My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the piece. There were colors in your words, too. It is about you and your steed. You were being followed by your steed. Then the icy river water is where you end up. You end up there in an undisturbed sleep. KEEP WRITING.
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I once gave this a 3.0 I give it a 4.5 now for it is a good piece. There are few mistakes that were found in the whole piece. You did a good job. You have done well. It isn't easy all the time telling somene you care for them. It is hard sometimes to get them to listen. You did good with what you did. So glad that you wrote the piece.
My overall impression is that this is a good collection of works. You did well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the collection of works. I must say that it would have been better to have separated the pieces to make it even better. One loses track of what one is trying to write by putting too much in a small space.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You added colors to your words, too. It is about falling from the place where they were at one time. However, they will rise again.
PERFECT! This is a beautiful picture of your fiancee. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There is so much to this little piece. It is full of color. You would walk the earth to find her if needed. She is all you hope for. That is a beautiful way of being.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You havve done well. You have done a good job. However, there were many mistakes found in the piece. The story was about Girl. She was into horses and such. The mother died or was dead when the story was written. I think that if you re-read your story that you'd find the mistakes that are in there. It is a good story; however.
PERFECT! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You havve done well. You have done a good job. There were colors within your words, too. Bad days do come along for sure enough. How loving though it is that you have someone close to you that makes the bad days not so bad. KEEP WRITING.
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PERFECT! You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors within your words too. I am sorry for your loss. You described her well. With the hoses taped to her face and the other things were similar to what they had for my own mother. Mother passed about 6 years ago,.
KEEP WRITING.
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PERFECT! This is such a sad story or poem. It tells a story of one little girl who is growing up or grown up now to have no memrory of her dad. I wouldn't know how to act should I be in the same situation. I had fifty plus years with my Dad. So, i am the fortunate one between the two of us. I feel bad for you but dont' pity you though. You didn't ask me to be feeling pity when you wrote the piece. You wrote it out of a love for your dad. KEEP WRITING.
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My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors within your words, too. One could see the tide. One could see her walking and having her feet in the water. All of this and more was clear as mud. You did a good job, as I said before. KEEP WRITING.
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PERFECT!This was a great story. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors within your words, too. You did a good job. You have done well. It was something to read for sure enough, I liked the part where she recouped her heart and was able to be a new woman. The one stared her in the mirror was gone. KEEP WRITING.
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This is a sad piece. There is no getting around that. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. It was so sad for hearing or reading about your situation. The day you were dressed in the shorts and the long sleeved shirt and the jacket must have been terribly cold. KEEP WRITING.
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My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have done a good job. You have done well. There was color within your words, too. Yes time is something else for those of us who have to wait for it. It is slow really slow and slower when we want it to hurry up. I know what you mean. KEEP WRITING.
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My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There was one mistake in the whole piece. It was the word "though" for "thuught" toward the end of the story. You did a good however. You did well. It was about Joe the paper boy. A man who was mentally disadvantaged. What I liked best was the cheers the people were givign him. They were behind him.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There was one mistake with the word "and" when it should have been "an" end. There were colors within your words too. There was romance within the piece. It was about Mr. Forever being a Never man.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words, too. it is about becoming older in your years. You aren't sure of being older and liking it. As I get the meaning of your story.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors within your words,too. It is about you and you being in basketball. Heather was your girlfriend and she loved you at one time. It is possible that she loves you still. However, she didnt' want to be with you. That is the sad part.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors added to your words, too. It is about sorrow. The plans you had were not meant to be. It is a hard thing to experience sorrow.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You are speaking of futility. How futile it is or seems to be. Then there is a part of you that gets beyond the futility and you don't have to worry about it any more.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It is about you in your school days. It is about you growing up. It is what you did to the girls and the guys.
What a surprise ending! I wasn't expecting that.Her mother musthave been something else. Giving her the dress was one thing but to let her daughter be treated wrong by this monster was something inexcuseable. You knew what he was after for he was after her and her body.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There was one mistake in the piece. When you used the word "out" at the last of the piece you ended the piece with a preposition. You don't do that or shouldn't have.
Tips for improving this would be to leave out the word at the end of the poem. It will make it better.
Was a good collection of poems. One loses something by wriiting too much. It would have been better to have separated the pieces instead of clumping them together. There was alot to read. From what I did read there wasn't any mistakes. You did a good job. You have done well. There was color within your words, too.
Talking about a surprise ending. I was expectting the couple to be man and woman. I am not against the two of them being women. I just think that it is unusual. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. You have done well. It was really something for it to have snowed in SC in April. There was so much to this piece that was good. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for writing it.
This was difficult to read. I am not saying you didn't do a good job for you did. I am not saying that you havent' done well for you have. It is just so hard to read. There are no mistakes found in the piece. You added color to your words, too. However, with the locals this type of talking is unbeknownest to me. I couldn't make head nor tails out of the way you wrote this piece. Not to be harsh or anything at all. I just didnt' get it..
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