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Review of marigold  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi
I am here to review for your WDC Account Anniversary!
Congratulations on completing one more year with the WDC.
Have a wonderful day.

The poet had shown his experience with two flowers, marigold and the sunflower. His dream showed the marigold but he doubts it might be the sunflower. Looks like he knows both the blossoms pretty well.

They say that dreams are significant because they represent our desires and wishes. The poet must have had a real life closeness with the flowers.

That done, I should say imagery is colorful and realistic.
"I think it was a marigold of thousand petals"

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The author is able to show the kind of blood thirsty life that a Vampire family lives on and survives.
Setting-
Setting is what I liked the most. Hiding away from human company and looking for human beings to approach their hide out, Jenny and her family are rightly located in the basement.

Conversation and emotions for the daughter and her husband are very much like any other human being.

Yet, Jenny aligned her life and soul into that of Matt and cared little for the little boy and her mom who were targeted her.

Quite and engaging attempt.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Roari,

Congratulations on your WDC Account Anniversary. I hope you will have a wonderful day.

This story is impressive. I like the way you brought out the thoughts of the girl. The vampire and the girl whom he shadowed are nameless, yet identifiable through the dialog.
Just a beautiful girl affected by the presence of the tall young man with a dark flowing mane.
I wonder if it is her imagination that created the conversation betwixt the two of them.

I think you will probably take the tale further and tell if he had made a newborn out of her for the sake of eternal love.
He won her heart anyway,
"She knew she should be, and yet she was not. He knew her, and for the first time in her life she felt understood."
A young girl needs to be understood after all.

Interesting!

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Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Suzy,
this is an engaging piece of writing. You have wrapped a number of memories in this story. Your descriptions and tone told me that you have had a very pleasant childhood and a feeling of security.
You remember quite a lot with clarity and is able to put those memories down. I would very much like to do the same sometime in life. life has several recordable memories.I like two incidents you have mentioned. the first is the tractor ride and the second is your mom coming home with Jennifer in her arms. It must have been truly fascinating to you at that tender age.

Language and style go on with no mistakes of any kind.

This bit of writing is truly inspiring.

The events take us on and we move on.


I enjoyed it and thank you for sharing.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
I am reviewing this poem for you because you are celebrating WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more year with the WDC.

This is a very picturesque poem in the sense that it graphically showed the Nickerson Park and the pleasures the surroundings offered to the campers.

Anyone who likes the outside amusement would love to go to the park after hearing your descriptive poem.

It is remarkable that the people decided to do their best to restore the Park after the floods.
The fury of the flood is well shown in the lines like,
"Trailers thrown, landscape changed"

Yet,
"We’re lucky to all still have one another"

Strong mindedness is shown with the accompanying team-spirit.
"We’ll rebuild, we’ll recover"

I hope folks went back to the Nickerson Park as planned.

Rhythm makes the poem flow well.

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Review of princess Jule  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi
I am here to review for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations on completing one more year of your association with the WDC.
This is a beautiful tale of adventure. Jule seems extraordinary. She has courage and curiosity. I wonder where she met the dragon that seems to have gone out of the way to get her back home.

Setting is great. You showed us the world.

Have a great day!

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Review of The Real Treasure  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem expresses truth in a beautiful way.
Anything that is craved for its materialistic value is only for temporary pleasure. Beauty, wealth and fame are the popular things that one loves to possess.

But as the line says,
"The real treasure lies not within one's bounty
but in another's heart.'

Being loved is the greatest blessings. The poem brings it our credibly in a crisp short verse.Love is forever.

Imagery appealing more to the mind.

It flows well.

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The colorful glory of sunrise.
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Review of Flood  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Dan,

I went to your port and picked a poem at random. My dice rolled on this one.

This is for your WDC Account Anniversary!
Congratulations on completing one more year with the WDC, an excellent site for writers and readers alike.


Floods are an intrinsic feature of life. I live in a port city and a few years back we have had the life changing experience of being hit by a tsunami. Life just stood still for a week with no connections whatever with the rest of the world.

I can connect better with your lines such as,
"Mud in the water
holding creation, "

In the aftermath your lines life too proved true.
"Life will be born again.
creeping up steadily."

with "waiting" as nourishment.
Imagery paints the scene of disaster treated with a positive angle despite the tragic experience.

It flows well.

Have a wonderful day!

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Review of Day of Awakening  
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I like this essay on awakening. According to this author, awakening is to be able to investigate the truth behind statements like the one made by the teacher. I think everything is debatable except the permanent events like the sunrise and so on.

I agree that people don't much appreciate the youngster who asks questions at every juncture. The moment they realize that this questioning nature is responsible for every singly scientific discovery, they will try to answer the student's inquiries.Patience and understanding are true virtues to be found in few.

