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Rated: E | (4.5)
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The little bird is ready to fly.
In the cage he does lie.
Looking for a way out,
He just wants to shout.

You present a good case for freedom here.
The reader is cheering for the bird in a cage.
Imagery that captures the readers imagination.
Even as your character seeks to escape, we wish the same for him/her.

Form and structure are good.
Prosaic nature is fitting.
Flow is easy going, save for a slight hiccup along the way.
Pace is unhurried and enchanting.
One grammatical matter is the only suggestion for improvement.

This cage's holding me back, keeping me = would be better to use "cage is" - cages indicates more than one cage and unless it's a prison, the character is probably speaking of his/her particular cage.

Write on!
Copenator out!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Welcome to the WdC and thank you for your review of A Voice In the Wind.
The form and structure are standard and serves as a base for the reader to follow.
Flow is a bit strained.
Pace is slow as the reader digests the information you do provide about the characters and the impact they have on you.
Grammatically your piece is clean and no suggestions along that line are need.
However a few suggestions for improvement are geared toward improving the overall feel of the piece.
1. Category: You show this as an assignment, it is in fact a review and maybe changing it to that category will attract a new audience.
2. Line Spacing. I would recommend double spacing at each paragraph. This improves the flow of the piece because the reader is not constantly looking for a place to breath. Separating the paragraphs gives the reader a moment to rest before moving on to the next item you cover.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of The Fun House  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nice scary story.
Found this in the sponsored items on the left hand side of the page.
Form and structure is an asset to reading ease.
Flow is easy going.
Pace is based upon the part of the story you are reading.
Emotional ties that bind are happiness, fear, terror, and remorse.
That's imagery that keeps the reader fully invested in the story.
Grammatically clean there are no suggestions for improvement needed for this piece.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Amber Alert  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Amazing!
Many kudos for the photo.
Beautiful is the description.
Elegant is the concern revealed here.
Real is the fear and sadness felt here.

Form is well defined.
Structure is succinct.
Flow is melodious.
Pace is rapidly superb.
Grammatical snafu's are nowhere to be found.

Thanks for highlighting the Amber Alert system in such a telling and heart wrenching way. Wow!

Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Help The Homeless  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The title: Caught the readers attention immediately.
My passion for the homeless resulted in just under 100 backpacks and Bibles for the homeless, a shelter has Gideon Bibles placed there, and our church has been making sandwiches once a week for the shelter since the completion of the backpack campaign.
Description: Contest entry makes the reader wonder if you won.
Form and structure are distinctly defined in the notes below.
Serves as a firm foundation for the reader to follow.
Flow is as smooth as can be.
Pace is somewhat slow as the reader hears, sees, and feels the heart of the matter shared through this piece.
Grammatically snafu free, no suggestions for improvement are needed at all.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Noticing Newbies Newsletters 09-05-2012, features your piece.
An appropriately rated item, there is such a depiction of a city gone mad and the main characters trek through that city.
Form and structure are an excellent foundation.
Flow is choppy due only to the cringing the reader does as he/she reads what transpires in the alleyway.
Pace is rapid enough, and free of grammatical snafu's making for a decent reading endeavor.
Emotional ties that bind are numerous and you are encouraged to write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Review of Phobic City  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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A very intense piece is found in Noticing Newbies Newsletter 09-05-2012.
You may see the issue that featured you by clicking on the Things to Do and Read Link,
Click on Newsletter Archives, and select Noticing Newbies Newsletter 9-5-12.

