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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The experience of reading fiction is well described. The title of the poem is impressive, for a new novel has that captivating fragrance, which draws the reader more into the pages.

Imagery helps me to see the person lounging and started reading the fiction, which she or he might be looking forward to.
"I curl up alone
with the unmistakable
aroma
of a new book."

A new book is one of the most cherished things I ever look for.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well written contest entry.

prompt words are aptly used and the message is light, funny and crisp.

Free style poem has several suitable images. New Year party with lot of people and friends of the person addressed are seen. The tinkling glasses of wine, tipsy laughter and hearty conversation are heard and enjoyed.
As it draws to close it becomes a problem to go home with too much drink.

" Don’t get too tipsy before daylight is broken
or your relatives will begrudgingly attend you."

The rhyme scheme and rhythmic movement are noticed. well done.

It flows well.

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Review of A Bench  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This free style verse flows like a river that flows through un impeded.
The poet' reflections on the distant past makes us wonder whether we are really happy. However, the past looks more appealing than our own realities.
Imagery-
People and their places are summoned through appropriate imagery.
"Evil was conquered by light"

Rhythm feels good.
The bench is used as a symbol. A symbol that bridges the past and present.

Enjoyable.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Absolutely true. This is exactly what happens with me. I forget to take time off from everyday chores. That makes me irritable and complaining.
Yes, like you said I need to unwind. It is such a beautiful world outside.
I should go for a brisk walk and look at the tall green trees and wild flowers that brighten our winter blues.

As you have said, I must smile. A smile can work wonders.

Thank you for sharing thoughts.

I appreciate your prose.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The structure and the form of the poem are well explained at the end of the poem. It helps me look at it and read it the way should be. Thank you.

Monsoon is a feature of Indian calendar too. we wait for the monsoon as soon as summer gets over. Usually, we get it in June and it continues for the next two and a half months.

Description of your monsoon is done graphically with appeal to the senses. We could see the blue skies,
"Monsoonal moisture left
Behind pristine blue skies"

feel the weather,
"The wind still blowing through
Green limbs of oak and pine,"

Imagery is eye catching. The poet captures what she sees before her in the poem.

It flows well.

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Review of Recitation  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Carly,
I just read the story and reminisced of my own school days. Indeed, how sensitive we were like Aliya, your girl character.
Aliya is a cool girl. She could hide her feelings and act normal despite the internal turmoil. Crushes are a common symptom for those young adults.And when he or she favors you, well, you are on cloud nine. You have painted an appealing character.

classroom atmosphere and the manners of the teacher, Mr.Houston and the boys are well described.
Imagery appeals to eye and mind.
Dialog is like backbone to the story. Great job!

Shakespeare's famous sonnet gives me immense pleasure.



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Review of A new dawn  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thoughts on the coming year are well recorded in this free style poem. The image of hope in the dawn of the New Year is well crafted.
"Hope towered over us....."

It is watched with a mixture of emotions.
"The birth of a new time"

The resolution sounds great.
"To rectify the past mistakes...."

Every day brings a change, a change for the better. That, I think is unique about a new dawn.

Imagery and reflections combine agreeably.
It flows well.

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Review of Patch of Sunlight  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sara
I too am a nature lover and often inspired by her various colors and beauty and change.
I can see that you take pleasure in observing nature, flora and fauna. you have also added that a hawk is your "protector" thus bringing in your culture and belief into the poem. That's a delightful combination.

"My soul is one with nature
It keeps me centered to continue on life's adventure."

Your images are eye catching and pleasing.

Rhyming and rhythm are impressive.

It flows well.

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Review of Static.  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This free style verse shows how monotonous life has come to be in the modern context. Television too has proved useless. What ails us?
How could we intercept the static with the dynamic?
"Black,
grey and
white"
The poet has shown the static in colors and darkness. The static cannot change with regard to grass, sky or any other natural elements. But they are not static strangely. Each day is new, brings something different. The television and the daily routine may be so.

The poet's present and thinking are well reflected in this well flowing poem.

