PERFECT! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There were pictures to be seen within your piece. He was bent on getting back at the ones who took his job away from him. There was no redemption for these people. He was going to do it up right with all he took to do the job. You made me believe. You did it.
Good but short piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There were colors to your words. It's about loving someone and wanting to be near them. There was romance in the piece, too. However, with time it became not a big deal to you. Made me think that it wasn't so special after all.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within in your words. There were pictures you wanted us to see. It was about the time you were blind as an exercise. You had the choice of either being deaf or blind. You chose to be blind. Then, you went with that to wind up on your kister. There were so many pictures that I saw within this piece. You did a good job, as I said earlier.
Great advice. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. It is amazing how many things you brought to light in this piece. Anger, resentment, jealousy to name a few are for the protagionist and the antagionist. One can hurt another with the anger, resentment and jealousy. Surprior(sp) feelings sometimes get in the way. You brought that out. You did a good job, as I said earlier.
PERFECT! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow within your piece. There were colors you used and used well. For example, it isn't money that will buy happiness. You said the same thing. There is something I didn't know that you brought out and that was happiness is the game and not the score.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There were colors within your piece. For example:"My soul and myself with Celine afore lifeless remained and lifeless shall be so." that sets up a picture right there.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow within the piece. There were colors you used and used them well. They painted pictures that you wanted us to see. For example:"You've torn my brain And ended my desires."
There was one mistake found n the whole piece. The word "Bought" should have been "Brought". There was an even flow to the piece. There were colors within your words. Growing up there must have been beautiful from the way you described it. You did a good job.
Yes, it is something else for the ladies of the night to be like that. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. I was able to see them walking about and doing tricks. The men they knew as John was the man after one thing. I think it would have been a good idea to have made this into a piece for 18+ or older. However, you did a good job, as I said before.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. It was like a forsty morning with the snow on the ground. There was the black sky which I could see. There was the trees all barren with the touch of winter. So many pictures was there to see.
Good but sad one. You had no errors found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There was the fire I was able to see. There was Angela who was small at the time. There was the time she became twelve years of age. It was all so clear. The makeup that Auguste wore I could see that. You made me bellieve in this story.
What a piece! This one was very good. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You had an even flow to your piece. There were colors to be seen. It was as if Death was a humanbeing. According to songwriers Death is an angel. However, you don't see it that way I liked your perspective of what Death is really. You did a good job..
The rhyming was perfect. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was a flow to your piece. There were colors you added witihin your words. It was picturesque to have traveled where you traveled. For example, in one of the lines you said:"The sky is gray and the trees are bare" it sets up a beautiful picture of the sky being gray and the trees being bare due to it being Autumn.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow to this piece. There was color within your words. So, you like spiders. I don't have any use for them at all. I am afraid of some of them Like triantlers(sp) for one, I wouldn't want one of them near me. I can see the good they do from this piece. I guess I should change my mind about them.
How true this is! People can be so narrowminded that they can't see the forest for the trees. You did a good job. There was a flow that was present. You used your colors well. There were pictures to see like the people looking down their noses at you. Just because you are gay or the character was gay doesn't mean to treat you like a second class citizen.You have rights too. You have privileges like the straight world does. What makes you so unique is a simple orientation that isn't simple.
That's telling him. He made you feel all of these things. You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was a flow within your piece. There were colors you used well. There were pictures one was able to see within your piece. He tried to make you angry. He tried to do so many things that it didn't work. You asked him if he felt better. I wouldn't feel better I would feel ashamed.
Loving tribute to a man who isn't your father but could have been. There is so many good things in thid piece. You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. The flow was there. The colors were there, too. Painting ipictures of this man lifting you up when you would fall and how he had a light to light the way for you in an area that was dark. You care very deeply for this man and it shows through this piece.
There is something right about saying no sometimes. There are many things one would not do or should not do after being told no. You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors to your words. For instance, like when you said:"If I say no Who will get mad." itis like you know that someone is going to get mad at you for saying no. Sometimes it is necessary for saying no and meaning it.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow. There were colors within your words. There were pictures to be seen within your piece. Like when you said:"There is always the artist who is never lost" sets up a picture that one can depend upon and is never lost.
Good but sad piece. This is regrettable that you didn't realize before what he was doing in keeping the family together. Working when he didnt' feel like it and doing things for you. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece, by the way. You did a good job. I could see the bills mounting up and no way to pay for them. The insurance surely isn't enough to take care of it. You said that right.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. The flow was there well done. There was color within your words. There was romance in the piece. It is like you were looking into his eyes and finding what you were looking for. The last line of the piece says it all. "Your loving eyes engaged, fulfill viisions once lost." That sets up a picture of his loving eyes fulfill visions once lost.
Good but sad story. There were no mistakes found in the whole pece. You did a good job. There was an even flow to the whole story. it was something for Mary to have wished for the deaths to stop and then afterward pray for them to start again. The stars must have been willing to have answered her wishes. You made it sound believeable. Thank you for writing t his piece.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. It was something else for the painting to be a Van Gogh. It told many stories i am sure. There was romance in the piece too. The question "what if" is the right question to ask. The line you said:"I wonder if you ever gaze at the lovely bright night protrait" made you think that maybe they did look at it or they didn't one can't be sure.
How true this is! A person may rant and rave to be manly. However, the womanly side of things are better. They don't rant and rave nor do they look for a gun. They are the balm we need to help things to be better. They are there for a reason. To be calm and serene is what a woman has charge of doing. A man is all out to do this and that. Most of the time without thinking.
How true this is! You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. The colors within your words were well used. You mentioned about the craving of what your husband did. How he kept chiseling away at something until it was done. There were so many pictures in this piece.
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