My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It is interesting that you used several forms of poetry. I liked that. There was color within your words. For example the lines where you said:"With heavy heart, uncertain and depressed" sets up a picture for sure enough. Your heart was heavy and you were uncertain and depressed.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow. There were colors within the words. Like the last stanza was a picture. You said:"I reach for your frozen beauty and only find a memory..." sets up a picture of her beauty and wanting to be close to her you only find a memory.
My overall impression is that this is perfect. There are no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was an even flow. There were colors within your words. I could see the urgency of you stopping where you did. I could sense the feelings you had. There are many more pictures that I was able to see. You did a good job.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. I saw the marching band and heard their sweet sound. I saw the protestors and their signs they had. It was so clear. You made me believe it and that is the sign of a good writer. You did it.
My overall impression is that t his is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow to the piece. There were colors to the piece, too. It sounds as if you are wondering who you are or where you are going. if someone will take an interest in you or not. I hope that I got the meaning right about this passage. Thank you for writing it.
My overall impression is this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was an even flow. There were colors you used and used well. It is so romantic. The love is there for the both of you. You resign yourselves to be happy there where you are. The rondevous(sp) spot is yours and his. How beautiful this is. You did a good job.
My overall impression of this is it is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was an even flow. There were colors to your words. For example:"no out-stretched hands no welcoming hugs, no smile..no song..." sets up a picture right there of no outstretched hands or a welcoming hug, or smile o song. All self explanatory. ..
My overall impression is that it is a good piece. There was one mistake found in the whole piece. The word "realsed" is spelled "realized". This is meant to help you as use the word again to get the spelling right. No big deal. There were colors within your words. There was the picture you wanted us to see by your painting it well.
My overall impression is that it is perfect. There are many things a poet could write about when looking at this picture. The Badlands aren't so bad after all are they. They are beautiful. The road itself is a long one. One could get stranded out there if they ran out of gas don't you think.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There were colors within your work. The things I noticed were when you said that you were looking out your dirty windows and smelling the Indian incense watching the cars driving to work. Must have been refreshing to not have to do the same thing. You did a godo job, as I said before.
My overall impression was ti was a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. The picture helped to add some life to it. I am amazed at how many forms of poetry there are. This one was spelled out and most helpful.
My overall impression is PERFECT! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words. There were pictres you wanted us to see with the paintings you painted for us. For example:"Tis only then that you will know Your promise in His Golden Glow' sets up a picture right there.
PERFECT! As always you come up with some great ideas and these are no exceptions. My overall impression is just that perfect. You have hit the nail on the head to use a phrase. It isn't hard to visualize this being done is it? I know in listening to you one can't go wrong. You have been there and know what it is like. I thank you for writing this piece.
PERFECT! My overall impression is just that perfect. I once rated this a 4.5 but feel that you deserve to have the 5.0. You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color to your words. I liked the part where you said:"The morning sun comes up and washes all the pain and hurt i feel." Always good to get that out of the way.
My overall impression is that it is a good piece. There were some mistakes in it; however. The "feris" is "Ferris" wheel after the one who invented it. You did a good job. There was an even flow. There were colors within your words. You painted of what it is like being with the perfect young man or woman.
My overall impression is that it was a good piece. There were some mistakes in the piece; however. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There were paiintings you wanted us to see with the colors you used and used well. The chorus seemingly was a long one. However, I don't know that much about music but do poetry. This is what it seemed to me to be a poem. Lyrics yes is what it is. I understand that.
Good story. There were no mistakes found in t he whole piece. You did a good job. There was somethings I thought of that I did and it was dumb, too. It is sad that you were busted. I know what that must have been like. From my dad driving for he was the only diriver in the family. He was stopped one time for having an outdated tag on his car. That was an oversight my dad but i was in the car at the time.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole pieice. You did a good job. There was an even flow to the piece. There were colors within your words. Ah, there is nothing like having a bath at the end of the day. To use candles is one thing i wouldn't be used to do doing. However, for some it is all right. You did a good job on this. Be proud of it.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There was the rainbow I was able to see, the lilacs, roses, and the other things you described in this piece. The ground muddy was another picture. All beautiful pictures was within this piece.
PERFECT! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. I was able to see you holding your dad's hand. I was able to sense the breathing being labored. There was no where for you to be but by his side. God bless you for standing with your dad.
Good but short piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. A thousand wives? I don't think so. This was a funny piece. That was what it was supposed to be is funny. I enjoyed reading it. You have a talent for writing. Do more with it than what you have and you will become even greater.
What a great tribute to your grandfather. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words It was about his life and the lives of your family members. There was so much to this piece. I liked the last few lines of your piece most of all. "A promise kept of the same ritual as the last A new era we keep close to our hearts Never to fall away from all that is close to our blood.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was much to this story. It was somewhat awkward for Leon to have all the attention that he was getting. Opal was somthing else again. Dressed as she was and attractting the others at the bus stop. There were other pictures that I was able to see. AS said before, you did a good job.
There were obvious errors in the stories. You did a good job; however. There was much in this piece. There was the two stories of Eleyana and Isabell. You made me believe that Isabell was a girfl not an animal I liked the story about the ice cream. It was rather interesting.
Good but short piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow to this piece. There were colors to your words. It is clear that you are talking to or about your love. There is romance in the piece. I liked the last couple of lines where you said:'In the end, and evemore May a brethless love endure." That was sweet and so well done. Good job, as I said before.
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