marriage does not matter to the sender and without any comprehension of what would actually work with me in a Valentine's Day card. This business-driven occasion imposes burdens on singles and seeks to sabotage marriages with unreal expectations.

So maybe I will join you on your anti valentines day single pride march after all.

Thanks for sharing.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed to discuss the insights in the poem

Reader Experience

Various relationships, life experiences, and frustrated expectations have left the author feeling down.


Commentary

OR:
Failure is the one I learn from, it helps me to grow stronger
Winning is an occasional pleasure, usually requiring hard work and perseverance, and a commitment to quality, and when it happens I need to get it into perspective.
Order or discipline is a decision, that is followed through and after time is engrained in good habits
Love is forever and permeates everything
Hope is in God as He never lets us down
'Irony' is a pal of mockery and usually gets it wrong
Cunning is required when the stakes are high
Wicked is the devil and all his demons and all who aspire to his goals.
My family are not perfect, are scattered all over, but somehow the bond between us remains
These relationships are the context, but you are you and can make your own decisions.
This was a little whiney but today is a new day.

Thanks for sharing

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Review of Courage  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for a poem about courage

Reader Experience

Did not know Lizzie Velazquez until I was inspired to find out by this poem. A simple google search will reveal why this woman is worthy of the poem's adoration. She was once dubbed the 'world's ugliest woman' but is actually the victim of Marfanoid–progeroid–lipodystrophy syndrome and had extensive experience of bullying while growing up. This lady is now a motivational speaker.

Commentary

Courage takes many forms, in fact so many it is almost a personal question to ask 'what am I truly scared of?' and 'do I have the courage to face that down?' But this lady is brave by any definition and I found the poem inspiring enough to discover her story. As the poem says she takes her years of pain at the hands of others and turns it into the tools to build others up. Remarkable and brave!

The poem is content-driven rather than fitting a more structured style-driven format and as such is a powerful and passionate affirmation of a brave lady.

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Review of Princess Diaries  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed because it was funny

Reader Experience

Princess in a tower guarded by a firebreathing dragon. Think this sounds like Shrek and the princess Fiona rather than a Brothers Grimm tale. It also has the same irreverent modern authenticity to its style.


Commentary

Genevieve sounds like a normal teenage girl, who probably eats too much and does not do enough exercise. She has caged herself in a 'maiden in the tower' fantasy that she decries as sexist and out of touch with her choices and desire for freedom. Her mother and father's wishes provide the background to which she reacts. She waits for a rescue, bored out of her mind but is not too keen on the baggage that might come with such brave action by a dragon-slaying hero. Her thoughtful annihilation of the old fairy tales does not leave her with much sympathy for the plentiful princesses trapped inside these dreams.

A highly amusing and authentic take on the old fairy tales or at very least the more modern adaptations of them in Shrek, Dragonslayer, and the like.

Thanks enjoyed this. You might want to check out Grammarly or a similar tool as there are a lot of missing hyphens, commas, and some spelling mistakes here.


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Review of Our Last Walk  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and stayed because it was about a dad and his daughter.

Reader Experience

Nicole's parents live in different places. Visiting dad, who lives with Grandpa and Grandma is a special event for her. But dad has made some mistakes and he is sick and does not have long for the world. She needs to be careful around him but has some special moments. Knowing about his sickness changes her but moves her closer to her father in his last days.

Commentary

A powerful family drama with a tragic underlying storyline. It is heartwarming to see father and daughter spending special time together. It is heartbreaking to know that these times will eventually run out. I guess every father knows that one day his daughter will leave, it seems harder for both when it is the other way round. Loved this story which was authentic and emotional without being extreme or judgmental about the situation that the father had created by his mistakes. There is a lot of love here with no obvious mistakes.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Tetrafied  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed because I liked the title.

Reader Experience

Alice is picked up by Jack in a bar. But she is scared off by fish.


Commentary

I liked the play on terrified and Tetra fish to produce Tetrafied.

Alice was a little easy to pick up and came across as being a little desperate until the Tetra Fish provided her with her out. Her mother's put-downs about her appearance, and the lack of confidence that may have resulted, did not read as an entirely convincing excuse for that.

You started with the POV with Alice and ended it with Jack which spoilt the flow of the text.

There are no stylistic or grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Space Lasers!  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Reviewing this as preparation for doing my SciFi entry for February. So I will try to be neither ingratiating nor insulting.

Reader Experience

A plot to destroy all pineapple serving pizzerias on the planet using space lasers.

