I love your poem and the words are lovingly placed
and tell such a beautiful story I‘m not sure what went
wrong..
I don’t know if you meant to use small caps where it should be capitalized, or if this is how you intended it to be.
You started with capital letters line 1 and 2, then never again. Maybe you had a reason, or this is a form that you use.
I read it like it was perfect! I would have given you a perfect five if you'd left it all in small caps. Should you change it I'll be happy to change the rating.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I feel this little poem touched my heart as it speaks
so much truth. I think that everyone needs to cry sometime for some reason in their life time. I've heard people say they never cry, others they can't cry, I really feel sorry for them as I feel a deep cleanse from deep inside whenever I do cry! After a wonderful peace comes over me at the end. Thank you for sharing.
M Duci
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You've written the poet's song! You've painted the canvas with one stroke of your brush and in its wake
a wonderful treasure has come into view. You have been given a beautiful gift please hold on to it and never let it go. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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What a touching poem written about someone so very
special. Your words show the love and emotions that
your writing evokes and I hope that you'll continue
to write and share your beautiful gift.
I found only a very few little minor errors which can
be fixed quickly: I'm not sure if you meant 'So many memories, or some many memories,' 'Somethings should be Something's.'
A lovely work and I'll be back to visit your port again and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Oops...I don't know if I should laugh or cry! This
is a cute little mess we've found ourselves in and
hope somehow it can all get back in shape and that
everything will end up all right.
I love these little limericks and I'll be saying
Oops for days until someone pulls my coat and tells
me that’s enough. Thank you for sharing, keep up the
great writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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This is all a Nanny wants to hear and feel the love that you have expressed so beautiful. As a grand-mother I feel that life would be so complete just to know that I'll be remembered by my grand's for something so simple as playing in the snow and making something sweet for a treat. I can feel the love she must have had for you as well, and I know that she rests so much more comfortablely. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I love enchanting tales and you are very good at spinning them. I look forward to reading more of
your 'Well Women' stories. I found no errors what so
ever in your story. Yes I could see the story within
a story! I thought the idea of the girl becoming the
tiger who became the pet to the prince very well done.
Thank you for sharing and please continue.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Today, I heard a similar reading from the book by
Kmora Simmons (Baby Phat clothing line) I found your
ranting exceptional and very true.
But maybe because I'm growing older these days and realizing that I make me happy first and foremost that I don't have time to worry about what others may think or feel about me. I just want to spend the rest of my life living it "My Way" just one day at a time. I'd like to think I allow others to do the same.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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There is something about this poem, that I like very much. Maybe the fact that it is from the darker side of you, yet it is very captivating! So, much so that I could not stop reading it over and over to see if you by chance meant one thing, and I was getting something else. But I love the way you put down the words and let it flow from you without a thought of what would come next. This is the way I think writers should write, and that is what I feel you've done and quite well, I love it. Keep it up and welcome to Writing.Com.
I found your short story very enjoyable. I especially liked how you introduced your characters to each other.
Sounds like this is a great opening for a longer story.
I'd like to know if they stayed friends, grew up and went off to college. Good job and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Nice little poem! I'd love to see this cutie a little
longer, and please fill me in on what else you can do while the wind is blowing and we are moving with the flow.
What a lovely piece of work. Some of my best friends are 'TREES.' I live in the California Rain Forrest and
spend many happy days among them. I sometimes don't feel the need to write, but if I go among the trees I become so inspired.
I love ever stanza of your beautiful poem! But I must admit the last stanza is my favorite.
Only one thing I'd like to see you add, would be a little reference to the Ents. Some reviewers may not be familiar with the ENT people of the earth forest.
'A race of giant, tree-like people whose purpose was to protect the forests of Middle-earth. By the end of the Third Age, the great forests had dwindled, and so had the Ents, but they were still to be found in Fangorn Forest.'
