Stunningly vivid imagery highlights this piece.
Featured in Spiritual Newsletter 02-15-2012.
There are so many emotional ties that bind in this piece,
The reader is scarcely able to contain his/her response.
The form and structure are standard and give the reader a base from which to begin.
The scenes are epic in nature,
They flow with the ease of leaves floating.
Paced at an even gait, the reader is all too soon at the end.
Grammatical snafu free presence, leave no room for improvement suggestions.
Write on!
Copenator out!
Leader of Copenator's Crew
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Thank you for treating this story with such respect.
You are featured in the Spiritual Newsletter date 02-15-2012.
A good story told from the main characters eyes, as he attempts to buy food at a grocery store.
From the flow of this piece, the reader is able to discern the fear that is playing through the mans mind. The reader is caught up in the story from stem to stern and is rooting for him in the end.
Common emotional ties are present in this piece and are evidence of your mastery of the element of imagery that makes for a good story.
Paced like an adventure novel, the scenes are played out to precision to the very end. The respite in the park is especially telling, for the tale he relates about he next days headlines is that of a man who expects the worse.
Grammatically snafu free, there are no suggestions for improvement necessary in this review of a well developed and written story.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Featured in the Spiritual Newsletter 02-15-2012.
Your piece brings to bear the plight of homelessness and rescue that does occur from time to time.
Excellent story Eyz. Your characterizations are clear and the reader assumes you are talking about homeless children. All the way to the end you keep the story interesting with the human interaction going on with family members.
Form and structure are solid.
Flow is much like liquid.
Pace is like a gentle walk along the beach,
Grammatical snafu free, to new heights does your piece reach.
Emotional tie that binds is love. There is love in this family and the reader is able to discern that throughout your intriguing piece.
Inquiring minds would like to see a pic of that gym.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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PS: On a personal note we rescued a cat in July who with his two sisters lived in squalor for two months while the owners only kept food and water for them to drink. They had already left but in the end we got Prince and can only pray for the fate of his two sisters. Prince is safe and is the subject of several videos and stories.
Thanks for sharing the story that you like. It is indeed a romantic ideal.
Your piece give the readers the usual handles to grasp as he/she progresses.
The flow is unrestrained by any grammatical snafu's.
The pace is smooth and data filled, so the reader remains engaged.
Imagery is used to invest the reader emotionally in the story. Main emotional factor is rooting for the underdog- love in a political morass of turmoil.
Suggestions for improvement are nil, as your piece surely fits the bill.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Emotional from the beginning.
The heart and mind are pining.
Love that once was is no more,
And the result is a heart so sore.
The imagery is such that the reader feels the scene in detail.
The water ripples and the flow is downstream, you've set sail.
Form, structure, and prosaic nature of this are tools the reader can use to follow along as you speak of a burning heart.
Flow is methodical and detail filled.
The pace is set by the emotions churning.
The absence of grammatical snafu's leaves no opportunity to make suggestions for improvement in this piece.
You are encouraged to write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
Welcome to the WdC.
You were featured in the Noticing Newbies Newsletter of 2-8-2012.
Your poem is compelling.
The emotion is telling.
Loneliness is the main emotion,
The heart is in such commotion.
Form is consistent and flows easily.
Rhyming is top notch and enables an unhurried pace to the end.
Impressive dark poetry from the pen of a sixteen year old.
A suggestion for improvement has to do with using "too" rather than "to" in line 6.
Encouraging you to write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Masterfully etched shaped poetry,
Found in 02-07-12 newsletter on poetry.
The emotional tie is surely love,
Woven in line-by-line, to your turtle dove.
Form is adhered to thoughtfully.
Flow is unhindered by some line breaking.
Pace is at a rate similar to a dance.
Structure this feeling does enhance.
Grammatically snafu free,
You get a kudos for your creativity.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Poetry Newsletter 02-07-2012,
Finds a treasure of love lines.
Countrymom writes of a new kind of line,
And the reader is caught up in it all, just too fine.
Form is very tight and allows for a drifting flow.
Structure and prosaic nature leads the reader on the go.
Paced at a romantic gait, the writer tells the story straight.
And the reader is thankful for the easy gait.
Grammatically speaking, there is no leaking.
More and more of your writing is what we are seeking.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Fyn how romantic is this.
A great ideal indeed for next year.
Writing for or about Rhonda comes easily.
The trick would be keeping it out of her view.
That's imagery that drew this out of me.
The flow is natural and easy going.
The pace is almost hypnotizing and calm.
Form and structure are solid, enhanced by the absence of grammatical snafu's.
Found you in the Poetic Newsletter 02-07-2012
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Sorry for your loss and thank you for sharing this tribute in the WdC.
This is a touching piece that is chock full of emotional times that bind.
Imagery that bring the reader into the story and helps them understand the situation from the eyes of the writer.
It is an honor to read this and to thank you for writing in the WdC.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Your story is compelling.
The imagery is telling.
Emotions that emerge include;
Frustration, sadness, anger, and more.
The reader will be able to connect on many levels.
Form is good, structure is sufficient to give the reader a sure direction to follow.
Rhyming scheme is graceful and the flow is enhanced by this talent.
Pace is somewhat hurried, but the reader gets the message from every line.
Grammatical snafu's are limited and do not detract from your meaning.
Suggestions for improvement are not necessary at this point.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Welcome to the WdC.
Your story has a good start in this piece.
The flow is fairly well established.
The pace is unhurried and you provide a good dose of information along the way.
The reader is kept wondering what's coming next and that's a good thing.
There are some grammatical matters that this writer would be willing to cover with you in a separate email to help smooth out the story. If you are willing, I am willing to help with a good story that you have developing here.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Feature in Poetry Newsletter 02-01-2012.
