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I picked on this lovely poem about a farm of long ago.
This poem contains a picturesque description of the old farm where the poet grew up among cousins and uncle and aunt. The simple life on a farm is well dealt with in this story-poem.
Nostalgia is the dominant mood and memories come crowding through the length of this poem.
Rhyming verse illuminates the dwelling, the animals and barn and the visit of a fawn that stayed for a while and moved on.
From morn to evening the children were busy pursuing sport and playing in the open air much to their heart's content.
As I read through I am reminded of my own childhood days. During holidays we visited our grand parents who lived in a small village. We were similarly engaged.
Imagery brings various sights and smells of the farm and the farm house to the reader's mind.
Children's psychology is well high lighted.
Tommy's age is such that children of his age can hardly be quiet. They are restless and always on to something new.
Tommy's character is naturally drawn. His father had hard time controlling his son's urge to get to his mother.
Descriptions are well done."Car horns and tires screeching suddenly, and deafeningly, silenced the birds." "No!"
The last minute accident can make the reader anxious as to what would happen to Tommy.
Tragedy was diverted and a lesson learnt.
Fear is the reason for our fall.
Fear thwarted my personality all through my life. Fear to express myself, fear that the others might have a very low impression about me stopped me from being myself. So I wore a mask and hid behind it for a long time. It took me a long time to behave as I am and not artificially.
This article has enunciated truth about being afraid and the way to overcome fear. The best way you have suggested is to create something. It could be carpentry to learning music to writing a poem or a story. Creativity opens a window to imagination and that gives me freedom from the concerns that crib, cabin and trap my mind.
I enjoyed the other alternatives to win over fear and avoid depression.
Prose is good and style is easy for me to grapple with.
"Know one else"
(no one else)
All the four stanzas unfold the beauty of the Expressions of Spring Blossoms. Their scent, the sunlight,their brilliant colors and the supreme Artist Who created them are being praised.
Rhyming poem with its ab ab scheme paints the picture of spring blossoms as they reveal how they shine with beauty.
Expressions like, "smell them radiantly", "blissfully attractive", "irradiant" "plenty thankful", and "random prayer" are unique descriptions.
Imagery shows the spring blossoms in all their glory.
I agree with the points you have given us to ponder.
I like the second one that says,"And when you talk; always talk for yourself." I always find people finding examples for negative reasons. I need to discourage that tendency and check it in the beginning itself.
older and wiser doesn't apply to all. only those humane and with an attitude to embrace all count.
The last point has great appeal to me.
Love is never for negative reasons. It spreads light and it spreads sweetness. There is no life without love. It is the be all and end all of things.
This is a thought provoking article. It makes me turn the torch inwards.
Language and style are easy and go at a comfortable pace.
I absolutely agree with your point of view. We do need to change the perspective every now and then. However, there are things that we cannot change like rising at a particular hour(on working days), Getting that elusive bus on time and signing in the register at the office and so on. These are necessary to maintain a certain order and discipline(at least where it matters). Sunrise and sunset are done on time.(including several other things in nature.)
I agree that the Instagram pictures and such social media elements, are for some, life's main motto. Change in such matters is vital. We need to find alternatives to make our lives more joyful There are things that make life enjoyable and provide inspiration as well. Your examples have an appeal.
"- stand in the rain, surround yourself by the unfamiliar, try something new, buy a different sandwich - you’d soon realise life has so much more to offer. "
Very captivating and fascinating.
The title is ever so musical. No wonder you danced in September to the music of falling leaves and "throwing roses into the rain". What a lovely spectacle!
Nostalgia dominates the poem. Back then things were easy and life was full of love. Every single chore was hardly weighing. youth and love make light of monotonous tasks such as
"Laundromat, car wash, grocery store strife"
I am moved by the finishing line of this lilting verse full of music, roses and dancing.
"September love lingers loud and clear"
Imagery shows two people very much in love dancing away to everlasting music.
Very inspiring and practically true. Sick people need this kind of encouragement. They need to be encouraged that they were making tremendous progress in recovery with their sheer will power and by following the medical advice and exercise.
I find this article helpful in the sense that what I have been following is the right path.
