I love to read anything that is for children! I have two of my grandchildren over for the weekend and I just read them this little cutie. They are still laughing. You are very good at writing for children and I will read to them again some of your other work because they enjoyed it so much.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
M Duci
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What a wonderful tribute to this person in your life!
You've been given a greater gift just for being there, greater then even you could know. He is your gift from God, and you are his gift. I don't believe that things happen by chance! People come into our lives for reasons we can never know, only God knows and we don't question God'. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem, and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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What a lovely little story of two people who didn't belong to one another, only to meet on line and take it a step further. Better to know before it had gone any further that most times online means! ONLINE.
Great piece and look forward to reading more of your work in the near future.
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M Duci
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You are not only inspired by Poe your writing has
streaks of his genius genes running in your veins.
This is quite good and the pictures it conjures up are very believable. I can see this very pale figure with her arms outstretched on the bare floor. The blood running from the dagger into a crimson pool.
Thank you for sharing, and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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For a young man of fourteen you are certainly showing signs of being a great writer. This poem shows just how much promise you have and never give up on your dreams or writing. I did notice that you use small caps for I's. It will look much better using large caps. Keep up the wonderful writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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You are very much the poet, and quite good at it.
I enjoyed this one very much and it conjured up things from the past that made a remarkably impression of someone from years long ago past.
Thank you so much for sharing this one and welcome to Writing.Com. Keep up the great work.
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M Duci
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Very short and very much to the point. I like that
in this free verse poetry of yours. I like all your
lines but the first two caught me a little by surprise.
But after reading them over again I fully understood their meaning. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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Sometimes life can lead us down many different paths, and we'll travel many crossroads in one short life time. You did a good deed by letting go of someone who had not yet experienced all that life has in store for them. You also did a good deed for yourself in not taking that person on the same path you traveled with the drugs and dropping out of school. I hope they found what they needed to make their life full, and I hope that you have found the life that will fulfill you. Your writing was done in very good taste, thank you for sharing.
Keep up the great writing, and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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This is my kind of writing, I loved reading every single line. You've painted a lovely picture of two lovers caught up in their own dream. Such a wonderful delight to read. My favorite lines although I love them all are:
'Effortless
Like the air we shared
In slumber moments before.'
Keep up the great writing and welcome to Writing.Com
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M Duci
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I like this poem very much and I found myself looking for the riders face. I feel it has so much potential but it needs a little more clarifying. Like, was he a jockey, a race car driver, or was he riding a motorcycle? But over all a very good read. Just a few little fixings will make it better. Keep writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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heared-heard
noone-no one
borned-born
What are you blind?,-remove the coma.
watsin-not sure what this word means?
What a poem of pure sadness and strife! I hope that
one day the person will find it in her heart to forgive the person that made her life so unwanted.
You are a very gifted young women and I hope that you'll continue to write and share with us here at
Writing.Com. Welcome.
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M Duci
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I'm so very happy to see that you are walking with 'His Spirit.' I feel that this is one such
place that one can come for letting go of anything that is not pleasant in their lives, and being able
to write and tell about it helps in more ways then
one. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful
knowledge with us and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I must admit that I love this poem. Some might say that the use of small caps would be incorrect, but
because you kept the whole poem in the lower case
I give it a perfect five. Your words describing the
play between the sea and the wind were done with so
much delight that I found myself playing the game along with them. Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I've enjoyed reading your short story and will hopefully get a chance to read more on the boy
wonder in your next chapter.
The story is something that I think every young
twelve to thirteen year old and even older will
love. Keep up the great writing and welcome to
Writing.Com. I did see one tiny typo: 'I couldn’t find am adequate word to describe him.' Am should be an.
Sincerely
M Duci
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This is one to keep forever! It takes me right down memory lane when my grandma would tell us wonderful
stories of those bye gone days of long dresses, of
horses pulling buggies and wagons. Then the stories
we were told by our father and mother of all their wonderful memory's, and of course we couldn't relate,
and now when I tell these stories to my own grandchildren, they laugh and continue playing their computer games. I laugh too! Because I know that one day the tables will turn. Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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I can see that your life is like one of many lives,
with its ups and downs. Hopefully it will have many more ups then downs. I quite enjoyed these little metaphors of yours, and the challenges they presented one in putting your life in "A Nutshell" I like how you put the Spanish in for the big stick. Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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Hello Chloes Secret,
What a beautiful way to look at death. I lost my husband in 1998, and it took years for that moon
to smile down and let me know that I was now free! But one day it did, and with it came someone quite dear. Never to take the place of that very special
person, but to fit inside an empty space. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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What a wonderful, loving picture you've taken and how wonderful I feel knowing that what you've seen in your mirror is who you are. 'Beauty is in the eye of the beholder,' and you have taken that big step forward you should be so proud of yourself. With self confidence life can take on a whole new meaning, and I believe that is just what you have done. Congratulations on taking a perfect picture, and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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I'd say you had a little Angel with you on that particular night and that you were not to be on
that train. I hope that you'll always have your
gift of sight, and that one day you can help others who are in need. But for those who were aboard that
train, it was because they were meant to be...Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I'm not sure just what this story implies but I can see some truth in it no matter what. I could swear I was reading something from Revelations. The thought is scary but the idea is valued.
Ezra's roll as weapon maker was very interesting, but even with all his weapons he could not save them nor could they save themselves. The end was quite surprising! I do wish that, this could be the way of the world! that man will make plow's and whatever it takes to run the world, but never weapons, never again.
Keep up the great writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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This is just so very beautiful! I will print it off and frame it, just as a reminder that 'He walks with me, and talks with me,' each and every day that I live.
My own father passed away several years ago and he reminds me so much of my other Father.
Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful tribute and keep up the great writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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What a lovely description of not only the once beautiful flowering blossom, but of nature it self,
as the beauty of youth lingers awhile and just as suddenly removes the oil and tightness of the skin
leaving in its wake sags, bags and shinny baldheads.
Thank you very much for this reminder that nothing last forever. A remarkable read! Keep writing, and welcome to Writing.Com.
M Duci
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What a wonderful Mother you had who was able to prepare you for the challenge that life can present.
There are many pitfalls on the way to growth and thank God for all the wonderful, knowledgeable Mothers who softened their young daughters lives as well as their beds. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
M Duci
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These are always such sad stories to read, and there are so very many such sad stories on this site. I pray it is not your story, as you mentioned it just came from out of know where. But somewhere at the very time you put this writing to paper it was happening out there someplace, too to many children, male and female.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com
M Duci
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What a lovely essay you've written, and I must agree with you 100%. Love is all you say it is. Love Is. I love each and every line of it. But for some reason these three lines stand out for me! I love them.
'Love is taking a look at yourself, no matter how difficult it may seem. Never force your beliefs and ways of life onto another.'
Your writing is beautiful and very fulfilling keep right on writing, and welcome to Writing.Com
Sincerely
M Duci
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