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Review of Alone  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A nice story about loneliness and extinction.
A wolf's story told in a tone of sadness. I am impressed by the last line which sounded like the curtain fall on the last scene of a tragic story.

"what is a wolf without a pack?"

To me it also sounded like an individual and his society. He cannot thrive without company. Loneliness is so killing.

Beautiful description of the wolf milieu and memories.Memories are all that one is left with.
"A beautiful, terrible memory."

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Review of Our fate  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.0)
There is a limit for everything they say. But, l believe there is no limit to having patience. Patience to wait for our hopes to realize should never wear off. As known, without hope we have nothing to hang on.

Prose style and the arrangement of thoughts is smooth and spontaneous. Except for the few typos, to me this article appears fine.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I used to blame myself for making mistakes although they are not beyond correction. The feeling of guilt used hang on me rather heavily. You said that it is not unusual to make mistakes and that it only helps you to become a better person. I appreciate the solace it offers. Sometimes daily life, its rush and tumble bring me under pressure and knowing or unknowing we do make mistakes. All that I need to do is to move on and never repeat the mistakes I did.

Thank you for sharing thoughts.

your prose and prose style are impressive.
"YOU are your own meaning of BEAUTIFUL!"

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Review of Through the Mist  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Judi

It is a lovely poem showing the color and quality of autumn and winter. It feels more like winter than autumn. Anyway if autumn comes winter is not far behind. The chill and the longing to go back to your cocoon are shown in a detailed manner. Even your "dawn yawns". Understandable under the circumstances. But what an image!

What I liked about the verse is that instead of description you have shown what it feels like to feel the ice cold winter and its lingering sleepiness.

"A clammy chill lies on my skin
spreading cold up
to the base of my neck,"

You made me experience the iciness of the season. I shiver.

It flows well.

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Review of Sheets  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Exactly so. many of us are afraid of the outside of our comfort zone. But once you dare going outside it is like no stopping spreading your wings. I experienced it. The freedom it brings is marvelous.

"Sheets" is what you call dependence on the familiar, which at some point of time might turn to be a shackling agent. The metaphor is arresting drawing attention to the fact of being narrow and uncomfortable because sometimes we do not need or want sheets to wrap us in.

Imagery-
Absolutely a draw.
"My body is protected on the outside,
but decaying me on the inside."

How very true. It is for those who never want to meet or experience something novel, strange and exciting.

This little poem is full of meaning, message and significance.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't know if writing is a curse. But it certainly is a gift and a blessing.
It allows you to be yourself. The privacy lets you spread your creative wings, so you can fly to the land of your liking.
Few can have the kind of intense liking, devotion and passion for writing.
You have described a typical writer's behavior and attitude. Yes, I agree that writers do not much care for the mill of the run kind of life. They want to be alone so they can gather thoughts and feelings and give them expression on paper. This doesn't make them loners. On the contrary, they mix with people and observe life, which gives them material to create on paper.

I appreciate your frank expression of your love of writing.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dad acted like any other human being in desperate need of the precious Christmas tree. I never knew that in some places getting a Christmas tree could be an ordeal.
You have described the feelings and deeds through dialog and description pretty well.
As a child you must have had your own doubts and excitement as your father carried the chopped branch to the car. You and your mother must have waited with bated breath till you drove home without being caught.

The descriptive quality of the story appeals to me.
Your memory of that particular Christmas cannot erased for a number of reasons I am sure.

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Review of Soul Cleaver  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
using a foreign tradition and a ghost that didn't like the son-in-law added spice to the ghost story. It is strange to witness an able human being becoming a puppet in the ghostly hands.Obviously ghosts seem to be more powerful than thinking living human beings.

Revenge could be carried out even after death. Intensity of the revenge motive leaves me a bit puzzled.

You have created fear especially with the electric razor. A new mode of scaring and drawing blood. you have done well with this genre(horror/scary).

The last incident at the interview is mind-blowing.

well done!

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It is an informative essay highlighting the various features of being a Latino. You talked about several things that I as an Indian can understand. Indians also revel in culture and traditions. They are the backbone of their daily life and culture. For us, it is the vedic traditions and religion that count a lot.
As an Indian I share similar features like family values and attachment to the family,traditions,pride in being what you are.