I liked the flow of this piece. It was filled with emotionally charged imagery that kept this readers attention all the way through. Well done with the imagery. Serves your story well.
The pace is decidedly rapid as the reader feels the desire to move on felt in the characters marching about on their way to who knows where in phobic city.
Form and structure are superb. The short sentences along the way keeps the reader on the edge of his/her seat, in anticipation of what's coming next.
One suggestion for improvement in addressed below, otherwise your piece is a highly readable and enjoyable featured item in the Newsletter.
Line 4: "the cluttering of heels" - "the {b)clattering of heels
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Found your piece in the Noticing Newbies Newsletter 09-05-2012.
A very endearing piece and worthy of featuring in a newsletter that focuses on those new to the WdC.
Form and structure are solid foundations.
Flow is pristine with but a minor hiccup to be pointed out later.
Pace is a pleasant medium, peppered with such emotionally endearing imagery. The reader is caught up in the fun that is obviously going on and the rise of the author's observational skills. Well done!
One minor suggestion for improvement does no damage to the flow but is clear enough to cause the reader to hesitate for a moment.
Line 2: "listen" might be better as "listening".
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of American Reality  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Featured in the Noticing Newbies Newsletter 09-05-2012.
A heart breaking poem about the plight of the American Dream v/s the American Reality.

Home ownership.
Hopes and dreams fill the home.
Then comes abandonment.
The stress and strain as thick as a tome.

Form and structure are superb.
Prosaic scheme is appropriate.
Flow is excellent.
Pace is unhurried.
Emotional ties that bind are despair, and a deep sense of loss.
Grammatically snafu free, no suggestions for improvement do you need.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A good presentation of what's happening in the group.
Membership list with 9 pages = one big group.
Leadership has to be quite active to keep it going smoothly.
Keep praying Copenator's Crew will become more alive and still praise the Lord for 2 active reviewers (including me).
It's encouraging to see a group investing in the art of reviewing.
It is an integral part of the WdC and what makes it fun for me.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of the library  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Featured in Poetry Newsletter of 09-05-2012.
I'm hungry! That's the feeling your piece filters out.
The good news is that you feed us along the way.
A unique presentation that draws one into the library.

Form and structure are pleasant to the eye and very readable.
Flow is smooth and the details along the way keeps the readers attention.
The pace is medium.
There are no grammatical matters to discuss and you are encouraged to write on forever more.
Copenator out!
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Review of September  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Featured in Poetry Newsletter 09-05-2012,
An acrostic that is this writers passion is well done.
The form and structure are super.
The prosaic format lends to a melodious timber.
The flow is smooth as glass.
The pace is slow and mystifying.
Emotionally the reader feels the melancholy in the midst of this piece.
No suggestions for improvement are necessary at this time.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good tribute to Neil Armstorng.
Our world has lost a legendary astronaut and man.
There is soul to your haiku.
Form is adherent to the syllabic criteria.
The moon is the subject.
The loss is the theme.
The emotional tie that binds is sadness.
One suggestion for improvement would be to change "envelopes" to envelops.
As in the darkness envelops the sky.
It's not being stuffed in an envelope. It' is being covered over by darkness.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Really, dad?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Dads can be a pain to be sure.
But for the most part they care.
Their intentions are pure.
Imagery that makes the reader want to share.

Form and structure are decent.
Flow is okay and grammatically snafu free.
Pace is a little slow.
Rhyming is efficient.

Overall impression: A daughter want's to fly and the dad just keeps grounding her. Ah the classic battle between parents and their children.

Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Chick Flick Quiz  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Didn't do so well.
Chick flicks was a good quiz to take.
The movies were familiar to me but I just hadn't seen them.
Billy Crystal in City Slickers was fun to watch.
Presentation was well laid out.
Flow is smooth and the pace is easy on the eyes.
The absence of grammatical matters to discuss indicates your concern for a good product to release.
Thanks for being a part of the WdC!
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
You have a good bio here Sisco.
I'll be reading the reason for your handle soon.
The form and structure are well suited for a bio.
The flow is smooth and unhindered by grammatical matter.
The pace is slow as the reader garners the information you dispense line-by-line.
Thanks for the plug of the story I did with you and SherryB. It's been awhile but still when I read it I get a laugh or two along the way.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Member Survey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
A pretty comprehensive survey set up.
The format is typical of most survey's.
The flow is consistent.
The pace is slow as you have some places the survey taker has to think about.
The absence of grammatical matters speaks of your detail orientation and dedication to publishing a good piece here in the WdC.
Write on, share on, and above all have fun in the halls of the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Found you in the Spiritual Newsletter 08-29-12.
The story you submitted is an awesome piece of writing.
Form and structure are interesting and serves as an anchor.
Flow is smooth and unhindered by grammatical snafu's.
The pace is steady, resolute, and succinct.
The emotional tie that binds is care and concern for your mother. Something almost everyone can identify with and want the best results for the author.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Found you in Contest's and Activities 08-29-12,
The forum is well organized, distinctive, and the visitors know what's up for bids and minimums are a great way to get the GPs flowing.
Good packages and worthy causes make for a well rounded auction for this sizzling summer.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of When a Cop Sleeps  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Sobering view of a policeman's sleep.
Featured in Poetry Newsletter 08-22-2012.
The haunting demons pepper imagery of anxiety throughout the piece.
Structure is consistently distinct.
Form is well organized and conducive to an even flow.
Pace is slow, filled with emotional tags that rivet the reader to the material at hand.
The reader sees a side of the policeman, the human side, that may not always manifest in the midst of a day-to-day job.
Praying that the demons will dissipate and your sleep will be restful.
Grammatically speaking there are no real challenged that slow the pace of your piece. Encouraging you to write on in the WdC!
Copenator out! BA, MDiv
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Review of Tick Tock  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Poetry Newsletter 08-22-2012, features your piece.
Anxiety is the theme and your Tick Tock is a telling symbol.
Form and Structure: Butterfly like with the wings pinned back.
Prosaic tempo is just right.
Flow is smooth and consistent.
Pace is fast but detail filled that keeps the reader riveted to his/her seat.
No suggestions for improvement are needed in this case.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Is This Death?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Intensity visits the pages of Poetry Newsletter.
On 8/22/2012, a question is faced head on.
Is This Death? Wow the power of that question.
In so few lines you lead the reader on a wild ride.
The imagery is incredibly distinct.
The reader is on the edge of his/her seat.
There is a sense of anticipation that is palpable.
The flow is rapid fire and full of fear, wonder, and lack of hope.
The pace is race track speed. The reader is at the end far too soon.
Grammatically flawless and just plain wwwwoooowwww!
No suggestions for improvement are necessary here to be sure.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of The White Blanket  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Whoa! The wow factor is found.
Spiritual Newsletter closes with The White Blanket.
A very chaotic scene unfolds.

Form and structure are consistent.
Prosaic formula is fitting in this piece.
Flow is somewhat stilted,
as the reader grasps to find the meaning of it all.
The pace is slow, due in part to the absence of punctuation.
The reader struggles to find an end, and a beginning again.
Emotionally this piece hits home. Your imagery equals that wow factor.
Overall impression is that the author has a story to tell that he/she has experienced first hand.
That is the kind of writing that a reader seeks.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of Why Me?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Why Me? A good question.
The Spiritual Newsletter 08-28-12 shares your piece.
Are the answers forthcoming?
Or is there more to learn before all becomes clear?

Form and structure are consistently 4 line stanza's.
This gives the reader a good base from which to begin.
Prosaic format is fitting in this inquisitive piece.
Imagery is efficient and draws the reader in with your queries.
Flow is smooth and easy to follow.
Pace is not too slow. For within these lines are matters that causes one to pause and consider.
Grammatically snafu free, no suggestions for improvement are needed for thee.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Review of The Road  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Spiritual Newsletter 08-22-12,
Finds a cryptic piece in The Road.
The issue deals with milestones,
and your piece deals with the road upon which life is driven.

The form and structure are consistent.
The rhyme scheme is a somewhat rocky road.
Emotionally the reader sees much they can invest in.
That's what imagery is all about, therefore a big 3.0 there!
The flow is stable.
The pace is palpable.
One suggestion for improvement would be to place this in a 4 line stanza format.
This would improve the flow, and the pace of the piece overall.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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