This essay has a practical thesis and supporting arguments.

Everything from fantasy to reality need not be believed in. Blind faith should also be questioned.

So what is the difference between faith and blind faith, you may ask.

And that would take a long time to answer to fit in here.

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kids at play
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Review of How I Became Sum1  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jim!

Congratulations on your WDC Account Anniversary!
Have a wonderful day!

This piece of writing is truly interesting. The history behind Sum1 reads like a story. This username is very popular all over WDC and we all admire the way Sum1 handles the community activity called "Anniversary Reviews". You give us a chance to read and review various authors. Thank you for that.

Now, this nonfiction is pretty amusing. Not only your shortened name but those of your brothers and sister too are unique. I wonder if they too have shortened forms of their names as it is in your case.

Regarding the sentiments with regard to Sum1, contrary to what you have said, it can be that here is someone to reckon with. Not just anybody but someone whom people should respect and value.

You told us what and who you are in a nutshell.

Thank you for sharing the story behind Sum1.

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Review of The Gatekeeper  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A descriptive tale of fantasy.
Hell's gatekeeper must be a super devil herself posed quite credibly as a heavenly angel. The author is able to show the differences between the two by the description of their personal features and looks.
The man must have been destined to go to hell. He was in a kind of fool's paradise for a while and by the time he realized the truth, he was hell-bound.

Setting and dialog are quite apt. They cannot help human features though.

Interesting.

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Review of Yesterday  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Amay,

This is your Account Anniversary month. Time, feels and flies like a race horse, doesn't it? Congrats on this wonderful occasion.

This is truly a heartfelt and praiseworthy tribute to Linda Kaiser, your principal, and a lovely lady all around. This poem tells me why you love her so much.

"For all the lives she's touched,
Her light will continue to shine."

What else does a person need to stay alive in the hearts so many?. Few are lucky to have lived in proximity with such individuals.

It flows well on many counts. Imagery is one of the reasons for it to shine. You brought her alive in the verse for the readers to see and understand her in their minds.

Your word choices did serve the purpose of penning a telling tribute for someone you love. The sentiments are even better at the beginning and the end of the poem.

"But yesterday, her light dimmed here
While heaven's a little brighter."

Rhythm is just fine.

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Review of Dancing Dresses  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A moving poem on the fate of homeless people. I see two reasons why the person in the poem turned homeless. "loving innocently" and choosing a drug addict as husband. Her fate is sealed thereof.

The story of a fate worse than death is mirrored here. Past and present get compared in memorable lines like,
"I was not a “street person”
but a PTA president.."

I realize that there are some genuine original homeless people and there are those who due to their own folly become homeless.

The difference between the rich and poor is shown through the suitcase of dresses I guess.

Nicely written with apt and impressive imagery.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Ray,

Saying farewell is a tough task whether to people or houses. You have brought out this aspect of life lucidly in this poem.
"Today, I said farewell to the house
containing my childhood and countless memories"

Begins on a simple and conversational note.

This is like a story-poem from your reality. I like the way you take the reader as you walk through your erstwhile home. Who can ever forget the places where one grows up? Your memory lane as you travel down reveals the past and its impact on you. Nostalgic flavor dominates the poem.

The composition is well done. You told us why the house is on sale and then you paused inside here and there describing the nooks and corners.The difficulty of parting with a house is like parting with a person.
"I will never forget you, old friend."
After all, this is what is being human, touched or overcome with emotion.

Imagery reflects the features of the house and their value to the past owner.

Beautiful and sensitive writing that flows well.

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Review of Amen  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A religious and a spiritual poem. A poem of prayer and devotion to God. Most importantly it speaks of the deep belief that the poet has in God, our Maker.

The poet, during her prayer raises the matters of family and seeks His help and acknowledges His help and guidance.
"Decisions of worth I have to make,"
Indeed. in times of indecision we do need to fall back upon the inner light lit by our belief in Him.

Somehow, wonderfully, prayers succeed in getting answers to unsolved problems of various kinds.
"As I rise from my knees,
a feeling of happiness,"

Imagery mirrors the interaction between the Lord and His devotee.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is the kind of poem, which does a lot of good to people. It makes them think of the contraries and even inspires them to rise above them. Light and darkness, sunrise and sunset, sorrow and joy are all shades of life. They are complementary
I like the philosophy that failures make us understand how to work for success.
"Suffering teaches how to find joy.
And, pain reveals the way to pleasure.
I fully agree with the fact that life should be faced with a smile.

I love the following lines;
"The greater your strife, the greater your outcome,
Nothing good ever comes so easily."

It tells me to face the challenge and with a sincere effort I am going to win the odds and shine anew.

