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Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Found your piece in the Spiritual Newsletter of 09-26-2012.
The reader is drawn into the scenes you do paint.
One stroke at a time you show the reader the world you awaken to.
Form and structure are sufficient.
Flow is smooth, save for a few minor grammatical snafu's along the way.
The meaning of the message is not lost, they merely serve as stumbling blocks to hurtle.
Pace is slow as the reader takes in the scenery that makes up your day. Beautiful imagery that captivates the reader.
Suggestions for improvement:
Line 1 "peaked" should be "peeked".
Paragraph 5 After al should be "After all
Thank you for sharing in the WdC and write on!
Copenator out!
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777
Review of Poetry Sustains  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An admirer of the Acrostic form.
Your Mirror acrostic is quite the poem.
Form and structure are amazing.
Prosaic nature is beauteous.
Flow is nice and smooth.
Pace is slow and detail filled.
The emotional tie that binds is melancholy.
There seems to be a sense that something happened and you are over it but revisiting it for the benefit of the reader.
The one suggestion might be to bold the 1st letter of the lines, as well as the last since it is a mirror.
It helps the reader see more clearly the words you use to form your acrostic.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Founder of Copenator's Crew
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778
Review of YOLO. Why?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


Found your piece in Noticing Newbies Newsletter of 09-26-2012.
I often use them to garner reviewing fodder.

Your rant about YOLO is telling.
The youth of today are using it as an excuse,
rather than the deep thought it was intended to be.
The emotion you feel is clear to the reader and it's frustration.
Form and structure are efficient.
Flow is only slightly bumpy,
as a result of grammatical snafu's.
Pace is rapid as the end is rapidly reached.
One suggestion for improvement occurs in lines 10 & 12
exceptable should be acceptable.
unexceptable should be unacceptable.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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779
Review of Iridescent Wing  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


Your piece is featured in Noticing Newbies Newsletter 09-26-2012.
I use the newsletters as fodder for reviewing and glad to find yours here.

Form and structure are pristine.
Rhyme scheme is quite a scene.
Flow is smooth and suspenseful.
Pace is rapid and detail full.

The emotional tie that binds is despair,
Why do all those crows come from the air.?
Grammatically snafu free,
no suggestions for improvement needed for thee.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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780
Review of I Am the Vine  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Congratulations on your honorable mention in Stormy's Poetry contest.
You're featured in the Poetry Newsletter of 09-26-2012.

Your form and structure are a hit.
The rhyme scheme is sublime.
The flow is soothing to the soul, the reader picks up on your imagery.
The pace is a slight skipping effect.
The absence of grammatical matters means no suggestions for improvement are needed today.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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781
Review of Upon Words  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


Oh my goodness,
What a beauteous piece.
The poetry newsletter 09-26-2012,
finds a jewel of contentment and peace.

The form and structure are positive.
The rhyme scheme is serene.
The flow is supreme.
The pace is slow and steady on.
The emotional tie that binds your piece is contentment.
Happy to be a child of your parents, you immortalize them here in the image of their wedding day.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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782
Review of Old love  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Poetry newsletter 09-26-2012
Featured your piece round about page twelve.
Fodder for reviewing,
Is what this writer is doing.

Form and structure are clear.
Emotional tie that binds is near.
The reader feels the loss,
Of one whom you well thought.

Flow is smooth and easy on the eyes.
Pace is rapid as the imagery leads the reader from part to part.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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783
Review of Wee (Wee) Stairs  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Poetry Newsletter displays your limerick.
In the 09-26-2012 edition, there she blows.
A puppy needs training.
Oh the task it is paining.

Entertaining is your endeavor.
As the reader, your words does savor.
Form and structure are solid.
Flow is stolid.
Rhyming is sing-song like.
Pace is happy and light.

Write on!
Copenator out!
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784
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
You're in Poetry Newsletter 09-26-2012.
I use the newsletters for reviewing fodder.

A tale you tell that is quite odd.
An apparent poetic dialogue by two at odds.
The reader is caught up in the fray,
Of Ichabod Crane, and taken away.