Keep up the great writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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This is my last day before I leave for Italy, but I just wanted you to know how much I love your poem,
'Caged Bird.' I have to admit it brought tears to my eyes and I can't tell you how talented I think you are.
This was so beautifully written in acrostic, something that is not easy to do. Hope you do well in the contest.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I think you have the start of a very good song. What I do see that could use a little revision would be to put your song into stanza's and correct several of the little typos by sending it through your spell checker.
Some of your wording needs to be reworded. Other wise I like your choice of words and look forward to reading it again when you've made your revisions. Best wish's and Welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I would love to see this continued perhaps using other still life forms to include this little essay. I love the take on your poem, your words are very moving and beautifully written. Please continue it, so charming. Keep up the great writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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What a sweet letter to a friend in need, hope all is going well for him now. Even though it was not a very long letter it held a lot of meaning and friendly advice. I like your writing and the way you express your emotions to your friend. Best wishes and Welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I must say you are a very talented young writer and I'm sure you'll go far. Your piece is very touching and beautifully worded and written. I found no errors and good luck in the contest.
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What a darling essay, I couldn't stop the laughter and the tears that clouded my already foggie eyes. Then came the choking on the laughter. Everything you've written you've written about me. I just rolled! I could see all the actions that you spoke of and oh my goodness I could have read on forever. Non errors and good luck in the challenge.
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Four wonderful lines and you've captured my heart!
I love reading the meaning behind the words spoken by it's author. Perfect. Good luck in the contest, looking forward to reading more of your work very soon.
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What a delightful short story! I found it amazing that someone would write a story about the appliances and which one would be the reigning queen of the kitchen. Unique.
I like the picture you painted of your characters; they came across very good. Just a few errors like
spacing but nothing that you can't fix. Great read
and I look forward to reading more of your work in the coming weeks.
Sincerely
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What an adorable little poem, I love the colors that you display and of course I must add to that your Muse, of course. Good luck in the contest and I look forward to reading more of your work in the near future.
Sincerely
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My name is M Duci and I'm one of the reviewers for
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Welcome to this weeks Newbie Challenge Contest.
The river is a restful place and you painted the
picture quite well. I could see the fish jumping, and
the river churning. Good piece and welcome Casey to Writing.Com. Good luck in the contest and looking forward to reading more of your work in the coming weeks.
Sincerely
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What a little budding beauty. I could see the womb earth moving as these tiny footprints made their way forth underground, then spring forth with brilliant colors. The colors you painted are still imbedded in my mind. No errors of any kind. Good luck in the contest.
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I found your short story very sad and painful. Here we
have a best friend killed by the boy friend and the boy friend being put to death for his murder.
But what was not very clear is how it came to be that the best friend or the boy friend were able to enter
Reika's home, with out her knowing? Needs a little clarification here.
'One night, Reika was awakened by a loud yell,
and in her horror, she saw her bestfriend,
Ken, at her feet.. dead.. bloody...
and standing next to Ken was
her Boyrfriend, Lei, holding a bloody knife..'
It might sound a little better if Lei was standing beside the body, instead of next to Ken. Also you might
want to separate bestfriend to best friend, and Boyrfriend should be boyfriend.
Over all good piece, keep writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Being a native of California and living in the Califorina rain forrest there is alway that little
thought that goes through your mind in summer, will
the animals be safe should we have a fire? Your poem touched upon how it can happen so fast and blacken even faster. Your painting was quite visual.
I truly enjoyed your poem and wish you luck in the contest.
Sincerely
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Letter Home is darling, I only wish I could have
had more visual paintings! Like the weather was bliss,
but was it warm, hot, cold I couldn't see it.
The evening meal was lovely but what was on the table?
The third stanza just needs to have a little rewrite, I didn't quite get the meaning.
'Listening to the forecast of weather
We’re due for several days of sun, said her
That is one thing I’ll better remember
To include in my first letter'
Good luck in the contest and I look forward to seeing more of your work in the coming weeks.
Sincerely
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