Very nice, I love the beat to each little stanza. Each doing their own individual thing, going somewhere different and never completing the thing it starts out to do. I found it enjoyable, as well a intertaining. I think the last stanza was my favorite. Thank you so much for sharing this little darling and welcome to Writing.Com, also congratulations on being editor of your magazine at school.
Sincerely
Mduci
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Oh! I really enjoyed this story and it kept me captivated from beginning to end. What a perfect
name for Morton the turtle, and you had such a great
understanding of who he was and what he needed! I love
the fact that you gave him back to nature and let him go on with his journey. Thank you so much for sharing the short time you and Morton spent together and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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This is such a little cutie! I like every line, I think you've written a cute little song. I found a little melody somewhere in the back of my head and
sang a little tune, for my ears only. Thank you for
sharing and I'll be back again very soon. Hope you
are having fun at WDC.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a sad and painful experience for any child to go through. My heart ached for this baby and the torture she endured. Your writing of this story must have been very hurtful for you just in telling it. Thank you so much my friend for sharing this story and I look forward to visiting your site each time I come by.
Sincerely
Your friend
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This is a very nice piece, and speaks so well of the person you grew up to be. Peer pressure is an awful thing to have to deal with today and you tell it just like it is for the young people of today. But you see, its not just the teens who are suffering from it the adults are suffering from it too. Everybody wants Angelina Jolie's lip's. I like what you have to say just be yourself that’s my motto too.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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I being a child born to the water lived and grew up a few blocks from the water. I still live in an area surrounded by water! I say all that to say this! You’ve written the perfect poem for me. Tell me you've written about the ocean, a lake or a river running through it, you've got a review from me.
This river sound’s like a river I know quite well and it is all that you speak of. Thank you so very much for sharing this little beauty with me and welcome to writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a little treasure, I like this so very much.
The imagery is wonderful and the visual of the love
you feel for this person comes across very loud and
clear. I hope that they can hear you and will reciprocate idem.
This stanza stands out for me:
'Really, I had never felt like this before,
It is like a bolt from the blue.
Thousand nights come and go,
But I love you and only you.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
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This is adorable and I could hear the narrator so
very clear, children do have the sweetest way of
explaining situations that go bump in the night.
Your writing puts me in mind of another author on
our site Mrs.H, she writes for children also.
Thank you for sharing and I look forward to visiting
again real soon.
Sincerely
Mduci
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I just love everything you write, I think you bring that little girl out in me. I know I should be thinking older, but when I read your poetry I feel like that little girl sitting on my grandpa's knee.
I love children, little children, big children, and even grandma children. Thank you so much for sharing this one it's in my favorites.
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I don't think that would make you a lot different from millions of others who dance to a whole different band.
But if it did it would special just like this little cutie. I love the rhythm, the beat and yes I love the rhyme.
I love each and every line it reminds me of my late husband who was a great singer and musician but had two left feet when it came to dancing. Thank you so much of sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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This is a beautiful poem written to someone you met
while on a trip. It happens often and when it does
there is always something there in the heart that
will never go away.
The whole poem stands out to me but the first stanza is very lovely.
'Lo no so lei recorda qunto
Quelli mesi di Novembre, Dicembre
Quando tutti sembrarono andare bene in luogo
E noi godemmo un po` della grazie di dio.'
Thank you for sharing this lovely piece with us and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
I love this story and could hear the story being told so sweetly from the child. I wonder if you wrote this in english or did you write it first in chinese and later translate? Either way you did a very good job in writing this story. I thought the picture taking was lovely as there will always be those fond memories of the grandmother. Thank you for sharing this story and welcome to Writing.Com
Sincerely
Mduci
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I think the tears have stopped now, so that I can see what I'm writing to you.
This is so very beautiful and timely for so many mom's who are saying good-bye to their youth's and hello to their adult's as they grow up and go out on their own.
I've said my good-byes to my son's and in time they will say good-bye to their own children.
Thank you so much for sharing this lovely letter and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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Thank you for this one, I think it is perfect. Raymond your talent is awesome and I could read on in your port for days. Thank you for sharing, and for being a part of the "I REMEMBER WHEN" group. Keep up the great writing, I'll be stopping by again real soon.
Sincerely
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Yes, I can see it, and should I live tomorrow I will see it even more. Tiny lines at the tip of my eyes, and my lips where I smile. Yes I can see the moments, with you I must agree. Thank you for the reminder and welcome to Writing.Com. I like your poem and it's given me all I need for the moment.
Keep up the great writing.
Sincerely
Mduci
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This was such an interesting piece! I love the fact that you are searching for your true identity and who knows maybe one day it will come to you! That you are the sum total of whom you've always been and therefore you are perfect. Remember Butterflies are free!
I think you are a gifted writer, one who is showing a wonderful potential for reaching great heights. Keep writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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Wow! This was breathtaking and worthy of a perfect five in my minds eye.
Each line better then the last, capturing and holding the reader to the very end.
Thank you so very much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com. I look forward to seeing more from your port.
Sincerely
Mduci
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Somehow I feel this poem goes way beyond my own imagination to a place that is very far away. Very
far away.
I hope that you will find a peace here on Writing.Com,
and place all your feeling and fears in this place
where others who have suffered can help you find that safe place. My heart goes out to you, and please continue to write.
Sincerely
M Duci
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I do like this poem it reads like Slam, and I love slam. I can feel what your trying to convey in this poetry and it touched me and I guess you might say
I learned a little about you.
Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com. Keep writing and never give up.
Sincerely
Mduci
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This is a very nice setting, and I can see you kicking back, relaxing and loving every minute that God' has given you too love and enjoy the realization that this is the 'Good life.' A very nice picture take care and keep writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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I think the will will win once we kill the ego. That is my take and I try hard to live by it.
I love this short six line cutie, and understandable every line speaks the truth as I see it.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
I'm looking forward to reading more from your site.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a lovely little story about the darling fae's,
they are such delicate little things aren't they?
I read and rated another of your stories today, I'll be back to read more but I'm quite a bit behind in my
duties. Take care keep up the great writing and I promise to come back in the very near future.
Sincerely
A fae' friend
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