Overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. You did well. There was color within your words, too. Man conditions himself against anything or anyone that is not like him. Not all men actually do that fortunately. It is just a few out there too stuck on themsleves which you pointed out so very well. Thank you for writing this piece.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You added colors to your words, too. There was horror in this piece. You were walking along and all of a sudden there was the wolf like creature after you. Now you bay and howl at the moon. Not really but you made me believe that you did.
My overall impression is that this is a great piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. I once rated this a 4.5 stars. I acted rather hastily. I am re-reading it and rating it a 5.0. Iti s perfect just the way it is. it is about the love of your life being 2000 miles away.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. It is about two boys who went to a library. One of the boys had an attraction for the color blue. He picked up the book and took his blue library card out and went to the desk. He got the book and the two went home. It was raining out so they couldn't go and play. So, they had time to read the book.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece but sad. You made me believe that there was such a problem as the two men being together and you being left alone. That is the sad part. You love him with all of your heart and care for him. He accepts that but also wants Mike. That is the sad part again. You wrote a good piece. I certainly believed it.
My overall impression is this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You added color to your words. There were so many pictures I could see. The snow and the ice pellets were very visible. There were more to this piece. All beautiful and special. You did a good job.
This was a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words. It's easy to see yourself looking in a mirror and liking the person you see there even if they are a new person. There was the time needed for healing. You did a good job. KEEP WRITING.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes in the whole piece. You used color within your words. I like the part where you said that he had shown you to be loveable. That you could love back. I would be thankful too if I had somenoe like this. There is a debt that you owe.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words. For example:"Auburn with purple and pinkish hues" one is able to see that. There were others that you described in your piece. All beautiful and picturesque.
My overall impression is that this is a good story or poem. You did well. There were some mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors withn your words. For example: So as the flower blooms in desttruction and the Phoenix rises from the ashes you will rebuild from the rubble". a beautiful picture of a flower blooming and as Phoenix rises from the ashes you will rebuild again.
This is a hard piece to read. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words. I still found it hard to read. I mentioned color within your words and there are. For example: "how beautiful you still seem to me your petals floating on the breeze oh who was I to end your life? so here I write in memory. meaning that you still think the flower is beautiful and that it floats on the water or the breeze.
My overalll impression is that this is a good piece. You did well. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color wihin the piece, too. I have to say, though, that it seems more like a cry for anarchy. That there isn't enough of the government to go around to make everyone happy. It seems you are against the government in this piece.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You have done well. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You added color to your words. For example"wish for this war to end just like we all need to hope and wish and pray for this day" sets up a pictrure of the war ending and the troops returning home.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. You did a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color within your words. It is something that your baby brother has been gone for 32 years. It is sad that you have had to do without him. I am sorry for your loss.
A great tribute to your dear mother is this piece. You must have given the eulogy for it was clear that the piece you did could serve as the euloogy. It is so beautiful. A mother who wanted the best for her children and made sure of it is a great mom. She probably did without so you could have something. That is the sign of a true mother. One that remains close to your heart. You did a good job. Thank you for writing this piece.
What a piece! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. It was a matter of who to believe. Jason or Skip. The two were best friends according to your piece. I dont' know where the policeman came in but I remember Jason accusing Mary of having something to do wiith the policeman. You sure made it believeable. You are a good writer to do that. Keep writing.
My overall impression is t hat this is a good piece. You had no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color withn your words. It is really something to write poetry. It is great being a reader of the same. The two connect when the reads the work. The last line sums it up pretty well. My little rhyme has drawn us near. You did a good job. That is what happens when reader and poet meet together.
Ah, the alligators of Louisana are something to see for sure enough. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There were colors to your words, too. For example, in the last stanza you said:"Off to th e night of our pirogue an alligator slid off the banks,soft splash, a bumpy-log followed in our wake." setting up a beautiful picture of an alligator slipping off the banks, with a soft splash looking like a bumpy log following after you.
Good piece but a sad one. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did well. There was color within your words. There were pictures you wanted us to see and I saw some. Like for example:"I wonder why they stopped and dreams went away." sets up a picture of something stopping and dreams went away. Self explanatory.
My overall impression is that this is good. You had no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was color to your words. It was clear to see that you are talkng to another person. It is clear that you are feeling badly about something. Being jilted is one thing. There are other pictures that I was able to see..
My overall impression was this was a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. There was an even flow. There were colors within your words. For example:"A day in the life of a blind man Search for the light in infinite blackness" sets up a picture right there. The man is blind searching for light in dark blackness.
My overall impression was this was a good piece. You did well. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have some kind of imagination to have come up with something like this. There is a scientific mind that you obviously have. Your piece had a sense of being believeable. Though, one would say to the contrary. You made it believeable.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. For example:"To want those that are unwanted" sums it up pretty well to want those that are not wanted. Do you know how many people feel of themselves as being unwanted? It is alot of them. Glad that you included that in your piece.
PERFECT! There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. Everything is spelled out as to what you will accept and what you will not. It is a good poetry contest. There are options to writing more than the eight lines for other contests. You did a good job.
My overall impression is that this is a good piece. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did a good job. There was color within your words. You have got romance in there for the piece. There is or are so many things you wish for in this piece. You wanted him to smile for one. You wanted his hurt to end.
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