Well written and well composed article with an interesting beginning, middle and end. Sentences connect well as paragraphs do.
Language and style are impressive. Your love of the English language is shown in the way you write.

Keep on writing.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Effective story that reveals so much about the inner world. This conflict is not peculiar to the suffering only. I think that all of us undergo this trial when we are not at peace with self.
The author created a situation that visualizes her and herself. The rain outside enhances the gap betwixt the two.
"...she thought the noice was coming from..."

It reminds me of a story named The Yellow Wall Paper wherein the central character goes gradually mad and finally jumps out of the window.

Besides the theme I like the setting suggestive of the surrounding details.

Nice mini story.

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Review of America  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The difficult patch that America is going through is voiced well in the poem. The rhyming verse in couplets reflect the present crises created in the lives of the general public.
Each country has its ups and downs. While some are visible others are not. So as you have said it is up to the people to decide on the future course of action.

Course of action is to go our and vote instead of fretting and not going out to vote. Vote is powerful. It can decide the fate of a nation, even a developed nation like America.

"The road to recovery is at the tip of one’s fingers
If you don’t get out and vote, the madness can linger"

It is from the pen of a seasoned poet, I can see. This poem catches the conflict in a nutshell and exhorts the fellow citizens to do what best they could.

Imagery is effective and the flow, smooth.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
An engaging Halloween story. Tracy's secret was revealed by a stranger. After years, he had decided to met Tracy and talk about the accident that had taken place long ago.

Setting-
Setting is perfect. Halloween comes alive.
"Tracy started to decorate her apartment....."

The meeting of the ghosts looks incredible.
Language and style are a draw. Sentences are well connected.
Dialog is attractive.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Well written personal experience. Each person has something different to think about, to tell and then decide what to do. It is a bit puzzling that a marriage of twenty years should end because of "the similarities that were scary."

It is no wonder that no two persons have the same set of minds. While the husband doesn't seem to be affected by what appears to be monotonous, the wife feels it is time to "try" something different. Marriages are supposed to last till death does them apart.

Indeed, love conquers all, even boredom and a thirst to search for a diversion.

"although we are holding hands through this, we cannot feel each other's warmth, we can't hear each other's thoughts."
The above pattern is quite common in a marriage. It is not one long colorful dream. Realities do hit us. yet couples survive them and move on being wedded.

I don't know if had understood what the author is trying to say. If I fail, I sincerely feel sorry.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Felwa
Your letter/memo is novel, interesting and refreshing.

I appreciate your emphasis on knowing self, which in my view is most important. Those who succeed in gaining knowledge regarding self can achieve almost anything in life.

You have admitted to have been selfish and cowardly. All can't bring themselves to do that.
It is a learning experience to draw a dividing line between humility and self disregard. There are many who get confused with them.

Language and style are impressive.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I would like to know what happened after you noticed the red pickup. Did the driver say sorry for what happened?
This story reflects the inhuman and often harsh behavior of some of the people who race past in their vehicles. It is truly regrettable that they used a dog to target a woman on the bicycle.

This story is written well showing the fear and tension in the rider whom the dog targeted. Anyone would feel the same in such a situation.

You have actually shown how the dog came chasing unawares and the way you had to pedal to the limit of your stamina. A newsense case must be filed against those culprits.

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Review of Troubled Thoughts  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Sounds quite personal. Or may not be. Imagination could be as natural.

Loneliness and guilt are brought our with appeal.

Imagery-
Images of hands trembling in fear, hands covered in blood make an impression on the reader.

Title-
Title suits the substance of the poem.

In the last stanza we see some kind of repentance for the wrong deeds and a longing to come back by any means.
"I could be loved.
By friend or foe,"

He or she needs company to share the deep rooted sadness.

A free style poem, it flows well.

Edit-
"My hands would tremble in fear,
to the thought of death"
(My hands would tremble in fear,
at the thought of death)

In the third stanza you have used the word "covered" twice. you can provide a substitute for one.

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