The bond between the two is exceedingly dear and delicate. The grand daughter however much sulfur she carried, cannot shock her grandma.
Even in her dream the little one cannot help making a character out of her granny.
The fantasy she was dreaming and visualizing seems like a fight between good and evil and the evil seems to surpass the good. I am just surmising.
Dialog is the beam on which the whole episode rests.
This piece of writing revolves around Easter lilies also known as buttercream flowers. I am truly impressed that you could use all the prompt words to bring out your association with the flowers. Your birthday, mother, spring, winter, decorations for the event are all interconnected.
Narration is autobiographical and a personal experience is well recounted. I like the figure, "These beautiful buttercream like flowers are a balm to sore eyes each spring."
Prose flows well with apt description of people and the scenery around West Virginia.
Short verse on love and proximity with the one she is in love with.
It is anyone's dream to be in the arms of someone one loves.
Details fill the rest of the togetherness quite appealing and attractive.
The poet describes the feelings of a lover in delicate terms.
" breathe your scent
inhale a life..."
Figures of speech and imagery are well connected. It appeals to senses and is written with sensitivity.
What an interesting story. The fantasy of the book made me feel curious despite its short length. The narration reminds me of the voices of the ancient story tellers who told the stories to the gathering of the people around a fire at night before retiring to bed.
The book is made to have a brain and thus it is personified. Its plans did not work. It never had a chance to guess why it met a fire funeral. There is always someone superior to us.
Lovely story of beach side summer. Written from a child's point of view, it mirrors the impressions and observations of a little girl. Summer vacation spent at her granny's house is something she looks forward to.
Granny's character is well portrayed. Her kindness and love for the grandchildren come through clear and loud.
The bond between the grandchildren and the grand parents is valuable and delicate. The author did her best to mirror the moments of attachment and fondness between the two.
Indeed, school can be boring and monotonous. yet, the parents and the teachers insist we do well or be a zero when we grow up. Utter nonsense. You can be what you want to be. Give yourself a chance to be what drives and not trying to come up to expectations of the society.
This poem highlights the feelings and thoughts of a student pretty vocally. It is unfair to make comparisons and show you in bad light. But well, that is the way it goes.
As far as the poem goes, to me it strikes OK, nothing wrong with the syllables etcetera because it says what the poet desires to say. And it comes out well.
It is difficult to have structure with random thoughts. Of course, I can see one thought leading to another and the other thoughts on the main idea. The main thought that bothered the writer is regarding his love, which comes up in the middle of the paragraph.
"as we gave up on each other awhile ago"
The rift between the lovers is clear. search for the reasons that caused it and the hope that it might be back to normal, and the doubt that it might not be so, begins.
Random reflections are shown here. No more no less.
Cleverly constructed poem with a mirror in which the reflection is shown. Preparing to go to bed the girl says good night to the image in the mirror.
Mirror occupies a place of importance in her life.
"With you mirror, my day becomes inert"
The character of Takashi is well constructed. It is an introvert character fearing the threat of diabetes, the one disease that spread its wings all over the world.
Takashi's fears are not baseless. strain and stress are a one of the front-line reasons for getting the ailment. This reason behind diabetes is well brought out at the end of the story. The daughter played a significant role in airing it out.
Sometimes, when I feel lonesome I walk around the street and see myself coming across to meet me. That might be the time when I detach myself from self and look at me objectively I guess. If I can do this I am sure I know what I want to be in life. Suppose I want to be teacher I would see myself teaching in the class in a detached way and enjoy that condition.
The author has nicely described her encounter with self and making peace with it. That is knowing what you are and what you want to be. This ability to feel, to see and to talk to one's own self as if it is another person is truly amazing.
I like the setting and the two characters and the conversation that might have taken place.
When there is no unity, it is a divided house. It matters even more in a country where the leaders and the opposition have to agree on certain important matters such as helping Puerto Rico when it needed support, when it needed food and water and shelter.
Things get worse if the government ignores the needy and the poor. America has always had a policy to help where it is necessary whatever be its stand on foreign policy.
This article no doubt expresses the anguish and alarm for the future of the generations to come. A Democracy is supposed to listen to the voice of the people, for of the people, for the people, and by the people.It is supposed to take the consensus on any issue and see that an agreeable decision is reached.
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This is touching and a telling poem. It reflects the thoughts on being lonely yet happy thinking about the absent lover.
"I don't feel the emptiness of the love lost ..."
The poet's ability to go on with love despite the knowledge that he is "somewhere lost in the woods".
Imagery-
shows the dance,the picture of the two together,the picture of the absent lover. Rhythm is intact.
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Your way of writing the bio is attractive and interesting. It tells me a lot if not all about you. Your interests and your school background are truly responsible for your becoming an author.
The meaning of Lani is curious with its cultural rhythms.
"Lani is a Hawaiian name that means sky or heaven."
My writing interests were also developed because of my English teachers, at school and college.
The strange case of Anna Dupree makes an interesting read. Descriptive passages are par excellence. Omniscient voice of the author could reflect emotions and thoughts on different events pretty clearly.