Life is all about giving in, a good piece indeed.
The imagery gives the reader a sense of wonder, restfulness, and calm.
Consistent rhyme scheme enhances the flow of this piece.
Form and structure are grand.
Pacing is excellent and unhurried.
Grammatical snafu free, no suggestions for improvement for you.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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p.s. upon clicking the link there is indeed a price listed in Amazon, might suggest you include that price in your blurb at the bottom of the write.
Awesome acrostic prayer.
Genuine emotion is here.
The reader knows the Lord can hear.
Your piece brings prayer to new heights.
Rhyme scheme is super.
Flow is like a gentle drifting wave.
Paced at a slight saunter, relaxed and detail filled.
Grammatically speaking, snafu free.
Nary a suggestion for improvement is issued to thee.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Emotional tie that binds is concern for the girl,
Her fear seems to be given life in the swirl.
What can she be going through? Color of red.
Anger, fear, rage, all associated with dread.
Form, structure and rhyme scheme are fabulous.
There is a melodious timber to this that's stupendous.
Flow is as smooth as a bolt of silk.
Pace is suspenseful and detail milked.
Grammatical snafu's are nowhere in sight,
Suggestions for improvement have no voice.
Write on in the WdC morning, noon, and night.
And we will read, review, and daily rejoice!
p.s. Found you in the latest Authors Newsletter,
For a crayon horror story, there are none better.
Copenator out!
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Form, Structure, Flow:
Form is consistent and the structure gives the reader a sense of uniformity.
The slow, lilting nature is a good part of the flow.
Imagery:
Sadness permeates the lines, sinking into the readers hearts.
A home; meant to be a place of solace; is rife with the opposite parts.
Pace:
The nature of this piece affords the reader with an even and natural pace. The reader has no problem grasping the intent of this piece.
Author speaks to the Lord!
Read all about it, featured in Spiritual Newsletter 02-01-12.
Poetic and full of genuine emotional tags,
This piece in no way drags.
Your format is unique,
To the Lord you do speak.
The reader is blessed by this piece,
And is filled with a sense of inner peace.
So well written, so well is this received.
Your heart is visible here, none can be deceived.
Flowing like a gentle spring,
The truth from this does ring.
Paced at a melodic timber,
This poem many will remember.
Spiritual Newslettes Features Senryu, 2-1-12.
In so few words really just five syllables, plus twelve.
Seventeen syllables speak to the growth through trials.
The pageantry is found in the simplicity of it all.
Form is spot on, structure is adhered to and lends cohesion to the thought.
Free verse is suitable to this piece and the conclusion is worthy of praise.
Snafu free and it is this writers honor to have reviewed your piece.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Typingrhyme strikes gold,
Featured in the Spiritual Newsletter 2-1-12, none editions sold.
Freely featured and sent to emails in the thousands,
Exposure for your piece, reviews as numerous as sand.
Overall Impression: Wow this person is a true poet in love with the Lord.
First impression: The title gives the reader a taste of what is to come.
Second impression: The body is worthy of a melody to go with it, the flow is so smooth.
Third Impression: Very impressed with the writer known as typingrhyme.
Imagery: Wowie zowie! 'nuff said.
Suggestions for improvement: Nil.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Featured in the latest edition of the Spiritual Newsletter.
Your piece shines through as a cool view of a world made better.
Better by the presence of angels all around.
Around the world and while we look up, we see.
See the form, structure and flow of your piece more clearly.
Clearly there is passion in this write, imagery that speaks.
Speaks of the wonder, the awe, the magnificence of the angels.
Angels explored and seen in this snafu free piece of art.
Art that was birthed from a caring heart.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Welcome to the WdC.
Your piece is a well written treatise.
Featured in the latest edition of The Spiritual Newsletter 02-01-2012.
Form. structure and rhyme scheme add a melodic flow to this poem.
Paced like a gentle wave there is a sense of peace permeating from within. Testament to the mastery of the art of imagery displayed here.
No evidence of grammatical snafu's being present, no suggestions for improvement are necessary.
Write on in the WdC!
Copenator out!
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Wow what an imagery filled song,
The Brown is hard at work all along.
Cool chorus, and refrain too.
All the world can identify with this to-do.
Flow is magical and the rhythm is a hoot.
Paced at an easy gait, you have a tale to tell.
Forgiveness? Apparently not in this tune,
But you leave a clue as to whom to see for that too.
You are encouraged to;
Write on!
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Delightful song and not too long.
Listening to the tune it preaches.
Flashes of things crashing, no longer working.
Keeps the readers interest from the beginning to the end.
Form, structure, and flow are great,
The rhyming scheme is consistent and the pace is an easy gait along the trail that is life after the crash.
Nary a grammatical snafu in sight,
This review is off into the night.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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Perfection in the making.
Your piece is enlightening.
The comparison to weather and her,
Is admirably done and visible to the readers eye.
The punch line is priceless,
And worthy of reading from stem to stern just to reach the end.
Your mastery of the art of imagery is evident in this piece.
There is a natural flow at a pace that is easy on the readers eye.
Singing this would be possible and all would still laugh aloud in the end.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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"Where can we be safe?"
Where indeed is the question.
Even the church can receive strafe.
Innocents are lost in the blink of an eye.
Your imagery draws this reverie so clear.
Flowing with ease the topic is surely sore.
Regret, dumfounded by the cacophony, fear.
The acrid smell of gun powder, none can ignore.
Pacing is rapid, scenario's presented and felt.
Form, structure, and grammatical snafu free status,
Makes the reader appreciate the work placed in this piece.
A remembrance of a tragic blot on mans inhumanity toward man.
Suggestions for improvement are not needed in this your complete piece.
Write on!
Copenator out!
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