I see that the key sentence to this article sums up the way we are supposed to view ourselves,
"It's only after we realize and discover our strengths, our abilities, and the gifts that God has given us, that we can begin to use them - in our spiritual lives, our personal lives, and in our careers."
Each sentence and the paragraph are torch bearers.
Thank you for the article written in excellent language and style.
your free style poem shows the sea in rage. Tempest can be quite dangerous with rising waves. Ships toss like small craft over the surface of the sea. It heaves like a giant just woken up and shakes us like a bunch of bones.
You have shown the ship being caught in the thick of the tempest.
"The wind, no ... THE WIND! Creaking and deadly, that force we sailors know all to well!" (too well)
The gentle wind changes into a furious force.
"stinging my flesh, devouring my sanity!"
Descriptions are to the point and practically true. I was there too caught in a similar situation.
Seamen are generally victims of a frothing ocean.
"someone's story ending."
This is one of the fierce faces of old mother sea.
The poet did justice by bringing the relentless force of the sea to our mind's eye.
There is life's drama enacted aboard the ship, which is at the mercy of the elements.
This personal poem has a furious flow to it. Feelings come out like a torrent tumbling down the mountain side. Setting, imagery and action have an urgency about them.
"I hang on to the edge,"
So the poem begins. One sits up to read on. That is the impact. As it progresses, the reader is not disappointed. Feelings are powerful, and the way the poet puts them in words is also powerful. Language and feelings make a potent mix in this poem.
Hatred and love go hand in hand. How strange! But that is the way love behaves I guess.
"Those ice shards in the name of eyes you possess
Impale me bone deep, piercing my soul,
Yet I cannot stop my pathetic self
From trying to hold on to you as I fall."
This free verse tells the story of the poet's love for someone who acts rather heartlessly. Yet his pull on the poet is strong and forceful. So she pleads for his love.
I can see desperate love makes one beg, plead and implore or even more.
It flows well.
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"Heard melodies are sweet
but those unheard are sweeter."
The poet's silent melody reminds me of Keats' immortal lines. The crux of the matter is imagination and the mood of the moment. Mind can play and dance at an instant's notice. "the sweetest voice" that the poet speaks of plays in the mind and those with the music recognition can listen to it no doubt.
" Sweeter then the nectar of flowers'
(Sweeter than the nectar of flowers)
Usages like "the room inside the room," "soul danced" " floors of the heart." are unique. They lent charm and charisma to the poem.
Imagery show the thrill and joy experienced by the poet.
Free style poem flows well.
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this short verse reflects the way you imagine stars and moon as your company to fill the lonely nights. The cold nights perhaps lose their coldness as you are absorbed in the stars and the moon.
Imagery shows your mind that shares feelings with the celestial bodies. You called the moon insane probably because of its phases of waning and waxing. The stars are constant. So you believe they remember your name. Good imagination.
Coming to the poem, you have capitalized the first letter of each line. Yet you used punctuation (comma) at the end of two lines.I wonder why.
Ambiance is well created.
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when I first read the poem, I was reminded of the "Kaleidoscope shades" I saw during my stay in the US. The scenario in spring as I recollect, was exactly the way you have described in this poem written in the form of Gwawdodyn.
Imagery-
Images of nature are the very backbone of this poem. Their appeal is to all senses, for the reader can see, hear,smell,touch and feel the tingle of spring you have portrayed here.
Your description of the season of spring and its alluring features has me in thrall. What colors, what beauty! I don't think any human artist can imitate or reproduce the Supreme Artist's natural painting.
Your attempt to show the changing "brown beaches" into "indigo" translucence under a golden sun is a winner. You do watch with a keen eye.
A feast of summer beauty and attractions follow with watermelons, berries, trees and bees and flowers bringing a colorful spectrum to my mind's eye.
The use of "No more subtlety" points out the joyous abandon and care free enjoyment the season of colors blesses us with.
Form and structure-
Form is followed in the most meticulous manner. The structure with the three stanzas of a prescribed syllabic count is attractive and arresting.
An alluring poem from moon's point of view. Pretty attractive because you have brought out all the attributes of the moon and its phases.
Personification of the moon is the poem's main attraction.
"Attacked, which brought me my black spot."
This line has cultural (Hindu) significance for me. Every time there is a lunar eclipse, it believed that one of the asuras or giants of the ancient ages named Rahu(Uranus) is supposed to swallow the moon and so the eclipse happens.
