This is a tragic piece. There is so much love going on and then the bottom falls out. You prepare yourself for the inevitable. That should help you get over the losing the girl part of it. But you sum it up in the last line. Hope you're happy. That really tells alot right there. I wonder if the person you were speaking about is happy now or what. Happy New Year. All the best, cubby
A sad commentary of the woman is this piece. You have spelled it out so well as to what was going on and who was doing what. It was a very good story. Your use of words were eloquent. There were pictures to be seen through your words. it was like I was viewing the woman and all that was happening tot her. Happy New Year. All the best, cubby
My overall impression is that this is a sad piece. it was sad that the only thing or person he thought about was a woman. He gave no consideration for himself. He was tied up in the feelings of the woman. His heart must have been bad. That is even sadder. Happy New Year. All the best, cubby
This is a beautiful piece of work. You have done well. You make it seem very interesting to read this piece. I know I was interested. it is a sad thing to cry. I loved the part where you said "and I'm
coming to life
through your eyes
This is a beautiful thing to have said. You have done a good job with this piece. I would like to read some more of your work. Happy New Year. All the best, cubby
This was a rough story for you to write. it was sad to say the least. Your mother had been dealing in dope and manufacturing it. That is most sad. There was going to come a day when she would get caught and that happened on your birthday. That was terribly sad. it is sad all the way round. Being taken away from your mother wasn't what she wanted no doubt of that. However, she couldn't continue on doing what she was doing. I feel for you. Hope you have a Happy New Year. All the best, cubby
You drew some pretty pictures with this piece. One could see the snow and also the flower that was buried underneath the snow. One could see the summer time and the pine trees. Your imagery was well noted. it is truly something for a flower to catch the eye of its beholder. You said so much in such a small space. It was a good read. Thank you for sharing. All the best, Cubby Happy New Year.
This is awesome. It is something that I never really thought about. It is something that must be somewhat true. Death is an angel sent for the purpose of taking one's life. It is something for me to understand and I do very much understand where you were coming from. It is a good story. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You did an excellent job. Keep writing. You have an obvious talent for it.
Good piece but short. You did well until you got to the word angle instead of angel. But I knew what you meant. You did well. You got out of your heart what you wanted to say on the screen. It isn't that hard to get it out in the open by saying something to the one you care for.
But what happened about his mother? It seems that you can add more to this piece. It is a good one. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have done well. There is so much left to say about the story. It is as if you cut it off in midstream. There was not any reprecutions to the story of King Arthur. You can add more to it and make it a deeper story. This is my opinion only.
Was a good prayer. It was full of heart-wrenching words. You have done a good job. You have done well. There was one mistake the word to should have been too at the beginning of the piece. Other thanthat I saw nothing wrong. You put your heart into this piece. It shows so well.
There is nothing left to chance with this piece. It is a good one. it is spelled out as to what is accepted and what is not. I noticed the many postings that you have. Someone is surely doing something with this contest. I wish I could write everyday but my mind doesn't work like that.
A good but sad piece is this one. You gave description after discrription of how things were. The colors you used painted some good pictures. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. My overall impression is that this is a good piece. It is a sad piece as I said earlier. Depression seems to win everytime.
This is a sad piece. It makes no difference that the woman has her own feelings. It is a stalemate for the woman no matter what she does. I hope I am getting the message of the poem. It is a hard thing to just sit idly by and see someone mistreated. I believe the woman or women in your poem are mistreated and abused.
Very romantic. This sets up all sorts of pictures with the colors you used. It was a good write. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was very picturesque. True love blooms for sure.
I get this message. It is written in instant messenger language. It was really something to see the person for the first time from what I read. He or she was in your mind for good. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were mistakes at least to me for using u instead you. However, you written this as you saw it.
This is sad. There was no reason why you did what you did except in your own mind. it was rough to say the very least. There was no mistake that you made in the whole piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. My overall impression is that this is a good job. I hope that you have started eating more and keeping it down. I know what it is to be sick. However, not the sickness you mentioned.
After having read every word I feel the pain. It was something that shouldn't have happened and hopefully it reallly didn't. You made me believe it though. That is the sign of a good writer was to make a person believe and you did it with me. Keep writing. Review and rate as much as you can for it will help you in your own work.
What a good story! It was such a true one. For it happened that Christ Jesus was crucified and on t he cross that you made. I know that you really didn't make a cross but your character did. How regretable it is that Christ Jesus had to die on the cross! It was for everyone present, past, and future. It was once nd for all. Never again will He have to die for mankind. It is such a beautiful act of love.
Good but short piece. There were no mistakes found in the piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. The poor man must be at odds within himself. He suffered a heart attack or at least a heartache. It must have been devestating to him. There was no helping him get over that. That is a shame.
This was a very good piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There were no mistakes found in the piece. I loved the colors you used to paint your pictures within the piece. You painted some pretty pictures. There was the picture about winter and the snow. There was the truth that the lies will come back to haunt you.
Picturesque. It is a beautiful piece. It is a sad one. There are many pictures that come to mind and one of those is about Winter. Frigid temps and all of it combined makes for a beautiful picture. The heart being broken is a sad one. There is hope for the girl. There is hope that someone else will come along and brighten her days.
I get the picture of an hour glass. The sand goes down but never goes up. There is so many things that makes sense about this piece. I am so glad that you wrote it. A picture of an hour glass that the sand sifts through going down and then you turn it over and it goes down again. You did well. You have done a good job. Keep writing.
It was great reading. It was a song that I would love to hear the music. You did a good job. You have done well. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. It was a good piece of beauty and the words made me want to hum the song. I didn't have the music so i couldnt' do that. I ask that you keep writing elsewhere so I can see some more of your work.
It is a good collection of poetry. There were no mistakes found in the whole piece. You have done well. You have done a good job. There was one that sounded like a greeting card. The one about mother was very good. You added color within your words, too.
i have been acquainted with Pay It Forward for years now. I think it is a valuveed part of WDC. There were no mistkakes found in the whole piece. You have done a good job. Youhave done well. It is an interstign part of WDC. To Pay It Forward is what one does. The notes are nice ones.
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