Form and structure are adequate.
Rhyme scheme is sedate.
Flow is melodious in nature,
As the pace is your imagery does nurture.

Grammatically snafu free,
No suggestions for improvement to ye.

Write on!
Copenator out!
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785
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You are featured in the Contests and Activities Newsletter 09-26-2012.
I use them as fodder to find reviewing opportunities and impressed by your layout.
Form and structure are ample for the type of forum you present.
The flow is a bit jumpy as the reader digests the plethora of data presented.
The pace is suitably slow as the reader takes in the rules, prizes, and the incentives along the way.
Grammatically snafu free attests to the professional piece you place forth in the wdC!
Write on!
Copenator out!
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786
Review of A place to be  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Featured in For Authors Newsletter 09-26-2012.
Form and structure are solid. The form is familiar to this writer, just cannot recall the name of the form.
Prosaic nature give the reader a sense of awe, for your imagery speaks of the awe inspiring site that is the wdc.
The flow is smooth and easy going.
The pace is not a race.
The absence of discernible grammatical snafu's equals no suggestions for improvement are needed.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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787
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Viv featured you in For Authors Newsletter 09-26-12.
It's good to see that 2011 and 2012 are represented and I just found fodder for reviewing more items soon.
Thank you and SM for having the vision and courage to launch Story.Com 12 years ago and for still being here so writers can grow, learn, and prosper in the art that colors the world with it's imagery.
Clear sentence gives the reader a sense of knowing what this forum is all about.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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788
Review of Lost Lyrics  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


Found you in the noticing newbies newsletter of 9-19-2012.
Your piece speaks of the words lost.
Lyrics that are afraid to come forth,
Lest another be hurt and tears do flow.
How disconcerting it is,
To have it all there but out of care, it will always go unsung.
Imagery that wraps the reader up in the turmoil within.
Form and structure are strong.
Prosaic nature lends a melodic tone to the piece.
Like a song is being sung, flowing so smoothly along.
The pace is rapid as the reader is led by a grammatically clear piece to the end and the continued search for the right words.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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789
Review of Stormy Mind  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


Found your piece in the Noticing Newbies Newsletter 09-19-2012.
Into the stormy mind you do deftly delve.
The topic is the greatest of all, that of love.
You hope it will indeed fit like a glove.

Your form and structure are uniquely challenging.
The rhyme scheme is steady and unchanging.
The flow is smooth and transitions are well done.
The pace is somewhat slow, as the reader digests that which you bemoan.

Details that are amazingly well organized,
Imagery that keeps the reader mobilized.
Dominant emotion is trepidation.
It's all up in the air and you're unaware of your destination.

Grammatically snafu free.
That alone gives you a big three.
Write on in the WdC
and welcome again to our newbie.

Copenator out!
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790
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Featured in For Authors Newsletter 09-19-2012
Your form and structure are solid.
The prosaic nature is fitting.
The flow is soothing.
The pace is unhurried.
The emotional ties that bind are peace, anticipation, and fulfillment.
The reader is treated to the preparation of an ice skating lesson.
Grammatically snafu free, no suggestions for improvement are needed today.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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791
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Featured in the For Authors Newsletter of 09-19-2012.
I often use the newsletter for reviewing fodder.
I'm glad to have found your piece in their midst.

Form and structure are firm foundations from which to commence.
The flow is smooth and easy on the eyes.
The pace is unhurried and senses filled.
The reader can see, hear, and feel the intensity in your words.
That's imagery that is used to engage the reader line-by-line.
Grammatically snafu free, you are more than encouraged to write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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792
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Featured in the For Authors Newsletter of 09-19-2012.

What an awesome poem you display.
The details and scenes before us you lay.
The dancer is riveting,
Her skill tantalizing.