Commentary

Found this to be immensely amusing and also insightful as to how lasers work and what their real potential actually is. The plot could only happen in America, a culture of billionaires who have the resources to fund their whims. But I guess it is Musk et al that are getting us back to the moon and on to Mars so not complaining. Not sure how Cutter planned to manage the audit trail of vapourising people from space. It would have been obvious OurSat put the satellites up there. Baker sounds like the techie and the story is told from Edgar's POV. He seems to be the Laser expert who likes Pineapple in his pizza and like Cutter will do what is necessary to see his vision realized.

Found one small mistake:
So Cutter really did have the cash to find his insanity. = So Cutter really did have the cash to fund his insanity.

Anyway, now that I have read your story it's time to do my entry.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Received this via random review and stayed to see this guy die.

Reader Experience

A PI is observing a very immoral character, on behalf of his wife, who is filing for divorce. He is with a curvaceous blonde who it turns out saves the wife a load of legal fees and seems to be a version of Judge Dredd.

Commentary

There were a lot of issues with the text:

He must good with women = He must be good with women

the rumors of - remove the space

the four weeks I’ve = the four weeks, I’ve

envelops = envelopes

But where, I - no comma

the nearby construction and smack - construction site

Thanks for sharing


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Received this via random review and was intrigued by the subject

Reader Experience

A well-sourced account of PTSD. This is an interesting overview of the experience of having it and how it affects the senses.


Commentary

I find this subject quite fascinating and as your article pointed out it is not just soldiers that get this. We can all experience traumatic events in our lives which in turn can impact on our senses.

You might want to look at how you use commas. I found the following issues:

day in and day out, - no comma needed

is PTSD, or post-traumatic stress disorder - again no comma needed

the experience repeatedly, - remove comma

come home battered, and scarred - remove comma

Some return home to their families very differently to how they left them - Some return home to their families very different from how they left them

before his last tour, now finds - no comma

being shot at, and - no comma

air-freshner= air-freshener

dread in her, because - no comma

In combination with therapy some - In combination with therapy, some

help shoulder the pain, so - no comma

Thanks for an interesting read

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed because heaven was visiting earth

Reader Experience

3 heavenly apprentices Kirsten, Edna and Chloe, who may have been around for centuries in Edna's case are playing cupid. The drama has them in some kind of club watching over 3 girls Maya, Beth and Sandy. Beth seems to be growing up in all the wrong directions, Maya is right about stuff but comes across prudish to a rebellious teenager and Sandy acts as peacemaker. Any way the match made in heaven is supposed to be Maya with Scott as heavens choice for her, he comes across as a world weary, pro-Choice feminist who believes women should be allowed to make their own mistakes. Then a black cloud approaches the newly connecting couple.


Commentary

Was not sure what heavenly values were being affirmed here, nor why Edna had such a minor role after all these centuries of Divine instruction. Maya sounds like she has the right instincts in the wrong place, with the wrong people. Maybe Scott and Maya can cheer each other up though. Also this was a pro Choice woven into an account of a heaven sent marriage arrangement team which seemed an odd combo.

But the dialogue itself was intriguing albeit from cultures I have never inhabited.

Thanks for sharing



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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for the hilarity of the school bug fest

Reader Experience

The school class assignment where every school kid got to bring a bug to school. But the authors preying mantis is expelled after hunting food and saying grace in school.


Commentary

Loved the last line "my bug was expelled for preying in school.". Liked the rhyme and rhythm and the content kept us all entertained all the way through. Great poem, thanks for sharing.



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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed because it was clever, or at least sounded clever to me.

Reader Experience

A list of contrasts point to a doomed relationship:

- On independence day he proclaimed his love.
- Words that win her AND that predict disaster
- Passions that will devastate the landscape of our desire


Commentary

Independence is not a good background for relationship.

Not sure what kind of words look like the backdraft of a twister nor how they could win a woman in the first place, but some girls like bad boys I suppose.

Passions that generated the perfect storm and end in a devastation akin to Armageddon sound both interesting and slightly evil at the same time. Probably best to steer a course around those though.

The poem was advertised as bitter, but I found it so extreme it was amusing, and I thought the contrasts were quite clever. Might just be tired after a busy day at work though. Clever how you integrated these impossible words and phrases into a love poem also.

Thanks for sharing.




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Review of Ashen Halls  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Received this via random review and stayed because I loved it

Reader Experience

Unlike a photo in the sun the lover's memory will never fade. The memory sounds naughty but unforgettable. It imprisons the lover in the ashen halls of remembering to be tortured for a lover's sins.

Commentary

Well you said it really well. The first stanzas rhyming scheme was not duplicated in the second but the rhythm seemed ok anyway.

Guess I would have to object to the implication of sin being worth remembering or worse the conviction that some experiences are too good not to remember regardless of whether sins or not. So imprisonment and torture may fit the crime of refusing to let go of illicit passions and move on to sunny outside where new and purer loves and romantic moments beckon.

