What a beautiful poem Intuey! This one brought fresh tears to my eyes. I never got to say good-by to my son when he was killed in the line of duty, but for years I've always felt him close. So, I thank you for this one it was a wonderful piece.
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Mduci
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This one to keep! I love nature and this Tanka is adorable. It fits the way I feel about my grass and
my yard in particular. Thank you for sharing and
glad I stopped by to visit your port once again.
Looking forward to coming back again real soon.
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Mduci
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What a beautiful sound and picture of mother nature at her best. You gave such a clear and visual picture, and the little dog added right into the frame. Beautiful, thank you for sharing this perfection, it could not be better.
Welcome to Writing.Com, and I look forward to coming again very soon.
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Mduci
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I truly love this piece, and even though their are no punctuation marks it still is perfect too me.
I felt her slide up to you and whisper in your ear, I could see the cultivating seed being planted in the garden of your mind. Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com. Great read, write on.
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Mduci
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What a tale, and you just never know about these fast food chains anymore. True or not I refuse to dine in one for love or money. So, somewhere in the back of my mind must have been this same thought.
Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to coming back to your port for more.
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What a beautiful sweet piece on the unfolding of the rose. I feel like that is the way God' intended all of creation to be! Like the unfolding of the rose is the way he meant for us all to be.
Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com. I look forward to visiting your port again real soon.
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Mduci
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Wow! I love this story, and I do hope that you are planning too let us know how to read the rest of this the story.
You've painted such a wonderful picture of your characters and I love the drawing of Gumdrop. Please continue with the story and I look forward to reading
more in the near future.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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Mduci
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Just dropped by for another peek into your port, and
oh! I do love this one to bits. I love dill pickles
myself! Never had them with buttermilk, but I'm ready to try. Thanks so much for this one and keep on writing this good stuff.
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A great story, a great slam, this could not be any better, therefore it is a perfect five from me. Every
stanza is speaking the truth and how very sad it is. The words 'in a child, out a man' seems to be the norm for today. The tears of the mother and her child as he is chained and placed shackles maybe for the rest of his life. Your writing is so very visual, and truthfully heartbreaking. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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Mduci
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This was very funny, not all of them very surprising, but still very funny. I think the answer to #15 would be sidewalk for me and my peers. I think you can take a rest for now, they are very cute. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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Mduci
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The title really caught my eye, and I thought what have I got to lose. Thank you for the invitation and
I must say the party was well worth my time.
I love it because it's really gutsy and I like that in a writer.
Plus it was a great read, I promise to come back again sometime. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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Mduci
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The lyrics to this song are lovely, I only wish I could hear the melody as well. This story tells the story of much hurt and pain hidden beneath a mask that only she can see. I could feel her pain, see her tears and my heart goes out to her. These are my favorite line's: 'Do you know
It's always raining,
Do you care
What I'm explaining.'
Thank you so much for sharing, and welcome to the "I REMEMBER WHEN" group, so happy you've joined us.
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Mduci
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Being a native California I must agree that writing a book is a great escape to get away from the smog.
I enjoyed your poem very much. Very cute and comes right to the point. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com. I look forward to visiting your port again very soon. Great read and keep up the great writing.
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M Duci
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Great piece, great read! I could have read more of this story and never grew tired.
Just a few little suggestions, you can take or leave, its up to you.
'Silent cries say come now in
In the night you two become one
Her heart, soul and body you have now won' I'd leave off the word now
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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Mduci
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I really like this little cutie! To answer your question no I don't believe half of what I see
on my t.v. maybe it's because I don't often watch
the bbc. I'm more inclined to review at WDC.
Great little read and the rhyming was not over done.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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This story was very deep, and how sad it made me feel to know that she couldn't stay still long enough to make it to the wedding. Very sad story and her loss not his. You've done a very nice job of putting this story together and good luck with you writing and your future. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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Love is like that you know! It just comes at you like
a ton of bricks and you'll never know what hit you.
I like your poem and I like the way you tell the story of how you fell in love. Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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Oh! What a beautiful poem, and it did make the tears run down the cheeks. It is such a wonderful day when parents know that they are not the only ones who love with all their heart. That their children need and love them just as much. I hope that you've shared this little beauty with them. Good luck with your writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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This is a lovely tribute to the friend you've made here. I love this piece! It takes me down a river’s stream and cradles me softly in its gentle arms. I could close my eyes and drift dreamily into some unknown land, never taking a backward glance. This is how it makes me feel beautiful.
As you can tell I love it. Thank you for sharing.
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I will never forget that February day when that accident occurred. Everyone’s breath was held for
minutes upon the announcement of his death.
You've written a beautiful and heart felt tribute
to the son of my favorite Nascar driver Dale E. Sr.
Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com. I look forward to stopping by your port again real soon.
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M Duci
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What a wonderful birthday poem, to one own self. A perfect fit for any glove size. I like your choice of words, and each line read wonderfully well. Thank you so much for sharing and congratulations on 'Honorable Mention' in the 'Take My Phrase' contest. I be back to soon to view more from your site later.
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M Duci
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What a beautiful, enchanting piece! Yours is the last for me this evening and I will contemplate on it as I lay my head down to rest tonight. It is very deep in deed! I loved every last line of it.
I wish you the best in your writing, and look forward to reading your longer works very soon.
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I guess you'd call this one 'An eye for an eye.' I'm happy to say I don't know anyone as of yet who has done such a thing, but I know it does happen in just this way! Even in the movies.
Intuey, you've done a great job with this piece and I love reading your work. Needless to say I'll be back for more from the dark side.
Thank you for being this month's Moderator on the spot, for the 'I REMEMBER WHEN' review group.
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M Duci
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I feel that I've known you all my life! Or most of it anyway, depending on how early you were born,
I love your article, and it works for me too. My husband who kept a diary for all the ten years we were married until his death taught me to do the same. At first I thought it silly but after a few month's of keeping my diary I wouldn't know what to do without it.
Thank you so much for sharing your words and welcome to Writing.Com. I found your piece such a pleasure.
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I like the way you've created this little land of Fae, as a place to run and hide when you don't care to let the outside world in. I like this story and other then a few typos, which can be fixed in an instant, it’s a winner, in the short story category.
(dissapointed)is spelled wrong should be disappointed.
magickal is spelled magical.
background
hinge
Fae-if it’s a land
satisfy
pretend that someone here waits for (here)should be her.
Welcome to Writing.Com and keep on writing.
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I think you can take a rest for now, they are very cute. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.