A very good job for your first try. I cannot say I
understand all that you are trying to say, but I like
your play of words. I can't say I understand a lot of
what famous poets are attempting to get across, but it
sounds good. I think your poem sounds good also. Keep writing and it will come clearer, and clearer.
Welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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What a fasinating read this little Gem is. I thought you did a wonderful character study and even though
you could have used the written word for u (you) and
urself (yourself) it kind of added to the scare and dare tactics. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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Oh, I love this little essay, it sounds just like
something I would write.
I feel the same way if I logon and I see that little
zero I feel so bad I logout again until I get myself together.
Thats why I subscribe to all the Newsletters just so I know there will be something in my e-mail to read in case I see that 0. Thank you for sharing and also welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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What a lovely little gem of a poem Wren on what makes WDC, work for you. I could feel how much you love it here. Reading your piece makes me feel like I'm talking with you on the telephone. You know how to captivate your reader and that is wonderful. Keep up the wonderful addition and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
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Your story has really touched me so very deeply! It's lovely.
You are right about your one reason for being on this
site! It, is because you love to write and share your
talents with other like minds. I have read much of
your work and never tire of it. Thank you so much
for sharing this beautifully written piece with us,
and we love you at Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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I enjoyed your essay on what it means to be a member of WDC. I feel the love and the strength you've gained just being some place where you can be who you want to be and write what you want to write. Thank you for sharing the wonderful information about the great things that have happened because of you and your friends at the WDC. Good luck in the contest, and never stop writing.
Sincerely
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What a heart wrenching story you've written about
how Writing.Com came to be a place of refuge for you. It was that way for many of us nearly in the same way! It's a home for what could become lost works of art.
Thank you for bring that to our attention, and lest we not forget that what happened to you could happen to any of us. Thank you so much for sharing your story, and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
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Oh! My, what a darling read, I could not stop
smiling from beginning to end. I could have been
reading a little one act play, and you had a very
captive audience. Thank you so much for sharing this
piece and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
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What an enteresting view you have on writing.
In fact it seems to be far removed from the
make-up of the contest! But I must tell you that I
enjoyed your little story, and the very honest
remarks came across quite well. Good luck in the
contest and do continue to write.
Sincerely
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Thank you for correcting! It is lovely.
To tell you the truth, I just read it
again and it certainly brought tears to
my eyes. It's even more lovely today.
I'm so sorry about your eyes, but your
soul makes up for them. Take care and
never stop writing. It is a perfect five.
Sincerely
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I like your poem very much, but it seems to need
a few little errors cleaned up. Like putting spaces between your words. 'youre pretty face' shouldn't it be your? I's should be capitalized. Over all a very
lovely work keep it up and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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What a beautiful drawing and I could see the wings so clear as they spread open wide, to go in search of those wonderful, loving arms. I could truly relate to your poetry and I will be visiting your port again to read more of your work. Thank you so much for sharing this one and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I love your poem and the words are lovingly placed
and tell such a beautiful story I‘m not sure what went
wrong..
I don’t know if you meant to use small caps where it should be capitalized, or if this is how you intended it to be.
You started with capital letters line 1 and 2, then never again. Maybe you had a reason, or this is a form that you use.
I read it like it was perfect! I would have given you a perfect five if you'd left it all in small caps. Should you change it I'll be happy to change the rating.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I feel this little poem touched my heart as it speaks
so much truth. I think that everyone needs to cry sometime for some reason in their life time. I've heard people say they never cry, others they can't cry, I really feel sorry for them as I feel a deep cleanse from deep inside whenever I do cry! After a wonderful peace comes over me at the end. Thank you for sharing.
M Duci
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You've written the poet's song! You've painted the canvas with one stroke of your brush and in its wake
a wonderful treasure has come into view. You have been given a beautiful gift please hold on to it and never let it go. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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What a touching poem written about someone so very
special. Your words show the love and emotions that
your writing evokes and I hope that you'll continue
to write and share your beautiful gift.
I found only a very few little minor errors which can
be fixed quickly: I'm not sure if you meant 'So many memories, or some many memories,' 'Somethings should be Something's.'
A lovely work and I'll be back to visit your port again and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Oops...I don't know if I should laugh or cry! This
is a cute little mess we've found ourselves in and
hope somehow it can all get back in shape and that
everything will end up all right.
I love these little limericks and I'll be saying
Oops for days until someone pulls my coat and tells
me that’s enough. Thank you for sharing, keep up the
great writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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This is all a Nanny wants to hear and feel the love that you have expressed so beautiful. As a grand-mother I feel that life would be so complete just to know that I'll be remembered by my grand's for something so simple as playing in the snow and making something sweet for a treat. I can feel the love she must have had for you as well, and I know that she rests so much more comfortablely. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I love enchanting tales and you are very good at spinning them. I look forward to reading more of
your 'Well Women' stories. I found no errors what so
ever in your story. Yes I could see the story within
a story! I thought the idea of the girl becoming the
tiger who became the pet to the prince very well done.
Thank you for sharing and please continue.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Today, I heard a similar reading from the book by
Kmora Simmons (Baby Phat clothing line) I found your
ranting exceptional and very true.
But maybe because I'm growing older these days and realizing that I make me happy first and foremost that I don't have time to worry about what others may think or feel about me. I just want to spend the rest of my life living it "My Way" just one day at a time. I'd like to think I allow others to do the same.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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There is something about this poem, that I like very much. Maybe the fact that it is from the darker side of you, yet it is very captivating! So, much so that I could not stop reading it over and over to see if you by chance meant one thing, and I was getting something else. But I love the way you put down the words and let it flow from you without a thought of what would come next. This is the way I think writers should write, and that is what I feel you've done and quite well, I love it. Keep it up and welcome to Writing.Com.
I found your short story very enjoyable. I especially liked how you introduced your characters to each other.
Sounds like this is a great opening for a longer story.
I'd like to know if they stayed friends, grew up and went off to college. Good job and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Nice little poem! I'd love to see this cutie a little
longer, and please fill me in on what else you can do while the wind is blowing and we are moving with the flow.
What a lovely piece of work. Some of my best friends are 'TREES.' I live in the California Rain Forrest and
spend many happy days among them. I sometimes don't feel the need to write, but if I go among the trees I become so inspired.
I love ever stanza of your beautiful poem! But I must admit the last stanza is my favorite.
Only one thing I'd like to see you add, would be a little reference to the Ents. Some reviewers may not be familiar with the ENT people of the earth forest.
'A race of giant, tree-like people whose purpose was to protect the forests of Middle-earth. By the end of the Third Age, the great forests had dwindled, and so had the Ents, but they were still to be found in Fangorn Forest.'
Keep up the great writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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This is my last day before I leave for Italy, but I just wanted you to know how much I love your poem,
'Caged Bird.' I have to admit it brought tears to my eyes and I can't tell you how talented I think you are.
This was so beautifully written in acrostic, something that is not easy to do. Hope you do well in the contest.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I think you have the start of a very good song. What I do see that could use a little revision would be to put your song into stanza's and correct several of the little typos by sending it through your spell checker.
Some of your wording needs to be reworded. Other wise I like your choice of words and look forward to reading it again when you've made your revisions. Best wish's and Welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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