Numb or feeling numb is the thing of this piece. A person can be numb and not even know it At least that is what it seems to be saying. There is so much one that one doesn't know about being numb. It is a common feeling of expression. If I am correct in saying that. you did well in bringing this to us. I thank you for this. Ihope that you will keep on writing. .
It seems you are a cutter and one that will bleed for the pure fun of it. I don't understand why one would cut themselves But Iguess it is therapy for the one who does it. I liked the piece for it brought out the essence of self mutilation in a romantic sort of way. I am a stickler for any romance of any kind. I do ask that you keep on writing. Expounding on the subject would be nice if you are so inclined to do so.Keep on writing. you're good at it.
This was a very good piece that you have on your hands. It is almost like being in the therapist's office yourself. You, it seemed to me was the subject of getting your picture taken. I know I would have stood still to have had my picture taken. Anywaya, it was a good piece and I enjoyed it very muc. you have a way with wortds to make it seem like pictures. Keep on writing.You're good at it.
The thought is there. You are asking this person if they would be with you doing things and going places. I personally feel that the words If I was used too many times and ask that you might check that out you do care and it shows that you want that person along with you. I think you did a great job and that you should keep on writing. You're good at it.
This was a lovely piece. I enjoyed reading it. The only thing I saw as an observation is that you referred to the Lord as you with a small letter for the beginning. This is the only thing I saw wrong with the piece. Your love for the Lord is supreme and you care about Him. It is a quality that not too many people have today. I know that the You is a pronoun. Normally it isn't capitalized But you needto with the reference to God and Jesus. Very good work. Keep writing. You're good at it.
What a story! It was something great. You watched as your dad did this to the chipmunk. I loved how you went from story to poem in this piece. You did an excellent job with this piece. No wonder you loved your dad. It seems he is a fun sort of guy. I detect that the dad in this story has since passed on. It is a large loss for you andfor us your readers. Keep writing. You're good at it.
One can see from this piece that you are a good writer. You are lost in the overwhelming calmness and you try to focus your attentions to somethingmore substanial. You have written but you feel that it a bunch of nothing as far as the paper. You should be proud of this piece. you did a great job and I ask that you keep writing. You're good at it.
I think that the word you are looking for here is breathe. You have breaths and they matter to everyone You are looking for someone to love. That is clear and undisputed. You must take the love that is yours to new heights. It is with that love that you really begin to grow. You have written this well. Keep writing.
This is a great love poem. The characters care for the other. There is love within the one heart to give it to another. I loved the part where you said My heart is yours. You are giving your heart to the person and want it to be that way. You did a good job with this piece. You keep on writing. you're good at it.
Although I understood what you meant to say there were mispellingsall through this piece. However, it didn't takeaway from the point of the piece. You were mentioning about yesterday and today. How they differ and what happens when they occur. Yesterday is lost forever and tomorrow hasn't come yet. I liked the piece and encourage you to keep on writing. You did a good job with this one in spite of the spelling errors.
This is a sad piece to read. You were in love with this person and they left you alone. It is something that happens all the time but when it happens to you you aren't ready for it. I liked the rhyme scheme to this piece. You did a good job. I wish you well in your writing. You're good at it. So, keep writing.
I appreciate what you have written. It is a negative piece no pun intended. You feel better behind the camera and not in front of it. When so much of you is lost to the real world it is something that you have felt for sometime I believe. You need to be in front of the camera and have people see you for who you really are. That is my suggestion. It was a good piece written well. Keep on writing. You are good at it.
A great tribute to the one you had this for. That is exactly how it is for us to have our freedom someone must pay the price and it is sometimes with their very lives. you should be proud of this piece for it is truth and speaks volumes. I am happy I chose to read this one. You have made it a great experience. Keep writing. You'r good at it.
Not one but two pieces I have read and enjoyed. You did a good job with this and the rhyming is excellent. There was oneword I didn't know the meaning of and that word is rend. So please tell me what that means so I wll know the next time I see it. I am glad I chose to read the two pieces and was happy that you wanted to share it with us. Keep writing. you'r good at it.
WHEW! What a story. It was something special to read. you were recalling the first murder that took place with Cain and Abel. Gabriel was someone very special in the story. It was so interesting for you to read this piece. You got to the heart of the matter when you came back to yourself and it was there that the reason for the blood was there. You did a good job with this piece. It shows that you know how to write and I ask that you keep on writing. you're good at it
Good rhyming technique. You have done well. It almost makes one want to attempt to fly themselves in reading this piece. I know one day that we will soar higher than the birds that fly. All of those who have accepted Jesus in their hearts. It makes one want to fly now from readingabout it in your work. You have a knack for writing. Keep on writing and let us hear more of yourwork.
This is a good piece. You have done well in presenting it. You have some questions here that must have an answer. You are thinking about the person that you call Him and it brings up the question are you speaking about the Lord?
He is the answer to all of our problems. If you are speaking about a love then I can understand that too. You did good in writing this. Keep writing. You're good at it.
How special was this piece! You saw an empty vessel. But toyou it was morethan that. it was a beautiful piece of work that the potter did. Life is like that too. It takes someone special to do for you what no one else can do. It isthe Lord that makes a life what it is. People are so full of pride that they don't see the need for the Lord. you helped me to see this in your piece. I thank youfor sharing the piece with us. Keep writing You are good at it. cubby
The piece is simple and straightforward. You are mentioning your love. He is everywhere you look. He must be a good man for that. I loved how you wrote this piece. Though, I am a little confounded as to why you wrote on the right side of the page. It was different for sure. You did a good job here with the piece. It was an interesting read. I am glad I clicked it.
This is so beautiful. It is clearly spelled out as to what is and what isn't there in your heart of hearts. You have done a good job at conveying your message. Spring is the season you speak. It is with blossoming trees and flowers and all the other things that come along with the season. You made it real and I liked that.
This is a grusome piece of work. It is regretable that the person has to endure so much pain. It is a good piece, though. There were pictures to be seen by the words. I would like to get in your port andfind some more of your work. It is a great thing to be able to write. You have some talent todo just that.
Well, it is hard not to look at someone and especially if they care about that one person. Why would you lie? I don't understand. I like the piece for it was short and to the point. you did a good job on this and was pleasant reading. I hope that your work blossoms more and for you to write more than you did here.
This is beautiful and wonderful You have captured my attention with your details of Spring. Though you didn't mention Spring in the piece It is beautiful for you made it that way and I loved it. I enjoy the working you do. You have got a great talent for writing and it shows.
Dear Pat,
I have never seen one like this before. You did a great job with it. I love howyou id colors with this one makes one want to see more of the same. I don' t believe I could do one like this one. You put a lot of work into this and it shows.
My what a piece of poetry; You have described a house that is obviously in trouble of decay. It is a very illustrative piece of work. You did an excellent job with this piece. You could see the rafters and the flooring and the other things. I hope that it is a fictional piece of work. You really know how to gain attention to the details of a piece. Done review for the RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group.
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