Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. You used them well. Like when you said:"Fog is thickened" meaning that the fog is thick and hard to see within it. There are others that paint a piicture. KEEP WRITING. Read and review all you can for it will help you in your own work.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was the absent-minded clerk that I find at fault here with your plight. He left you knowing you were in there. There was the colors you used when it came to the parakeets. I could envision them fluttering around you. Poor man in dire straits were you. Glad that the morning came when you could get out of there. Good job on this piece.
Good but sad piece. There were no mistakes found in the piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. The place Ground Zero was smoldering with smoke as you said. That was a picture there. There were other pictures that is almost too much to contemplate that went on that day. You did a good job, as I said before.
Let's start at the beginning. The word was should have been were.
Then in the nineth line you used off instead of of. Then the word quit was better used for quite understand.The word without is one word not two. You repeated it again in the next line Without instead of with out. Even though I'll not i'll Again you used with ouot instead of withoutThen the word throughout is one word not two. I'll not ill congradullate You threw it back not through it back. Without not witth out any one. You might of broke my heart not You might off broke my heart. You might off damaged every part was wrong. It was to be this way You might of damaged every part. Good try for sure just correct these errors and I will re-rate it again higher than the 3.5.
Good piece.. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. You used them well. There were pictures to see within your piece. I saw them. Like when you said:"...you would be even more beautiful' sets up a picture. There were others too that you painted..
Good but short piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within the words you used. You used them well. I liked the part where you said:"Awesome parodies in the blink of an eye." I am sure they were awesome from the description you layed out.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in this piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. One caught the glimpse of the dolphins and the other sea creatures not to mention the other things you named in the piece. Each with a picture all its own. You did such a good job with this piece. I think it was the best of the ones you have written.
This one had several errors that I found in the whole piece. You did a good job, however. There was beauty and romance within your words. The word "horizon" was mispellled you left out the "z". There was as said before romance was found in the passage. There is a sense of love that is strong for Maria. How beautiful it is, too.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was romance within the words. You could feel the love that you have for Maria. You could sense the urgency of being with her. There was color within your words. You used them well.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There was romance within the piece, as well. Like when you said:"Promising the world to never let go" that was a picture if I ever saw one. As said, you did a good job.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. One was able to see New York City a year later from 9/11. Thriving and going on with life. There were many pictures that came to mind in reading this piece. As I said before, you did a good job.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was very important information found within the piece. How the synopsis is to be in length and how if you have 30,000 words in your story that the synopsis should be three pages long. All of this applies very well with an author and his work. As said before, you did a good job.
Good piece. There was one possible mistake. The word "beauty" could have been said as "beautifully". "Plays beautifuly" would be the best way to write that. There was color within your words. There were pictures one could see. Like when you said:"Truth comes with the dark" certainly sets up a picture for me to see it.
Good but sad piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There were colors used within your words. I see it as a boogie man type thing. He feeds off the scared and intimidated. His main audiance is with children. Of course, they don't know any better.
Almost perfect. There was the following error. "Nobody heas my sobs
when it should have been "Nobody hears my sobs" I know it is one letter omitted. However it was distracting away from the piece. You did a good job however on the whole. KEEP WRITING. Read and review all you can for it will help you in your own work.
Good but sad piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There were pictures to be seen within your piece. It is about a little girl who dies. There are so many wonderful things about this poem. You made it sound believeable. That is the sign of a very good writer. You did it. I believed you.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There were pictures within your words. You used your colors well. Like when you said:"Sit in wild chatter listen for truth". It says something to me. Listening for the truth to be revealed is one thing. Sitting in chatter is another. KEEP WRITING.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole pieice. You did a good job. It makes peffect sense for what you said. There is nothing wrong with giving a 5.0 rating. Some of the pieces I have read today have been perfect ones. Honesty is the greatest part of reviewing. Without it then nothing really matters.
Good poll. I can understand why you would ask the question. In time, my keys will look like that too. I just recently bought my new computer so of course the keys are going to be freshly painted on. It is something I don't want to see but it may happen.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. That was a little bit of beinig hard-nosed wasn't it? You telling God to get your car going by morning. I don't think I would have had the nerve. If you didn't do that you made it believeable that you did. That is the sign of a good writer. You did it. You made it very believeable.
Funny piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There was the Lab taking you for a walk. It seemed that way to me from reading the piece. Your daughter got into this too. It was a funny no wonder you laugh to this day.
Sad piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. It was believeable. You made it sound so believeable. That there was a werewolf running after Dominik. It was forbidden for a wizard to marry a mortal. This is quite interesting. As i said before, you did a good job.
Good piece. There was the word realized mispelled realised. That was the only mistake I saw. You did a good job. It is a sad piece, too. It is sad when mother and daughter dont' see eye to eye. There were other pictures found in the piece. You made it sound believeable. That is the sign of a good writer. You did it. You made me believe.
Good but sad piece. There were few mistakes in the whole piece. Please re-read it for yourself and see where I am speaking. You did a good job; however. It is sad when one is treated better than the other. In this case, it was his sister treated well and the boy was always into something that was against his mother. That is most sad.
Good but sad piece. There were few mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job, however. It is a sad piece because you are talking about death. Death is always sad. There was color within y our words,. Like the first line mentioning about the lips being cold. That is for sure. The lips are cold to the touch. The word "whether" should have been used and not "wether".
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