This is a hard piece to read. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words. I still found it hard to read. I mentioned color within your words and there are. For example: "how beautiful you still seem to me your petals floating on the breeze oh who was I to end your life? so here I write in memory. meaning that you still think the flower is beautiful and that it floats on the water or the breeze.
My overalll impression is that this is a good piece. You did well. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color wihin the piece, too. I have to say, though, that it seems more like a cry for anarchy. That there isn't enough of the government to go around to make everyone happy. It seems you are against the government in this piece.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You added color to your words. For example"wish for this war to end just like we all need to hope and wish and pray for this day" sets up a pictrure of the war ending and the troops returning home.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words. It is something that your baby brother has been gone for 32 years. It is sad that you have had to do without him. I am sorry for your loss.
My overall impression is t hat this is a good piece. You had no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color withn your words. It is really something to write poetry. It is great being a reader of the same. The two connect when the reads the work. The last line sums it up pretty well. My little rhyme has drawn us near. You did a good job. That is what happens when reader and poet meet together.
Ah, the alligators of Louisana are something to see for sure enough. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors to your words, too. For example, in the last stanza you said:"Off to th e night of our pirogue an alligator slid off the banks,soft splash, a bumpy-log followed in our wake." setting up a beautiful picture of an alligator slipping off the banks, with a soft splash looking like a bumpy log following after you.
Good piece but a sad one. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did well. There was color within your words. There were pictures you wanted us to see and I saw some. Like for example:"I wonder why they stopped and dreams went away." sets up a picture of something stopping and dreams went away. Self explanatory.
My overall impression was this was a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was an even flow. There were colors within your words. For example:"A day in the life of a blind man Search for the light in infinite blackness" sets up a picture right there. The man is blind searching for light in dark blackness.
My overall impression was this was a good piece. You did well. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have some kind of imagination to have come up with something like this. There is a scientific mind that you obviously have. Your piece had a sense of being believeable. Though, one would say to the contrary. You made it believeable.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. For example:"To want those that are unwanted" sums it up pretty well to want those that are not wanted. Do you know how many people feel of themselves as being unwanted? It is alot of them. Glad that you included that in your piece.
PERFECT! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. Everything is spelled out as to what you will accept and what you will not. It is a good poetry contest. There are options to writing more than the eight lines for other contests. You did a good job.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. You have got romance in there for the piece. There is or are so many things you wish for in this piece. You wanted him to smile for one. You wanted his hurt to end.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It is interesting that you used several forms of poetry. I liked that. There was color within your words. For example the lines where you said:"With heavy heart, uncertain and depressed" sets up a picture for sure enough. Your heart was heavy and you were uncertain and depressed.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow. There were colors within the words. Like the last stanza was a picture. You said:"I reach for your frozen beauty and only find a memory..." sets up a picture of her beauty and wanting to be close to her you only find a memory.
My overall impression is that this is perfect. There are no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was an even flow. There were colors within your words. I could see the urgency of you stopping where you did. I could sense the feelings you had. There are many more pictures that I was able to see. You did a good job.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. I saw the marching band and heard their sweet sound. I saw the protestors and their signs they had. It was so clear. You made me believe it and that is the sign of a good writer. You did it.
My overall impression is that t his is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was an even flow to the piece. There were colors to the piece, too. It sounds as if you are wondering who you are or where you are going. if someone will take an interest in you or not. I hope that I got the meaning right about this passage. Thank you for writing it.
My overall impression is this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was an even flow. There were colors you used and used well. It is so romantic. The love is there for the both of you. You resign yourselves to be happy there where you are. The rondevous(sp) spot is yours and his. How beautiful this is. You did a good job.
My overall impression of this is it is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was an even flow. There were colors to your words. For example:"no out-stretched hands no welcoming hugs, no smile..no song..." sets up a picture right there of no outstretched hands or a welcoming hug, or smile o song. All self explanatory. ..
My overall impression is that it is a good piece. There was one mistake found in the whole piece. The word "realsed" is spelled "realized". This is meant to help you as use the word again to get the spelling right. No big deal. There were colors within your words. There was the picture you wanted us to see by your painting it well.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There were colors within your work. The things I noticed were when you said that you were looking out your dirty windows and smelling the Indian incense watching the cars driving to work. Must have been refreshing to not have to do the same thing. You did a godo job, as I said before.
My overall impression was ti was a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. The picture helped to add some life to it. I am amazed at how many forms of poetry there are. This one was spelled out and most helpful.
My overall impression is PERFECT! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words. There were pictres you wanted us to see with the paintings you painted for us. For example:"Tis only then that you will know Your promise in His Golden Glow' sets up a picture right there.
PERFECT! As always you come up with some great ideas and these are no exceptions. My overall impression is just that perfect. You have hit the nail on the head to use a phrase. It isn't hard to visualize this being done is it? I know in listening to you one can't go wrong. You have been there and know what it is like. I thank you for writing this piece.
PERFECT! My overall impression is just that perfect. I once rated this a 4.5 but feel that you deserve to have the 5.0. You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color to your words. I liked the part where you said:"The morning sun comes up and washes all the pain and hurt i feel." Always good to get that out of the way.
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