The ghouls are after Anna's family and her long serving staff. The evil spirits have the habit of eating human bodies, even those that were buried. No sheriff could do anything about arresting the culprits because they are not human but evil spirits. You cannot take the spirits to task.
What interests me is not the ghouls' deeds of monstrosity. Anna's reflections, fears, thoughts and nervous writing draws me more into the thick of the story.
"My mind is a racing torrent of terror and doubt. A relentless tidal wave of emotion floods my mind with grief, drowning me in hopelessness."
Language and style of these passages are like prose poems at places.
Fear and tension are brought before us in a telling manner.
I wait for the next sequel to see whether Anna was alive and how the deaths of those close to her are revenged by her.
Unable to bear with the burden of guilt in the mind and the deteriorating physical strength, I often see people wishing for death. Death is supposed to be freedom from ailments and pain. May be it is true.
However, life is a gift and while it lasts there is time enough to repent, reform and retain the light of wisdom and sweetness. Never say die is also a popular saying.
The writer has well described his condition and expressed his philosophy in a memorable way.
"ts time for you to go,,,to go where old bones are crushed and turned into dust. No longer will I hear your voice or see your face..."
I find the author's disgust at his own self and the disdain for what remains is also loud and clear.
"Dust thou art,to dust returnest"
The title "Old bones" suits what follows in the story.
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This is a rhyming poem written with high emotion. All the questions are pertinent and need to be answered. But then, at some point everyone feels like asking these questions. Like I said before they make sense.
It is the little things that hurt us more. Those unseen unspoken hurting events, that take away peace and tranquility. However, one should find the answers themselves, I guess.
Nice poem with rhyming couplets the rhythm of which makes it flow well.
Teaching is considered a noble profession in any era. people are always grateful for what they have been doing in improving their lives and careers.
This essay on teaching is appreciable because it shows the different angles of the profession of teaching.Besides dealing with the fact of how hard-working the teachers are, it also shows the irony that they are always financially backward compared to the other professions. I never understood why it is so.
"They earned millions; while their teacher still had that decent enough salary. In that case, who should really earn more?"
A teacher can never be made unless she or he has genuine love for teaching.
A simple yet a telling poem on heat-break.
Highly emotional and with a melancholic in tone, this free style poem appeals to me mainly due to the poet's sincerity.
Being in love and then have break up could be traumatic for some.
Also engaging is the fact that the poet is ready to welcome back his/her lover despite the separation not long ago.
Structure of the poem is eye-catching. Each line starts with an "I" (except in the fourth line) and each ends in "you". It is I and you that matter.
Congratulation on being the winner in Stormy's poetry contest with this lovely poem on childhood.
Prompt words are beautifully used in each of the stanza. It appears quite realistic. The childhood years pass much the same way in which you have described.
A child's world is ruled by fantasy and fun. you have explored them by the simple ways of joy found in a child's world.
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This is an impressive poem on the state of mind of the poet. Right now there is no hope no light no stars in the sky.
There is darkness and a lonely road ahead.
The poem is an address to the dark night. The poet pleads with the night to shed some light on her life.
Imagery and imagination are in sync with one another and makes the poem quite appealing.
Very humorous take on cheese. Its popularity is explored by the writer in this very well narrated story of a twelve year old kid.
The story shows the love of books, what drives them to do so, what happens if it is followed too intensely.
Duncan's dad did well in gifting him a telescope, thus widening his hobbies and encouraging to move and shed some unwanted weight.
The fantasy and sci-fi element is engaging too. The aliens and the moon are too engaging for the children such as Duncan. He looks like a true to life character.
Yes, it is a fine quote on music. One should have the ability to recognize music that flows through this universe. We find it in everything around us. Apart from nature, we find rhythm in almost everything that we see, listen and do.
Those with music recognition are truly blessed. They are sensitive and perceptive.
In a poem by a great poet entitled "From Harmony to Harmony" we see the poet's way of showing how music dominates and pervades the whole universe.
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This is a cute poem on a childhood memories of a Birthday party. All of us loved to be the center of attraction on our birthdays. Enjoy the song, cake and games that follow. With friends around and laughter that rings through the evening and night, a birthday party is always welcome by young and old alike.
"Sounds of happy laughter
And wonder fills the air"
Imagery shows the various things that take place on the evening of a Birthday celebration.
The poet is able to catch those moments in retrospect and enjoys doing so.
It flows well with perfect rhythm and word endings.
It is a spiritual poem filled with faith and love.
Life is a smooth flow for those who believe in God. They have the ability and courage to face any odds and cross them confidently.
"We stand beneath
His all encompassing love"
This free style poem makes us aware of all His deeds and the great sacrifice He made to save us from sin and unhappiness.
It is remarkable to feel the need to believe in a greater power that helps us in living a peaceful and serene lives.
Each stanza records a particular phase in the life the Lord.
A well-told story of love and hope.
The young man feels happy at meeting a beautiful green-eyed girl soon after being fired from the job. His sadness seems to have disappeared after he met the waitress who also seems affected by his presence in the restaurant her father owns. After what follows shows that love comes quietly and takes them both into its warm embrace.
The writer leaves that part when they might have met and continued being in love. open ended story.
Language and style help create situations and dialog in an impressive way.
Write on!
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