It sounds like a free style poem. Yet, there is rhyming here and there. But the rhythm follows the verses very well.

It flows well.

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The colorful glory of sunrise.

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Review of The First Story  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I think this story makes great sense. Imagination and creative writing should never be given up. Also there is no age bar to create stories and poems and more. All one needs is the realization that imagination is as important as any other facts of life. It opens the mind and heart to new vistas and thereby discover self and society and more.

The author did a great job by showing Timmy with the help of his own surreal self the part he missed using. The shoe box opened a new world and now there is no stopping Timmy to go on creating with imagination .

This story brings out the value and need to write and read through apt dialog and setting.

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Review of THE BABY HUSBAND  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The metaphors used for husbands and wives is something novel and interesting. If given a chance I would certainly read the book to understand and analyze the "bonding and blossoming" relationship between the couples.

you have mentioned the practical and time tested truth when you said that husbands must treat their wives as their babies and the wives should look after them as mothers do. That is the final step to find true love. Love is not love if the person concerned is not ready for sacrifices of any kind and as I recently read that person should be ready to give up his or her own comfort and time and be ready to do anything.

Thanks for the information.

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Glorious and Joyful
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Review of stories  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi
Indeed, it is a real pain to have war memories on the mind. It seems there is someone who actually fought and witnessed a real war.
"your eyes tell me stories that i cannot bear to hear,"

Imagery helps me to understand what it could be to flash memories of genocide and bloodshed with eyes, eyes that tell the stories of a bloody war and a lot of trauma to live with.

Wars in the world are a true shame for humanity as a whole, wherever they are fought.

"no length of time could erase these horrors your eyes beheld,"

Your description and poetic expression of a ghastly event are excellent.

It flows well.

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Review of My Life  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It is a pathetic story of loneliness and pain. As a young person it is no doubt difficult to lead such a life. yet you had shown extra ordinary patience and love for the family and stayed within the family instead of finding other diversions like the father and the brother. They have escaped from their primary duties towards the mother.

If you add some dialog and more emotion it would add to the story making it more interesting. you have an interesting story line. work a little more and it would get better.

Good luck!

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This Utopic world imagined by the author looks delicious. If we have to reach this world of beauty and clean environment everyone of the earth should work for it. They should get their body and mind under control.
" All hints of unsafe gases wiped out and free vitality around the world."

It is like a prose poem that shows the kind of world where everybody lives well and enjoy freedom of mind.
"When we set aside our physical contrasts and acknowledge we are every one of the one"

Prose flows well and imagination is worth praise.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
"But in the end, Love is a decision of the mind."
I agree with this statement. What an irony! love, many think is a matter of heart. As my own experience tells it has more to do with the mind rather than with the heart.

Another meaningful observation made in this unique essay is,
" true love will also make you demand from yourself that you become selfless, and forsake all things, including your own safety, ...."

It needs lots of true grit to go through the tough test of love.
I haven't come across anyone who has the above kind of stuff in his or her personality.

I sure would like to do as you advise,
" Develop your philosophy. Improve self, and follow your path."

I can imagine the sweetness and light that await on the other side of the horizon.

Language and style are equally admirable. Prose just flow well and the chosen passages of verse too are arresting.

Thank you for this wonderful and light-filling article.
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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Pumpkin,

it is a touching story, with the loss of life partner and the pain she felt.
Well narrated in a convincing voice. Description of the present sadness and the plans to go ahead with sit well with the setting.
Her way of feeling his presence is heartening. Indeed it is a time that cannot be put in words so easily.
Life is strange and at times cold like a machine that runs with indifference. Whatever happens time passes and takes us with it.
" I stood swaying, remembering him. I will survive. It really is a wonderful world."

It is going to be your WDC Account Anniversary soon.

Have a wonderful day!

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Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Megan,
This is a random review I happened to come across.

Your love for Twilight and the characters, Bella, Edward, James and Victoria and the Cullen family is well conveyed through this prose writing. Indeed, we all had been through that phase where vampires have become real life characters.

Your story telling and the theater visit with your husband made interesting writing.
Prose style is great and so are the thoughts well organized.

Hope to read more.

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Review of My thoughts...  
for entry "Where to begin." 
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Joto-Kai,
Thank you for sharing the wonderful ideas on a hook in the story. This is the kind of story I would like to create.
If the beginning is the end or the middle of the story, if the beginning records something that the main characters least expect and if the beginning happens to make you sit up and start reading the story, then I think I can register some growth as a writer.

I can see it is not easy to be an interesting writer.
But then everyday is a beginning for someone like me who wants to write and who loves the written word.

Language and style are a draw.

Congratulations on your WDC Account Anniversary!


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