Form and structure are consistent.
Flow is steady on and persistent.
Rhyme scheme is impeccable, a real gem.
Pace is unhurried as the reader grooves to the rhythm.
Grammatically pristine,
No suggestions for improvement are needed for thee.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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793
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
You're featured in Contests and Activities.
This is my first exposure to my memory of this forum.
What a great ideal to have a central location for published authors int he WdC.
Your layout is appealing.
Your links are working.
The rules are succinct.
The reader comes away from this forum with interest in doing reviews by published authors here in the WdC.
Flow is comfortable.
Pace is unhurried as the reader digests the data.
No evidence of grammatical matters warrants no suggestions for improvement.
Write on and thanks for the opportunity to find this in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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794
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Featured in Contests and Activities Newsletter 09-19-2012.
The Newbie welcome wagon has been an inspiration to this writer.
I've learned to take newbies seriously and let them know they are important to the community that is the WdC.
Thanks for that!
The structure of your presentation is strong.
It serves as a good base for the reader to follow.
The reader who visits this site feels a sense of welcome, care, and a genuine concern for those we call Newbies.
That's imagery that shines through a forum to the heart of the matter.
The flow is smooth.
The pace is unhurried and detail filled.
The links are working.
The overall impression is: A great place to hang out and to be active in.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


Your fine piece is featured in Noticing Newbies Newsletter 09-15-2012.
A series on the categories of genre available to list your items in.

Form and structure are typical in make up to a short story.
The flow is unhurried and easy going.
The pace is rapid but not too much so.
It' gives the reader enough information along the way to keep his/her attention.
Grammatically clean suggestions for improvement are nil.
Encouraging you to write on!
Copenator out!
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796
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


The little bird is ready to fly.
In the cage he does lie.
Looking for a way out,
He just wants to shout.

You present a good case for freedom here.
The reader is cheering for the bird in a cage.
Imagery that captures the readers imagination.
Even as your character seeks to escape, we wish the same for him/her.

Form and structure are good.
Prosaic nature is fitting.
Flow is easy going, save for a slight hiccup along the way.
Pace is unhurried and enchanting.
One grammatical matter is the only suggestion for improvement.

This cage's holding me back, keeping me = would be better to use "cage is" - cages indicates more than one cage and unless it's a prison, the character is probably speaking of his/her particular cage.

Write on!
Copenator out!
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797
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


Welcome to the WdC and thank you for your review of A Voice In the Wind.
The form and structure are standard and serves as a base for the reader to follow.
Flow is a bit strained.
Pace is slow as the reader digests the information you do provide about the characters and the impact they have on you.
Grammatically your piece is clean and no suggestions along that line are need.
However a few suggestions for improvement are geared toward improving the overall feel of the piece.
1. Category: You show this as an assignment, it is in fact a review and maybe changing it to that category will attract a new audience.
2. Line Spacing. I would recommend double spacing at each paragraph. This improves the flow of the piece because the reader is not constantly looking for a place to breath. Separating the paragraphs gives the reader a moment to rest before moving on to the next item you cover.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of The Fun House  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nice scary story.
Found this in the sponsored items on the left hand side of the page.
Form and structure is an asset to reading ease.
Flow is easy going.
Pace is based upon the part of the story you are reading.
Emotional ties that bind are happiness, fear, terror, and remorse.
That's imagery that keeps the reader fully invested in the story.
Grammatically clean there are no suggestions for improvement needed for this piece.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Amber Alert  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Amazing!
Many kudos for the photo.
Beautiful is the description.
Elegant is the concern revealed here.
Real is the fear and sadness felt here.

Form is well defined.
Structure is succinct.
Flow is melodious.
Pace is rapidly superb.
Grammatical snafu's are nowhere to be found.

Thanks for highlighting the Amber Alert system in such a telling and heart wrenching way. Wow!

Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Help The Homeless  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The title: Caught the readers attention immediately.
My passion for the homeless resulted in just under 100 backpacks and Bibles for the homeless, a shelter has Gideon Bibles placed there, and our church has been making sandwiches once a week for the shelter since the completion of the backpack campaign.
Description: Contest entry makes the reader wonder if you won.
Form and structure are distinctly defined in the notes below.
Serves as a firm foundation for the reader to follow.
Flow is as smooth as can be.
Pace is somewhat slow as the reader hears, sees, and feels the heart of the matter shared through this piece.
Grammatically snafu free, no suggestions for improvement are needed at all.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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