The use of adjectives like,mesmerize(verb), magnificent, mysterious, glorious truly describe the moon.
Imagery mirrors the phases and descriptive qualities of the Moon.
Glass of water has so much tucked away. Stephan's palsy is known to it and not to his daughter. Certain things are just never known to anyone except to the sufferer.
The author has brought life to the gesture of drinking a glass of water. Every drop becomes precious and there is a lot that happened between the cup and the lip.
The story inspires pity and sympathy in the reader. When health is lost, nothing is within reach.
" The palsey came in waves, each tremor sloshing his precious water from his glass a..."
Both characters, no, the three characters are effectively portrayed. All naturally enacted.
It looked more like work in progress. The illicit relationship is main issue that caused the murder.
How did the detective got in there? Who appointed him? How does he conclude that their marriage is going to be short-lived? was he there at the time of murder?
You took the story very well till the man was questioned by the coroner. After that it went a little off beat.
A dog was mentioned at the beginning. It could give a clue as to who hit Pat?
How and why did the killer enter Pat's house? What is responsible for her marital discord?
The man- what is his job? How did they marry if they didn't get along?
Language is fine and you could liven up the style a little more.
You are right. Many institutions have this malady. They should live broadly, I mean they should share their life with all the students coming from various backgrounds. Only then as you feel there is scope to widen our vision and improve the quality of life.
" I choose not to live in one of these living learning communities when I go to college because it hinders my ability to meet diverse people with different viewpoints."
Once you start living in communities it is difficult to come out of the trap.
What I like about the story is the way in which the author took us through various events. Myra's birthday, William's visit to the gold shop, his thoughts about the pricey articles on the display, the clerk's attitude, then his preference for the sale pieces and then his return to Myra.
Other than the supernatural happening at the end of the story, it is evident that the siblings are faithful to each other and they share the thick and thin of life.
I wonder what causes Myra to transform into a mythical being. I guess it is the blue sapphire that her brother gifted to her.
Shaped verse pays tribute all the guiding lights like parents, teacher, grandparents, coaches and several others. This poem shaped like light expresses the poet's admiration and gratitude to all those who helped him shape his sensitivity and a mind to decide on what to do in his own life.
"There’s so many I look up
to, so many footsteps I want to chase,
and chase them I will."
Imagery shows those important people in the poet's life in whom he strongly believes.
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Beginning with Hemingway's words on being dull and blunt,you played on different things with those words. Finally, you zeroed on becoming dull living in California. Does "drive to live successfully" has anything to do with the place or people or anything else? I am not sure.
Egon is worth falling in love albeit platonically. Hasn't Harold Ramis said "How one handles success or failure is determined by their early childhood." I am sure it appeals to those who loved his portrayals.
Your opinions and influence on self by them is interesting.
I see the deep impact of the remark made by one of them on you. ""You're a good soul." " Indeed time and mood also contribute to come under the spell of such words.
I utterly like your writing aim " When I write, it is vital that I represent humanity honestly."
Those who do that are some of the best writers.
Everything you said in this article appeals to me.
The sea is seen from a human angle. All the human emotions are applied to the old mother sea. She is hyper, social, angry and passionate, loving, beautiful. The heaving, ever dynamic and active sea is an enigma. What moves it? Does it ever stay motionless? Questions remain unanswered. Among all the other elements that stop and start, the sea alone is unique. There is no change in its attitude from the beginning of creation.
The poet has rightly evaluated the qualities of the sea. An awesome spectacle any time of the day or night.
This poem is well structured with three lines in each of the four stanzas. The vast sea is fitted in there aptly and attractively.
The rhythm brings the movement of the sea to my mind.
Imagery deals with the picture of the sea, which the poet paints well.
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This is a child's experience on the first day of starting school. Kids are generally scared on the first of attending school. I am surprised that Bethany went to school all by herself. Usually, either of the parents or both accompany the kid. That apart, Bethany appears to be a nice kid and quite confident.
The way her teacher and classmates treated her is like a dream. No tears, no crying. That is really impressive.
Making friends comes easy for children. Look at the charming way you have portrayed the two kids talking and enjoying themselves at school.
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