Good story. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There was the man who was running after her that I was able to see. There was the gunshot I was able to imagine. There was the young lady I was able to see and what she asked him plus his answer was heard. You did a good job as I said before.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. It is regrettable that you mom had to pass away. I know that you will see her again someday some glorious day. There were other pictures within this piece,too. Night is the time for rest as you said. The Lord's most awesome show are the stars at night. So much to see within the grasp of us and not many will take the time to see it. You did a good job, as I said before.
A piece that didn't make much sense to me that is. I know it is about drugs and doom from your brief description. But that is about all I know. There were colors within the piece, though. I was able to see pictures you wanted us to see. There were the needles and all that stuff about drugs. There was the picture of doom, as well.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. I was able to see you and the tears. I was able to see the other person in your life. There were numrous pictures I was able to see because you used your colors well.
Good but sad piece. There were few mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job, however. There was color within your words. You used them well. There was the singer which I saw as you described him. There was the rucus going on that I was able to see. There was the girl and what happened to her was all clearly seen. As said before, you did a good job.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job There was color within your words. it was sci-fi lall the way with this story.There were the Brothers who knew the Scriptures or their form of religion. They didn't take into account of Mat understanding their teachings. Mat wasn't real. He was a machine. This is what i got out of this story. As said before, you did a good job.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. You used them well. There was the fact that the realization of things had changed. You were intoxicated by the freedom you felt. That is what I got out of this. I hope that I am right.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There was the accident you mentioned. The passenger's blood was seen. There was the night fading second by second. All of these and more are pictures that I saw. You made it sound believeable. The mark of a good writer is to make the words sound believeable. You did it.
Good piece and a sad one. There were no mistakes in t he whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There was the fact that we talk around race not talk about it. The racial strife is still going on. It is sad because everyone should be counted as equals.
Good but sad piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. There was the things you couldn't say to him because you hurt so much. He didn't want you to be yourself. He wanted you the way he wanted. That is very sad.
Good but sad piece. There were few mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. Painting pictures one was able to see. I saw some and felt bad for you. There is the last stanza with the hope of the sun coming up and shedding better light on your broken heart.
PERFECT! There are so many responsible for being anonymous. It is refreshing to know that when we need help or recognition we can get it from anonymous. You did well in doing this piece. My hat is off to you. There were no mistakes in your words you used. You did a good job.
Great group of poetry works. You did a good job. It makes you want to read all you have to offer. There is so much here. I hope to visit your port again sometime in the near future. That way I know I will be pleased by having done so. You have some great pieces here. You strike me as a Christian and one who believes in the Lord. That is obvious to those who will read your work.
What a surprise twist that was! I was expecting it to be a man living with you. Watching the races seemed like the logical conclusion o it being a man and not a cat. Then he was eyeing you at taking your clothes off certainly made it seem like man instead of a pet. Wow! You had me going there for a while.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was the vision of a dragon flying over and people was astounded. You made it believeable. That is the sign of a good writer to make it believeable. You did it. It was a bit far-fetched to believe in dragons but one could imagine them happening.
Good piece. One of the most needed bits of information is just what you said. Our children is the most important as well as the wife, the husband, the aunts and uncles and all that is concerned. Money should be the last thing we think about instead of the first. I applaud you with this piece. It is so needed and needed badly. Good job.
Another winner, SWPoet! You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was the thing about the clock ticking that painted a picture. There was the other things like the mother getting on the floor with the child. Many more pictures are seen. I rated it a 4.5 which is almost perfect. i hope that you are pleased with the rating.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. You used them well. Like when you said:"Fog is thickened" meaning that the fog is thick and hard to see within it. There are others that paint a piicture. KEEP WRITING. Read and review all you can for it will help you in your own work.
Good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was the absent-minded clerk that I find at fault here with your plight. He left you knowing you were in there. There was the colors you used when it came to the parakeets. I could envision them fluttering around you. Poor man in dire straits were you. Glad that the morning came when you could get out of there. Good job on this piece.
Good but sad piece. There were no mistakes found in the piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. The place Ground Zero was smoldering with smoke as you said. That was a picture there. There were other pictures that is almost too much to contemplate that went on that day. You did a good job, as I said before.
Let's start at the beginning. The word was should have been were.
Then in the nineth line you used off instead of of. Then the word quit was better used for quite understand.The word without is one word not two. You repeated it again in the next line Without instead of with out. Even though I'll not i'll Again you used with ouot instead of withoutThen the word throughout is one word not two. I'll not ill congradullate You threw it back not through it back. Without not witth out any one. You might of broke my heart not You might off broke my heart. You might off damaged every part was wrong. It was to be this way You might of damaged every part. Good try for sure just correct these errors and I will re-rate it again higher than the 3.5.
Good piece.. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. You used them well. There were pictures to see within your piece. I saw them. Like when you said:"...you would be even more beautiful' sets up a picture. There were others too that you painted..
Good but sad piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. You used them well. There sadness in the whole piece. Like when you said:"Uncontrollably I cry" there was a picture if I ever saw one. As said before, you did a good job. It was believeable.
Good but short piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within the words you used. You used them well. I liked the part where you said:"Awesome parodies in the blink of an eye." I am sure they were awesome from the description you layed out.
Good piece. There were no mistakes found in this piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. One caught the glimpse of the dolphins and the other sea creatures not to mention the other things you named in the piece. Each with a picture all its own. You did such a good job with this piece. I think it was the best of the ones you have written.
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