Liked this, thanks for sharing.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed because I generally like your stuff.

Reader Experience

Two paths, poetically described, of blood and wine, of roots and joy.

Commentary

Seems like a choice to return to the womb, or go off with the pretty woman, who is probably not much good for you. Staying with what is familiar, or running away with what looks like fun. Obeying the wisdom and traditions, with which you were raised, or drinking the wine of foreign lands and new adventures. Both choices seem quite worldly to me and to belong, by themselves, to the same road - a broad highway to destruction rather than the narrow path that leads to eternal life. I say that as a man who married a foreign woman and ended up in a strange land.

Not sure about this line:

and told never to stray - did you mean - and were told never to stray

Thanks for another thought provoking read.

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Review of Blacky  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Received this via random review and stayed because I am a cat lover

Reader Experience

Black cat, with tricks, beats entitled princess, who just looks pretty and purrs.

Commentary

Seemed this was a male led decision, though maybe the mother also realized the uniqueness of the black cat's marketing. Most likely a long haired white Persian would have cost a lot more also. That said our cat is white and girly and well completely non functional really and as entitled as they come, so who am I to prefer the black cat in your story. In fact, on reflection, the black cat behaved pretty much like a dog to win it's domestic kitty status. Very Machiavellian! Indeed will his new owners really be able to trust this new cat.

Think you missed a comma here

Then I rolled over on my back = Then, I rolled over on my back

Thanks for an enjoyable read.

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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Received this via random review and stayed for the music of the mountain people.

Reader Experience

Based on Songcatcher movie, a poem that articulates the richness of the mountain people's song collection

Commentary

The movie concerns a woman who does not make it in the patriarchal world of musicology but instead finds a mission in the mountains collecting the songs of the people there. Their songs are a product of the pain of their harsh living which they have endured since their ancestors came from the even more ancient Europe. They tell a story of struggle and perseverance that is quite inspiring and of the simple joys and pain of mountain living. So the poem articulates this communities songs and the connection between these songs and the mountains. There are overtones of a feminist theme in the view that the songs are passed down through the female line. There is a simple purity to country folk music like this which is powerful and enduring and it would be a shame if songs like this were to be lost.

It is not the mountains that sing any songs but rather the people who survive them.

The following needs some attention:

and the kinfolk sing along...
and the kin folk sing along. - why a gap in the second kinfolk

when the mountain sings the ancient songs...
when the mountain sings the ancient songs. - Why three dots on the first line not the second. Should be the other way around?


Thanks for sharing.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Received this via random review and was hooked from the first line

Reader Experience

Amanda has a green car as a present from her father, who left her mother as a single mum to raise her. She plays with it but Gary messes things up. She tries to get the police involved but that did not really work out how she intended. Now there is talk of her going to live with the dad she hardly knows, but who gave her the green car.

Commentary

Loved the story but did not like Amanda, Gary or the mother that much. All of them were selfish and careless in their own ways. But can see why you won a prize for this description of a dysfunctional character from a dysfunctional background.

Sorry this is a fluff review as I have nothing bad to say about this piece - it was brilliant.


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Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Received this via random review and I stayed because I wanted to stay. (Think that qualifies as a truism).

Reader Experience

Author picks a baker's dozen of truisms and then majors on 'You can lead a horse to water, but you can't make him drink'.

Commentary

A bedrock of cliches and truism supports the English language culture but this author is bravely attempting to debunk one of them to demonstrate his rising star status and to cast doubt on everything we thought a truism. Apparently you can make a horse drink, solution involves a hose and duct tape. But applying this principle of forced opportunity on to kids and animals may involve visits from child and animal services. But maybe plastic hoses and duct tape were not actually available in the true age of horses so it might have qualified as a truism then but less so now?

Loved the last line: if they die, I quit beating them

Just a few suggestions:

Dogbert relies = Dogbert replies

"squeaky wheel" at first, because I know they can be replaced - main clause needs no comma with because

Thanks for a very amusing article.

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Review of Autumn Interlude  
Review by LightinMind
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Received this via random review and stayed because this brought back memories

Reader Experience

A child's first day at school from the mothers perspective


Commentary

I have done this with son and daughter and there is a pride and a sadness woven into this experience. Pride at the confidence with which they moved into their new worlds and sadness at the loss of what was deeply special and will always be remembered. So the child returns from this new world of school and new friends animated and excited by a larger world and shares with it a mother or a father who he begins to leave in this moment. The journey has begun to leaving home, getting married having kids of his own and the space he leaves behind grows inexorably in his absence.

Loved this powerful poem


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